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|[ IELTS Task 2] the standard of living in country benefits cities rather than rural areas
8 - Let's take your first sentence; Why has it sparked a major dispute? Also as JethroJosh points out,...
Writing Feedbackgabbie - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 28, 2013
|"Why people attend college?" To fulfill their dreams!
Writing Feedbacksky2586 - Oct 25, 2013 / sky2586 - Oct 28, 2013
|IELTS; Is money the main motivator for employees ? To what extent you agree with that?
3 - Good advice from Pahan :) This is not a typical agree/disagree topic. However, you can still use this format...
Writing FeedbackAllii - Oct 27, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|Socialization by parents of their children into gender roles
Writing FeedbackSalewaa - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|Young People Are Much More Aware of and Concerned About Issues Like the Environment, Pover
4 - Overall, your essay needs lots of improvement with regard to clarity of your sentences. They don't convey the idea...
Writing Feedbackyas 2013 - Oct 26, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|[TOEFL] agree or disagree the purpose of television is to educate, not to entertain
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Sep 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 28, 2013
|Why study?; 'improve understanding, practical knowledge and career planning'
Writing Feedbackphuongdunglotus - Oct 24, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 27, 2013
|[TOEFL] : Governments should spend money on space exploration or for basic needs of people
5 - Your second sentence in the introduction is more meaningful and depict the same meaning. I feel that the...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 26, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 27, 2013
|Love and friendship - the best things in life are free.
3 - "each people" is wrong. People means a collection of men/women and therefore it is a plural word. So...
Writing Feedbackcarmspinto - Oct 25, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 27, 2013
|IELTS:Who should be responsible for cleaning pollution? Private Individuals or Government?
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 27, 2013
|TOEFL: Best ways of reducing stress: listening to music, exercise, meditation
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 27, 2013
|TOEFL; The internet provides a lot of valuable information. However,others disagree
Writing Feedbackpppanta - Oct 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 27, 2013
|[toefl task] Is the purpose of television to educate, not to entertain?
5 - After 8-hour working or study, people are so exhausted that they may be reluctant to spend time on...
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 26, 2013 / dumi - Oct 27, 2013
|Agree/ Disagree -Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program
4 - I sincerely thank you! MisterWandering ! you must have seen thoroughly for giving me comments. thank to your assistance,...
Writing FeedbackTHUSINHTITANA - Oct 20, 2013 / THUSINHTITANA - Oct 27, 2013
|"I believe in our universe, everything we see and believe, is nothing more than a dream"
2 - I believe our universe , everything in the universe, we see and believe , is nothing more thanbut a...
Writing FeedbackDelainaMichelle - Oct 21, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 26, 2013
|"Cartesian Duality";Term Paper for Core Humanities
2 - Mary Shelley believes humans are naturally innocent at birth and also are born as a blank slate or as...
Writing FeedbackFranky 1994 - Oct 20, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 26, 2013
|Recalling an Experience; NARRATIVE ESSAY
3 - First, I have a request; You need to provide a more meaningful topic for your thread which is a...
Writing FeedbackPICHIRO - Oct 25, 2013 / dumi - Oct 26, 2013
|IELTS:Motorized flight is the greatest invention in the modern world; Agree or Disagree?
3 - First of all, the frequent air travels have detrimental effects on the environment due to the emission of the...
Writing Feedbacklslt - Oct 24, 2013 / dumi - Oct 26, 2013
|'depends on the age'; should teachers assign homework for students every day?
7 - establish a rule proposing that teachers should not assign homework for their pupils students need...
Writing Feedbackaster0224 - Oct 24, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 24, 2013
|'broaden horizons'; it is better to begin learning foreign language early
5 - I think this is the best way to practice because these tasks you need to finish within the allocated...
Writing Feedbackravenet - Oct 24, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 24, 2013
|"Driven by idea of the 'common good'" ; Constitution of May 3
2 - Using sentence structure/ writing accurately - Varied and sophisticated sentence structures used to impressive effect - Uses a...
Writing Feedbackleslav - Oct 17, 2013 / 98_IIG - Oct 24, 2013
|IELTS; Some prefer changes in life while others refuse to change
2 - Some people think change in their lives is unnecessary, because they would like to keepmaintain a regular lifestyleslifestyle. ...
Writing FeedbackJerry0123 - Oct 24, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 24, 2013
|IELTS -Some people think that we can use as much fresh water as we want. Others think
12 - Dear Dumi, Thank you for your all explanation and I just now read in Oxford dictionary that make...
Writing Feedbackravenet - Oct 23, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 24, 2013
|GRE AWA Issue Analysis ; Studying major cities helps understand their society
Writing FeedbackFatimaK - Oct 19, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 24, 2013
|IELTS:In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries th
5 - I thinks your introduction to the essay is somehow too long. your examples should be mentioned in the body,...
Writing Feedbacksoheylvahabzade - Oct 21, 2013 / vmtct - Oct 24, 2013
|The gap between the rich and the poor; Introduction to essay on socio-economic inequality
Writing FeedbackJane321 - Oct 24, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|The Rise of the Indus River Valley Civilizations essay
5 - Egypt and Mesopotamian civilizations possess lots of written evidence. However, in case of the Indus River valley not...
Writing Feedbacksheddy - Oct 13, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|compare-contrast b/w mother and father;Really need some help;20% part of grade
3 - There are several ideas crowded in this one line sentence. Better re-organize them; One needs money to provide...
Writing FeedbackBisasa - Oct 16, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|"Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandy sitting alone"
4 - Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandySandy sitting alone. He walkswalked up to her and very nervously asked...
