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|The factor of sense of fulfillment is more important than the factor of salary; Mother Teresa
2 - Many people prefer a job with high salary. Although the salary is one of the important factors to a...
Writing Feedbackwahdee489 - Sep 20, 2014 / beginner1010 - Sep 20, 2014
|I went to Thailand this summer for a school service trip - Narrative Essay
6 - For the first sentence, instead of directly restating the question, try to change it so that you are answering...
Writing FeedbackGilchrist2014 - Sep 16, 2014 / m924 - Sep 20, 2014
|GRE: The replacement of any leader should be considered individually
NEW - Claim: In any field-business, politics, education, government-those in power should step down after five years. Reason: The surest path...
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|"Treaty No.7" - The TV show that I like the most
Writing Feedbacknguyentuandhmdc - Sep 20, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 20, 2014
|'The argument draws conclusion based on poor and insufficient information'; "Woven baskets"
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 19, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 20, 2014
|IELTS: Balance Diet; people should pay attention to other aspects for their health
4 - My promt is "Eating a balance diet is the most important factor for a health life" To what extent...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Sep 19, 2014 / Mann_ms - Sep 20, 2014
|GRE issue- Should society try to save every plant and animal species regardless of needed resources?
2 - Hi Dunguyen, your essay is pretty good. Your position and reasoning are clear and logical. adapt to...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Sep 19, 2014 / xatutik - Sep 20, 2014
|It is vital for arts to have prolific conditions to thrive and be accessible for people
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 18, 2014 / Anfalia - Sep 20, 2014
|Keeping dogs and cats as companion. How it influences ownership and the community?
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 19, 2014 / Anfalia - Sep 20, 2014
|Life is easier? Positive view about everything always help us for having a good life in every times.
3 - To write an introductory paragraph, you have to show background information and thesis. For this moment, you did. Yet,...
Writing FeedbackKian1378 - Sep 19, 2014 / eddies - Sep 20, 2014
|IELTS: Without communication technology and transport, the foundation of modern life will crumple
2 - - Solid introduction with a good thesis statement. This essay is off to a very good start. However,...
Writing Feedbackcy20070324 - Sep 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 19, 2014
|IELTS Essay Task 1: 'popularity peak took place in 1980' - Teenage vegeterians
5 - * based on my understanding.. In IELTS writing task, if you use overall, you don't need write...
Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Aug 19, 2014 / Mann_ms - Sep 19, 2014
|What should kids do when parents are too busy to accompany their child? TOEFL EXAM
8 - Focus on your beginning and conclusion. Your beginning was not abrupt which is good. But the conclusion is not...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 15, 2014 / NoumanAhmad - Sep 19, 2014
|'Modern time makes all people busy with their job' - how to solve traffic problem?
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 19, 2014
|What life would be like without the internet?
4 - Truc, while you presented a good discussion. I believe that in order to answer this essay, you should merely...
Writing FeedbackTrucMai - Sep 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 19, 2014
|Theme : about alternative medicine treatment and dangerous risk from it
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 17, 2014 / YULIS - Sep 19, 2014
|Working for the same or different company for all life. Discuss both view and give opinion (IELTS)
3 - kttrung, the essay is asking you compare the advantages and disadvantages of working with the same company for life,...
Writing Feedbackkttrung - Sep 18, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 18, 2014
|IELTS: Arts are crucial to government to gain successful incomes by some events
3 - how many 'government' that you already used here? try to use another word such as administration, or they or...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Sep 18, 2014 / fikri - Sep 18, 2014
|IELTS: government should focus on investment both of arts and public service; equally important
3 - Thank you so much for reading my essay and correcting it... That is very useful for me to improve...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Sep 18, 2014 / Mann_ms - Sep 18, 2014
|Once I was; now I am
Writing FeedbackNoumanAhmad - Sep 18, 2014 / NoumanAhmad - Sep 18, 2014
|I helped Tony - this event marked my transition to the adulthood
2 - Mantoes, you must be commended on the way that you developed your story. From the first paragraph onwards, I...
