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[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] The role of constructing free libraries in town.

2 - You should "render" your position at the start of the essay to meet the task accuracy requirement for a...

Writing Feedbackjeangrrr - Feb 10, 2023 / Holt - Feb 11, 2023
Free time on my smartphone - Writing task 2: Direct question

2 - Okay, you just needed to write up a simple opinion paper in this case. Something that quickly, but clearly...

Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 10, 2023 / Holt - Feb 10, 2023
Ielts Writing Task 1: The supplied line graph indicates the consumption of beef, lamb and fish

2 - Make it a practice to use at least 2 sentences for your summary overview. This will help create a...

Writing FeedbackTommy Jasper - Feb 9, 2023 / Holt - Feb 10, 2023
The annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line services of Americans

2 - The presentation tends to be confusing in terms of sentence idea presentation. This is caused by the incorrect sentence...

Writing Feedbackhuukim - Feb 9, 2023 / Holt - Feb 10, 2023
Rich countries often give financial aid to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty

2 - 323 words would not be easily achieved in an actual test. Not if you are aiming for properly developing...

Writing Feedbackmariachiarafico - Feb 9, 2023 / Holt - Feb 10, 2023
Expenses for mobile phones, domestic and global fixed-line, and services in America

2 - This is another example of an overwritten and impossible to complete within 20 minutes task 1 essay. the task...

Writing Feedbacksomeoneishere - Feb 9, 2023 / Holt - Feb 10, 2023
TASK 2: Would it be better for children to grow up in rural areas or cities?

3 - I think most of the problems I saw have been resolved by @Holt. Nevertheless, the most important aspect of...

Writing Feedbacklehmy - Feb 9, 2023 / Ahmadjb225 - Feb 9, 2023
Artificial intelligences and their role in modern life.

2 - The one thing that a task 2 essay does not do is over discuss a given topic to the...

Writing FeedbackGiorgi_2059 - Feb 9, 2023 / Holt - Feb 9, 2023
Is the primary function of music to reduce stress?

2 - You have a presentation over 300 words here. While it allowed you present a proper reasoning series, it affected...

Writing Feedbackquocdat - Feb 8, 2023 / Holt - Feb 9, 2023
Task 2 - Caring for children is important in any society

2 - The response provided contradicts itself. The writer used the term "concur" which literally means "I agree" but, in the...

Writing FeedbackMinh Tri - Feb 8, 2023 / Holt - Feb 8, 2023
ielts writing: Describe a city that you have visited (Ha Noi)

4 - @tsyiaa99 thanks a lot...

Writing Feedbackhuychamchi - Feb 3, 2023 / huychamchi - Feb 7, 2023
The essay about the question: Should people restrict video games?

2 - While the examiner will appreciate the quotation at the start of the essay, he cannot consider it as a...

Writing Feedbackdinhhavan16 - Feb 7, 2023 / Holt - Feb 7, 2023
The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten

4 - It much better to replace "they prefer eating them to the main dishes" with " they prefer to eat...

Writing Feedbackyennguyenkim - Feb 1, 2023 / tsyiaa99 - Feb 7, 2023
A positive situation of owning a home rather than renting one

5 - Hi @han0212! There is one mistake that I noticed in your essay is the word "theirselves". It has to...

Writing Feedbackhan0212 - Jan 30, 2023 / selenakieu - Feb 6, 2023
Opinion are varied when it comes to the social media website

4 - Afterof + V_ing For example. in your essay you write "...are created for the purpose of connect people together."...

Writing Feedbackphuongnhi - Jan 29, 2023 / selenakieu - Feb 6, 2023
Video Platforms - IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - AGREE OR DISAGREE?

2 - This is an extent essay so an emotional response is required or a reference to an unmeasured (dis)agreement. It...

Writing Feedbackspinode111 - Feb 6, 2023 / Holt - Feb 6, 2023
WRITING TASK 2: Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

2 - Please be constantly vigilant of the word count. Due to the quality requirement of the discussion, as well as...

Writing Feedbackselenakieu - Feb 6, 2023 / Holt - Feb 6, 2023
Summarise the information from the chart about passing the driving test in Asia

2 - The summary overview will receive a failing preliminary score. This is due to your inability to restate the given...

Writing FeedbackLee99 - Feb 4, 2023 / Holt - Feb 5, 2023
[Toeic Writing Part 8 ] Some companies block their employees from using social media network.

2 - The presentation is not grammatically perfect but works for the purpose of the writer. While there are some incorrect...

Writing Feedbackmrhuyprono1 - Feb 4, 2023 / Holt - Feb 4, 2023
Writing task 2: Should violent criminals' personal information be made available to the public?

3 - Regarding the introduction, it is my view that you should not mention your personal opinion since this essay is...

Writing FeedbackHeo Nguyen - Jan 28, 2023 / Camtu25 - Feb 4, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: State investment in medical research or environmental protection

NEW - Governments should spend more money on medical research to protect citizen's health rather than on protecting the environment. Do...

