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|IELTS: problem of obesity and how to solve it; parents & school all have a role
Writing Feedbackhbzezo - Apr 26, 2014 / fikri - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Adult educational survey report
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: Many old buildings = history --> it is very important to protect them
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 30, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Planning new supermarket in Pellington (by upinipin)
7 - In Task 1 of the IELTS test, you ARE NOT required to give your personal opinion. So you should...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / zztrieuman - Apr 30, 2014
|'monster if we cannot manage it well' - Movies or tv influence people's behavior
7 - Television is one of the most popular media used by any household. It has also becomingbecome an important...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: People attend collage or university especially for career preparation
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|"Get bored because nothing to do around" - a new movie theater may be built
7 - Second, the closest movie theater is 25 minutes from my home and it is quite a distance we need...
Writing Feedbacksamuelbartoli - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: limited resources, infrastructure; traditional house vs modern apartment?
Writing Feedbacksamkmas - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: Children are working for money, therefore they learn the value of money
4 - Children at work raise long-standing debates. While some people argue that this is good to teach new skills...
Writing Feedback19epuzam - Apr 26, 2014 / eddies - Apr 30, 2014
|Classification essay; aren't rock music isn't boring - 'sub-genres of choice'
3 - Rock music is important to me because it acts as an outlet for expressing things that I am unable...
Writing FeedbackOrangeeskies - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2- MUSIC IN THE WOLD TODAY
4 - Above all, nowadays, people are always surrounded with music. International pop music is a trend in the near future,...
Writing Feedbacktiandteo - Apr 24, 2014 / samkmas - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Animals should not be exploited by people
6 - In my opinion, I think that animals should have the same rights as human beings because animals are also...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / samkmas - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: should all offenders be sent to prisons? 'alternative punishment'
8 - You have very good writing skills. Improve on the essay structure as Pahan suggested to you because this task...
Writing FeedbackYvonne_lulu - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|Mindfulness Reflection - Communications course essay
3 - Thank you for your immediate response. You brought many points to my attention that I had overlooked. ...
Writing Feedbackbrandymhunter - Apr 29, 2014 / brandymhunter - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: Proposed sites for a new hypermarket in the city of Pellington.
6 - The map shows three recommendedgeographical locationSforof a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in Pellington Town. Overall, population...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 29, 2014
|"Living alone without parent" - Do you guys think this is good narrative essay?
4 - Even though I madefell into troubles from my mistake, I knew that my mom was always there for me....
Writing Feedbackgwp1095 - Apr 25, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : The electricity consumption and cost per year
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 24, 2014 / fikri - Apr 29, 2014
|Ielts: invite letter: for Tom - coming for a visit in Beijing
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: advertising impact on people's choice of consumption
4 - This intro is too big. You need to organize better otherwise you would run out of allowed time. This...
Writing Feedbackyuchiu - Apr 26, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Australian weather broadcasting process
6 - The diagram shows a process of weather broadcasterbroadcastingwhich is broadcasted by the Australian Bureau of Meteorology Overall,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 8, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: Subway system in London, Paris, Tokio, Washington, Kyoto and Los Angeles
4 - This is not adding any value to your writing as it does not give any meaningful information to...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Changes of mode transportation using in UK
5 - This is a very important aspect in report writing. You should not make any errors when interpreting data,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 24, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|Cultural Changes in Music from Generation to Generation
3 - Yes, this is very important. You need to tell us the purpose why you wrote it (IELTS, TOEFL, GRE...
Writing FeedbackTarcisiofl - Apr 22, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS 1:Type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
4 - shoping list or listing. i suggest you to adopt comparison and contrast essay to deliver your detail information. Moreover,...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 24, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|Unemployment rates in US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999
6 - is that your introduction? if it is your introduction i think too long and quite confusing. Introduction...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 22, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|Ielts take 2 Young people attitude towards parents and grand parents
4 - Actually, both are interchangeable. Meaning, both are correct. However, in writing, it is more appropriate to use "with...
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 29, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: Hydroelectric dam and turbine
5 - The picture depicts the hydroelectric dam process which is used for electricity. Grammar issue it's...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|The charts: reasons why adults decide to study / shared costs of adult education
4 - The charts give information about results of a survey of adult education i will write The chart gives...
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - Apr 28, 2014 / Mattgang - Apr 29, 2014
|Learn more about another country by watching tv programmes and films about it
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 28, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 29, 2014
|radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 23, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The audiences of radio and television for full the day in 1992.
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 23, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 29, 2014
|The number of television sales annually from 1996 to 1999
4 - between 1996 and 1999. wrong noun phrase ; a significant increase or significantly (adv) increase (verb)...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Apr 28, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : TRIP TO WORK IN HOUSTON, TEXAS
5 - For me, probably, that way of organizing body paragraphs is very common in writing. However, let us not...
