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|Five Sentence Chronological Paragraph. "Let me tell you how to make my favorite sandwich."
Writing FeedbackMaryMag96 - Nov 6, 2013 / MaryMag96 - Nov 7, 2013
|[IELTS] Unpaid community service and its role in high school programs
Writing FeedbackRomanticDog - Nov 6, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 7, 2013
|IELTS - the largest percentage of consumer spending in each country went on food/drinks/tobacco
3 - very good summarising! I do not know much about writings but I noticed repetitive using of the word 'spending'....
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Oct 31, 2013 / ladyjoy - Nov 7, 2013
|IELTS essay about Multitasking, problems and solutions
Writing Feedbackgabbie - Nov 4, 2013 / gabbie - Nov 7, 2013
|IELTS; Children learning foreign languages - Good or Bad?
2 - In my opinion , you tried to state firstly the advantages by following this sentence : "Nowadays, children are...
Writing Feedbackanus - Nov 6, 2013 / Altaa - Nov 7, 2013
|Government officials should rely on their own judgment or not?
Writing Feedbackserendipityluo - Nov 3, 2013 / serendipityluo - Nov 6, 2013
|Educational systems of the United States and Ukraine
Writing Feedbackmerukameru - Nov 6, 2013 / merukameru - Nov 6, 2013
|[TOEFL]Agree or disagree: The telephone has greater influence on people's lives than TV
4 - As per TOEFL standards, an effective essay written for the TOEFL Independent Writing Task, which can score over...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Nov 6, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 6, 2013
|Children are easily impressed by colors and sugar and this is dangerous.
4 - Actually this is your position of the argument which you should have been stated in the introduction. (have...
Writing FeedbackNatQ - Nov 4, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 6, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should good people are rewarded and bad people are punished in movies or dramas?
Writing Feedbackscurry - Nov 6, 2013 / Allen Hu - Nov 6, 2013
|IELTS- Problems with students behaviour
3 - The upbringing of children is very important for preventing children from in-disciplinary actions. .... the first...
Writing Feedbackwoodfish - Nov 4, 2013 / dumi - Nov 6, 2013
|IELTS, Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular
4 - .... this sentence has grammar issues; Modern and busy society depends on fast food for efficient and convenient...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Nov 1, 2013 / dumi - Nov 6, 2013
|IELTS task-2, talk about private seconary school
Writing Feedbackeric628 - Nov 5, 2013 / dumi - Nov 6, 2013
|[IELTS] The private motor vehicle and air pollution
Writing Feedbackgowtham - Nov 6, 2013 / dumi - Nov 6, 2013
|Real life vs books - practical and theoretical ways to gain a knowledge.
Writing Feedbackbatais - Nov 5, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 6, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Some people believe money is a less important factor than free time
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Oct 30, 2013 / Altaa - Nov 6, 2013
|IELTS; CONTROL ON WATER OR NOT?
Writing Feedbackmaniskul - Nov 4, 2013 / JethroJosh - Nov 5, 2013
|Online education and traditional education
3 - If this writing is meant for IELTS or TOEFL, I am pretty confident that this essay is too very...
Writing FeedbackShaunFenty - Nov 1, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 5, 2013
|The new forms of communication have positive effects on interpersonal relationships.
3 - ...."different" regions is not the important fact here. It is the "far apart" that makes inconveniences for the...
Writing Feedbackdodam - Nov 4, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 5, 2013
|IELTS: Humans responsibility to prevent lesser-known languages from dying out
Writing Feedbackboannie - Nov 5, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 5, 2013
|IELTS Human's dependence in the modern world - about coherence, academic style
Writing Feedbackgabbie - Oct 27, 2013 / gabbie - Nov 5, 2013
|GRE ISSUE ESSAY:Is power an empirical act or an immaterial ability?
2 - These are some things that caught my eye in your Introduction. Is power an empirical act or an...
Writing Feedbackjhb - Nov 3, 2013 / Layune - Nov 5, 2013
|Attending university is now mandatory for student to be accepted for better work
7 - thank you sir...
Writing Feedbackbatais - Oct 10, 2013 / batais - Nov 5, 2013
|IELTS; FOOD PREPARATION IS EASIER TODAY COMPARED TO PREVIOUS ERAS
Writing Feedbackbatais - Nov 3, 2013 / batais - Nov 5, 2013
|Advantages and disadvantages of being famous
3 - What is the prompt? Are you preparing for TOEFL or IELTS? It's good if you mentioned them because then...
Writing FeedbackSleepingBeauty - Nov 4, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 4, 2013
|[IETLS] TV advertising is bad - Agree or Disagree?
Writing Feedbackwoodfish - Nov 3, 2013 / JethroJosh - Nov 4, 2013
|[ielts] Should we only be concerned with our own communities and countries?
Writing Feedbackhongphuc - Nov 3, 2013 / JethroJosh - Nov 4, 2013
|Community service can give a sense of fullment to students
4 - By working in unpiad community services, students will be able to acknowledge the way in which people communicating...
Writing Feedbacklynn731 - Oct 25, 2013 / hongphuc - Nov 3, 2013
|Me and Myself; Need help with Grammar!
Writing Feedbackfarhanwsd - Oct 25, 2013 / hongphuc - Nov 3, 2013
|IMPORTANCE OF MUSIC - important factor in the life of human being
2 - Hence = so, therefore, hence, consequently, thence, accordingly try to use various words. Hope it can help...
Writing Feedbacknileshv1 - Nov 3, 2013 / something - Nov 3, 2013
|Over the past few decades, society has been technologized; political duality of technology
Writing Feedbackvaulting - Nov 1, 2013 / vaulting - Nov 3, 2013
|should the government spend money on saving nearly extincted language ?