Writing FeedbackCamtu25 - Feb 3, 2023 / — -
Food advertising should be banned the same as smoking is since overeating is harmful as smoking.

3 - @Holt Thank you for your response!...

Writing Feedbacktrananhthu686 - Feb 1, 2023 / trananhthu686 - Feb 2, 2023
The opinion that teamwork spirit can be honed through team sports

2 - The actual discussion of the topic should not be done in the first paragraph as you did here. Any...

Writing Feedbacksplitude198 - Feb 2, 2023 / Holt - Feb 2, 2023
Scientists predict that in the future cars will be driven by computers - IELTS Writing Task 2

2 - While the essay is extremely wordy and actually shows off your vast English vocabulary, the focus on word exercise...

Writing Feedbacknguyenana611 - Feb 1, 2023 / Holt - Feb 1, 2023
Task 1: The rate of vehicle registrations (1970-2010) of three common commercial types...

2 - There are actually 2 graph images to be identified in this image. In no particular order, the presentation contains...

Writing Feedbackruy - Jan 30, 2023 / Holt - Jan 31, 2023
[IELTS WTITING 1] The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year

2 - The essay is too long to be completed within 20 minutes. Aim to write only 200 words as this...

Writing Feedbackdynamite101 - Jan 29, 2023 / Holt - Jan 30, 2023
The graph gives information about the percentage of people living in Australia born in UK

3 - @Holt thank you for correcting my mistakes...

Writing Feedbackmillbucksgurl - Jan 28, 2023 / millbucksgurl - Jan 29, 2023
General writing task 1: A formal complaint to retaurant

3 - @Holt Thanks for your comment, your points are critical and I realized I do missunderstood the topic requirements on...

Writing Feedbackbbqguy - Jan 27, 2023 / bbqguy - Jan 29, 2023
Academic paper on abortion on demand

2 - The first two paragraphs that you have written are bordering on incoherent. The thoughts being presented are a jumbled...

Writing FeedbackDaisyJk - Jan 28, 2023 / Holt - Jan 29, 2023
Writing task 1: Percentage of adults of different age in the UK

3 - Thanks for your checking...

Writing Feedbacklethacquang - Jan 28, 2023 / lethacquang - Jan 28, 2023
The best way to teach children to cooperation is through team sports

2 - The response you have used in this presentation is incorrect. While it appears that you are giving a degree...

Writing Feedbacktrinhxuanbach - Jan 25, 2023 / Holt - Jan 25, 2023
Writing task 2 : Working from home is more efficient than travelling

2 - Rather than referring to the opinion you support as "it", use a more specific term based on the keyword...

Writing Feedbackdjjockey1205 - Jan 24, 2023 / Holt - Jan 25, 2023
WRITING IELTS TASK 2: oral communication is more effective than written word

2 - Your prompt restatement is accurate as it refers to an opinion stated by someone else as a fact, rather...

Writing FeedbackCamtu25 - Jan 17, 2023 / Holt - Jan 18, 2023
TASK 2: Benefits of the use of technology at school (only body)

2 - The task 2 essay requires a 2-3 body paragraph depending upon the writing instructions. It appears to me that...

Writing FeedbackConann - Jan 17, 2023 / Holt - Jan 18, 2023
UBC ACTIVITIES AND ACCOMPLISHMENTS part

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. Actually, I wrote a pretty long explanation but had cut down thinking it...

Writing Feedbackjkarmie - Jan 13, 2023 / jkarmie - Jan 13, 2023
IELTS writing task 2 Why women's sports receive less attention than men's sports

2 - The topic interpretation and your point of view should stand alone in the paragraph. You will automatically receive a...

Writing FeedbackSunny0629 - Jan 6, 2023 / Holt - Jan 12, 2023
Writing task: Learning right or wrong and punishment of the children

2 - The first major reason that this essay will fail is that you did not follow the writing requirements. You...

Writing Feedbacknerdypmns - Jan 11, 2023 / Holt - Jan 12, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 2 - The salary is not the only key thing to consider when choosing a job

2 - The prompt itself does not ask you to consider the truth behind the presented discussion point. Therefore, to do...

Writing FeedbackJohndavisvu - Jan 11, 2023 / Holt - Jan 12, 2023
IELTS writing task 2: The causes and solutions of reoffending

2 - Contact me privately for comprehensive scoring services. It is not part of our free review offering anymore. ...

Writing FeedbackSunny0629 - Jan 7, 2023 / Holt - Jan 11, 2023
IELTS writing task 1: Demographic change in Japan

3 - @Holt Thanks for you help, that's really helpful for me. Have a nice day!...

Writing FeedbackSunny0629 - Jan 7, 2023 / Sunny0629 - Jan 11, 2023
IELTS Task 1: The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas

3 - @Holt thank you for your advice, I will try to read more and do better next time....