Writing FeedbackMantoes - Sep 18, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 18, 2014
|A leader should admit if they made a bad decision? Toefl exam.
12 - conviction!that's the word. sometimes,I just cannot figure out another way to illustrate my point,even though i am not satisfied...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 16, 2014 / Adamtong - Sep 18, 2014
|The best gift for a child? Books help to learn more skills such as pronouncing and reading
Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 17, 2014 / fikri - Sep 17, 2014
|'good mental and body conditions' - people have different interpretation of enjoyment; TOEFL
Writing FeedbackKian1378 - Sep 16, 2014 / Kian1378 - Sep 17, 2014
|TOEFL essay: A good shopping center can decrease our effort for shopping.
NEW - I would be grateful if someone could help me to correct my writing. It has been announced that a...
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|Assigning homework every day to students is necessary or not ?
3 - Hamed, my comments will be below. I will revise the essay content for you whenever possible in order to...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 17, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 17, 2014
|TOEFL: "My shy girlfriend" - people should be honest
3 - I, too, do agree. You have to clearly present the prompt in the introduction. I think that sort...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 17, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 17, 2014
|Average distance in miles traveled by English person per year 1985 and 2000.
3 - Including the picture of the graph is a must. The picture helps readers understand the logical order easily. ...
Writing FeedbackEmma Le - Sep 17, 2014 / eddies - Sep 17, 2014
|IELTS Writting task 1: UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.
7 - You write well. However, you need to pay particular attention to the appropriate language of change. Please allow me...
Writing Feedbackvandon92 - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 17, 2014
|While the wealthy nations are getting richer, developing countries are struggling with the poverty
5 - hey vangi, I'm curious how to quote other's essay and make comment? I can just label some words...
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 16, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 17, 2014
|Free time or money? Spending time with family brings more advantages for both workers and companies
3 - Omit base on the hours, so as to avoid writing redundancy. Everyone knows that wage is according the...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 16, 2014
|Writing Task 1 - IELTS Academic - Post-school qualification in Australia according to gender 1999
3 - If I were you, I prefer writing an overview paragraph instead of conclusion paragraph. Writing task 1 needs...
Writing Feedbackbocahnakal - Sep 13, 2014 / tiaDS - Sep 16, 2014
|John Wayne once said: "Tomorrow is the most important thing in life" - IELTS task
5 - to solve it, try to use synonym of these words or phrase, try to paraphrase, make another sentence...
Writing FeedbackAshlyn - Sep 16, 2014 / fikri - Sep 16, 2014
|The main reason worldwide for agricultural land becoming less productive is over-grazing; IELTS
2 - The pie chart reports main causes of worldwide agricultural land degradation and while the table shows main reasons...
Writing Feedbackcoriandrum - Sep 16, 2014 / fikri - Sep 16, 2014
|GRE: Nation's culture and traditions are mainly maintained and generated in major cities
3 - Thank you very very much for your comments and suggestions. In fact they are always very helpful :)...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 16, 2014 / xatutik - Sep 16, 2014
|Modern technology, such as chemical fertilizer is dangerous to human health and local communities
8 - 1. Pay attention to use personal pronoun. 2. I worry to use many connectors will be overusing. 3. Some...
Writing Feedbacknasir1112 - Sep 16, 2014 / tiaDS - Sep 16, 2014
|TOEFL: different types of tasks endow more colors to our life
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 16, 2014 / xatutik - Sep 16, 2014
|IELTS: "CLIMATE CHANGE" - politicians should take a step to save our environment
3 - When it comes to an introductory statement, you are asked to introduce the topic. Most students simply paraphrase the...
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 15, 2014 / eddies - Sep 16, 2014
|TOEFL: Students would receive a better education if attending classes for 11 month of a year
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 11, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 16, 2014
|One of the dangerous threat to our planet is climate change - ielts task 2
2 - There are a number of sentence structure and grammar errors in the paper but we cannot address those problems...
Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 15, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|Should we take action at once? 'patience have great range influence in our life'
6 - Mabel, don't worry. You will get to my level of writing through constant practice. So don't stop writing essays...
Writing FeedbackMabel Ye - Sep 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|Living in country or city? Answer depends on the ages, hobbies and gender of each person.
3 - I think the answer for this question depends on the ages , hobbies , and gender of each person....
Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 15, 2014 / fikri - Sep 15, 2014
|'Lack of proper education system' - fixing the existing gap between the rich and poor countries
Writing Feedbackderine - Sep 15, 2014 / masghar - Sep 15, 2014
|School curriculum - It should be optional for students to choose their favorite subjects to follow
3 - Related: Essay ideas - students should have more input into the school curriculum Greetings! It depends in...
Writing Feedbackboo2601 - Sep 14, 2014 / boo2601 - Sep 15, 2014
|'It was at that moment I realized my mistake' - sample from my autobiography; college essay
Writing Feedbackjakobymeyers - Sep 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 15, 2014
|My girlfriend says that money is everything, but we need yet have more care about public recognition
2 - When e ating and drinking, we need use money. Similarly, it is also necessary when giving an fancy gift...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 15, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 15, 2014
|[Toefl] By excessive use of cars in the roads, the number of accident has increased.
4 - the new version! Nowadays automobiles are the most important type of transportation. However, automobiles have an important effect on...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 13, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 15, 2014
|Use of water in agriculture had increased dramatically from about 500 km3 (1900) to 3000 km3 in 2000
NEW - *The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.* ...
Writing Feedbackworstmanz - Sep 14, 2014 / — -
|I'm a nice person that is always trying to help others. Self-evaluation for my teacher
5 - This is incomplete. What are you going to accomplish? Your goals? If that so, better state it clearly...
Writing Feedbackronny12 - Sep 14, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 14, 2014
|Responsible tourists to preserve about culture and environment
5 - This is a very meticulous essay and then I suggest that you pay more attention concerning the overall arguments...
Writing Feedbacksyabring - Jan 3, 2014 / profes - Sep 14, 2014
|IELTS writing Task-2 which type of teaching is better indoor or outdoor
4 - I think that the introduction needs more reformulation to delver a good impression to the corrector at first you...
Writing Feedbackroop1 - Mar 3, 2014 / profes - Sep 14, 2014
|TOEFL: Cars have had a greater impact on the society than airplanes.
2 - Admittedly, automobiles have greatly facilitated our lives,and hence definitely have a great impact on our society. Statement...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 14, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 14, 2014
|The law need the flexibility in each verdict of criminal behaviours
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 13, 2014 / hamedmas - Sep 13, 2014
|GRE Issue: Great nations should be assessed by general welfare of its people
2 - You have a solid start for your introduction. There is a slight problem though. You were supposed to agree...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Sep 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 13, 2014
|IELTS: 'Women absolutely dominate in two fields' - male and female teachers
8 - This is not clearly referred.It is also not fair while the graph shows man's worker outnumber women in...
Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Aug 16, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 13, 2014
|which one have an important role in order to success of students in school?classmate or parents?
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 12, 2014 / nickyzhi - Sep 13, 2014
|TOEFL: to be an expert in one field is not better than to have broad knowledge of many subjects
3 - the flow interrupted while you are not explain what is the specific reasons effecting your sister...
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Aug 10, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 13, 2014
|MONEY IS THE ROOT OF ALL EVIL
4 - I wonder that you can write the prompt and purpose of the essay. It is addressed for IELTS, TOEFL...
Writing FeedbackMariuxi - Aug 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Sep 12, 2014
|GRE; Welfare of the nation and the desire of corporations to maximize profits
3 - Personally I think you need a stronger thesis statement in the introductory paragraph. It is ambiguous which side you...
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|Consequences to Uselessly Building in Wildlife/Natural Areas
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