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|Do schools kill creativity - TED Summary - Sir Ken Robinson
3 - Hi Fadhil, What a very interesting topic, you talk about creativity and education. Concerned with that, here I...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 17, 2016 / dils - Sep 18, 2016
|The information about two different ways of collecting water for further use
4 - First, there is an ( there are several) equipments (Wrong spelling) which are basket made of bamboo Then...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 17, 2016 / ALMAJID06 - Sep 17, 2016
|Tourism is travel for pleasure, it can bring down the walls that separate people
2 - Dear Gon, here are some advices for you, feel free to correct me, There is always a separatein...
Writing Feedbackgon01 - Sep 17, 2016 / fadhilmd25 - Sep 17, 2016
|The sport is separated into two groups; a team sport or an individual sport
2 - Dear Yuyahhhhh, here are some advices for your writing, feel free to correct me, The Olympics is going...
Writing FeedbackYuyahhhh - Sep 17, 2016 / fadhilmd25 - Sep 17, 2016
|The talent from the children must supported for people around them
2 - he said big interesting for education ( in one sentence you should not put two adjective in one position...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 17, 2016 / ALMAJID06 - Sep 17, 2016
|A new device created by LouAnne Boyd at the University of California at Irvine, helps learn language
3 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections ... tones will probably encontered the most difficulties...
Writing FeedbackIedha01 - Sep 16, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 17, 2016
|The extinction of the elephant population becomes a crucial aspect to discuss, it brings attention
2 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections ... it means some people would be easier...
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Sep 17, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 17, 2016
|The legal trade of ivory could lower the elephant population or even made them extinct
3 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections Based on a research study studied on 15...
Writing FeedbackFira28 - Sep 17, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 17, 2016
|STRICT RULE TOWARD ROAD OFFENDERS
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Sep 17, 2016 / wew018 - Sep 17, 2016
|Tourist guide dedicates to expound foreigner on place, building, estate, etc.
2 - Hello, Ifan. I found that your essay is a decent one. Still, there are several issues in grammar and...
Writing FeedbackIfan21 - Sep 17, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 17, 2016
|TED SUMMARY: SARAH CAIN THE INTROVERT PERSON
4 - Hi @VK wssh Here are some corrections I have made for your composition. that introvertedpersonpeopleare different from...
Writing FeedbackVK WSSH - Sep 17, 2016 / wew018 - Sep 17, 2016
|Susan Chain - What the introvert's Advantages From The Other Types
Writing FeedbackFirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 17, 2016 / Jawa - Sep 17, 2016
|Tourism as a Crucial Key for Promoting Cultures and Increasing Local Income
3 - Hi, there! got some additional tips for you. Entertainment is one of "the" essential needs every...
Writing Feedbackabdasyari93 - Sep 16, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 17, 2016
|TED VIDEO SUMMARY: THE POWER OF INTROVERTS BY SUSAN CAIN
3 - Hi @Asma Raj You have a good writing style. Though, there are some minor lapses in your essay....
Writing FeedbackAsma Raj - Sep 17, 2016 / wew018 - Sep 17, 2016
|Two ways of pick up water for watering system from different water sources
3 - PARAGRAPH 1: The diagram gives information about two ways of pick up water ... repetition: water ; "The diagram...
Writing Feedbackryan31 - Sep 17, 2016 / angga93 - Sep 17, 2016
|HOW CRUCIAL IS ENGLISH IN YOUR LIFE?
3 - Hi, there! got some additional tips for you. 1) Other languages may disappear, if one language is...
Writing FeedbackJnur - Sep 16, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 17, 2016
|The Highlight of Introverts' Powers (TED)
2 - Dear abdasyari, here are some advices for you, feel free to correct me while shyness is about scare...
Writing Feedbackabdasyari93 - Sep 17, 2016 / fadhilmd25 - Sep 17, 2016
|1.Swing basket method to fetch water from the soil 2.The roller bucket to reap water for irrigation
2 - Hi @kiki23 I find your composition a bit confusing even though the ideas are well organized. I think...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 17, 2016 / wew018 - Sep 17, 2016
|Both, the traditional and the medieval method can be used to fill the irrigation system.
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 17, 2016 / kiki23 - Sep 17, 2016
|CONSUMERISM CULTURE IS BEHIND ADVERTISING
5 - He Rinnegan, here are some advices for your writing, beware of consumerism culture among us it cause the...
