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|The effects of technology on children - NEGATIVE/ POSITIVE
2 - I don't find this an interesting hook statement. You can do better with your opening sentence :) ...
Writing FeedbackHOL2040366 - Nov 26, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|IELTS essay youth criminals should be punished in the same way as adults ?
4 - Very good introduction - Good structure, vocabulary , grammar etc. :) A teenage murderer would not feel...
Writing Feedbackgabbie - Nov 12, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|EXPLAIN THE CHARACTER OF MR LURIA in " The Halawe'en Party " short story ; Prose essay
4 - He can sometimes be harsh on certain acts of his family members, for example when they go for...
Writing FeedbackTheUnlimited - Nov 13, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|Books? The knowledge learned from experience will remain in our minds better
4 - Thank you so much Your points of views really help me be more ready for the test(TOEFL) I'm going...
Writing Feedbackkhodekhodam - Nov 20, 2013 / khodekhodam - Nov 27, 2013
|I learn about who I am; DEPRESSION & ANXIETY
4 - ... it sounds too general when you declare that everybody experience these things everyday. There may be people...
Writing Feedbacktabithamica - Nov 16, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|Have you ever felt like you don't recognize the feeling of being happy anymore?
3 - This sentence sounds better if you present it in a more simplified version; Have you ever felt that...
Writing FeedbackJumanaa - Nov 16, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|IELTS- opinion about languages dying out
Writing Feedbackmingming - Nov 26, 2013 / SreeSam - Nov 27, 2013
|Financing artists from tax payer's money - Ielts
Writing FeedbackBobbypark - Nov 24, 2013 / dumi - Nov 27, 2013
|Nowadays traffic in major cities is worsening. What problems does it create? Solutions?
7 - You should use more data or statistics to help display how traffic is worsening, some of the major problems,...
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Nov 23, 2013 / desaik111 - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS-In some countries, the old age is more valued, while in some countries the youth
14 - Hi, Dumi, my tutor insist that Discuss both views and give your own opinion means you should...
Writing Feedbacktiyuok - Nov 22, 2013 / tiyuok - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS Academic- stringent age rules to reduce the road accidents.
2 - Here you assume the reader knows the argument. However, you are supposed to introduce the argument to the...
Writing Feedbacksri_1 - Nov 26, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|toefl essay, face-to-face communication, seeing the other person eye to eye
2 - Well structured essay. Please take a note on the punctuation. Use comma in appropriate place. Especially after connectives...
Writing FeedbackArinadeer - Nov 26, 2013 / sri_1 - Nov 26, 2013
|Warnings and smoking - IELTS task 2 Academic.
3 - ... well this is not for speech writing, but essay writing. So, avoid unnecessary redundancy. It is well...
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY: People in the past used to be more dependent on one another
4 - This sounds pretty vague :( What sort of transformation it undergoes? Remember, this is your hook statement that...
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS: Improving careers or spend time with family and friends more important
3 - It is often believed that money and success are directly correlated with each other. Therefore, some...
Writing Feedbackasmy - Nov 24, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay:Some people think that music brings benefits to individuals
3 - First, I have a small admin request for you; Please open all IELTS essays in Writing Feedback forum :)...
Writing FeedbackDuva - Nov 25, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|TOEFL improve the quality of education,more money should be spent on professors' salaries
5 - ... Wish you improve clarity a bit more; One of the important ways of improving the quality of...
Writing Feedbacklegend777 - Nov 12, 2013 / dumi - Nov 26, 2013
|IELTS; Studying a foreign language at primary school is very advantageous!
Writing FeedbackHgly - Nov 19, 2013 / HelpmepassIELTS - Nov 26, 2013
|'Taxpayer, employer and individual' - IELTS Writing : Cambridge 1 : Practice 1
Writing Feedbacklimarchung - Nov 22, 2013 / limarchung - Nov 26, 2013
|[IELTS] - Problems caused by Traffic and its Solutions
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Nov 25, 2013 / asmy - Nov 25, 2013
|IELTS: Is economic progress only way of measuring Country's Success? Add health care and education
4 - Thanks for your suggestions Dumi. I think i used repeated few main words that I think causes the essay...