Writing Feedbackcalicoshafira - Jan 9, 2023 / calicoshafira - Jan 9, 2023
Should children be banned from using their phones during the school day?

5 - This essay presents a balanced view on the use of phones in schools. it acknowledges the potential distractions and...

Writing Feedbackhuongggtra - Jan 4, 2023 / glowstorm - Jan 9, 2023
Internally young forever (about the blue zone states and Dr. Sinclairs research)

2 - Some is a plural adjective so it cannot be used with a singular reference. Use the indefinite article...

Writing FeedbackDreamgirl01 - Jan 9, 2023 / Holt - Jan 9, 2023
The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.

2 - Always remember that this report is written on the assumption that the reader does not have a copy of...

Writing Feedbackthuyne - Jan 8, 2023 / Holt - Jan 9, 2023
Research essay on the Federal Reserve- Feed Back

2 - Create a stronger opening statement and thesis presentation by removing the cited sources within the first paragraph. As a...

Writing Feedbackjos2250 - Jan 8, 2023 / Holt - Jan 8, 2023
Discipline is a growing problem in modern schools. Some people think that parents should discipline

2 - Your restatement is confusing to read. To be honest, it is not even remotely close to the original discussion...

Writing Feedbackjimmy1104 - Jan 8, 2023 / Holt - Jan 8, 2023
The population of young adults has been far higher than that of elderly people in some countries

2 - There is a redundancy existing in your opinion statement. The double presentation of your openion in a single sentence...

Writing Feedbackghadtj - Jan 7, 2023 / Holt - Jan 8, 2023
[Writing Ielts Task 2] The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress.

3 - I am also studying for the IELTS, and I can hardly imagine a candidate who can write a 440...

Writing FeedbackABC2519 - Dec 25, 2022 / Sunny0629 - Jan 7, 2023
TASK II IELTS regarding of the world becoming popular to research the history of owns family

3 - I'm not going to judge your performance in TA, LR and CC. Holt has already made a comprehensive assessment,...

Writing FeedbackYETI YUNIARSIH - Jan 1, 2023 / Sunny0629 - Jan 7, 2023
Ielts task 2 _ using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor

3 - I didn't find any grammatical mistakes in your paper. Great! Your section structure is reasonable, but it should be...

Writing Feedbackhoaflth - Jan 2, 2023 / Sunny0629 - Jan 7, 2023
Ielts 2: Government supervised and handled by the authority rather than by private companies

3 - There are some grammatical mistakes in your paper: 1.the article before the noun cannot be omitted, so it is...

Writing FeedbackHuynguyen123232 - Jan 2, 2023 / Sunny0629 - Jan 6, 2023
In recent days, shopping is not considered as a responsibility anymore

2 - The essay will immediately receive a failing preliminary score. The writer has not followed the writing instruction as provided....

Writing Feedbacklyphung - Jan 4, 2023 / Holt - Jan 4, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - More Men Dying of Covid-19 Than Women

2 - While the word count was properly met in the presentation, the correct page formatting was not applied so formatting...

Writing Feedbackzeed22 - Jan 1, 2023 / Holt - Jan 1, 2023
Guitar Makes a Comeback to Pop Music

2 - The essay would also benefit from more popular song mentions in relation to guitar use a rhythm basis. You...

Writing FeedbackEddward - Jan 1, 2023 / Holt - Jan 1, 2023
IETLS Writing Task 2: encouraging studying overseas?

3 - The structure of your writing is good. You have an argument and example in both paragraphs. However, you put...

Writing Feedbackchlyee - Dec 31, 2022 / tuanb2610 - Dec 31, 2022
Oman and Spain population age ratios in 2005 and predictions for 2055 - IELTS Writing Task 1

3 - - "Predictive data accurately half a century later " this phrase is so long and vague => You should...

Writing FeedbackHanNguyen4869 - Dec 19, 2022 / nataliely - Dec 29, 2022
The percentage of population in cities IELTS Writing task 1

4 - - You use some words many time. + increase : rise / a rise, climb/ a climb, grow/ a...

Writing Feedbackyenvoo - Dec 22, 2022 / nataliely - Dec 29, 2022
Life today is unhealthier than in the past century. Do you agree or disagree? (IELTS)

3 - Grammatical errors and wrong word usage No defined thesis statement The point in your paragraph three is not well...

Writing FeedbackZhani - Dec 23, 2022 / Exceptional - Dec 26, 2022
Loss of plants and animals vs other major environmental issues

3 - Thank you for the feedback. Will definitely work on identified mistakes. Could you please provide me with a band...

Writing Feedbackumers - Dec 25, 2022 / umers - Dec 26, 2022
New experiences versus daily routines

2 - Good work on the restatement using 2 topic sentences. These were very clear reinterpretations that showed accurate English comprehension...

Writing Feedbacklong_hoangeiu - Dec 24, 2022 / Holt - Dec 24, 2022

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