Writing FeedbackVK WSSH - Sep 16, 2016 / fadhilmd25 - Sep 17, 2016
|There's a difference in the amount of read books among students, in regard to their gender
Writing Feedbackryan31 - Sep 16, 2016 / kiki23 - Sep 17, 2016
|Scientific research revealed that there is an abnormal leisure time situation
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|Different Perception Of The Happiness
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|9 Things You Can Do Right Now for a Frugal Holiday Season
2 - Hi @kiki23 I appreciate your use of transition words. Though, there are some minor lapses that you might...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 17, 2016 / wew018 - Sep 17, 2016
|Government and Society : What Governments Can Do ?
3 - The officials of government run "the" wheels of administration in a country. Every actions of government such /...
Writing FeedbackFirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 16, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 17, 2016
|The Positive and Negative Consequences of Consumerism in Social Life
3 - yo! nice to read your essay. here my feedback comes... Nowadays, the demands of goods "have" increaseD higher...
Writing FeedbackAsma Raj - Sep 16, 2016 / Rinnegan45 - Sep 17, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - Exposure to international media, e.g. films, TV and magazines
2 - Hi @madmoiselle Your essay is good and has a power. However, there are some minor lapses which we...
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Sep 17, 2016 / wew018 - Sep 17, 2016
|Find out the peripheral vision in sport
3 - Hi pha-pha, It is my suggestion for your nice summary: Sometime weWe sometimes simply tolerate thea blur....
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Sep 17, 2016 / swr10 - Sep 17, 2016
|The private car is the most popular vehicle in Edmonton used for commuting to work, business, etc.
2 - Hi @windvalley I liked how the way you presented the data. It is organized and well thought. However,...
Writing FeedbackWindvalley - Sep 17, 2016 / wew018 - Sep 17, 2016
|Recent studies report that the level of people's stress and obesity increased in the last decades.
6 - Hey Paij1830 your have briefly summarized the essay and it's great : here some corrections for you : ...
Writing Feedbackfaizahadina - Sep 16, 2016 / Ifan21 - Sep 17, 2016
|Global use of water by three sectors such as agriculture, industry, and domestic
3 - Dear Arisandy14. before i give you some advice regarding your writing, I want to start it with a few...
Writing Feedbackarisandy14 - Sep 16, 2016 / Clark Kent - Sep 17, 2016
|Summary Article_Grit: The power of passion and perseverance
2 - Hello David, this is little suggestion for you: ... 27 years old when deciding to leftleave (to infinitif...
Writing FeedbackDavid54 - Sep 16, 2016 / FirmanRomadhon20 - Sep 17, 2016
|Claims that the passion and perseverance contributes to a success more than a talent and IQ
Writing FeedbackIedha01 - Sep 16, 2016 / abdasyari93 - Sep 17, 2016
|COMBINED CHARTS; global water usage by sectors; which country used more: Brazil or Congo?
2 - hi bams, i have some thought for you. The line charts showsRatio global water usethe global ratio of...
Writing FeedbackBAMS14 - Sep 16, 2016 / Aris05 - Sep 16, 2016
|Technologies are suppressing various professions and make them not so important for society
2 - hay, Sherzo, i would like give some comments that is probably helpful. in my opinion, there are several...
Writing FeedbackSherzod457 - Sep 16, 2016 / arisandy14 - Sep 16, 2016
|Water usage by the society in Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo in 3 different sectors
3 - hay, rose, i would try to give some comments which are probably useful. in my opinion, your sentence--...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016 / arisandy14 - Sep 16, 2016
|Summary _ Halal foods are particulary popular with millenia
2 - Hi, I would like to give you some advice about your writing. I think your essay is good, however...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 16, 2016 / Iedha01 - Sep 16, 2016
|The contribution of 6 major energy resources in the US over a 50 years period
2 - Hello Windvalley, here i left comment for you (The) chart illustrates ==> (you can change with: shows,...
Writing FeedbackWindvalley - Sep 16, 2016 / Fira28 - Sep 16, 2016
|Writing task 4 : the amount of water consumption overseas by sectors and land
NEW - The line graph compares the amount of global water consumption based on three different sectors from 1900 to 2000,...
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|TED Summary : The history of our world in 18 minutes
2 - Hi andika08 here are my suggestions Universe can created(create = after modal we need verb inf) but...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 16, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016
|How to catch up the grit? A strong effort and high understanding is a key to reaching personal goals
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Sep 16, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016
|Writing Task 1: The graph line shows which three sectors global water consumed during a century
2 - Hi PHA2016, here are my suggestions, ==> The graph line shows which is three sectors of global water...
