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|Writing IELTS task 2 : starting a business instead of working for a company
2 - Ashela, For others,[need comma] it is too risky because an enterprise ... StillHowever , I think the risk...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Sep 1, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Sep 1, 2016
|AI is calling to battle code gone rogue
2 - Sofi, The article written by Cade Metz elaborates relating to open AI is calling to battle code gone...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Sep 1, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Sep 1, 2016
|TASK 2 : Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages
2 - Hi Sofi! I think the idea is well delivered since you give relevant illustrations and or examples to support...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Sep 1, 2016 / pebzna12 - Sep 1, 2016
|It Is Better to be An Entrepreneur than a worker of company.
3 - Here are my vantage points about your essay. Chech them. ^_^ ONE OF HUMAN NECESSITIES. Please, you...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Sep 1, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 1, 2016
|Many individuals believe that having independent companies gives them more advantages
3 - Hello, Eka. Your writing is good and you can present your ideas clearly. But I'd like to give you...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 1, 2016 / maulida07 - Sep 1, 2016
|Happiness Percentages for Married and Unmarried, and How Happy Having Children in US
2 - Hello Hirani. To ease the other members in commenting your essay, please give 1-enter to separate each paragraph. Now,...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Sep 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 1, 2016
|Being an entrepreneur has some risks and advantages, however it has more benefits than drawbacks
3 - Hello Fadillah, below are my feedbacks: First paragraph: - Some people think that choosing to start new enterprise...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Sep 1, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Sep 1, 2016
|The correlation between happiness and marriage status in the US
4 - Both married people and unmarried ones =>be aware with word's form than the others who are unmarried ...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Sep 1, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Sep 1, 2016
|Both of married and unmarried groups were divided into four age categories to check their happiness
2 - The charts reveal the percentage of happiness rating[redundancy] for married and unmarried peopleAmericans[don't forget to mention all the key...
Writing FeedbackIforsa - Sep 1, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 1, 2016
|The happiness level of US inhabitants between those who are married and those single ones.
2 - ... between those who have marriage and ones do not have . It also showS how having children ......
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 1, 2016 / RAY93 - Sep 1, 2016
|The benefit of becoming a business man or women are greater than being an employee
3 - Hi Farida. There were some grammatical errors in your essay. However, in this moment, let me tell you my...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Sep 1, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 1, 2016
|Life satisfaction among married and unmarried people in America - writing task 1
NEW - There two charts that provide information about life satisfaction level of people who has been married and unmarried in...
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|Advice for my exercise - FOR INTRODUCTION - IELTS WRITING PART 2
5 - NowadaysIt's too common you can use other words like recently or these days or directly mention the year ,...
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Aug 25, 2016 / Iforsa - Sep 1, 2016
|Nowadays, every piece of business conducted by humans is easier because of the advanced technology
4 - Hello! Just a little feedback for you, hope this helps. Nowadays, every business conducted by humans communication is...
Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Aug 31, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Sep 1, 2016
|'simple touch of fingers' - People's daily activities have been simplified by connecting online
Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Aug 31, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Sep 1, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 Result of Survey On Happiness Rattings In Married And Unmarried People
NEW - The bar chats display the result from a study about happiness feeling for people who already married and bachelor...
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|Nowadays, private car is one of the essential needs for people lives. But there's too many of them.
5 - Hi Heru, - Some of them buy car in order to encourage their professionalprofessionalism or only to improve...
Writing FeedbackHeru22 - Aug 31, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Sep 1, 2016
|MAKING INTRODUCTION; discussing benefits and drawbacks, giving opinions on issues. IELTS TASK 2
3 - ... goods that we use on a daily basis are produced in other countries. ... become ineffective which spend...
Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 25, 2016 / Heru22 - Sep 1, 2016
|Internet is used for updating information, communicate with others and easily to fulfill daily needs
2 - Hi Hairul. Welcome to Essay Forum. Let me help you to finalize this essay. I wanna give you corrections...
Writing Feedbackfikni05 - Aug 31, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Sep 1, 2016
|General debate whether the environment damage is serious or acceptable to the international laws
NEW - WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic:...