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Nov 19, 2013 / ieltsp - Nov 25, 2013
|iELTS: Is ambition is a positive or negative characteristic? Is it necessary for success?
5 - ... I fixed the grammar error. However, technogical marvels and change in living standards are not the outcomes...
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Nov 24, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 25, 2013
|IELTS Essay - Money spent on parties is waste or for betterment.
3 - Partying is considered as a great way to socialize.... I think this provides a better hook statement for...
Writing Feedbacksri_1 - Nov 25, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 25, 2013
|[TOEFL] The advantages and disadvantages of building a large factory near community.
Writing Feedbackaoey - Nov 20, 2013 / ggalaxy - Nov 25, 2013
|Sports & Social Activities are just as important as Classes- Equal financial support!
Writing Feedback600score - Nov 24, 2013 / 600score - Nov 25, 2013
|IELTS; Universities should not provide so much theoretical knowledge
2 - It is generally accepted that universities are the very places where students can obtain profound knowledge ofin the fields...
Writing Feedbackhaodiep7640 - Nov 25, 2013 / dumi - Nov 25, 2013
|Is Advertising Changing our Idea of Sex?
2 - Honestly, I can't find much wrong with this. However, I do have a suggestion. "In the following essay...
Writing Feedbackharrylev1995 - Nov 16, 2013 / SilverKnight - Nov 24, 2013
|'Lecture and reading passage' - Toefl: integrated essay
Writing Feedbackmonayoussef - May 23, 2012 / ggalaxy - Nov 24, 2013
|IELTS - Some business prohibits smoking in any of their offices
4 - to gtamani:Thanks so much for your time. It helped me a lot to locate my common mistakes tiyuok :...
Writing Feedbackkumkap - Nov 24, 2013 / kumkap - Nov 24, 2013
|IELTS- competition and cooperation , which one is important for children?
Writing Feedbackduo008 - Nov 23, 2013 / duo008 - Nov 24, 2013
|Antidemocratic countries and the effect of capital punishment on our lives
Writing Feedbackera1996 - Nov 19, 2013 / era1996 - Nov 23, 2013
|IELTS; Technology cannot solve all the world's problems!
Writing Feedbackhaodiep7640 - Nov 21, 2013 / raDJa - Nov 23, 2013
|IELTS: pros and cons of work in other countries and take families together
8 - Since you struggle with time management, I think this structure for your introduction also would help you organize your...
Writing Feedbackasmy - Nov 21, 2013 / dumi - Nov 23, 2013
|IELTS; At young age children are more adaptable to studying foreign language
6 - Hi, I have an admin request for you - Please have a more meaningful topic, similar to the one...
Writing FeedbackraDJa - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Nov 23, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay:Social networking has the advantages and disadvantages
Writing Feedbacknhr - Nov 22, 2013 / pakias - Nov 23, 2013
|distance travelled - IELTS academic task 1 writing (table form)
6 - Good... Hey, I've done a major mistake while providing you the structure for this task. The one I provided...
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 21, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 22, 2013
|Doing things within groups or by individual - ielts essay
2 - This sentence is poorly constructed and it is too crowded with so many words and improper phrases. You...
Writing FeedbackEricidelia - Nov 22, 2013 / dumi - Nov 22, 2013
|GRE Practice Essay - Governments should limit the amount of restriction, if any, on scient
Writing Feedbackchloespaha - Nov 20, 2013 / Nikkyrulzz - Nov 22, 2013
|Economic growth is defined as an increase in the number of goods and services produced in one year
5 - In my opinion, your introduction is not appropriate for your task. Firstly, you are more likely talking about Economic...
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 20, 2013 / gmad06 - Nov 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] Compare and contrast knowledge from experience with knowledge from books.
Writing Feedbackaoey - Nov 19, 2013 / aoey - Nov 22, 2013
|IELTS; Mobile phones have made life easier - More positive than negative effects?