Writing FeedbackPHA2016 - Sep 16, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016
|The number of books read by the boys and girls - a fluctuating trend between the two variables
2 - -The line graph gives information about the comparison number of books (...) and girls over a four-year period at...
Writing Feedbackkiki23 - Sep 16, 2016 / Windvalley - Sep 16, 2016
|The 'peaceful' Pacific Ocean, however not without typhoons, earthquakes and hurricanes
Writing FeedbackALMAJID06 - Sep 16, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016
|The best way to refresh mind and body conditions is to spend the leisure time in natural environment
2 - Hi dils, this is my thought to you Research shows that mostlymost people are do not optimizeing their...
Writing Feedbackdils - Sep 16, 2016 / Aris05 - Sep 16, 2016
|The oldest form of circus has existed in Roman Empire around sixth century
2 - Hi,., yonathan,., your summarization is great, however, here some advice for you in order to improve your writing...
Writing FeedbackYonathan - Sep 16, 2016 / hasbi - Sep 16, 2016
|The shown line graph indicates the readers' changes of Starmouth School library
3 - Hallo, There are several correction, ...The shown line graph indicates... ...according to how many books already read...
Writing FeedbackHujjatul19 - Sep 16, 2016 / David54 - Sep 16, 2016
|OUR ACHIEVEMENT DEPENDS ON THE PERSONALITY
2 - Hello @deanarin I would like to give you some corrections. 1. This sentence should be "... memories,...
Writing Feedbackdeanarin - Sep 16, 2016 / Asma Raj - Sep 16, 2016
|The Older forms of Entertainment - the circus have been famous a thousand years ago already
2 - Hey @Alamsyah Ismail, I got some suggestions for your writing. Here my advice: 1. Circus, the one...
Writing FeedbackAlamsyah Ismail - Sep 16, 2016 / abdasyari93 - Sep 16, 2016
|The information about the amount of books been read in a school, the trends of years 2009-2012.
5 - the number of library books which read (passive Voice always use V3) by boys ... There were (use was...
Writing Feedbackandika08 - Sep 16, 2016 / ALMAJID06 - Sep 16, 2016
|Universe consist of several complexities which becomes more complex with the great difficulties
3 - halo brother, i give you some correction for you. David Christian tried to summarized ( to infinitive + v1)...
Writing Feedbackfadhilmd25 - Sep 16, 2016 / ALMAJID06 - Sep 16, 2016
|Logging effects: habittat loss, environment pollution, and climate change
7 - hi Miss Qara ==>Impacts of logging industry makecause the effect untold harmharm untold effect to the environment includes...
Writing FeedbackQaranew - Sep 15, 2016 / rosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016
|Summarize Graphic Chart 4 on Cambridge Book - Starmouth School library statistics
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Sep 16, 2016 / Hujjatul19 - Sep 16, 2016
|The ancient circus was introduced at the time of the Roman Empire.
3 - Hello You have a good summary I have some corrections ... mostly showing popular spectator sport, and chariot...
Writing Feedbackerwiin - Sep 16, 2016 / andika08 - Sep 16, 2016
|The leisure time in some outdoor activities is the most favourable method to relax the body and mind
2 - Hello rizaldo, nice to see your essay and also i really appreciate with your efforts to write an essay....
Writing Feedbackrizaldohabibie - Sep 16, 2016 / mem77 - Sep 16, 2016
|There is a magic headset which will help you learn Chinese.
2 - Hi Terminal... Let me give you some advice... ... most extremely difficult but there are utilizing by(using) headset...
Writing FeedbackTerminal23 - Sep 16, 2016 / Yonathan - Sep 16, 2016
|Athletes are obliged to train their skills and focus not only to the muscles or body movements
4 - Hay rosa, i will give you some suggestion Original sentences : The rapidity and accuracy visual is an...
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Sep 16, 2016 / Qaranew52 - Sep 16, 2016
|'Sophisticated wearable headset'. Undoubtedly, it is tricky to learn tonal language nowadays.
Writing Feedbackzul2805_es - Sep 16, 2016 / Jawa - Sep 16, 2016
|My summary task about social Networking
9 - Hay aris, my i will give you some suggestion Original sentences : - the popularity of a social...
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Sep 1, 2016 / Qaranew52 - Sep 16, 2016
|Opinions about Advertising : The Advantages on Situation
5 - hi..@mem77 let me try to correct your writing make your sentence straight to the point for example,...
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