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|The addiction to the Internet seems to be a concerning issue, and many people suffer from it
Writing FeedbackYusuf05 - Aug 31, 2016 / TJLuschen - Aug 31, 2016
|The common silkworm's life cycle and how silk cloth is harvested from them
4 - Hi Farida, I have been an avid reviewer of your work, wether it is an analysis, an essay, argumentative...
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 31, 2016
|Human activity is more pleasure due to the sophisticated existence of Internet
3 - If I were you, then I would develop my paragraph with at least three sentences. This way helps...
Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 31, 2016 / eddies - Aug 31, 2016
|Many people has acknowledged that internet makes their daily business more accessible
3 - Sony, I must admit that I like the way you write. Your introductory paragraph has a strong hook and...
Writing Feedbackjomul01 - Aug 31, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 31, 2016
|It is true that the Internet affects the way people live. Our life is much more easier now.
2 - This idea comes nowhere. Also, you need to write this present tense, not the past one. Let me...
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Aug 31, 2016 / eddies - Aug 31, 2016
|People's lives are much more comfortable since the introduction of cutting-edge the internet
Writing FeedbackPermata992 - Aug 31, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 31, 2016
|At the present time, car become one of the most important goods (instruments) in human life
2 - Hi aidafitria, let me you a hand, this is my suggestions for you. I hope it will develop your...
Writing Feedbackaidafitria18 - Aug 31, 2016 / ZiadRasyid24 - Aug 31, 2016
|There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family
NEW - There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. Where...
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|Beneficial relaxation. Learning vacation is a new kind of holiday
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Aug 31, 2016 / rian31 - Aug 31, 2016
|People who decide to have kids should better cogitate on how they can meet their children's needs
3 - Hi Bung Ilham. Here are my suggestions to improve your score in the writing section. In this moment, I...
Writing Feedbackbung ilham - Aug 31, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 31, 2016
|Environmental issues are caused by human's activities. Task 2 (practice): "improving environment"
3 - Environmental issues are caused by human's activities. As a consequence, every person (i think it is better to change...
Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Aug 30, 2016 / aidafitria18 - Aug 31, 2016
|What can be done to reduce the use of cars? SEVERAL EXAMPLES OF INTRODUCTION
NEW - Many people depend on their cars for everyday domestic, social, and working needs. However, unlimited use of cars causes...
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|How a wind turbine will be built and where it is located
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016 / RAY93 - Aug 31, 2016
|Maintaining repeated customers is a prevalent aim within a business. My summary about Brand Loyalty
2 - Hi Aris. In this moment, let me help you to finalize your writing grammatically. Make you sure to meet...
Writing FeedbackAris05 - Aug 31, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 31, 2016
|A wind turbine consist of tower, generator, wind sensor, and blades controlled by a computer.
5 - A wind turbine consistS of A tower, A generator, A wind sensor, and blades ... The best locations for...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 30, 2016 / RAY93 - Aug 31, 2016
|It's not necessary to earn money by children when they are still on parents care
5 - Hi, thank you for feedback! But anyway, 'thing' phrase sometimes becomes too informal for academic essay, that's why...
Writing Feedbackdaya93 - Aug 30, 2016 / daya93 - Aug 31, 2016
|Natural deterioration has became a major concern in any part across the globe.
3 - Hi Jomul.. I'd like to give you a hand... Natural deterioration has becamebecome a major concern in ......
Writing Feedbackjomul01 - Aug 30, 2016 / Dipa19 - Aug 31, 2016
|TED Talks : How to Make Stress Your Friend
2 - These are my corrections for you. Please, you provide your time to review those so that you fall the...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 30, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 30, 2016
|The changes at West park School since 1950 - after the demand for personal vehicles increased
2 - Hai Ziad. I have some constructive feedbacks for you. ... Secondary School at West Park first was constructed...
Writing FeedbackZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016 / Aris05 - Aug 30, 2016
|A phenomenon of social networking is rapidly increase in 21st century. SUMMARY TASK 7
2 - Hai occa. I have some interesting feedback for you ... social networking is rapidly increaseincreasing in 21st century....
Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 30, 2016 / Aris05 - Aug 30, 2016
|We pay too much attention to actors and other celebrities, and the media sometimes sensationalize it
Writing Feedbackhailun11 - Aug 30, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 30, 2016
|West Park Secondary School map. The building experienced a significant change from 1950 to 2010.
2 - Ilmi_03..., it is good to see you again here with a very good report writing. However, some changes are...
Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
|Individuals vs. environment - PRACTICE IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : ESSAY TYPE AGREE OR DISAGREE
Writing Feedbackrian31 - Aug 30, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 30, 2016
|Celebrity Life or Inspiring Personal Life?
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 30, 2016 / jomul01 - Aug 30, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task 2 ( Full essay regarding environment in type of agree or disagree)
2 - Hi Fazlur..^^ I have read your writing, I think you haven't given the task response with the question...
Writing FeedbackFazlur27 - Aug 30, 2016 / hailun11 - Aug 30, 2016
|Reducing emission production, processing waste, planting the number of plants - all for environment
2 - Hello there^^ There are differentdifferences of perspectives that (...) and businesses be able to develop the surrounding, meanwhile...
Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 30, 2016 / hailun11 - Aug 30, 2016
|The Design of a Wave-Energy Machine and Its Best Location
3 - There are two diagrams about the design of ... => you are supposed to use a paraphrase in introduction...
Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 30, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016
|Facts about celebrities are always interesting to follow, and the lives of ordinary people?
2 - Hi ashelarisa, let me you a hand, this is my suggestions for you. I hope it will develop your...
Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 30, 2016 / ZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016
|On Women's Equality Day, More Tech Companies Promise Change
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 30, 2016
|Citizens obligation and business cooperation - "Only large companies can improve environment"
2 - Hi Erpin92 The firms could maintain the employees' life ... Therefore, the waste of factory could not flow...
Writing FeedbackErpin92 - Aug 30, 2016 / hirani03 - Aug 30, 2016
|The mass media has been more interesting to show well known people's way of life
2 - hi! i catch some grammatical errors. hope you can follow through ... to report people who live usuallynormally...
Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016 / azmi23 - Aug 30, 2016
|It is certain that the clear water resource became a rarity in the several countries.
Writing FeedbackPermata992 - Aug 30, 2016 / ZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016
|These days, many entertainment news report celebrities activities and their private lives.
Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 30, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 30, 2016
|People prefer live today in some urban areas and communicate less with local residents.
Writing Feedbackibal28 - Aug 29, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 30, 2016
|The environment improvement depends only on large companies since individuals can't do much alone
4 - Hello Maulida! Nice to see you in essay forum! Here a little feedback for you. The improvement of...
Writing Feedbackmaulida07 - Aug 30, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 30, 2016
|Big companies could improve environment rather than people because they have big impact on society.
3 - Hi, Heru22 Check the amendment below. However, there are a number of reasons why not only ... ......
Writing FeedbackHeru22 - Aug 30, 2016 / Naoki28 - Aug 30, 2016
|Large companies and individuals are no difference in maintaining the environment
4 - hi... Environmental damage is alarm. Some people said that is pressing issue can only be solved by...
Writing FeedbackNaoki28 - Aug 30, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016
|Parents have been through a lot of things, that's why I believe that they are outstanding teachers
4 - hai dipa i have some suggestions for you i hope it helps In the worldNowadays, people believe that...
Writing FeedbackDipa19 - Aug 26, 2016 / rian31 - Aug 30, 2016
|The machine for generating electricity consist of two main parts : steel tower and a computer room
3 - Atikah, it is a nice thread. I can easily follow the process of this machine. However, there are some...
Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 30, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 30, 2016
|How to See the Upcoming 'Great American Eclipse' (SUMMARY)
5 - Since 1979, total eclipse never crossescrossed American continent (past > 1979) ... because the total eclipse willwould cross...
Writing FeedbackErpin92 - Aug 25, 2016 / Hary01 - Aug 30, 2016
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