Writing FeedbackAnelis123 - Oct 10, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|Murder, bloodshed, carnage; why exactly is it wrong?
4 - From the beginning of times, murder hashad been viewed as the ultimate crime deprived of life ...
Writing FeedbackBipabrena - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|IELTS : IN MANY COUNTRIES TODAY INSUFFICIENT RESPECT GIVEN TO OLD PEOPLE >...
Writing FeedbackShaan123 - Oct 21, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 24, 2013
|TOEFL;universities require students to studymany subjects or specialize in one subject
Writing Feedbackpppanta - Oct 23, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 23, 2013
|Some people think that private schools should be banned.
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Oct 23, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 23, 2013
|Argumentative Essay : Living on campus
8 - .... good point, but when you talk about competition among them, it kind of disturbs your idea :(...
Writing Feedbackcactus2601 - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 23, 2013
|Have you ever been in a crowded and dirty place? ;descriptive essay
4 - That is my introduction so i tried not to be specific in that paragraph. My teacher told me to...
Writing Feedbackboy3005 - Oct 23, 2013 / boy3005 - Oct 23, 2013
|Some teachers and parents suggest that rivalry between children should exist, while others don't
8 - In your body paragraphs, you should justify your opinion by giving reasons. And then you should support them...
Writing FeedbackGulala - Oct 13, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|BABYSITTING; Narration of process essay
Writing FeedbackCollege girl 13 - Oct 19, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|Perhaps food satisfies both the taste buds and the heart
Writing Feedbackthisistram - Oct 23, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|Man's Best Friend and Medicine; ESSAY ON ANIMAL THERAPY
4 - ... this sentence is too long and contain too many ideas. Therefore, it does not clearly deliver the...
Writing Feedbackczlets12 - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|English Informative essay about what people don't know of petroleum engineering.
2 - Many people perceive petroleum engineering is merely something to do with petroleum being converted into gasoline. ...
Writing Feedbackber - Oct 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|Soon people who cannot work with computers will be disadvantaged- IELTS
Writing Feedbackravenet - Oct 14, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 22, 2013
|Waving thoughts; Narrative Essay (Revising and correcting)
4 - Thank you all, just realized that I didn't even posted the full essay. If you found it nonsense, that's...
Writing Feedbackjorgearmando18 - Sep 26, 2013 / jorgearmando18 - Oct 22, 2013
|IELTS: More houses are needed in many countries to cope with increasing people...
Writing FeedbackGulala - Oct 22, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 22, 2013
|Process Analysis Essay-How to change a tire (Proofread, suggestions, improvement)
Writing Feedbackjorgearmando18 - Oct 22, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 22, 2013
|We stand together looking at the flag; What does patriotism mean to me?
4 - the audience will be veterans, i think it probably should stay on the topic of war veterans but...
Writing Feedbackoksanavy7 - Sep 22, 2013 / oksanavy7 - Oct 22, 2013
|Increased fees affecting demand for University degrees
Writing FeedbackCJA - Oct 15, 2013 / CJA - Oct 22, 2013
|COMPARE/CONTRAST essay about my mother&sister
4 - Overall though is it a good essay.... I'm going to edit it and make changes and post it again...
Writing FeedbackCollege girl 13 - Oct 21, 2013 / College girl 13 - Oct 22, 2013
|Governments &Companies should share their scientific discoveries
2 - It's always better you mention the purpose of your writing in the title. For example, IELTS, TOEFL etc. Then...
Writing FeedbackRichardGe - Oct 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 22, 2013
|TOEFL: 'analogous concern and money' - financial support for sports and social activities
6 - TOEFL Independent writing task expects you to provide specific examples to back the reasons that you present to...
Writing Feedbacknasiim - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 22, 2013
|knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decision today.
Writing FeedbackArunabh05 - Oct 10, 2013 / ebychris - Oct 22, 2013
|What changes your perception in order to be a better communicator
4 - In high school, I also got involved with Physics Olympiad Team. ... what do you mean by science-based...
Writing Feedbackkevinj888 - Oct 21, 2013 / dumi - Oct 22, 2013
|IELTS: Ads result in high sales of well-received consumer goods. Agree or disagree?
4 - Yes.... you should not narrow down the scope of your topic. ...which outweigh advertisements. ... here...
Writing Feedbackstream_xu - Oct 21, 2013 / dumi - Oct 22, 2013
|what are benefits of shopping online.
Writing Feedbackbixanh - Oct 21, 2013 / bixanh - Oct 21, 2013
|Human Cloning is the creation of a lab human or test tube baby!
Writing FeedbackNiuWang - Oct 14, 2013 / NiuWang - Oct 21, 2013
|TOEFL: Why people attend universities?
3 - ... I don't find any relevance between this sentence and your topic. This is your hook and it...
Writing Feedbackaqua12713 - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 21, 2013
|TOEFL: learning facts has more subsequent advantages for students' future lives
Writing Feedbacknasiim - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|IELTS: Born with talents or talents can be trained? Discuss both views!
Writing Feedbackstream_xu - Oct 17, 2013 / skynet0512 - Oct 20, 2013
|TOEFL; Dancing plays an important role in a culture.
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 19, 2013 / legend777 - Oct 20, 2013
|I was waving goodbye to the life I had for 16 years/Transition from Childhood to Adulthood
5 - I like it! It's really great. The ONLY thing I would say is switch one "alive" to something else,...
Writing Feedbackrp2013 - Oct 11, 2013 / tayleeb - Oct 20, 2013
|TV & Movies have negative effects on children.
3 - Where is the example? Make sure you provide a specific example to each reason you bring up to...
Writing Feedbacksusananley - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
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