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|[IELTS] consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat - GRAPH
5 - Hi, Please open IELTS related writing in Writing Feedback forum. Also, you can use the feature, "Attach file(s) "...
Writing Feedbackmatthewdang131 - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991
3 - Where is the table? Use the "Attach file(s)" feature to upload the table. It is always good to upload...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 16, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|We look up people who have many unique qualities that make them our role models
Writing FeedbackCathAni - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|Summary of Alexie's " The Joy of Reading and Writing: Superman and me" Draft
3 - Sherman Alexie wrote "The Joy of Reading and Writing: Superman and Me" with the purpose of informing his...
Writing Feedbackmopoohaddict - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|[IELTS] Issue on Retirement Age! Agree or Disagree?
5 - .... don't use synonyms if you are not very familiar with their usage. They may mean something very...
Writing FeedbackHai An Hoang - Sep 10, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|TOEFL; TV has adverse effects on friends and family
4 - Instead of spending time with family or friends, they indulge themselves sitting in front of a TV for...
Writing Feedbackmjlm - Sep 10, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS-In many countries there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.
Writing Feedbackpuman - Sep 1, 2013 / trangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013
|Extended family is less important than before; 'lifestyle has changed'
4 - ... ok... you are talking about the joint family concept that helped people to manage their family farms...
Writing Feedbackfs7 - Sep 12, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose?
3 - this is well written. Only issue is it does not introduce your prompt to the reader. No where...
Writing Feedbacksohailuv - Sep 18, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS - WRITING TASK 1 - Top internet purchase categories by country
4 - Thank you very much, your passage seems to be better than me, I have difficulty in expressing my ideas...
Writing FeedbackTrang Nguyen - Sep 17, 2013 / Trang Nguyen - Sep 18, 2013
|WRITING TASK 1: THE GRAPH; three different categories in the Britain economy
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013 / trangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013
|In some countries, traditional food is being replaced by international fast food.
Writing FeedbackOliviaZeng - Sep 2, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|Global world changes rapidly with the influx of technology but cultural heritage never changes
3 - It's always good to include the prompt with your essay so that we know what it expects. Is this...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS Academic Writing Task 2: OPINIONS ABOUT GOVERNMENT FUNDING OF ARTISTS.
5 - Thanks guys. First of all you are right, I needed to put "alternative sources" instead of " health and...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Sep 13, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Studying the past can help us better understand present or not
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|full time university students spend most of time studying or doing other activities
3 - First, it is always better that you mention the purpose (i.e. TOEFL, IELTS, GRE etc.) in the topic so...
Writing Feedbackhuyentrang - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS: Education is the main determinant of a country's future development
3 - .... What do you mean by "highest education levels"? Do you mean to say that they have better...
Writing Feedbackzoha - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|Agree or disagree : Younger school children should study art and music (TOEFL)
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Aug 25, 2013 / Allen Hu - Sep 18, 2013
|[TOEFL] Changing something in time from the past
Writing Feedbacksomething - Sep 8, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS (Letter)- Invite your friend for a vacation
Writing Feedbackssaallaamm - Sep 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|GRE ARGUE: A "Palean" Basket Was Discovered in Lithos
Writing Feedbackharry52 - Sep 14, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 18, 2013
|TOEFL; WITHOUT A GOOD SENSE OF HUMOR LIFE WILL BE NOT ANY DIFFERENT FROM DEATH
2 - ....make the people... i think you should use "people" instead of "person" . person is a singular noun...
Writing FeedbackEnas30 - Sep 17, 2013 / Kalyn17992 - Sep 18, 2013
|TOEFL; Ability to Relate Well to people Vs Studying Hard
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 17, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 18, 2013
|Artists contributions to society - Music, painting, dancing - make life colorful
3 - This is well written, but a fairly lengthy introduction. If you are preparing for TOEFL or IELTS, this is...
Writing Feedbackfannasster - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|Trusting everyone; CBEST/ memorable childhood experience
3 - Well... you talk little about this experience, instead you talk more about your nature of trusting others. Therefore...
Writing Feedbackclau089 - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|Gre essay review Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievement
3 - ...narrowed down to what? need to specify! Technological development alone will not help a nation to...
Writing Feedbackgurumonk - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|[TOEFL] Whether it is better to have broad knowledge or not
2 - ... I find this is not adding much value to your introduction. Finish it with stating your position....
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and develop
Writing Feedbackgurumonk - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Writing Task 1: The pie chart; People living in poverty in the UK
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013 / Kalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013
|TV Vs. Literature. GRE Analyze an Issue
2 - Throughout history, we find various efforts taken by people to record events for future references. ......
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|[GRE Argument]To alleviate serious unemployment problem Autotech should be encouraged
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Sep 6, 2013 / testtaker - Sep 17, 2013
|Plato statement - There are many different types of music; Why we need it?
Writing Feedbackcactus2601 - Sep 15, 2013 / cactus2601 - Sep 17, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: the development of technology and its implication
2 - I feel you should have a hook that relates more with your prompt.Your prompt actually talks about technology...
Writing Feedbackbsm_25 - Sep 16, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Do you think mathematics can predict divorces ?
