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|Topic: Which better? Living in a city or living in the country? why (150 words)
2 - This should be split into two paras - Firstly and Secondly, should go into two separate paragraphs :)...
Writing FeedbackNamkeo - Jul 24, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2014
|IELTS - mobile phones: faster communication vs social problems
6 - Furthermore, the growing number of mobilesmobile games will impact theirthe mental development of children negatively. For instance, there are...
Writing FeedbackMy2983189867 - Jun 30, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2014
|IELTS: One of advertising's drawbacks - purchasing not necessary products
2 - Well, your essay has many issues and the most obvious one is that you have written everything in one...
Writing FeedbackJuliet Ngo - Jul 25, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2014
|Some subjects should be optional rather than compulsory
2 - Education has been viewed as one of the most essential elementsaspects of individual and social development.One topic now under...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2014
|IELTS Should we invent a new language for people to use for international communication?
2 - Why do you talk about "English" in particular here? Your prompt is much broader and talk about the...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 26, 2014 / dumi - Jul 27, 2014
|"Courage, my friends" - Tommy Douglas stands out as one of the greatest Canadian
2 - In fact, Canada is known for its successful Medicare system. Statistic showconfirm Canadians are among the healthiest people...
Writing Feedbackayesha10833 - Jun 9, 2014 / dumi - Jul 27, 2014
|Adolescents are being influenced badly by untalented people who become famous
5 - First of all, it is true thatAdmittedly, people usespend their money to becomeachieve an inspiration, which is are definitely...
Writing Feedbackicebeating - Jun 26, 2014 / eddies - Jul 27, 2014
|IELTS: I highly recommend authorities to raise the age to leave school to 18
7 - contribute to high quality or contribute in producing high quality I always suggest others to have...
Writing Feedbackbangvuthe - Jun 4, 2014 / eddies - Jul 27, 2014
|Imprisonment trend among five different countries - bar graph
Writing FeedbackVihuynh - Jun 30, 2014 / eddies - Jul 27, 2014
|Some people say that success is "10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work"
Writing FeedbackKatyDao - Jun 10, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|Crime in urban areas of America - rough draft
2 - teachers affects a studentsstudent's achievement. Without proper education, the possibility of being able to earn a decent income...
Writing Feedbackameyer149 - Jul 18, 2014 / Hiruni - Jul 26, 2014
|It is very boring and monotonous to keep living in the place you were born until you die
3 - First and foremost, there may be more job opportunities available in another area.outside. For example, many people choose to...
Writing Feedbackmandana193 - Jul 26, 2014 / dumi - Jul 26, 2014
|How the Vietnamese invasion of Cambodia affected the United States-feedback
5 - The Vietnamese invasion of Cambodia also affected people's actionsperceptions on war and their behavior (actions and behavior more or...
Writing Feedbackyodelkid4 - Jun 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 26, 2014
|ielts essay about water shortage
12 - You should have included the full prompt of your essay for us to understand what it really requires from...
Writing FeedbackShajiang - Jun 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 26, 2014
|Advertisement are only the good way of gaining information and one should not be fully depends on it
5 - As you have pointed out, it is difficult to generalise about IELTS template. You'd better focus on the...
Writing Feedbackemonabin - Jul 24, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|Unpaid community service - "great stepping stone for high school institutions"
6 - It is ok if you put many paragraphs here and there. However, a layout takes an important role...
Writing Feedbackhillard214james - Jun 23, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|essay: following the host country's culture for visitors
5 - even this essay opens for discussion/ both views, it is always nicer if you state your opinion in...
Writing Feedbacklovemylife - Jun 23, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|'healthy diet and adequate exercises' - Methods to improve public health
Writing Feedbackhillard214james - Jun 22, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK - 2 Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men
Writing FeedbackSabi Thapaa - Jun 22, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|some people believe that college student should consider only their own talents
4 - Given this evidence, both group opinions are right, which students should consider parameters when choosing field of study....
Writing Feedbacktgholian - Jun 5, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|Should people be allowed to have cosmetic surgery before the age of 18?
5 - Therefore, I believe that there are in-depth discussion about the pros and cons of having surgery for teenagers....
Writing Feedbackhwabatte - Jul 24, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. MARRIAGES AND DIVORCE IN THE USA & ADULT AMERICANS' MARITAL STATUS
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jun 19, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|IELTS; all towns and cities to have public spaces
5 - As I suggest to other students to pay attention to "example' they wrote, some students fail to present...
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 19, 2014 / eddies - Jul 26, 2014
|Ielts taks1: the diagram show how rainwater is reused
Writing Feedbackiamchop - Jul 3, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|College graduates find hard to get good jobs
5 - This contains 452 words. Did you finish it into 30 minutes? this intro carries bulky words. you don't...
Writing Feedbackbagusprabowoaji - Jun 19, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|I believe that society has been helped by the invention of the Internet
6 - is it ielts essay? please include the type of essay beside the topic that you have written above....
Writing Feedbackpntncar - Jul 17, 2014 / fikri - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS: What are the benefits and problems brought by international corporation?
8 - When writing a conclusion for task 2, I always start with the words "In conclusion". There's no reason...
Writing Feedbacklynn11 - Jun 16, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS - Effect of movies and computer games containing violence
7 - even this essay opens for discussion or both views, it is always nicer if you state your opinion in...
Writing Feedbackmsarkar - Jul 22, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|Ielts: Mobile phones facilitate our work and also simplify our lives
Writing Feedbackzizi1107 - Jun 21, 2014 / fikri - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS - Talent is one of the awesome things in the world
6 - grammar mistakes also, don't forget to put space between each paragraph to make the readers easier to...
