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|How technology affected the types of relationships people make?
4 - Yes, you need to improve your essay structure. Especially, your body paragraphs seem to be extensively longer. It is...
Writing Feedbacknzy576 - Jan 2, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2014
|We now live in 'consumer societies' where money and possessions are given too much import?
2 - In act, it is undeniable that the more the society be developed, higher the money be valued. ...
Writing Feedbacksa_228 - Jan 10, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2014
|IELTS;"Responsible Tourist" - Agree or Disagree type essay
5 - State your opinion more direct and clear.... Your body paragraphs do not contain any specific examples that are...
Writing Feedbacksharonpan - Jan 4, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|Toefl: "never, never give up" means to keep trying and never stop working for your goals
3 - Well.... if you are preparing for TOEFL, then you need to pay attention to the essay structure that contains...
Writing FeedbackDelusional_mell - Jan 13, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|IELTS: TECHNOLOGY affects the way we interact with other people!
3 - Advances in modern technology have definitely altered how people keep in touch closely with one another. Communication...
Writing Feedbackfreakingout - Jan 10, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|IELTS task 1 General Training : Letter to landlord
7 - Thanks again Pahan and Dumi. Will follow the standard structure for letter writing as below 1) Introduce you...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 12, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 13, 2014
|You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business.Which could you prefer ?
6 - Hmm... sorry but couldn't you apply every point you made arguing for the mouse to the business? Just asking...
Writing Feedbackasokh - Jan 7, 2014 / PeteSkizzle - Jan 13, 2014
|IELTS - Children should be brought up under strict rules of behavior or not?
5 - Mostly it does. There may be small adjustments you need to make depending on the essay type (I mean...
Writing Feedbackfly2shashi - Jan 12, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 13, 2014
|Shakespeare's Social Critique in Much Ado About Nothing - Hero Character Analysis Essay
Writing FeedbackPeteSkizzle - Jan 12, 2014 / travisl - Jan 12, 2014
|IELTS essay-Modern children are suffering from the diseases like obesity. Causes&solutions
8 - From nutrition class, I know that taste is very important. Rather than having children told what to eat. People...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Jan 7, 2014 / nimroz93 - Jan 11, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY:Government responsibility to provide infrastructure and Defence not others
NEW - Question: A government's role is only to provide defense capability and Urban infrastructure (roads, water supply etc.).All other services...
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 10, 2014 / — -
|IELTS task 2 topic:Why are young people leaving their homes from rural areas to study or
Writing Feedbackdy0693 - Jan 3, 2014 / dy0693 - Jan 10, 2014
|ielts task2-it is beneficial to enlighten young people to be good parents in school.
Writing Feedbackjannychen - Jan 2, 2014 / jannychen - Jan 10, 2014
|"A simple life" - intro to my essay
5 - A simple life is a free and easy life which people live in without any complications and don't use...
Writing FeedbackLatifahH - Apr 30, 2010 / Loriww - Jan 10, 2014
|IELTS: more and more young people go oversea for further studies. Some people think it
Writing Feedbackleoking - Jan 9, 2014 / leoking - Jan 9, 2014
|Corrupt Hope: An argument for fighting corruption
Writing Feedbacktwinkinstar - Jan 8, 2014 / animecomics - Jan 9, 2014
|'government is in charge' - equal numbers of male and female students
Writing Feedbackminaf - Jan 9, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 9, 2014
|People should scrutinize the ideas and actions of people in positions of authority - Napoleon story
Writing FeedbackUtau4928 - Jan 6, 2014 / znack - Jan 9, 2014
|SAT essay - TELEVISION
Writing FeedbackUtau4928 - Dec 28, 2013 / dumi - Jan 9, 2014
|How to write a persuasive essay arguing for the use of school uniforms at my school?
3 - Thank you for your feedback. I will take that into mind. I'll post my edited version and you can...
Writing Feedbackilovemkim13 - Jan 7, 2014 / ilovemkim13 - Jan 8, 2014
|IELTS-Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths
Writing Feedbackravenet - Jan 6, 2014 / ravenet - Jan 8, 2014
|GRE; Political leaders must yield to public opinion
2 - Hi...I'm new to this forum and I'm a novice in writing and correcting essays, but I'm trying to help...
