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|Essay For Toefl: how can schools help new students with their problems?
9 - Well, that's fine. This forum is for everybody to express their views on others' writing in view of helping...
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 6, 2014 / dumi - Mar 11, 2014
|Learning from experience or from book, TOEFL
6 - Sure :) This is what I would do for this intro; "Intellectual growth should commence at birth...
Writing Feedbacksntinn - Mar 6, 2014 / dumi - Mar 11, 2014
|Toefl essay: part time job for teenage students
5 - When we talk about student, we generally mean a boy or a girl who study in school or college....
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 10, 2014 / hakuyo1112 - Mar 11, 2014
|Attend college support people to go through their bitter or sweet student life
6 - Hey there. Your ideas are good but i suggest that you write 3 separate paragraphs about 'Some people want...
Writing Feedbackcharllote0825 - Mar 9, 2014 / hakuyo1112 - Mar 11, 2014
|IELTS task 2: Capital punishment (the death penalty) in society
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 24, 2014 / rairaichan0323 - Mar 11, 2014
|Television dominates the free time for too many people& prevent from socializing?
Writing Feedbackshezad - Mar 10, 2014 / dumi - Mar 11, 2014
|IELTS; Who should pay tuition fees for adults who are interested in university studies?
5 - Well, I don't see this as a strong reason to justify your position - government should sponsor adult...
Writing FeedbackGichki - Mar 10, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS; Who's responsible for one's health? The individual or society?
Writing Feedbackrairaichan0323 - Mar 10, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS - Negative effects of Globalization
Writing FeedbackGichki - Mar 10, 2014 / Gichki - Mar 10, 2014
|Driving education course before being licensed can reduce the number of traffic accidents.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Mar 10, 2014 / Abdurasul - Mar 10, 2014
|Too many subjects or specialize in one, which is better?
3 - I agree with Pahan. Try to maintain a proper alignment with what your prompt suggests. :) .......
Writing Feedbackmia_01 - Mar 10, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : increasing the number of sport facilities in order to improve public health
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 8, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS task 2: The traditional skills and ways of life die out.
4 - Well, this sounds like an example and not a reason that you use to justify a particular opinion....
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS task 1: The total number of minutes (in millions) of telephone calls in Finland
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS, Society will produce happy people if there's little gap between rich and the poor
4 - Well, it is not clear that how maintaining the justice would help reduce the gap between rich people...
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 9, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 10, 2014
|SAT ; Suspect honesty and motives of people?
2 - Well, you start with expressing your opinion. However, in my view, it is good to open your essay...
Writing FeedbackThePariah - Mar 7, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS task 2: Good exam results at school or college guarantee success in life.
4 - .... This is not an effective hook . I find it's pretty too long and contain some inappropriate...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS task 2: The rise of overweight children in developed countries
3 - Well, have you been able to complete this task within 30 mins? Your essay looks pretty lengthy. Especially your...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS Let students still have some challenges in art-based subjects, but not give mark on their work
Writing FeedbackMica1988 - Mar 8, 2014 / Mica1988 - Mar 10, 2014
|Reasons one should start (or not start) college right after high school..ESSAY
2 - First, you need to open your essays in the right forum. This should have been opened in the Writing...
Writing Feedbackgennabug - Mar 9, 2014 / dumi - Mar 10, 2014
|IELTS Task 2. As children become adults their social behavior changes in some ways.
4 - Well, it is not actually about the length of your paras. It is about the contents. In your body...
Writing Feedbacklarkkk - Mar 8, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 9, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Fast food is unhealthy. Do you agree and disagree?
Writing Feedbackshezad - Mar 4, 2014 / eddies - Mar 9, 2014
|Struggling for writting and speaking skills in English.
4 - Thank you very much, I really appreciate it. I would try my best to built such beautiful sentence structure...
Writing Feedbackkwkent94 - Mar 9, 2014 / kwkent94 - Mar 9, 2014
|IELTS Writing: Qualities for Becoming Successful Can't Learn At A University?
6 - in this part, you should state what mean being successful and what qualities associated with success. then link...
Writing Feedbackieltsfighter - Mar 7, 2014 / agi - Mar 9, 2014
|Does Internet Censorship damage a free society?
2 - I think that a discussion about sites like Piratebay would be interesting. UK blocked the site, while other countries...
Writing FeedbackMikeyyy - Mar 6, 2014 / Leelee1960 - Mar 9, 2014
|TOEFL; Words Speak Louder Than Words
Writing Feedbackneyeuboy - Mar 2, 2014 / neyeuboy - Mar 9, 2014
|if you could create a new holiday, what person or event would it honor? toefl essay
4 - Well, I think you have covered all these things in your essay. I find this is very well written....
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Mar 8, 2014 / dumi - Mar 9, 2014
|IELTS task 1: International migration in UK
Writing FeedbackTrangNTV - Mar 8, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 9, 2014
|The governors decision - the students should take part in competitive team sports
4 - Thak you...