Writing Feedbackpooh - Nov 20, 2013 / ieltsp - Nov 21, 2013
|IELTS - Line graph (UNEMPLOYMENT RATES OF PEOPLE IN THE US AND JAPAN)
3 - Many thanks for your help! Hopefully, I can receive more feedback from you for next reports and essays....
Writing Feedbackphuongthuy247 - Nov 20, 2013 / phuongthuy247 - Nov 21, 2013
|IELTS - A gift can be in any form!
3 - You write very long sentences and they actually get you carried away at the end of the sentence....
Writing Feedbackfaarah73 - Nov 12, 2013 / dumi - Nov 21, 2013
|IELTS ; Nuclear energy is a better source of power for today's global energy needs.
3 - To produce energy using traditional methods, we need to burn fossils and natural gases. These emit...
Writing Feedbackgerelmaa - Nov 20, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 21, 2013
|[IELTS] Does a celebrity benefit society or not? (Cambridge IELTS 9 G1 Task2)
2 - ... I find this statement unfair. Not everybody is interested in becoming a celebrity although there can be...
Writing FeedbackRomanticDog - Nov 21, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 21, 2013
|[TOEFL] learning a foreign language in my own country or anther country
4 - hi. You have to be careful in choosing your words to describe your idea, like in the sentence below...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 20, 2013 / gmad06 - Nov 21, 2013
|[TOEFL] experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you live
5 - Take out "are" in the second sentence. Dont tell your audience what your are foing to do, do it....
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 20, 2013 / JulieRose - Nov 20, 2013
|Some people say that increasing working hours leads to economic success
Writing Feedbackgerelmaa - Nov 13, 2013 / gerelmaa - Nov 20, 2013
|IELTS Essay, Advantages and disadvantages living in a house and apartment
5 - There is nothing wrong with both. They are both grammatically correct. Well... they follow a marking...
Writing Feedbackasmy - Nov 20, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 20, 2013
|major cities are essential sources of information about the culture of a country
5 - First sentence : Major cities are heart of a country. It would be better : Major cities are the...
Writing Feedbacknilka61 - Oct 21, 2013 / SalehMamdouh198 - Nov 20, 2013
|Topic: Books can lead us and give a heads up on some topics
5 - we come across new situations which can not be directly solve using the books so we try to find...
Writing Feedbacksky2586 - Nov 7, 2013 / aoey - Nov 20, 2013
|IELTS chart - the nutritional consistency of two dinners
3 - Pahan It seems like you are experienced and professional :-) . Thank you for the feedback, really....
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 19, 2013 / pakias - Nov 20, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Is nuclear energy is better source of power?
5 - Your example is good but I think you should expand more about the consequences of this accident. Because...
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 19, 2013 / ldlsky03 - Nov 20, 2013
|Whether to offer a higher education in high unemployment rate countries? ielts essay.
3 - Thank you DUMI Thank you for reminding me of cutting the sentence shortly to looks more brief. i will...
Writing FeedbackEricidelia - Nov 19, 2013 / Ericidelia - Nov 20, 2013
|toefl writing task 2, Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources
Writing Feedbacktevezmahmoud - Nov 12, 2013 / tevezmahmoud - Nov 20, 2013
|Toefl essay : Most important character
4 - This is your prompt and let see how you have introduced it to the reader in your introduction;...
Writing Feedbackpaulinavita - Nov 16, 2013 / dumi - Nov 20, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should replace normal classroom with online computer classes?
3 - This is because the classrooms are well equipped with resources that help students to comprehend their lessons better....
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 19, 2013 / dumi - Nov 20, 2013
|Private and public health care system s- IELTS Academic essay
Writing FeedbackDuva - Nov 19, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 19, 2013
|IELTS Essay; Education is a key factor for a successful life
3 - ..."immature period of life" does not sound proper; It is argued that children should start schooling from young...
Writing Feedbackpooh - Nov 18, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 19, 2013
|Multiple Pregnancies - Research paper - Preterm Labor
2 - Pregnancies can be difficult and dangerous whichand this is why mothers need to follow the instructions of doctors to...
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