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|A leader should admit if they made a bad decision? Toefl exam.
12 - conviction!that's the word. sometimes,I just cannot figure out another way to illustrate my point,even though i am not satisfied...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 16, 2014 / Adamtong - Sep 18, 2014
|The best gift for a child? Books help to learn more skills such as pronouncing and reading
Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 17, 2014 / fikri - Sep 17, 2014
|'good mental and body conditions' - people have different interpretation of enjoyment; TOEFL
Writing FeedbackKian1378 - Sep 16, 2014 / Kian1378 - Sep 17, 2014
|TOEFL essay: A good shopping center can decrease our effort for shopping.
NEW - I would be grateful if someone could help me to correct my writing. It has been announced that a...
Writing Feedbackamirtaghavi - Sep 17, 2014 / — -
|Assigning homework every day to students is necessary or not ?
3 - Hamed, my comments will be below. I will revise the essay content for you whenever possible in order to...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 17, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 17, 2014
|TOEFL: different types of tasks endow more colors to our life
3 - Gandhi devoted his whole life to fight against British-ruled government and inspired movements for civil rights in India.His great...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 16, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 17, 2014
|TOEFL: "My shy girlfriend" - people should be honest
3 - I, too, do agree. You have to clearly present the prompt in the introduction. I think that sort...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 17, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 17, 2014
|Average distance in miles traveled by English person per year 1985 and 2000.
3 - Including the picture of the graph is a must. The picture helps readers understand the logical order easily. ...
Writing FeedbackEmma Le - Sep 17, 2014 / eddies - Sep 17, 2014
|IELTS Writting task 1: UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.
7 - You write well. However, you need to pay particular attention to the appropriate language of change. Please allow me...
Writing Feedbackvandon92 - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 17, 2014
|While the wealthy nations are getting richer, developing countries are struggling with the poverty
5 - hey vangi, I'm curious how to quote other's essay and make comment? I can just label some words...
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 16, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 17, 2014
|Free time or money? Spending time with family brings more advantages for both workers and companies
3 - Omit base on the hours, so as to avoid writing redundancy. Everyone knows that wage is according the...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 16, 2014
|Writing Task 1 - IELTS Academic - Post-school qualification in Australia according to gender 1999
3 - If I were you, I prefer writing an overview paragraph instead of conclusion paragraph. Writing task 1 needs...
Writing Feedbackbocahnakal - Sep 13, 2014 / tiaDS - Sep 16, 2014
|The main reason worldwide for agricultural land becoming less productive is over-grazing; IELTS
3 - A pie chart shows the information about some causes of agricultural degradation in the world and the table...
Writing Feedbackcoriandrum - Sep 16, 2014 / tiaDS - Sep 16, 2014
|John Wayne once said: "Tomorrow is the most important thing in life" - IELTS task
5 - to solve it, try to use synonym of these words or phrase, try to paraphrase, make another sentence...
Writing FeedbackAshlyn - Sep 16, 2014 / fikri - Sep 16, 2014
|GRE: Nation's culture and traditions are mainly maintained and generated in major cities
3 - Thank you very very much for your comments and suggestions. In fact they are always very helpful :)...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 16, 2014 / xatutik - Sep 16, 2014
|Modern technology, such as chemical fertilizer is dangerous to human health and local communities
8 - 1. Pay attention to use personal pronoun. 2. I worry to use many connectors will be overusing. 3. Some...
Writing Feedbacknasir1112 - Sep 16, 2014 / tiaDS - Sep 16, 2014
|IELTS: "CLIMATE CHANGE" - politicians should take a step to save our environment
3 - When it comes to an introductory statement, you are asked to introduce the topic. Most students simply paraphrase the...
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 16, 2014
|TOEFL: Students would receive a better education if attending classes for 11 month of a year
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 11, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 16, 2014
|One of the dangerous threat to our planet is climate change - ielts task 2
2 - There are a number of sentence structure and grammar errors in the paper but we cannot address those problems...
Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 15, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|Should we take action at once? 'patience have great range influence in our life'
6 - Mabel, don't worry. You will get to my level of writing through constant practice. So don't stop writing essays...
Writing FeedbackMabel Ye - Sep 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|Living in country or city? Answer depends on the ages, hobbies and gender of each person.
3 - I think the answer for this question depends on the ages , hobbies , and gender of each person....
Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 15, 2014 / fikri - Sep 15, 2014
|'Lack of proper education system' - fixing the existing gap between the rich and poor countries
Writing Feedbackderine - Sep 15, 2014 / masghar - Sep 15, 2014
|School curriculum - It should be optional for students to choose their favorite subjects to follow
3 - Related: Essay ideas - students should have more input into the school curriculum Greetings! It depends in...
Writing Feedbackboo2601 - Sep 14, 2014 / boo2601 - Sep 15, 2014
|My girlfriend says that money is everything, but we need yet have more care about public recognition
3 - nickyzhi:When I ask my girlfriend which do you prefer, money or public recognition, she shouts:" Definitely money, money is...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 15, 2014 / d96nguyen - Sep 15, 2014
|'It was at that moment I realized my mistake' - sample from my autobiography; college essay
Writing Feedbackjakobymeyers - Sep 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|[Toefl] By excessive use of cars in the roads, the number of accident has increased.
4 - the new version! Nowadays automobiles are the most important type of transportation. However, automobiles have an important effect on...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 13, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 15, 2014
|Use of water in agriculture had increased dramatically from about 500 km3 (1900) to 3000 km3 in 2000
NEW - *The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.* ...
Writing Feedbackworstmanz - Sep 14, 2014 / — -
|I'm a nice person that is always trying to help others. Self-evaluation for my teacher
5 - This is incomplete. What are you going to accomplish? Your goals? If that so, better state it clearly...
Writing Feedbackronny12 - Sep 14, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 14, 2014
|Responsible tourists to preserve about culture and environment
5 - This is a very meticulous essay and then I suggest that you pay more attention concerning the overall arguments...
Writing Feedbacksyabring - Jan 3, 2014 / profes - Sep 14, 2014
|IELTS writing Task-2 which type of teaching is better indoor or outdoor
4 - I think that the introduction needs more reformulation to delver a good impression to the corrector at first you...
Writing Feedbackroop1 - Mar 3, 2014 / profes - Sep 14, 2014
|TOEFL: Cars have had a greater impact on the society than airplanes.
2 - Admittedly, automobiles have greatly facilitated our lives,and hence definitely have a great impact on our society. Statement...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 14, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 14, 2014
|The law need the flexibility in each verdict of criminal behaviours
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 13, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 13, 2014
|GRE Issue: Great nations should be assessed by general welfare of its people
2 - You have a solid start for your introduction. There is a slight problem though. You were supposed to agree...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Sep 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 13, 2014
|IELTS: 'Women absolutely dominate in two fields' - male and female teachers
8 - This is not clearly referred.It is also not fair while the graph shows man's worker outnumber women in...
Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Aug 16, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 13, 2014
|which one have an important role in order to success of students in school?classmate or parents?
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 12, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 13, 2014
|TOEFL: to be an expert in one field is not better than to have broad knowledge of many subjects
3 - the flow interrupted while you are not explain what is the specific reasons effecting your sister...
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Aug 10, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 13, 2014
|MONEY IS THE ROOT OF ALL EVIL
4 - I wonder that you can write the prompt and purpose of the essay. It is addressed for IELTS, TOEFL...
Writing FeedbackMariuxi - Aug 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 12, 2014
|GRE; Welfare of the nation and the desire of corporations to maximize profits
3 - Personally I think you need a stronger thesis statement in the introductory paragraph. It is ambiguous which side you...
