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|lifetime spent in one job or move. IELTS TASK 2
4 - Please leave a space in between your paragraphs, it would help you to impress the reader to attain good...
Writing Feedbackdwiokta - May 3, 2014 / ammus1 - May 3, 2014
|'robotic teacher' - Will technology replace the teacher in classroom??
Writing Feedbackanshita - May 2, 2014 / Pahan - May 2, 2014
|IELTS essay: Parents should teach children about money
3 - That is the very reason why we include sample essays. Read them carefully and try to figure out...
Writing Feedbacksamkmas - May 1, 2014 / Pahan - May 2, 2014
|CAPITAL PUNISHMENT AND THE INNOCENT; 52 states that have the death penalty in US
3 - Thank You....
Writing Feedbackmarti613 - May 1, 2014 / marti613 - May 2, 2014
|IELTS: traffic problems - some people in the world have a car for themselves
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|'good to be realized for government' - The tax of private car owners
5 - Don't open your essay with complicated sentences :( Here you leave the reader with so many questions -...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|Ielts: most popular sports - the pie chart
9 - Dear Pahan and MisterWandering thank you very much! What can you say about coherence and grammar??...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 1, 2014 / Abdurasul - May 2, 2014
|'our life would be easier'; government's money for improving computer technology
3 - First of all, an improved computer technology will inevitably make our lives easier by offering very sophisticated and advanced...
Writing Feedbackbestonline99 - Apr 23, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|ielts - Every year several languages die cut; Language as pride of every nation
13 - Thanks alot dumi :) now I will write another essay and will try to do like you have suggested...
Writing Feedbackmrs rafey - Apr 28, 2014 / mrs rafey - May 2, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: USA marathon records by age and gender in hours.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 2, 2014 / MisterWandering - May 2, 2014
|TOEFL: Famous people are bothered by the media
7 - One reason isthatwhy television and newspapers focus on famous peoples' lives isin order to increase their audience or readership....
Writing FeedbackAngelaB - Apr 27, 2014 / Pahan - May 2, 2014
|IELTS: Nowadays an increasing number of people change their jobs
4 - Ok, let's do the intro as per dumi's approach; Career plays an important role in one's success (hook) ...
Writing Feedbackata2931977 - May 2, 2014 / Pahan - May 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : UK Residence travel report
3 - BritonsBritish travelerscoming highest movement revealed the number ofhave mostly traveled abroad on holiday purpose recording 20.700 holiday trips...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|IELTS: Capital Punishment - is beneficial to penalize the recidivist
5 - However, in the side of humanistic viewfrom a more humanistic perspective, every human being should be honour for...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 1, 2014 / dumi - May 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: To solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car
5 - ... this is contains some errors ...As result, the pollution's level will be reduced. I correct...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - May 1, 2014 / SHanafi - May 1, 2014
|Water cycles - process showing how water evaporates, condenses and precipitates
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 28, 2014 / brandymhunter - May 1, 2014
|Should children be reeducated with severe methods?
8 - Also, I forgot to make my admin requests in the previous post - You should include the prompt in...
Writing FeedbackmasteringIELTS - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|IELTS:The stages and equipment used in the cement-making process
6 - The diagram shows how cement is producedthe stages of cement and concrete productionand how is way of using cement...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 28, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|IELTS_TASK2_ People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives
4 - In present-day society, to accomplish own dreams, most people hashave failed to keep a balance between their busy work...
Writing Feedbackitsmonica - May 1, 2014 / niesaysi - May 1, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: Sport in UK - boys interested to play football
2 - The table provides information about the percentage of school aged boys in two different age groups who participated in...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - May 1, 2014 / Pahan - May 1, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The percentage of sports in the UK in 2010
3 - Overall, it is clearlyclear that the biggesthighest percentage of boys in both age groups were involved insport was football...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - May 1, 2014 / Pahan - May 1, 2014
|IELTS: paying taxes is enough contribution from citizens
8 - Hi alexwater... in this sentence, I look 2 verb through conjunction. If in the sentence use two verb,...
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 28, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - May 1, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : People move to cities is increasing
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 27, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|Ielts: Why people are moving to big cities - social issue
6 - First, you write very well. However, you need to have more specific examples to support the reasons you are...
Writing Feedbackxingshigang3030 - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|IELTS: Planning a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Pellington.
8 - In this diagram, there is no reference to governments. So, you should not touch on anything that is...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - May 1, 2014
|IELTS: Greenhouse gases trap energy from the sun
9 - Greenhouse give affects to atmosphere and earth. Your detailed body paras are not adequately informing the details of what...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 25, 2014 / Pahan - May 1, 2014
|IELTS: Government should be considered to budget more for preventing programs
3 - after this sentence, it will seem more interesting if you add some supporting sentences in the next which...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 30, 2014 / fikri - May 1, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The graphs above give information about computer ownership
8 - Generally, percentage of people who haveowned a computer increased from 2002 to 2010 and it is same astrend with...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 30, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: problem of obesity and how to solve it; parents & school all have a role
Writing Feedbackhbzezo - Apr 26, 2014 / fikri - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS task 2: A successful person is one who has earned a lot of money...