Writing FeedbackFlower777 - Jun 30, 2014 / fikri - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS; Schools greatest failure is that it focuses too intensely on academic subjects
9 - this is the introduction that I've got from my teacher here,I've used it for along time and the result...
Writing FeedbackSagar1004 - Jul 22, 2014 / fikri - Jul 25, 2014
|Ielts - fast food is good or bad?
10 - read sample essays as many as possible as you will learn how ielts essay should written. Government...
Writing FeedbackHelpmeet - Jun 6, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS 2- insufficient respect is shown to older people
Writing Feedbackandial - Jun 30, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|Spending more money in public transportation should be improved early
4 - Therefore, I would argue that governments should categorize issues by putting them in orders, and public transportation should...
Writing Feedbackpe5167 - Jun 20, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|[TOEFL]People who cannot accept the criticism from others will not be successful
3 - the criticism enables youpeople to be aware of others' opinion | other opinions. I prefer using the world...
Writing FeedbackCute Scott - Jun 20, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY; Some people believe that cell phones should be for personal use only
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jul 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: permit of women to run career in army must be supported
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jul 12, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|IELTS Task 2. Where Talent Comes From
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jun 18, 2014 / eddies - Jul 25, 2014
|Oil discovery has been most beneficial for people in Iran
6 - We are very grateful to an abundant oil supply given by the almighty. It effects the future nation...
Writing Feedbacksomi - Jul 2, 2014 / SHanafi - Jul 25, 2014
|Most people believe that adult should provide all child demands, because they not are independent
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Jul 23, 2014 / eddies - Jul 24, 2014
|4 types of landfill waste in Molovia, Bratistan, Atlantis, Senia and Vatania
Writing FeedbackHang Le - Jun 11, 2014 / eddies - Jul 24, 2014
|TOEFL: If young children did not get in touch with technology, their creation would not develop
4 - Write a concluding signal, like: In conclusion,... This is important to show that you will end your essay....
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Jul 24, 2014 / eddies - Jul 24, 2014
|TOEFL: 'career preparation' - reasons why people attend to schools
6 - a subject and verb agreement. Write: These universities play | The university plays write: a library...
Writing Feedbackbrisky - Jun 4, 2014 / eddies - Jul 24, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Life cycle of silkworm and production of silk cloth
2 - You should have followed this approach ...> Introduction, Overview and Detailed paras :) I can see your introduction,...
Writing Feedbackzoomikag - Jul 23, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 24, 2014
|Most important characteristic of a good teacher?
3 - You better include the full prompt in your post for us to get a better understanding as to what...
Writing Feedbackashkannaghib - Jul 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 24, 2014
|[TOEFL] Sometimes we have to do something for others which are not interesting for us
5 - It is not good to work in other pressure.Nobody can be happy when they follow other and go against...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Jul 24, 2014 / poudelmelina - Jul 24, 2014
|Vehicle has enhanced people being. However, cars harm nature.
3 - First of all, there are few researches worry about influence transport on nature. They show that...
Writing FeedbackHappyman - Jul 22, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 24, 2014
|'We should acknowledge and use most suitable methods of learning' - Books vs Experience?
3 - well, I changed it to: We can learn and gain knowledge with different methods, such as reading a...
Writing Feedbackhirt_01 - Jul 22, 2014 / hirt_01 - Jul 23, 2014
|More and more people now choose to wear the fashionable clothes.
2 - negative- The more and more people get "trendy", the greater the expectations in what clothes you should wear increases....
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 23, 2014 / louisa216 - Jul 23, 2014
|"I AM NOT A MERE TEACHER" - creative essay
3 - thanks for correcting me on the digressions. n a cat means continuous assessment test... it's quite common in my...
Writing Feedbackdchege711 - Jul 17, 2014 / dchege711 - Jul 23, 2014
|We are always told that money is the most fundamental if one wants to make his own living
Writing FeedbackFor a voy - Jul 22, 2014 / For a voy - Jul 23, 2014
|People should be aware of health risks - dramatic increase in fast food consuming
4 - What is the purpose of writing this essay? Is it for IELTS, TOEFL? Mention the purpose in the title...
Writing FeedbackHaiha - Jul 12, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|IELTS writing 1: meat and poultry consumption
2 - The line graph comparespresents the per capita consumption of different meat items, namely beef, pork, brollersbroilers and turkey in...
Writing FeedbackStarSea - Jul 23, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|IELTS: In which areas people made important progress?
6 - Today,the role of English as a global language is indispensable.Some people are of the pointview that we can implementintroduce...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 19, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|SAT - "happiness is not something that happens to us after we get what we want"
4 - Impressive start :) It seems to be something close at hand yetor sometimes far away from our grasp....
Writing Feedbacklittleting - Jul 9, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|'Europe had degraded most of its land' - three regions of the world during 1990's
2 - First, you need to upload the charts in to the thread for us to provide you with more meaningful...
Writing Feedbackkashaf - Jul 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS: 'food, drink and tobacco' - statistic of expenditure graph
3 - Yes, your approach seems to be fine with me too - Introduction, Overview ( overall idea of the...
Writing Feedbackxizon7777 - Jul 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS Air travel is becoming more welcomed by common people since its price is going down
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 21, 2014 / msarkar - Jul 22, 2014
|Toefl writing is my weakness, hope you can help me, the question is written in the message.
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Jul 19, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 22, 2014
|In order to avoid social crisis we should treat the elders with a courteous attitude
3 - This sentence has a few issues :( Here you assume that the reader knows the topic. However, the...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
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