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|GRE best way to understand the character of a society
2 - You're essay is very good and well written, just the excess of large words makes it hard to get...
Writing FeedbackYoullee - Jun 26, 2014 / malsackey - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS - learning languages at an early age bracket benefits more than deteriorates.
4 - Sure :) This my suggestion for your introduction; Literacy on foreign languages is a great advantage in the modern...
Writing Feedbackerocdrah - Jul 15, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|I definitely agree - pressure of school and parental pressure should be reduced
3 - Don't write lengthy sentences to open your essay. Begin your essay with a more catchy, interesting and meaningful...
Writing Feedbackatmnbnnr - Jul 15, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS; working and travelling a year before university is a good idea
Writing Feedbackskyman - Jul 15, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|The importance of utilizing advisement globally continues to increase each year
Writing Feedbackdondon26 - Jun 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS The environment problems facing today's world are so great that there is
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 15, 2014 / MisterWandering - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS: 'The apple never falls far from the tree' - Parents should teach children
10 - For this essay, I think one body paragraph is not enough to cover all the question from the prompt....
Writing Feedback19epuzam - Jun 14, 2014 / eddies - Jul 16, 2014
|Toefl : Begin learning a foreign language as soon as starting school
5 - This sentence is too long and contains much vague information when it comes to an opening paragraph. according...
Writing Feedbackitspueng - Jun 14, 2014 / eddies - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS; School teachers used to be the source of information
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 15, 2014 / digitalidea - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Some people say that the Internet is making the world
Writing FeedbackSabi Thapaa - Jul 4, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|Parents should have much time for their children which are lonely sometimes
5 - It is sometimes hard to share writing feedback if you don't include a complete hook. Secondly, when you open...
Writing Feedbackanthonypasha - Jul 6, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS - GUN CONTROL & INCREASING VIOLENCE
13 - All in all, it is obvious thatObviously,there isa poorthis proves that there is no valid relationship between polices carrying...
Writing Feedbackicebeating - Jun 22, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS : negative effects of technological process ( agree or disagree )
5 - This is not a clear example, I think. Have journalistic questions to build a clear example. Let's say:...
Writing Feedbackthanhphongct1 - Jun 13, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY: Computers - What things will they be used for in the future?
Writing Feedbackrockybir - Jun 11, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|Young people should spend time on traveling before beginning their studies
Writing Feedbackwinnietseng - Jul 3, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|[TOEFL essay] Internship prepare students better for their careers
6 - Also doing internship programmes in the university also helpS students have some soft skills, such as team working, colleague...
Writing Feedbackeragon26050 - Jul 8, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS writing task 1 - Reject a company offer - letter
3 - Begin your letter with a positive note although it is to inform something negative; I am very thankful...
Writing Feedback12thaugust2005 - Jul 6, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Ielts: apology letter - 'evenings noise'
4 - I am writing to apologize for the noise that spoilsdisturbed your evenings and causescaused you some distress.inconvenience. As you...
Writing Feedbackganggang - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Video games are harmless fun. Disagree or Agree?
4 - I think the expression 'etc' is neither very appropriate in academic writings, nor be counted as a word, so...
Writing FeedbackMinhMinh - Jul 15, 2014 / erocdrah - Jul 15, 2014
|[IELTS Task 2] Text messages or phone calls; I prefer talking on the phone
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jul 7, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|Today's charity - support made by wealthy nations must be voluntary
4 - Money flow to the poorest nations in African and Asian continents riseshas risen magnificently during the last decade. ...
Writing FeedbackLazira - Jul 2, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS 2 Working hoursare toolong and people don't have time for family
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 14, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|GRE Issue "The best way to understand the character of a society..."
2 - Hi! I think you should make your stand clearer on the introduction and most importantly in conclusion. Instead of...
Writing FeedbackTila Tequila - Jul 13, 2014 / eirehc - Jul 15, 2014
|PUBLIC LIBRARIES SHOULD NOT BE MAINTAINED
NEW - TOPIC: PUBLIC LIBRARIES SHOULD NOT BE MAINTAINED ANYMORE SINCE WE ALREADY HAVE COMPUTER TECHNOLOGY. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU...
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|SAT : Is the world changing for the better ?
2 - I think you should try to arrange the thoughts on your paragraph. Try writing 1 thought per paragraph. The...
Writing Feedbackamanyeid - Jul 14, 2014 / eirehc - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. Chocolate production sequences
3 - Where is the diagram? It is important to upload the diagram if you wish to earn more meaningful comments....
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 14, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Short Description on Myself
Writing FeedbackLuqman Nul Haki - Jul 13, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Children should learn to compete rather than be cooperative. What's your opinion
4 - Child-rearing has always been a topical issues over a long period of time, which is the result of parent's...
Writing FeedbackQuynhAnh - Jul 7, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS: procedure of making cement / traffic congestion & air pollution
4 - Have two different threads for each task. By having both in one thread, you would lose your chances of...
Writing Feedbackhoho8453 - Jul 3, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS: Music makes our lifes magical and meaningful
7 - I hope you pay more attention to eddies comments. You need to change your approach for this task if...
Writing FeedbackTuti gunner - Jul 4, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Old home Cares: Who should be responsible ? family or Governmnet
3 - Thank you eddies and dummy . I have made changes according to you suggestions . Kindly take a look...
Writing Feedbackharis86 - Jul 12, 2014 / haris86 - Jul 14, 2014
|IELTS essay on video games - pros and cons
2 - n recent years, video games hashave increased itstheir popularity around the world. This has aroused considerable controversy in society...