Writing Feedbacksnowcones - Oct 21, 2013 / dunguyen - Sep 12, 2014
|Consequences to Uselessly Building in Wildlife/Natural Areas
Writing Feedbackhalhante - Mar 4, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Truth is most important factor in making a romantic relationship persistent
2 - - The debate about whether telling the truth is an important factor in any kind of relationship has...
Writing Feedbackm64 - Oct 20, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|TOEFL Essay: How does advertising influence people's behaviour?
Writing FeedbackHaydi - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Sep 12, 2014
|People go to college because they need to learn more things about the world - TOEFL
Writing Feedbackinecula - Jun 13, 2013 / hamedmas - Sep 12, 2014
|TOEFL: Public health. Should government introduce a law or is it a personal issue?
5 - Without government's attention to public health, epidemic diseases could be catastrophic. Please choose the first statement of the...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Sep 11, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 12, 2014
|[TOEFL] Parents are our teachers from the very early time in our life.
6 - Lian, I have the same problems with my essay writting as you do. Sometimes I even realize that I...
Writing FeedbackLian Li - Sep 11, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 12, 2014
|[TOEFL] 'Firstly, people want to have more knowledge' - why attend to college or university?
Writing FeedbackLian Li - Sep 11, 2014 / Lian Li - Sep 12, 2014
|TOEFL: Making relationship with pet means readiness to bear huge responsibility
3 - Louisa, I am very grateful for your support! Frankly, it takes me more time to write an essay than...
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Sep 11, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 12, 2014
|Informations from books or from real life?; unexpected things happening everyday
2 - Let's not worry about your grammar problems for now. Let's get the message of the essay cleaned up first....
Writing Feedbackkordestanchi - Mar 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Friendship does not have to be limited to people living and working around you anymore - CLEP Essays
2 - Rucha, let me offer you some words of advice in order to help polish your essay. You have written...
Writing FeedbackRucha - Nov 14, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Toefl- Government should spend more money on improving roads or public transport?
Writing FeedbackSyed Abrar - Mar 4, 2014 / Lian Li - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: the positive and negative effects of the increase in the elders
2 - Crystal, the prompt begs you to discuss the topic in the manner of a compare and contrast essay. That...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Apr 21, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|Young people and their participation in helping their communities
3 - I agree with xatutik. While you presented a well thought out essay. There was a failure on your part...
Writing Feedbackmtkee - May 14, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTS: "Countryside resort"; Where would you like to spend you unforgettable holidays next summer?
5 - By way of personal explanation,summer holiday is one of the best possible ways to get away from the...
Writing FeedbackLuke Cameron Jr - Sep 11, 2014 / fikri - Sep 11, 2014
|GRE: It is very responsible task to create school nationwide curriculum
2 - Xatutik, while you present an immediate and effective body paragraph to the prompt, you still need to establish your...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|Is homeschooling a good alternative to public education?
2 - Faith, I would advise you to please create an introductory statement that gives an overview of the topic being...
Writing FeedbackFaith318 - Mar 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|Telling truth has been a debatable issue among people from the past till now
Writing Feedback600score - Nov 26, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|TOEFL-ETS Some people believe that automobiles are useful and necessary.
2 - You present an interesting position on the topic provided. However, there is a lot more you can do to...
Writing FeedbackTareqkh - Jun 16, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|GRE: Scandals are really a way of information spreading, yet it often spread unwarranted information
2 - I have a few suggestions and revisions that I believe you can use to further improve the content of...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|New seafood restaurant: profit or no profit
5 - ok thank you...
Writing Feedbacksonumehta - Sep 11, 2014 / sonumehta - Sep 11, 2014
|Toefl - Replacing old buildings is important for any city but it should not affect historic houses
9 - Having taken the TOEFL in the past, I can understand your concerns. The key to passing the TOEFL lies...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|TOEFL: In modern world, everyone should learn to be polite to others under any circumstance
4 - Hi, Ryan! Thank you for the constructive comments. I myself feel that my sentence is choppy too. But I...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Sep 5, 2014 / Xiaokai Jin - Sep 11, 2014
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