Writing Feedbackissey1455 - Mar 7, 2014 / issey1455 - Mar 8, 2014
|IELTS task 1: International students graduating from universities in Canada
2 - The bar chart compares international graduates in percentage terms from universities in seven regions in Canada in two...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 8, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Private car ownership has grown, led to traffic congestion
Writing FeedbackKenNgo - Mar 6, 2014 / KenNgo - Mar 7, 2014
|Toefl: Do you agree or disagree that children should not be allowed to play computer games
3 - Actually, I have edited this essay before I posted in. The original version was written within the time limitaion,...
Writing Feedbackjinhailing - Mar 5, 2014 / jinhailing - Mar 7, 2014
|Egypt and United State: Differences and Similarities
4 - As we aware ofknow, Egypt has a long history andhas beenthey believed it has been created for about 3,200...
Writing Feedbackrashad20 - Feb 24, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 7, 2014
|'find a method' - Children begin learning foreign language at primary school
NEW - Traditionally, children have begun studying foreign language at secondary school, however some educationalist recommended that it's better to introduced...
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|Should government spend money on highways or public transportation?
4 - about speaking section i m also in perplex. i could not find any suitable site to practice speaking where...
Writing FeedbackEslam8787 - Mar 6, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 7, 2014
|Why people go to Japan for vacation (Writing Class' assignment - English Major)
Writing Feedbackglensnicholas - Feb 24, 2014 / dumi - Mar 7, 2014
|Wealth and poorer nations; 'developing country and developed country'
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 7, 2014
|GRE ISSUE Government should not found any scientific research whose consequences are uncle
2 - excellent writing... coherent, easy to follow, clearly expressed opinion in intro and good supporting body paragraph, your word count...
Writing FeedbackJudith Yan - Mar 6, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 6, 2014
|Today more people are travelling than ever before, why is this the case?
5 - Something I was told that helps with sentence fragments is to put "I realize" in front of each individual...
Writing Feedbackgramya25 - Feb 28, 2014 / Ems27 - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS; TV programmes are transmitted throughout the day and night
4 - There is no denying toabout the fact that watching television can be beneficial both tofor work and entertainment. Comprehensive...
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Mar 3, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Number of students attending three courses from 2001 to 2004
3 - This is to assess your report writing skills and therefore you need to adopt a more formal tone...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 Essay: Chorleywood Village development
3 - Yes, I too agree. Overview is more important than a conclusion which is actually not necessary for this...
Writing Feedbackseptem1821 - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|attending in university
Writing Feedbackoranji - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|Public health is a big issue. Government can play an important role in improving it.
3 - Your topic suggests that you have written this fro either IELTS or TOEFL :D However, I wish you...
Writing Feedbacktogiang - Feb 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: AIR TRANSPORT USED TO EXPORT FOOD
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|racism and xenophobia are attitude that we are taught, not born with, then the problems
3 - If racism and xenophobia are attitude that we are taught, not born with, then the problems that come from...
Writing Feedbackvishal19balar - Mar 2, 2014 / vishal19balar - Mar 6, 2014
|University students should be required to attend class; 'skipping some boring'
3 - As dumi mentioned above, you need to do more work on improving your grammar. The best way is to...
Writing FeedbackPhuong Thao - Mar 5, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS - teach every young person how to be a good parent
4 - well, your body paragraphs should contain reasons that helps you justify your opinion on the issue. Then you...
Writing Feedbackroop1 - Mar 6, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|What is your approach to problem-solving, and how does it work for you?
Writing Feedbackmahshad - Feb 28, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 6, 2014
|Extended definition essay; Enigma, intro and outline
3 - Everyone knows how it is (no comma) to encounter a situation that leaves one wondering how it happened. According...
Writing Feedbackcareswho - Mar 2, 2014 / dumi - Mar 6, 2014
|Why vaccinations are important? English 102 class
2 - The modern field of medicine is constantly discovering new methods to keep us healthy and safe. ...
Writing Feedbackamandah9109 - Feb 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS General Task 1- Letter to employer describing the problem
Writing Feedbackrairaichan60 - Mar 5, 2014 / rairaichan60 - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS, LIFE WILL BE BETTER IN THE FUTURE OR NOT
Writing Feedbackagi - Mar 5, 2014 / anselzhang - Mar 6, 2014
|IELTS - homework to students everyday - 'intersection between home and school'
Writing Feedbackmia_01 - Mar 5, 2014 / dumi - Mar 6, 2014
|Government budgets should be spent on public transportation or road and highways - Toefl
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 4, 2014 / Phuong Thao - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS task 2: History a fascinating subject.
3 - I feel you do not come up with strong arguments why history fascinates some people. You say it is...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 5, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|TOEFL- People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities
7 - I think you put too much information in just one sentence, which makes your writing hard to follow. I...
Writing FeedbackSunny H - Mar 4, 2014 / jon_snow - Mar 5, 2014
|Toefl: "To err is human" - listening to the advice of family and friends
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS: Computers have made life easier Vs Complicated ??
8 - give priority to your real reason. Here the reason is that computers handle transactions much more efficiently and faster...
Writing Feedbackanshita - Feb 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 5, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Hours of leisure time per year in Someland
5 - I suggest you to take this line after introduction and present it as the overview (have a look...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 5, 2014
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