Writing Feedbackloxm - Jul 2, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|ielts: the chart gives information about UK travel between 1979 and 1999
3 - Good advice by tiaDS. This is the approach I too suggest to everybody who prepare for this task....
Writing Feedbacksara88fte - Jul 3, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|IELTS : 'domestic usage for all technology gradually increased' - graph
Writing FeedbackMakorn - Jun 29, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|[IELTS] The two main materials of making cement are limestone and clay
3 - in my opinion there are 2 kinds of template: the first one is as you mentioned; the 2nd contain...
Writing Feedbackxizon7777 - Jul 14, 2014 / xizon7777 - Jul 14, 2014
|[IELTS task2]: some people argue that fashion items cost too much money.
6 - I suggest you to have a more meaningful sentence to open your essay. This should hook your reader...
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 11, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|[IELTS task2] Job for a few years between school and university
7 - If you look at all the prompts of IELTS task 2 more closely in Cambridge IELTS Student's Book,...
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 11, 2014 / eddies - Jul 14, 2014
|Toefl essay - We all work or will work in our jobs with many different people
2 - 1-It is better to use synonyms of "co-worker" such as "colleague" for avoiding repetition of the word. 2- For...
Writing Feedbackyashaswinisrini - Jul 9, 2014 / masih65 - Jul 14, 2014
|Dressing in school uniforms indeed prompt students to learn well
2 - Hi memory9711, First of all, you need to pay attention to your punctuation. After period [.], you need to...
Writing Feedbackmemory9711 - Jul 7, 2014 / Ulaai - Jul 13, 2014
|It is important to respect authority but only if it not violate your own freedom
Writing Feedbacknpuri11 - Jul 9, 2014 / dumi - Jul 13, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. Two bars: motivations to study and workers' support
4 - I like the approach you have followed for this task - Intro, Overview, Detailed paras. Let's look at the...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jul 11, 2014 / dumi - Jul 13, 2014
|IELTS Task 2. Tax on Private Schools Should Not Be Paid
NEW - Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state...
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|IELTS Task 2. Less Homework Means Less Stress for Children
3 - Halo Friends, In my personal point of view, no need to worry too much concerning this particular task...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Jul 12, 2014 / andial - Jul 13, 2014
|Increasing fuel cost is just a band aid for solving environmental issues
3 - No one can deny that consumption of fuel has contributed largely to the environmental issues we face nowadays....
Writing Feedbackeirehc - Jul 8, 2014 / dumi - Jul 13, 2014
|Success in life is a product of one's constant effort and dedication
3 - success is really within us, if we'll persevere in doing something and we are passionate, the success is just...
Writing Feedbackjjsteven - Jul 11, 2014 / charlene1699 - Jul 12, 2014
|Many people believe that formal 'pen and paper' examinations are not the best
Writing Feedbackabinh - Jun 4, 2014 / jjsteven - Jul 12, 2014
|[IELTS] Do guns can really increase the level of violence?
7 - According to Cambridge dictionary, "while" means compared with the fact that; but. So, I think you use this...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 15, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - Jul 12, 2014
|IELTS Governments and people both should help lower traffic growth and pollution
4 - According to Cambridge Dictionary, measurement means "the act or process of measuring". Don't you mean "measuring instrument" here?...
Writing Feedbackxizon7777 - Jul 8, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - Jul 11, 2014
|IELTS writing - statistics research of population aged 65 and more
3 - If i were you, I prefer writing a overall rather than conclusion paragraph. So, I suggest you to read...
Writing Feedbacksara88fte - Jul 8, 2014 / tiaDS - Jul 10, 2014
|IELTS Essay - Well qualified graduates without employement
5 - This is not a very clearly presented idea :( You need to have a more interesting statement to...
Writing FeedbackAxed - Jun 13, 2014 / dumi - Jul 10, 2014
|[IELTS] Problems and solutions for regional unbalance?
14 - Well... this is your hook which attracts your reader and provides a great entrance to your essay. So,...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 13, 2014 / dumi - Jul 10, 2014
|[IELTS] Competition or co-operation? - 'shaking hands or being up in arms'
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jul 10, 2014 / dumi - Jul 10, 2014
|COMPARE AND CONTRAST TECHNOLOGY NOW AND BEFORE
Writing Feedbackeirehc - Jul 8, 2014 / Anh Nguyen 265 - Jul 9, 2014
|Bar chart - what difficulties people face when they live in other countries?
Writing Feedbackphucth92 - Jul 9, 2014 / xizon7777 - Jul 9, 2014
|Some Certain jobs are suitable for men/women because of their capabilities
4 - when you present an example, make sure you write specifically. This ca be done by asking these points:...
Writing Feedbackworstmanz - Jul 7, 2014 / eddies - Jul 8, 2014
|The bar chart below shows the production of the world's oil in OPEC and non-OPEC
5 - Actually, I always try to write follow your structure your mentioned. In this essay, the first sentence,...
Writing Feedbackhungtho - Jul 4, 2014 / hungtho - Jul 8, 2014
|The diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable.
Writing FeedbackMuza - Jul 6, 2014 / Vihuynh - Jul 7, 2014
|GRE ESSAY - detailed analysis of a society
2 - Few comments, 1. Couple of sentences are too long. It is good to use them with appropriate conjunctions....
Writing Feedbackhsaxena - Jun 30, 2014 / 12thaugust2005 - Jul 6, 2014
|IELTS General Training - Letter Writing - job at a football club
5 - I am posting my essay here, instead of the picture. I highly appreciate your valuable comments and suggestions to...
Writing Feedback12thaugust2005 - Jul 4, 2014 / 12thaugust2005 - Jul 6, 2014
|Ielts exam; letter - item of clothing was left in the hotel
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