2 - In the contemporary eras, predicting divorces based on Mathematics is a matter of increasing concerns . Some people...
Writing FeedbackAloha363 - Sep 16, 2013 / JDCho - Sep 17, 2013
|GRE Analyze an argument. Restoration of local news and weather forecast time
4 - The author's recommendation for anto increase in the time devoted infor the coverage of local and weather news cannot...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|GRE: Arts does not needs to have the public eyes.
3 - ... The word "society" is getting repeated too much. Your opinion is not very clear (highlighted sentence). I...
Writing Feedbackleebongho - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|TOEFL; Children & their own money? lack of self-control and financing conception
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 12, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 17, 2013
|Short biography for TEDX TALK and Marketing proposal
Writing Feedbackbedomohamed - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Multiculturalism ; Accepting more cultures
Writing Feedbackqasderwdw - Sep 14, 2013 / dumi - Sep 16, 2013
|[Toefl] spending equal amount of money on libraries and sports?
2 - Well.... I feel you can present this idea better, in a more logical way; The degree of interest...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 14, 2013 / dumi - Sep 16, 2013
|A Person knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract
2 - I partially agree with the argument made here that banning from civil rights and the discredit about his own...
Writing Feedbackhemkantaregmi - Sep 16, 2013 / bui23353 - Sep 16, 2013
|GRE Sample Essay Response; Perceived Greatness of political leader
NEW - This is my response to a practice revised GRE Issue Essay response. I would love some feedback and scores...
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|IELTS - CAM 5; three different countries population compare
4 - The line graph provides information about the percentage of people with an age of 65 years or more in...
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Sep 15, 2013 / fahadbd - Sep 16, 2013
|[IELTS]- Use of mobiles have become common in many countries.
3 - Thank you guys. Thanks yosh, Very much appreciated. Thanks for correcting the essay... I didn't notice all those...
Writing Feedbackdelvydavis - Sep 11, 2013 / delvydavis - Sep 16, 2013
|Changing trends of local access to the advanced technology in the UK from 1996 to 2003.
4 - Thank you very much, Kalyn. Actually, I tried to do these tasks as regularly as possible and read relevant...
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 15, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 16, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: various nutrition of two different dinners
7 - Try to keep things simple, organise your task 1 in 3 or 4 paragraphs (e.i. introduction, overview and details)....
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 15, 2013 / Traveler - Sep 16, 2013
|The reasons of an increase in social problems involving teenagers
Writing Feedbackzoha - Sep 6, 2013 / zoha - Sep 15, 2013
|memo introducing myself. help: mechanicalism and grammar
4 - You probably don't have to, but it wouldn't be a bad idea to include something like "I appreciate you...
Writing Feedbackbhickey0827 - Sep 15, 2013 / Th25cc - Sep 15, 2013
|Ielts: Parents are sole responsible for their children's misbehavior. Do you agree?
2 - ....the word behavior is getting repeated. This you can present in a more simple way ; The way that...
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Sep 13, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|GRE: Colleges and universities should specify all required courses
Writing Feedbacksistan - Sep 8, 2013 / Th25cc - Sep 15, 2013
|Use ipads and mobiles in class or stay with hard copy books?
4 - There is no doubt that teaching methods and learning process have come under the heavy influence of advance...
Writing Feedbackalrashed - Aug 25, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|【IELTS2】Suggest measures that could be taken to reduce impact of ageing populations.
3 - ... what do you mean by "average of age"? this does not happen only in developing countries but...
Writing Feedbacknoro - Aug 24, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make
3 - The rapid growth of technology has brought about significant changes in human lives, especially in their relationships. ...
Writing FeedbackMinions144 - Aug 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|GRE Issue;Ability of human thinking may deteriorate with dependence on technology
3 - I think you need to improve the presentation of your essay. You need to have a clear Introduction, Body...
Writing Feedbackclearbinder - Aug 21, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Spending leisure time with different and the same age group
13 - Nice....
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Aug 23, 2013 / Marissa7200 - Sep 15, 2013
|[IELTS] CAM9 - WRITING TASK 1 - REPORT AN ISLAND BEFORE AND AFTER CONSTRUCTION
Writing Feedbackseabird88 - Aug 27, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|It's not pointless to strive to keep traditional skills and life style alive.
4 - Hi I think you need to pay attention to the essay structure. Your essay should have an introduction, body...
Writing Feedbackalesssiiaa - Aug 26, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|[IELTS]Task 2: Generally believed that some people are born with certain talents
4 - Hi.... You need to pay attention to your essay structure - Your essay needs to contain an introduction,...
Writing Feedbacksharman - Aug 25, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|Succees because of hard work- luck has nothing to do with it; it has been proven
2 - This is not grammatically correct. Also, it does not covey your idea clearly. Better re-phrase! Only...
Writing FeedbackAli110 - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|[IELTS] Task1:Table on consumer spending information in 5 countries on different item
7 - This is the structure I suggest for this task; Introduction - Introduce the graph title (e.g. The table depicts...
Writing Feedbacksharman - Aug 24, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
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