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|Robert Pattinson is for me the best actor around the world
5 - This sentence is way too long and cramped up with so many ideas. So this lacks good presentation....
Writing FeedbackMira97 - Jan 15, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS task2 : People reluctant to changes. What are the issues and possible solutions?
2 - Journey of life is generally a collection of inevitable changes in which people happen to face both positive and...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|People need fight against unfairness of authorities decision and protect themselves from its results
5 - Hi You should have opened this thread in "Writing Feedback" forum which is the most appropriate forum for this...
Writing Feedbackbraska1 - Jan 4, 2014 / dumi - Jan 29, 2014
|Hello! I am studying in class 7 I want to improve my English help me.
Writing Feedbackkrity - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|Some people believe in the traditional idea that the woman's place is in the home
2 - Woman is the live wire of every person's life. She could be one's mother, sister, daughter, wife or...
Writing Feedbacksabi123 - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS task 2: Resist change or Welcome change?
6 - Yes, that's my approach :) Anyways, hope this structure would help you too (this is for Agree/ Disagree or...
Writing FeedbackAlison - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Jan 29, 2014
|Memorable day in my entire life!
5 - ... This has some grammar issues. Also, try to avoid using numbers in essay writing. I have spent...
Writing Feedbackninamoradi - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Advertisements are benefial to people or not ?
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 25, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Televisions are the most favorite media for comunicating
8 - In your introduction you should have introduced the there types of media that yo are going to compare and...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS: outlay and expense on fast foods in the UK
5 - The bar chart illustrates the outlay on fast foods in the UK in 1990 whereas the line graph gives...
Writing Feedbackrockmanvnx6 - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS : Space Exploration - More to do with national pride than international effort?
3 - In my mindview, people who ... have been made their nationalitynation proud of thembecause they ...Now, let's discuss this...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create.
5 - Whatever the reason, I would give an argumentation that government cannotshouldn't prevent artist to earn much money from their...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 27, 2014 / dumi - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 - information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy
Writing Feedbacklavie - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS [TASK 2] alternatives to fossil fuels
3 - You need to pay attention to your essay structure. Your introduction should contain certain features in order to earn...
Writing FeedbackMonen - Jan 28, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 28, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Colour can affect human psychologist
4 - Hi Fardhani Putri, Yes , I understand your point here. I am not an expert in writing but still...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 26, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 27, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Species extinctions and the threats to plant life in tropical forests
3 - Very good introduction :) Very good overview too :) Let's see how you tackle the detail section :D ...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 27, 2014
|Should university students be required to attend class;gain education profoundly
Writing Feedbackodon - Jan 23, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014
|Literature review : Gender inequality in the global economic crisis....
2 - Professor Senguino--CAPITALIZE it for it is a title. gender-based employment had huge influences on not only well-developed...
Writing Feedbackpemaptheki - Jan 26, 2014 / niesaysi - Jan 27, 2014
|High-income and average-income people are more likely to consume hamburgers - IELTS
5 - Hi, active sentences are USUALLY preferred to be used, but in that case, you have to consider one...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 26, 2014 / niesaysi - Jan 27, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; Britons fast food
4 - I think your writing is just fine. Though, the conclusion should be more abstract. P.S I think you...
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 26, 2014 / Serapke - Jan 26, 2014
|The proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040. Writing Task 1
5 - The good pattern of IELTS in writting task 1 if you have overview/ Main trend the example for overview...
Writing FeedbackKarlito - Jan 22, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 26, 2014
|IELST TASK 1: Australian kids' leisure actives.
Writing Feedbackharry109 - Jan 24, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 26, 2014
|GMAT - ANALYTICAL WRITING ASSIGNMENT - AVIA AIRLINES
3 - Thanks for the advice. I believe the same too, however in the GMAT you're asked to state two or...
Writing Feedbackfrancoise - Jan 20, 2014 / francoise - Jan 25, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: LINE GRAPH/ change in fish and other three types of meat consumption
7 - This could be replaced by the overview paragraph, which is often written after the introduction....
Writing Feedbackleoking - Jan 24, 2014 / MisterWandering - Jan 25, 2014
|IELTS; what people say about advertisement?
7 - Hi Fikri, As dumi said do not narrow down you scope in the introduction itself In several parts of...
Writing Feedbackfikri - Jan 23, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 25, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The main reasons for study and the amount of study grant
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 24, 2014 / tiaDS - Jan 25, 2014
|Ielts - changes in weekly spending by Britons on three types of fast food
5 - Good introduction :) Well, according to my knowledge the minimum word count should be 150 and...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 21, 2014 / dumi - Jan 25, 2014
|The given chart compares the amount of sales taking different products: games software, DVD and CDs
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 19, 2014 / tiaDS - Jan 24, 2014
|My sister got sick - I had embarrassing experience then.
2 - Hello Elhaam, I found some punctuation errors in your paragraph. Always space after (,)and (.) You don't have to...