2 - I am preparing IELTS exams as well. I am not fully capable to correct your grammars and the way...
Writing Feedbackhongphuc - Nov 3, 2013 / woodfish - Nov 3, 2013
|IELTS: Which should be the ones to teach children into good citizens? Parents or Schools?
Writing Feedbackstream_xu - Oct 28, 2013 / stream_xu - Nov 3, 2013
|The best teacher is one who is very knowledgeable about the subject matter
4 - it should be Knowledgable you have met the problem of repeating words "knowledgeable teachers" and "can't...
Writing Feedbacksofianc - Oct 23, 2013 / Shinigami97 - Nov 3, 2013
|The past 20 years have seen a considerable increase of international tourism.
Writing Feedbackvietcuong89ks - Nov 1, 2013 / Shinigami97 - Nov 3, 2013
|Education plays fundamental role in the growth of a country
7 - thanks a lot for your support. I've got some problems with brainstorming and expressing ideas. I wonder if we...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Oct 31, 2013 / Shinigami97 - Nov 2, 2013
|TOEFL: Which would you change to improve your health? EXERCISE
3 - Also,take some sports that could equip us with better body shape and help us to (need a space...
Writing Feedbackrolin - Nov 1, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 2, 2013
|She walked along the beach on a warm summer night
Writing Feedbackdewalea - Nov 2, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 2, 2013
|IELTS: Foreign languages should be instructed in kindergarten
6 - Well... I can see you have excellent writing skills . However, it is better to pay more attention to...
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Nov 1, 2013 / dumi - Nov 2, 2013
|'Children tend to imitate parents behavior'; Children - good members of society
Writing Feedbackbehrooz_00133 - Oct 29, 2013 / dumi - Nov 2, 2013
|IELTS: Are our zoos cruel to wild animals?
4 - Your IELTS Score depends on how accurately you used grammar and vocabulary. Though you need a variety of sentence...
Writing Feedbacklonghoho - Oct 28, 2013 / JethroJosh - Nov 2, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2:boarding schools are getting popular,positive or negative ?
3 - In the boarding life, students are required to become more independent because they live away from their families....
Writing FeedbackAgenderine - Oct 31, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 1, 2013
|IELTS 1; DIAGRAMS; Island before and after construction
Writing FeedbackShpr - Nov 1, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 1, 2013
|PRIVATE SCHOOL SHOULD BE BANNED! Ielts task 2
5 - Interactive learning, rich media and well prepared lectures let students find the subjects interesting, regardless of boredom textbook...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Oct 31, 2013 / phuoc - Nov 1, 2013
|It's better to live in a small town than a big city
2 - .... Don't use numbers in essay writing unless it is something to do with time or dates. Also,...
Writing FeedbackDoanhty - Nov 1, 2013 / dumi - Nov 1, 2013
|Task 2 IELTS, AIMS OF UNIVERSITY ARE FOR GETTING JOB OR BENEFITING INDIVIDUAL AND SOCIETY
4 - Maybe your fundamental problem here is over-complicated sentence structure that leads to grammatical mistakes or confusing in meaning. Hopefully...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Oct 31, 2013 / vmtct - Nov 1, 2013
|IELTS Academic writing: FREE FRESH WATER OR PAID FRESH WATER?
Writing Feedbackgerelmaa - Oct 30, 2013 / gerelmaa - Oct 31, 2013
|TOEFL ; Who is the Best Teacher ?
4 - ... student's ----> one student students' ------> many students He or she should devote his/her time in understanding...
Writing Feedbackclaudiaatalah - Oct 28, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 31, 2013
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Watching television is bad
4 - Ok, here the reason you give is that TV makes people unsociable. Then you should tell them how...
Writing Feedbackumanga - Oct 27, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 31, 2013
|Maintaining status quo can cause personal and professional stagnation of a person's development
5 - Thank you!...
Writing FeedbackAnnaAnna - Oct 26, 2013 / AnnaAnna - Oct 31, 2013
|IELTS;Education should be given priority over recreational and sports activities
3 - First, you should have included the prompt in your essay. Otherwise we do not get an exact idea about...
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Oct 31, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|Write a rough draft that examines a particular relationship and its significance; explain
Writing Feedbackwilliamp - Oct 29, 2013 / Sarath Kumar - Oct 31, 2013
|IELTS; GRAPH - evolving trend of population aged 65 and over
3 - Hi, I suggest you to change a little bit the organization of your details paragraphs. Try to make one...
Writing Feedbacklanlinhcc - Oct 30, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 31, 2013
|Ielts essay, The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades
3 - more and more people finds internet essential => it should be " find " because "more and more people"...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Oct 31, 2013 / Shinigami97 - Oct 31, 2013
|Music brings joy and emotion to our soul, traditional music should be preserved
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Oct 31, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|IELTS, Even though developing countries receive financial help, poverty is still an issue
2 - Developed countries are supporting developing countries to fight poor conditionspoverty mainly through financial aid but perceived improvement is not...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Oct 31, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|GRE Argument Essay - Smith Corporation/ Youngtown Wildlife Preserve
NEW - The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife...
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|Despite having few harmful consequences, Internet has a positive effect on the society.
4 - English_Learner I think it is better to bring the negative part to the second paragraph so that you...
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Oct 10, 2013 / phuoc - Oct 31, 2013
3 - Good editing by Pahan. .... too many spelling mistakes in this sentence. Pay attention to your spellings....
Writing Feedbackoum - Oct 30, 2013 / dumi - Oct 31, 2013
|Diamonds are unflinchingly hard; Students and Stress
2 - Inside the brick walls, around the lines of lockers, between the rows of desks and within the minds of...
Writing Feedbackestumph - Oct 28, 2013 / Kalena54 - Oct 30, 2013
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