3 - in agree disagree task, you should mention both sides whether you agree or disagree for example, when...
Writing Feedbackminhvo - Apr 26, 2014 / fikri - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Adult educational survey report
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: Many old buildings = history --> it is very important to protect them
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 30, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Planning new supermarket in Pellington (by upinipin)
7 - In Task 1 of the IELTS test, you ARE NOT required to give your personal opinion. So you should...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / zztrieuman - Apr 30, 2014
|'monster if we cannot manage it well' - Movies or tv influence people's behavior
7 - Television is one of the most popular media used by any household. It has also becomingbecome an important...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: People attend collage or university especially for career preparation
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|"Get bored because nothing to do around" - a new movie theater may be built
7 - Second, the closest movie theater is 25 minutes from my home and it is quite a distance we need...
Writing Feedbacksamuelbartoli - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: limited resources, infrastructure; traditional house vs modern apartment?
Writing Feedbacksamkmas - Apr 30, 2014 / eddies - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: Children are working for money, therefore they learn the value of money
4 - Children at work raise long-standing debates. While some people argue that this is good to teach new skills and...
Writing Feedback19epuzam - Apr 26, 2014 / eddies - Apr 30, 2014
|Classification essay; aren't rock music isn't boring - 'sub-genres of choice'
3 - Rock music is important to me because it acts as an outlet for expressing things that I am unable...
Writing FeedbackOrangeeskies - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2- MUSIC IN THE WOLD TODAY
4 - Above all, nowadays, people are always surrounded with music. International pop music is a trend in the near future,...
Writing Feedbacktiandteo - Apr 24, 2014 / samkmas - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Animals should not be exploited by people
6 - In my opinion, I think that animals should have the same rights as human beings because animals are also...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 29, 2014 / samkmas - Apr 30, 2014
|IELTS: should all offenders be sent to prisons? 'alternative punishment'
7 - You have very good writing skills. Improve on the essay structure as Pahan suggested to you because this task...
Writing FeedbackYvonne_lulu - Apr 29, 2014 / dumi - Apr 30, 2014
|Mindfulness Reflection - Communications course essay
3 - Thank you for your immediate response. You brought many points to my attention that I had overlooked. ...
Writing Feedbackbrandymhunter - Apr 29, 2014 / brandymhunter - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: Proposed sites for a new hypermarket in the city of Pellington.
5 - A key point in the writing task 1 is the differences and similarities. Personally, i prefer to explain the...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 29, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : The electricity consumption and cost per year
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 24, 2014 / fikri - Apr 29, 2014
|Ielts: invite letter: for Tom - coming for a visit in Beijing
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: advertising impact on people's choice of consumption
4 - This intro is too big. You need to organize better otherwise you would run out of allowed time. This...
Writing Feedbackyuchiu - Apr 26, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Australian weather broadcasting process
6 - The diagram shows a process of weather broadcasterbroadcastingwhich is broadcasted by the Australian Bureau of Meteorology Overall,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 8, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: Subway system in London, Paris, Tokio, Washington, Kyoto and Los Angeles
4 - This is not adding any value to your writing as it does not give any meaningful information to...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 25, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Changes of mode transportation using in UK
5 - This is a very important aspect in report writing. You should not make any errors when interpreting data,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 24, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|Cultural Changes in Music from Generation to Generation
3 - Yes, this is very important. You need to tell us the purpose why you wrote it (IELTS, TOEFL, GRE...
Writing FeedbackTarcisiofl - Apr 22, 2014 / dumi - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS 1:Type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
4 - shoping list or listing. i suggest you to adopt comparison and contrast essay to deliver your detail information. Moreover,...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 24, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|Unemployment rates in US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999
6 - is that your introduction? if it is your introduction i think too long and quite confusing. Introduction...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 22, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|Ielts take 2 Young people attitude towards parents and grand parents
4 - Actually, both are interchangeable. Meaning, both are correct. However, in writing, it is more appropriate to use "with...
Writing FeedbackMattgang - Apr 29, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS: Hydroelectric dam and turbine
5 - The picture depicts the hydroelectric dam process which is used for electricity. Grammar issue it's...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 29, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 29, 2014
|The charts: reasons why adults decide to study / shared costs of adult education
4 - The charts give information about results of a survey of adult education i will write The chart gives...
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - Apr 28, 2014 / Mattgang - Apr 29, 2014
|Learn more about another country by watching tv programmes and films about it
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 28, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 29, 2014
|radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 23, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The audiences of radio and television for full the day in 1992.
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 23, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 29, 2014
|The number of television sales annually from 1996 to 1999
4 - between 1996 and 1999. wrong noun phrase ; a significant increase or significantly (adv) increase (verb)...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Apr 28, 2014 / tiaDS - Apr 28, 2014
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