Writing Feedbackrazzack - Jan 7, 2014 / gBv - Jan 8, 2014
|More reliance on technology reduces human thinking ability
2 - You assume that your reader knows the statement. If this is an essay task, the generally accepted norm...
Writing FeedbackSourabhSN - Jan 8, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 8, 2014
|Ielts essay. Violent crime among teenagers
Writing FeedbackShahoo - Jan 7, 2014 / dumi - Jan 8, 2014
|Ielts. Problems and solution of ageing populations.
Writing Feedbackznack - Jan 6, 2014 / znack - Jan 7, 2014
|GRE ; Free university education to every student who cannot afford it
2 - Good educational background is believed to provide a person with better occupationalcareer opportunitiesopportunity. Therefore, a country that...
Writing Feedbackquocthai7005 - Jan 1, 2014 / dumi - Jan 7, 2014
|Sports and social activities - 'both are important for student while in colleges and in the future'
3 - Well, you've written a very good essay and you display excellent writing skills. Pahan's suggestion is to provide you...
Writing Feedbackclee2908 - Jan 5, 2014 / dumi - Jan 7, 2014
|IELTS Task2: Teacher's responsibility in Student Upbringing
4 - yes, you could have had a better alignment with your topic and the prompt is not directed at the...
Writing Feedbackraj_ielts - Jan 6, 2014 / dumi - Jan 7, 2014
|TOEFL: 'The knowledge is power, not the grades' - Do grades encourage students to learn?
5 - I like your idea that show both advantages and disadvantages of grading. However, f you state your side clearly...
Writing Feedbackanhle - Jan 2, 2014 / tippabim - Jan 6, 2014
|IELTS; Should Fatherhood be recognized as well as the Motherhood?
Writing Feedbackjujulinka89 - Jan 2, 2014 / jujulinka89 - Jan 6, 2014
|GRE essay: Are people's attitudes determined more by society or situations?
2 - i also suggest you to post your essay in testbig forum. rating of your essay ~~3.5/6 try at least...
Writing Feedbackquocthai7005 - Jan 6, 2014 / kishorbhandari - Jan 6, 2014
|Better to be underrated by people or to be overrated by them?
Writing FeedbackUtau4928 - Dec 31, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 6, 2014
|IELTS essay - Work at home - benefits workers and NOT employers - agree/disagree ?
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Jan 6, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 6, 2014
|Rich countries should not give jobs to skilled workers of Poor Countries-Agree or Disagree
5 - Thanks Pahan, last time I could not do well in writing :D. I've to check out the other formats...
Writing Feedbackraj_ielts - Jan 4, 2014 / raj_ielts - Jan 6, 2014
|TOEFL topic: which one do you prefer? studying alone or studying with a teacher.
5 - I appreciate your help... (everyone who left a comment) Dear Duminda Actually, I am trying to follow...
Writing Feedbackftn - Jan 2, 2014 / ftn - Jan 6, 2014
|GRE Issue Essay - Governments should offer a free university education
4 - ... I feel you should have presented this idea with better clarity; Other than the high costs that...
Writing FeedbackROMULO85 - Dec 13, 2013 / dumi - Jan 6, 2014
|Government support for the elderly. Agree or disagree ?
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Jan 1, 2014 / SreeSam - Jan 5, 2014
|IELTS TASK1; consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain
Writing Feedbackeagle112 - Dec 19, 2013 / znack - Jan 5, 2014
|Visit - voluntary experience for our project involved an orientation.
2 - Hygiene is another important factor since we are going to be in a hospital even though it is a...
Writing Feedbackairamcalleja96 - Jan 5, 2014 / theiceman - Jan 5, 2014
|IELTS: men/women 'oriented' studies - equal numbers of male and female students
4 - Yes, raj is absolutely right! .... word count is very important for you to go for a good band....
Writing Feedbackcherrymonster - Jan 2, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 5, 2014
|International events show peaceful things for people, distracts from problems
3 - no, it is a discussion essay. thank you, now i can change something in this essay, but please help...
