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The restriction of using vehicles on certain days as a way to reduce air pollution

2 - Your prompt restatement + writer's opinion is too long. It should not be more than 3 sentences in length....

Writing Feedbacknam08 - Oct 15, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
Essay about separate education for students with different academic levels

4 - There are some amendments I can give to improve your writing: (this is just my personal opinion) - Some...

Writing FeedbackAnhngoc12 - Oct 15, 2023 / wanttobebetter - Oct 21, 2023
The bar chart shows the literacy rate (% of people who can read and write) in 2011 by regions

2 - Never ask the reader to look at the image. You have to narrate the information, not ask the...

Writing Feedbackhtlam11 - Oct 14, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
Children watching TV - Writing Task 2

3 - First paragraph: not good job of paraphrasing. It is clear but you will need more advanced words, for eg:...

Writing FeedbackChu Chang - Oct 13, 2023 / wanttobebetter - Oct 21, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 1: three main difficulties each age has to face when they live abroad

NEW - the problems people have when they go to live in other countries The bar chart demonstrates three main...

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[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Juvenile delinquency. Cause/Solution?

NEW - IN SOME COUNTRIES, A HIGH PROPORTION OF CRIMINAL ACTS ARE COMMITTED BY TEENAGERS. WHY HAS THIS HAPPENED? WHAT CAN...

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Was the American Revolution a Civil War?

2 - The formatting of this paper is just all wrong. Paragraphs should be used to separate the idea discussions. There...

Writing FeedbackRonaldwrw - Oct 12, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Begin learning a foreign language

NEW - SOME EXPERTS BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER FOR CHILDREN TO BEGIN LEARNING A FOREIGN LANGUAGE AT PRIMARY SCHOOL RATHER...

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Getting information from newspapers and other media

2 - You made your position clear in the writer's opinion section. Yet you contradicted yourself in the discussion paragraphs. You...

Writing Feedbackthuyduong470 - Oct 11, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
The chart illustrates the contribution in percentage of two different sectors (Task 1 IELTS)

2 - Try to be more specific about the kind of chart that is provided. That will help you gain...

Writing Feedbackekko162 - Oct 10, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
Comparing life with parents to living on campus

2 - I cannot accurately review this essay as the word count and paragraph representations do not follow the necessary requirements...

Writing FeedbackNguyen Hoa - Oct 10, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
IELTS Cause/Problem Essay question on children spending less time with their parents

2 - This is personal information or a representation of your personal opinion. It is not a part of the...

Writing FeedbackDirkhammet - Oct 10, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
The proportion of population who used the Internet in three different countries between 1999 & 2009

2 - A trending statement needs to cover the most common information for the sources provided. You did that properly...

Writing Feedbacksuperattack2002 - Oct 9, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
Compare pie charts show the proportion of the energy produces from different sources in a country

2 - The summary overview lacks content. Always enumerate the information sources prior to setting up the trending statement. You cannot...

Writing FeedbackNgocAnk - Oct 9, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
The percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living.

3 - @Cao hong Ngoc You should be aware of the structure of sentence such as capital letters or end mark...

Writing FeedbackCao hong Ngoc - Oct 9, 2023 / Duy Dang - Oct 10, 2023
Why have men's sports been give far more attention by society than women's s? IELTS Writting Task 2

4 - I think you should give the essay a proper stance; either be positive about it or be negative about...

Writing FeedbackCantor Zhukov - Oct 9, 2023 / TanzeelaWasti - Oct 12, 2023
The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. The process is quite lengthy and complicated

4 - You do not have reached the word limit. You get a low score when you don't complete the task...

Writing Feedbackanhtho06 - Oct 8, 2023 / TanzeelaWasti - Oct 12, 2023
The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarize the information - 7 stages involved

2 - You have summarized the presentation too much. In your desire to present the quickest version of information possible, you...

Writing Feedbackpminhanh - Oct 7, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Present your ideas about what you should or shouldn't do to live green

2 - This is a well written essay. it shows that the writer has a good grasp of the English language...

