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|IELTS: Nature or nurture is more influential in children education?
6 - Education and upbringing are quintessentialquite essentialelements forfor one's development. For instance, children who are exposed to violence tend...
Writing Feedbackmeomeo3892 - May 3, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|Being a celebrity has plenty of benefits than downsides
6 - ... ok, let's do this para according to the approach I suggested; First, the celebrities are generally very...
Writing Feedbackdil77 - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TAST 2：REPEATED OFFENSE
2 - The best solution tofor this problem is to make prisons fulfill the function of rehabilitation.change the prison environment to...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - May 14, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|Student's Executive Summary (Finance and Business Marketing)
2 - It takes into consideration that CSL is not a part of the labour intensive industry and cannot use direct...
Writing FeedbackBachChaconne2 - May 14, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|Brave new world and Children of men; Dystopia Comparison Essay
Writing Feedbackvincentvincent - May 12, 2014 / dil77 - May 15, 2014
|Problems overrellance on cars can cause/suggest at least one possible solution.
Writing FeedbackBob brother - May 14, 2014 / Bob brother - May 14, 2014
|Watching movies vs. reading the original books
4 - Second of allSecondly , are nearlythe movie can take about maximumtwo hours and the film director cannot possibly accommodate...
Writing Feedbackr1996mm - Apr 27, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|IELTS: Children from poorer families are more successful in the future life.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 11, 2014 / Abdurasul - May 14, 2014
|Both Working parents and problems faced and how does it effect family
Writing Feedbacksreddy - May 13, 2014 / sreddy - May 14, 2014
|Line graph for the consumption and production of energy
3 - Pay attention to the approach that Pahan suggested above. .... This is your overview and therefore it...
Writing Feedbackammus1 - May 13, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|IELTS: The proportion of postgraduate students owning a computer
4 - Yes, the intro and overview look fine. Always mention the specific time period in the intro ; ...
Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - May 14, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|Traffic problems in city; new roads and railway networks, sub ways and skylines
Writing Feedbackammus1 - May 13, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|The more and more importance of Practical skills
Writing FeedbackNguyen Cong - May 12, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|IELTS: UK Tourism (Departure and Arrival)
4 - As per the line graph, the number UK citizens who visitedof visiting abroad among UK residentsslightly increased from around...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 12, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|IELTS - Internet will end the era of newspapers and magazines
Writing Feedbackrims - May 13, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|SAT: Learning from mistakes or from our successful actions?
Writing FeedbackItsyasmeens - Apr 27, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|TOEFL: schools should provide equal financial support to different courses
3 - Yes, as Pahan has mentioned above, I too feel you need to improve your essay structure since there are...
Writing FeedbackTiffany Lin - May 14, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|TOEFL- studnets prefer home-schooling rather than trditional schools
3 - ... Pahan has a very valid point. I too guess your topic is on which system, homeschooling or traditional,...
Writing Feedbackthalac - May 13, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|TOEFL: students participating in class discussion as investment for their future
Writing Feedbackmooncat - May 7, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|Toefl writing; "Can money buy you happiness?" - use money in a proper way
10 - Yes, you need to meet at least the minimum word count of 300 words. Follow this approach for...
Writing Feedbackvincenthuang - May 7, 2014 / dumi - May 14, 2014
|IELTS: Honey bees life cycle
4 - The first stage of the life cycle is startedoccurs when the queen layinglays 1 or 2 eggs once in...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 - Write a letter to your manager asking for a training course
Writing Feedbackrims - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|Not believe everything in newspaper, it's form of business; the goal: gain money
4 - You need to improve the presentation of this sentence as it needs to act as an interesting hook...
Writing Feedbackodon - May 13, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|TOEFL; More important to work quickly& risk making mistakes
7 - The most important task here is to complete your essay with must features. As I see, your essay need...
Writing Feedbackfarshid_t - May 13, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|IELTS: university education "to help graduates get better jobs"
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - May 9, 2014 / StarSea - May 13, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Encouraging sense of competition or cooperation in childhood
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 12, 2014 / rims - May 13, 2014
|[IELTS] schools should only teach children the academic subject
6 - Let me give you simple advice as to how your writing could be marked higher: When you deal with...
Writing FeedbackKelly219 - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - May 13, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Computer ownership - From 2002 to 2010
6 - Single graphs Introduction: Here you sould state what the graph shows short body paragraph: state the most improtant piece...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - May 13, 2014
|IELTS 1: Computer ownership among educated people
5 - Double graphs Introduction: Write one sentence, but introduce each chart separately e.g "This first bart chart shows..., and the...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - May 13, 2014
|Essay about freedom - Can anyone look over my paragraph?
3 - i also thought about doing this but it kind of contradicts my statement in the paragraph so i couldn't...
Writing Feedbackeldlflfk - May 13, 2014 / eldlflfk - May 13, 2014
|CBEST essay - Give entering college students advice
3 - Hi Nguyen Cong, Thank you for your comment. I think I still need more improvemenst when writing my...
Writing Feedbackokdeerpass - May 11, 2014 / okdeerpass - May 13, 2014
|IELTS : An enjoyable job or a good salary? Discuss both sides and give your view
Writing Feedbackharry137181143 - May 12, 2014 / harry137181143 - May 13, 2014
|IELTS academic rich-poor conflict
6 - Thank you all for such helpful responses,, but may I ask ,,regarding the paragraph which Pahan says away from...