Writing FeedbackElhaam - Jan 24, 2014 / Neupane3 - Jan 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: How color influence people's health and capacity for work
5 - Let's do one for this following this approach; Colors have a great impact on our lives (hook) According to...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 23, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 24, 2014
|"Inventions vs doctors"; 'broken bones, diseases, pain and suffering'
NEW - Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extend do you agree with this statements? Give...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 24, 2014 / — -
|TECHNOLOGY; PROBLEM AFFECTING MY COMMUNITY
6 - Well, your question asks you to write about a problem that affects your community. So, you need to talk...
Writing Feedbackshaii - Jan 22, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The graph shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Jan 20, 2014 / ARIA - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Summarising two charts (Demand and electricity usage during typical day)
6 - Hi Hanafi The most important point in IELTS writing task 1 is structure. As "dumi" explained you need...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 20, 2014 / ARIA - Jan 23, 2014
|Parents presently tend to let their children study or research subjects freely what they want
3 - Hi hoangle308 . I think i should have been This is because parents allow their little kids not only...
Writing Feedbackhoangle308 - Jan 23, 2014 / odon - Jan 23, 2014
|TOEFL; Do you prefer to eat out or eat at home ?
Writing Feedbackodon - Jan 22, 2014 / odon - Jan 23, 2014
|Letters, email, or telephone communication? Yes - it's more comfortable and can save time and money
5 - Gabriella especially when we are talking about embarrassing moments or apologizing for what I have done wrong especially...
Writing FeedbackGabriella - Jan 23, 2014 / odon - Jan 23, 2014
|Tourism; When visiting another country, huge cultural differences may arise.
3 - You haven't used the most important word here which is "TOURISM". It is good to have a multicultural environment...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Jan 21, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 23, 2014
|People attend university for many different reasons. 'making more money'
4 - Your essay seems to be a bit lengthy, especially the size of the paragraphs. TOEFL has a major bearing...
Writing Feedbacktarabas - Jan 20, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS task 1: the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040
6 - Ok... this is what I suggest' Similarities - From 2030 onward the aging population of all three countries...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 22, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 23, 2014
|IELST Task 2: Should people be exempted from taxes?
Writing Feedbackharry109 - Jan 22, 2014 / eddies - Jan 23, 2014
|Why people work? Money or Pleasure
4 - ok,,thank you Pahan n SHanafi I will try to make it better.. thanks very much for your advice,,this...
Writing Feedbackfikri - Jan 22, 2014 / fikri - Jan 23, 2014
|The bar chart depicts the percentage how Britons spent the amount of money for buying fast foods
2 - Your should adopt a more formal style of writing that suits report writing. Be concise and clear in...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 22, 2014 / dumi - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS: Who should care for the elders?
Writing Feedbackanusha38 - Jan 22, 2014 / anusha38 - Jan 23, 2014
|TOEFL/Disagree Playing Computer Games wastes time and students should not be allowed!
3 - You should separate this sentence into two sentences, and in fact, these sentences should be put in...
Writing Feedbackcshcara - Jan 22, 2014 / sntinn - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Process of Making Chewing Gum
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 19, 2014 / SHanafi - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS essay - Teenage or Adult life - which brings more happiness in life?
7 - learning new things is a common phenomenon throughout one's life. The biggest advantage during teenage years compared to...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Jan 21, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 22, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The challenges people face when they go to live in other countries
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 22, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 22, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Global population figures and figures for urban populations
5 - society means "the aggregate of people living together in a more or less ordered community" or "an organization or...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 20, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 22, 2014
|IELTS task 1: the chart in global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 19, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 22, 2014
|IELTS - wealth countries achieved over 4.0% in 60s and declined sharply under 3.0 percent in 1970
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 17, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 22, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The percentage of international student in different Canadian provinces
3 - The chart indicates the percentage of overseaforeigngraduate students from universities based on several regions in Canada from 2001...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 20, 2014 / dumi - Jan 21, 2014
|What would I change in my village if I could get an opportunity!
Writing Feedbackmehraban - Jan 21, 2014 / mehraban - Jan 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Population figures in Japan
5 - It's good for putting effort to improve your grammar by constructing more complex sentences. However, for this task,...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 20, 2014 / dumi - Jan 21, 2014
|Human is a complicated creature; Classifying people
3 - It classifies people .... Interesting classification - trying to figure out to which I'm falling ....LOL...
Writing Feedbacknosomi - Jan 21, 2014 / dumi - Jan 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 :World population figures and urban population in different world region. )
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 21, 2014 / dumi - Jan 21, 2014
|Why people go to the museum ?
Writing Feedbackodon - Jan 20, 2014 / odon - Jan 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 travel alone or with friends?
10 - okey MisterWandering,, many thanks for the advice I will try to rewrite again and we can discuss again about...
Writing Feedbackfikri - Jan 20, 2014 / fikri - Jan 21, 2014
|IELTS task 1: A survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company.
4 - The given bar chart illustrates ten factors that influence work effectiveness of two different age groups in a...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 20, 2014 / MisterWandering - Jan 21, 2014
|(IELTS TASK 2) closing offices to save energy
Writing Feedbackfikri - Jan 19, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 21, 2014
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