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|Vehicle has enhanced people being. However, cars harm nature.
3 - First of all, there are few researches worry about influence transport on nature. They show that...
Writing FeedbackHappyman - Jul 22, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 24, 2014
|'We should acknowledge and use most suitable methods of learning' - Books vs Experience?
3 - well, I changed it to: We can learn and gain knowledge with different methods, such as reading a...
Writing Feedbackhirt_01 - Jul 22, 2014 / hirt_01 - Jul 23, 2014
|More and more people now choose to wear the fashionable clothes.
2 - negative- The more and more people get "trendy", the greater the expectations in what clothes you should wear increases....
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 23, 2014 / louisa216 - Jul 23, 2014
|"I AM NOT A MERE TEACHER" - creative essay
3 - thanks for correcting me on the digressions. n a cat means continuous assessment test... it's quite common in my...
Writing Feedbackdchege711 - Jul 17, 2014 / dchege711 - Jul 23, 2014
|We are always told that money is the most fundamental if one wants to make his own living
Writing FeedbackFor a voy - Jul 22, 2014 / For a voy - Jul 23, 2014
|People should be aware of health risks - dramatic increase in fast food consuming
4 - What is the purpose of writing this essay? Is it for IELTS, TOEFL? Mention the purpose in the title...
Writing FeedbackHaiha - Jul 12, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|IELTS writing 1: meat and poultry consumption
2 - The line graph comparespresents the per capita consumption of different meat items, namely beef, pork, brollersbroilers and turkey in...
Writing FeedbackStarSea - Jul 23, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|IELTS: In which areas people made important progress?
6 - Today,the role of English as a global language is indispensable.Some people are of the pointview that we can implementintroduce...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 19, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|SAT - "happiness is not something that happens to us after we get what we want"
4 - Impressive start :) It seems to be something close at hand yetor sometimes far away from our grasp....
Writing Feedbacklittleting - Jul 9, 2014 / dumi - Jul 23, 2014
|'Europe had degraded most of its land' - three regions of the world during 1990's
2 - First, you need to upload the charts in to the thread for us to provide you with more meaningful...
Writing Feedbackkashaf - Jul 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS: 'food, drink and tobacco' - statistic of expenditure graph
3 - Yes, your approach seems to be fine with me too - Introduction, Overview ( overall idea of the...
Writing Feedbackxizon7777 - Jul 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS Air travel is becoming more welcomed by common people since its price is going down
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 21, 2014 / msarkar - Jul 22, 2014
|Toefl writing is my weakness, hope you can help me, the question is written in the message.
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Jul 19, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 22, 2014
|In order to avoid social crisis we should treat the elders with a courteous attitude
3 - This sentence has a few issues :( Here you assume that the reader knows the topic. However, the...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|Writing task 2: studying overseas can be difficult at first, but gaining experience make it worth it
7 - Your prompt is directly asking you about the opinion you hold on this issue. So, it is better...
Writing FeedbackTranAnh - Jul 18, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|TOEFL essay, living in big cities or living in small towns; the Article
Writing FeedbackBasilMostafa - Jul 18, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS: Effects of technology to communication - dangers for a society
7 - In the past, the method of communication was pretty straightforward. .... good start :) If you want to...
Writing Feedbackbmomongan - Jul 19, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS Easy for poor people to get access to university education
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|Long period of studying will make students feel bored and limit their self-study
Writing Feedbackwulishiyanzl - Jul 7, 2014 / wulishiyanzl - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS : Everyone possess a talent - we should recognize it and improve
Writing Feedbackxizon7777 - Jul 22, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 22, 2014
|Fast food is cheap and convenient therefore has positive impact on human eating habits
3 - Good introduction ... You have good writing skills :) I wish you shortened this sentence. Your point...
Writing Feedbackiamchop - Jul 17, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|TOEFL: extraordinarily cautious is important since rough work is intolerable
Writing FeedbackAndreawqh - Jul 18, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|An increasing amount of students have negative attitude of learning. Why is this happening?
Writing Feedbackstephy7658 - Jul 21, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 22, 2014
|The line graph: Migration Statistics in UK
3 - Well, this is a task that aims at assessing your report writing skills and therefore you need to...
Writing FeedbackVihuynh - Jul 7, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|What are the reasons behind lack of facilities &services for disabled population?
3 - We see many people with physical and mental disabilities and live in pathetic conditions. In fact, the recent statistical...
Writing FeedbackRUSHABH - Jun 5, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS: we should not ignore the traditional food; fast foods need be supervised
5 - .... that too has some grammar issues. These are few sentences I suggest ; There is a growing...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 16, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|Fixed punishments for crimes may improve the efficiency, decrease the crime rate
Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - Jul 16, 2014 / stephy7658 - Jul 22, 2014
|International aid is a must but also it is required to operate in the right way
4 - not only is the international aid is indispensable but also it is required to be operated in the rightappropriate...
Writing Feedbackgunyes - Jun 16, 2014 / eddies - Jul 21, 2014
|[IELTS] 'Long-term positive effects of culture' - should tourist obey local customs and behaviors?
6 - You have an excellent writing structure, excellent writing skill, perfect accuracy of collocation (lexical resources). As usual, I really...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jul 18, 2014 / tiaDS - Jul 21, 2014
|IELTS: Too much freedom for children affected their studies
2 - I like yoru approach towards the intorduction. However, I wish you removed the last line as it is...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jul 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|Number of languages in the world and its impact on global safety
4 - You should have mentioned the purpose of writing this essay, for example - IELTS, TOEFL etc., in the title...