Writing Feedbacknana867 - Jan 4, 2014 / nana867 - Jan 4, 2014
|Interest in subject , gain qualification - the result of a survey of adult education
4 - Well, this task is aimed at assessing your report writing skills. So, you need to be more formal...
Writing Feedbackfarideh - Dec 22, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 4, 2014
|IELTS; Disparities in earnings of different professionals
5 - dumi has suggested you a good structure to construct your introduction. You can re-write the intro by following her...
Writing Feedbackelenaz - Dec 30, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 4, 2014
|Music is the face of the country - IELTS band.
4 - I too strongly advise you to follow dumi's structure. Your essay needs improvement in its structure very badly. ...
Writing FeedbackAdele_Riva - Jan 2, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 4, 2014
|Employers reward members of staff for their contribution...
Writing Feedbacknmtuan3497 - Jan 2, 2014 / MisterWandering - Jan 4, 2014
|All cats are gray in dark- Nowadays people pay much more time and money on appearance
8 - dumi Thanks! Actually I wanted to discuss about raise of cosmetic use and cosmetic surgeries, and some ways to...
Writing Feedbackminaf - Jan 1, 2014 / minaf - Jan 4, 2014
|IELTS essay - Is the re introduction of criminals in societies is justified?
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Jan 3, 2014 / dumi - Jan 3, 2014
|Learning foreign language at primary school makes studying more stressful
2 - Ok... let's look at the strucutre' .... Your intro does not contain this feature. It is something...
Writing Feedbackrhadamanthys - Jan 3, 2014 / dumi - Jan 3, 2014
|Television teaches violence - my paragraph about television.
Writing Feedbacknghiavtran - Jan 3, 2014 / nghiavtran - Jan 3, 2014
|We did not have smart phones - Doing the same thing and avoiding change?
Writing Feedbackjannychen - Jan 1, 2014 / jannychen - Jan 3, 2014
|War weapons and increasing rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves
6 - I told that since you have not mentioned points about the factors which are creating problems. Spending time for...
Writing Feedbackquocthai7005 - Jan 1, 2014 / SreeSam - Jan 3, 2014
|Is there a secret way to be safe? "You are going to lead our department one day"
2 - Make the first two sentences in which you answer the prompt the last ones after the first paragraph....
Writing Feedbackxmo8omx - Jan 2, 2014 / ygicantoo - Jan 3, 2014
|Is there anyone in this world who does not want to be rich? Reasons for making money
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Jan 1, 2014 / tazhww - Jan 2, 2014
|Some people believe in the traditional idea that the woman's place is in the home......
Writing Feedbackbash_shell - Dec 30, 2013 / dumi - Jan 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 - Everyone should stay in school until age of eighteen. Agree or disagree?
3 - The best way to aim for a better score is to follow an appropriate essay structure that helps...
Writing FeedbackmayaRa - Jan 1, 2014 / dumi - Jan 2, 2014
|teaching statement for faculty position; my experience; teaching philosophy
Writing Feedbacksafaabu - Dec 31, 2013 / mayaRa - Jan 1, 2014
|IELTS; Can you justify high earnings of sports professionals?
2 - Improve on your introduction. As dumi suggests in this forum, This is the structure I suggest you for...
Writing Feedbackcengizaglar - Dec 30, 2013 / SreeSam - Jan 1, 2014
|Toefl Essay - Protecting Endangered animals is not important?
2 - I would take out "in my opinion" from the first sentence. The reader already knows that it is your...
Writing FeedbackJamilson - Dec 31, 2013 / hgood - Dec 31, 2013
|Hilary Clinton Facebook fan pages - my own writing prompt
2 - I love this!! It is really unique and well written. You could've gone really cliche but you didn't :)...
Writing Feedbackamarao96 - Dec 31, 2013 / a_foster - Dec 31, 2013
|IELTS : Some people think that families have the most powerful influence on children
Writing FeedbackNguyen Nhi Thao - Dec 26, 2013 / Nguyen Nhi Thao - Dec 29, 2013
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