Writing Feedbackanhthueunsung - Oct 6, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Writing task 1 Ielts: young people's expectations for change in five different areas

2 - Yes, statistics were provided in the image. However, you need to identify the type of image before you...

Writing Feedbackakane - Oct 5, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
The percentage of time adults spent on different activities in a country in 1958 and 2008

2 - You have misrepresented the number of pie charts in your summary overview. You need to use the plural form...

Writing Feedbackkhanh416 - Oct 4, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
The charts show the percentage of electricity consumed by different sectors in Eastern Australia

2 - I think you made a wrong word choice here. I believe you meant to say reverse. Which refers...

Writing FeedbacklemonadeA - Oct 3, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Task 1 writing ielts - carbon dioxide released by four different countries

3 - @laiphuongthao two nations,Italy and Portugal Following up were Sweden... in the given order, respectively/correspondingly. on the other hand, You...

Writing Feedbacklaiphuongthao - Oct 3, 2023 / Duy Dang - Oct 11, 2023
The given line graph compares the quantities of three companies' waste output for 15 years

NEW - the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. The given line graph...

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Reasons why friendship is gradually dying

2 - You have provided reasons for friendships ending. Those do not necessarily reflect the death of friendships. You are speaking...

Writing Feedbackkieuuoanh - Oct 3, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Plastic Bottle Production Process

NEW - Hi! I would love to see comments based upon IELTS marking criteria, and possibly a detailed band score! Thank...

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Global warming is one of the biggest threaten to our environment. Cause and solution ?

2 - I can understand what you are trying to tell me in the essay. The problem, is that even though...

Writing Feedbackpth1234 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Goverment should prioritize heathcare instead of orther areas. Do you agree or disagree?

2 - Do not confuse the well being of a person with healthcare. Well being is a larger field of personal...

Writing FeedbackGiahuy2107 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Construct stadium beneficial or not? IELTS Writting Task 2

2 - The essay is over written. It is not really a task 2 essay exercise at this point. It is...

Writing FeedbackOutsider_000 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The proportion of money spent on different goods and services of households

NEW - The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. The...

Writing FeedbackThuhuongab123987 - Oct 1, 2023 / — -
WRITE A SHORT PARAGRAPH (100-120 WORDS) ABOUT HOW TO KEEP FIT AND STAY HEALTHY.

2 - You have done a good job on writing this statement. It shows that you are becoming more comfortable writing...

Writing Feedbacktranhaithien2005 - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives.

2 - You are showing the reader why you partly agree with the given statement using a comparative discussion method. While...

Writing Feedbackmikey04 - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Dicussion between putting some strict controls about noise and making as much noise as possible

2 - Your prompt restatement became confusing to the reader. There is a lack of clarity and coherence in that presentation...

Writing Feedbackphuongna - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
What types of things do a logistics engineer plan?

NEW - writing a logistics engineer plan A logistics engineer plan is the basis for a business to reach its...

Writing Feedbackluuvinhtan2111 - Sep 28, 2023 / — -
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: ATTENTION SPANS

2 - Merged: writing on topic: attention spans being affected by social media - unprecedented technology-driven era: too complicated...

Writing FeedbackZoelee - Sep 28, 2023 / minhhien4326 - Sep 30, 2023
What is the advantages and disadvantages of using public transport?

2 - Seeing as this is a task 2 essay, you should not be coming to any conclusions or offering any...

Writing Feedbacknmint_tue07 - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Some people feel that advertising has negative effects on our society

2 - Make sur eyou follow the writing rudiments for the English language. Every first word of a new sentence is...

Writing FeedbackHoangson - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: LOOK AFTER ONE'S HEALTH FOR PERSONAL OR SOCIAL BENEFITS

2 - This is a single opinion essay. That is why you are being asked about the extent of your agreement...

Writing Feedbackhgzxz - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] GETTING OLD IN THE MODERN WORLD

2 - [quote=cangusocduaaa]This essay shall conduct a thorough assessment of both viewpoints so that a reasoned conclusion can be drawn.[/quoteWhile you...

Writing Feedbackcangusocduaaa - Sep 26, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
[WRITING TASK 1] Percentage of passing driving license of males and females in an Asian nation

2 - The summary overview is problematic and will not deliver a good preliminary score. There are several elements missing from...