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 15, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : Inventors are not as important to society as doctors ?
5 - appreciate what inventors have created in the past which hasbeengiven brought advantages for to the public (science inventions for...
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 23, 2014 / Samantha1111 - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS: production of electricity in Germany and France from all sources
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 25, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 28, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - Technology makes people's lives simpler rather than complicated
Writing FeedbackAlbatross1993 - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS: Graph of the winter heating costs from 2003 to 2011
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 23, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 28, 2014
|The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By 2020 may be as many as 29 million vehicles.
3 - Here is the sample (page 77) retrieved from IELTS official website: ielts.org/PDF/Vol4_Report2.pdf Perhaps you may start analyzing...
Writing Feedbacksamkmas - Apr 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS: 'sense of cooperation' - children should be competitive or cooperative?
11 - also, you can put some relevant specific examples, you may take from your own experience or your friends'...
Writing Feedbackyuchiu - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS: CHALLENGE - some people are attracted to dangerous sports/ activities
5 - My teacher said that introduction is a part to catch reader attention. So, making the good introduction is...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 1, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 28, 2014
|IELTS: electricity generated in Germany and France in the year 2009
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 25, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 27, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: How greenhouse gases
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 26, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 27, 2014
|IELTS General Training; 'growing trend of increasing the retirement age'
4 - also, I just give additional advise, try to give specific details, you can take some events from your real...
Writing Feedbackvarsha2606 - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 27, 2014
|Teaching in group along with specialised education according to abilities
Writing Feedbackclairpure - Apr 13, 2014 / fikri - Apr 27, 2014
|GRE: Development of technology and the way people rely on it too much.
2 - Hey, this essay is so good considering its your first. You almost have no mistakes however, I think you...
Writing Feedbackkarltran3s - Apr 27, 2014 / Itsyasmeens - Apr 27, 2014
|'homeless or in jail'; Parents are the best teachers; I agree with the statement
4 - Obviously, you write small letter "i" not just once but several times. Practice writing it in capital. Otherwise,...
Writing Feedbackmikoo4444 - Apr 8, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 27, 2014
|IELTS: The relative electricity consumption; 'spa is more extravagant used'
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 24, 2014 / eddies - Apr 27, 2014
|compare and contrast your fashion style with that of someone you know
3 - Here is I found on the net that should be followed as an organizational structure for your compare and...
Writing Feedbackmina karimi - Mar 7, 2014 / eddies - Apr 26, 2014
|SAT essay: 'Taking a bad decision is way better than the terror of indecision'
3 - Thanks man!...
Writing Feedbackofficialseif - Apr 26, 2014 / officialseif - Apr 26, 2014
|college or university; Success or a good life in future through knowledge
Writing Feedbackthaontt1408 - Apr 26, 2014 / eddies - Apr 26, 2014
|broad knowledge vs many academic subjects; various subjects in order to be wise
5 - Thank you very much! And do you mean that my paragraph structure is not clear enough? I just think...
Writing FeedbackFYR - Apr 25, 2014 / FYR - Apr 26, 2014
|Wealthy nation shares to support poor countries at the solidarity among nations
7 - Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 8, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 26, 2014
|Toefl- The qualities of a good neighbor - should be sociable and helpful
6 - Ok, so the idea is good but some sentences arent written in a right form so here's the correction:...
Writing FeedbackJaanu - Apr 15, 2014 / Itsyasmeens - Apr 25, 2014
|Every movie made in a country can reflect some realities about that country
5 - For example, when we are watching a picture made in Iran.. The right form is: when we are watching...
Writing Feedbacksevan_777 - Apr 24, 2014 / Itsyasmeens - Apr 25, 2014
|IELTS-GT (task2): Working Extended hours should restricted. (Agree/Disagree)
6 - I would strongly emphasis and recommend, Government must include the clause of maximum number of working hours in its...
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Apr 24, 2014 / sevan_777 - Apr 25, 2014
|Ielts 1 enquire letter - English lessons questions
4 - Overall, you are being asked to use Present simple, Present continuous, Present perfect, and Future. For the next...
Writing Feedbackxingshigang3030 - Apr 23, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|Controversial: Teenagers are working while they are still students
4 - Pahan is right. I too think this phrase adds no value. they can arrange time when they should...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 1, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|Toefl - Is technology creating single world culture? fights for culture & belief
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|Article: "What do you want to when you grow up?" medical student
5 - Doctor is one of the highest paying professions, (stop here) For example,thean average family doctor has an annual salary...
Writing FeedbackSaqib - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|Education of boys & girls in separate schools; 'distracting and hamper progress'
Writing Feedbackrsaca - Apr 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 25, 2014
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