Writing FeedbackAdammero - May 10, 2014 / Adammero - May 13, 2014
|TOEFL - Employers should provide smoking areas for their employees
4 - Cigarettes smokingSmoking causes deadly diseases like lung cancer, heart and lung diseases. IncidenceCases of lung cancer hashave been increased...
Writing Feedbackbrisky - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 13, 2014
|IELTS Task - CHANGING CAREER AND PLACE OF LIVING ; POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE?
7 - Change is an inevitable part of life . To excel in their lives, many some people now a daysnowadayseasily...
Writing Feedbackcandy07 - May 11, 2014 / eddies - May 13, 2014
|IELTS - Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects
9 - .... good :) As an example, a student who isstudents preparing for deliveringto deliver a speech on...
Writing Feedbackmsarkar - May 12, 2014 / dumi - May 13, 2014
|TOEFL..Dormitory or apartment? Which is better for students to choose?
Writing Feedbackhere2study - May 9, 2014 / dumi - May 13, 2014
|Advantages and Disadvantages of using Machines?
Writing Feedbackquocdai - May 12, 2014 / dumi - May 12, 2014
|Concrete produce: cement, water, sand and gravel are poured to a concrete mixer
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - May 12, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - May 12, 2014
|the charts below give information about travel to and from UK.
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - May 12, 2014 / SHanafi - May 12, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Garlsdon City on plan to build a supermarket
3 - As per the map's featuresAccording to the map, the suggestedproposed location (no comma) S2, for building a new supermarket(no...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 12, 2014
|IELTS: Freedom for creative artist - 'show their idealism freely'
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 8, 2014 / eddies - May 12, 2014
|Is international sport releasing patriotic emotions? 'fans support their teams'
4 - Sports unite peoples from different corners of the world. (Hook) For some people, sport events heighten international tensions....
Writing Feedbackmohamedtheking - May 11, 2014 / eddies - May 12, 2014
|IELTS - Children find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention in schools
13 - Thank you so much Pahan, Dumi Yep I am lucky Waiting for other paragraphs... I hope the model essay...
Writing Feedbackcandy07 - May 10, 2014 / candy07 - May 12, 2014
|Film review - "Gone with the wind"; 'deserves to be the most successful film'
3 - When the Civil War erupts and brings devastation and poverty to the O'Hara family, Scarlett becomes the indomitable one...
Writing Feedbackrainie1911 - May 3, 2014 / dumi - May 12, 2014
|IELTS task 2:should physical education be optional in school or not?
3 - ... Well, can you please give us the references where you find this information. It is worth for...
Writing FeedbackAndy_Vo - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 12, 2014
|Some people say the world would be a better place without private cars
3 - When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of...
Writing Feedbackulviqulieff - May 11, 2014 / eddies - May 12, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Total school spending in the UK
Writing Feedbackandial - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 12, 2014
|IELTS: technology affects people's interaction with each other
8 - Thank you dumi. I think I should focus more on the different between the present and the past. So...
Writing FeedbackStarSea - May 9, 2014 / StarSea - May 12, 2014
|IELTS: How Dangerous Products are Dealt with in Three Countries
4 - In the Overview, you need to talk about the most obvious trend/ trends without any details. It is not...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 11, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Temperature in Kolkata graph
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 4, 2014 / andial - May 11, 2014
|Tax Private car owner for improve public transportation which is problematic
3 - to connect these paragraphs, you should use a connector which shows contrast such as 'however' 'on the other hand'...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - May 7, 2014 / fikri - May 11, 2014
|"pursuit of happiness" - Need some relevant examples for this SAT essay!
2 - It is necessary to give example from the history? Can't you give a general example on happiness? I do...
Writing Feedbackmaheenatiq - May 11, 2014 / here2study - May 11, 2014
|IELTS: Part of nation's history - "Old building"
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - May 8, 2014 / Pahan - May 11, 2014
|Ielts task 2: What factors measure country's status.
3 - You write very well. First, you follow a good approach and your essay is well structured. Second, you have...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 11, 2014 / Pahan - May 11, 2014
|IELTS: Foreign language instruction should begin in kindergarten
Writing Feedbackkace - May 11, 2014 / Pahan - May 11, 2014
|Descriptive essay about an extraordinary island
5 - Thank you all. I really appreciate your help and I'll try to improve my writting skills more :)))...
Writing FeedbackAyman64 - May 9, 2014 / Ayman64 - May 11, 2014
|SAT Essay: Do we value only what we struggle for? Kindly grade.
6 - "That which we obtain too easily, we esteem too lightly. It is dearness only which gives everything its value."...
Writing Feedbackmaheenatiq - Apr 26, 2014 / maheenatiq - May 11, 2014
|Decisions that are made quickly are always wrong. Do you agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackbrisky - May 9, 2014 / kace - May 11, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Effects of Technology on people's relationship.
9 - This approach aims at helping you include all features in your essay (that are essential for scoring ) as...
Writing FeedbackNguyen Cong - May 10, 2014 / dumi - May 11, 2014
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