Writing Feedbackwanderinuniverse - Sep 26, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination

2 - You are writing a comparison essay that should focus on 2 things: 1. An explanation of the public...

Writing FeedbackVanChungNguyen - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
Teenagers should work unpaid, do you agree with the view? Write about 250 words

2 - You will already have failed the essay with your prompt restatement and writer's opinion alone. You are presenting a...

Writing FeedbackKhanhChi2009 - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
The different of weight in England

2 - You are not making any sense in this section. The sentences do not carry any thought references and...

Writing Feedbackbantraicuabe - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
[WRITING TASK 2] To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population

2 - The essay will receive a failing score. You have not properly developed the discussion presentation when it comes to...

Writing FeedbackDoggoZ - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
WRITING TASK 1: LINE GRAPH - CINEMA ATTENDANCE BY AGE GROUP IN THE UK

2 - Wrong sentence structure. You cannot use the word "and" to start a sentence. Being a conjunction, that is...

Writing FeedbackHuongTran - Sep 24, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
AN ESSAY ABOUT THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF LIVING IN THE MODERN WORLD

3 - It is very important that whenever you write pros and cons, write them in 2 separate structured paragraphs. Your...

Writing FeedbackHAPPYLE - Sep 24, 2023 / Love478 - Oct 7, 2023
What is an ideal society? And how can we create it?

2 - Word use redundancy. If you are imagining it, then it is already an illusion. There is...

Writing FeedbackRizChow - Sep 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
WRITING TASK1: LINE GRAPH - GREEN TRANSPORTATION USAGE

2 - The summary overview is not well developed. You need to learn to enumerate the required information such as the...

Writing Feedbackpnpu07 - Sep 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
Writing Task 2: Some people think that students should study the science of food and how to prepare

2 - I do not see an appropriate personal opinion provided in the discussion points. Based on the way you represented...

Writing FeedbackQuy Nguyen - Sep 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
Some students want to learn additional subjects. Others think should focus on getting a degree.

2 - The essay is over written. You cannot complete 288 words within 40 minutes. The actual test does not allow...

Writing Feedbacklynnci - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income

2 - You did not clearly identify the type of chart presented in the task. The image identifier helps to increase...

Writing Feedbackhuyphamdz1902 - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Governments should make universities free for everyone

2 - Did you review the response requirement for the essay prior to drafting it? If you did, then you would...

Writing Feedbackmayajuststart_0 - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
IELTS Writing task 2 - The excessive use of smartphones in free time

2 - The summary paraphrase and writer's opinion are unacceptable. The writer does not meet the passing preliminary TA score requirements...

Writing FeedbackEnglishwithakat - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 2 - about artificial intelligence

2 - The response is not aligned with the expected format. You gave a basic response instead of the expected measured...

Writing FeedbackPatsy Chan - Sep 20, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
IELTS WRTING TASK 1 - TABLE: INTERNATIONAL STUDENTS IN CANADA AND USA

NEW - students in canada by their country of origin The table delineates the number of foreign students in Canada...

Writing Feedbacksonbiee - Sep 18, 2023 / — -
Although families have influence on children's development, factors outside the home do too.

NEW - influence on child development It is a common belief that children are primarily affected by household members nurturing...

Writing FeedbackKieu Sa Nguyen - Sep 18, 2023 / — -
What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying online?

NEW - studying online pros and cons What do you think of studying online? It is popular with its convenience...

Writing Feedbackleanhthao - Sep 18, 2023 / — -
The chart below shows the aid from six developed countries to developing countries from 2008-2010.

NEW - funds for some developing countries The chart shows the number of financial aid from different nations to help...

Writing FeedbackThithi777 - Sep 18, 2023 / — -
The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of education

NEW - the share of male and female teachers in the uk The chart below delineates the porportion between male...

Writing Feedbackhoanglongsss - Sep 18, 2023 / — -
Some people think that too much attention and too many resources are given to the protection of wild

NEW - Some people think that too much attention and too many resources are given to the protection of wild animals...

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