Writing FeedbackVihuynh - Jun 9, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|Payment is very vital factor to consider while choose employer
Writing Feedbackhk_apm789 - Jul 2, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|"Bangla" - workers from Bangladesh in Malaysia
3 - 'Bangla' is one of the common descriptions we use to describe foreign construction workers in Malaysia, irrespective if they...
Writing FeedbackCycy - Jul 2, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|Nowadays, there is an ever increasing amount of noise in our everyday lives. Reasons and solutions
3 - I guess you have written this essay for IELTS or TOEFL preparation. It is good if you mention that...
Writing Feedbackstephy7658 - Jul 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
3 - Hello Divya, Your writing is impressive and especially in introduction paragraph which depicts that you have great writing skill....
Writing FeedbackDIVYA RAJKUMAR - Jul 20, 2014 / tiaDS - Jul 21, 2014
|Toefl essay: advertisements whose target is young children should be banned
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Jul 20, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|Ielts: The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business
5 - I think the reasons for both sides are not very good. And I think you should expand the ideas....
Writing Feedbackiamchop - Jun 24, 2014 / stephy7658 - Jul 21, 2014
|IELTS - Celebrities & Their Influences
5 - As a result, to become a star and an inspiration for people, a person need to have real talent...
Writing Feedbackicebeating - Jun 27, 2014 / kevin1983 - Jul 20, 2014
|The chart shows vast difference in the level of skilled vocational diploma
Writing Feedbackpranesh - Jul 17, 2014 / pranesh - Jul 20, 2014
|keep equal number of man and woman to show the respect for both genders
Writing Feedbacksky1997 - Jul 20, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 20, 2014
|TOEFL: An effective leader tries to make others feel they are part of the decision-making process.
Writing Feedbackjyong101 - Jul 18, 2014 / jyong101 - Jul 20, 2014
|IELTS: Technological progress in the past century has its negative effect, despite its remarkable
3 - level of living. health care standards. On the other hand, the development of technology is brings some...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 18, 2014 / heythere11 - Jul 20, 2014
|[IELTS TASK 2] Several languages die out in the world
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 23, 2014 / eddies - Jul 20, 2014
|Technological improvement has always two sides, benefits and drawbacks
5 - Some vocabularies and sentences interrupt the flow. You need a concluding signal. This is strictly necessary, you know....
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jul 17, 2014 / eddies - Jul 20, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY; companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform
2 - Hi, devaraj This is called shopping listing unfortunately, it indicates laziness. As far as I read the...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jul 18, 2014 / SHanafi - Jul 20, 2014
|TOEFL - automobiles have changed our lives
3 - In my personal view automobiles are the ones that have brought have a new era of transportation. Yes... I...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh13 - Jun 27, 2014 / dumi - Jul 20, 2014
|[IELTS] The role of parents and school in teaching children
2 - Firstly, parents have major influence on children's behaviour, especially when they are 3-to 5-years-olds.very young. Children, by...
Writing Feedbacktoanci - Jun 28, 2014 / dumi - Jul 20, 2014
|What is alternatives to reduce industrial pollution? replace harmful industries
2 - Pollution is a vital problem worldwide. Developing countries are becoming industrialized that leads to increase pollutedmore environmental pollutionenvironment. In...
Writing Feedbackhk_apm789 - Jun 28, 2014 / dumi - Jul 20, 2014
|"Another First Date" - my narrative essay
2 - I am in the bathroom getting ready for, yet another "first date." At this point, I do not have...
Writing FeedbackLuna2014 - Jul 9, 2014 / niesaysi - Jul 19, 2014
|IELTS: spending more money on promoting healthy lifestyle or treatment
NEW - Some people think it is more important for government to spend more money on promoting healthy lifestyle in order...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 19, 2014 / — -
|GRE-118: views we share vs views contradict our own and learning from it
2 - Why are you having three parts for the introduction. You should have had all these sentences in on para...
Writing Feedbackbuonarroti - Jun 8, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS Education plays an important role in the socioeconomic status of a country
3 - Well... you write very well. Good grammar, vocabulary , flow etc. However, I believe you need to pay a...
Writing Feedbacktink3r - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|(IELTS) Studying abroad is a trend among university students in Turkey
5 - It is always good to include your prompt in the post so that we can have a better understanding...
Writing Feedbackkbektas - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS: Abortion Should Be illegal? People should think of the consequences
4 - Recently, abortionsincreaseshave increased rapidly and becomesthe issue has become a controversial topic. Some people supposebelieve that abortions should...
Writing Feedbackthanhmai - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|(IELTS) a country benefits from more and more university students
5 - However, the publicsome people has doubt about the beneficial effect of college education and they believe these policies will...
Writing Feedbackpatdr - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS Essay Task 2: entertaining and educational functions of Museums
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|TOEFL: 11 month study period for a better, more efficient education
2 - You need to improve your approach for introduction. This introduction fails to introduce your prompt to the reader....
Writing Feedbackkurosusu - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - center for business vs agriculture (farming) research choice
3 - I agree with eddies .... your intro needs improvement. I think you better introduce the prompt itself. In this...
Writing Feedbackilaha - Jun 26, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS: How British people spending their money on fast foods? Chart
Writing Feedbackgns5958 - Jul 16, 2014 / iamchop - Jul 17, 2014
|[IELTS TASK 2] Some sectors request many well-qualified people - career choices for young generation
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