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The table and bar chart show how journey times in a city centre changed after improvement

7 - I'm also a student trying to get better at writing. I don't know as much as the professional writers...

Writing FeedbackHuongNg - May 21, 2022 / defy - Jun 8, 2022
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] PROBLEMS/SOLUTIONS - UNLIMITED USE OF CARS

2 - The prompt restatement is not even remotely related to the original discussion. The questions being asked as the establishing...

Writing Feedbacktypicallyarimel - Jun 7, 2022 / Holt - Jun 7, 2022
TASK 2: Advantages and disadvantages of working or traveling for a time before higher education

4 - @typicallyarimel thanks for the comment, i i really appreciate it :>...

Writing Feedbackmetyl2945 - Jun 7, 2022 / metyl2945 - Jun 7, 2022
[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] BAR CHART - GLOBAL MOBILE PHONES SALES BY BRAND

3 - appreciate your useful feedback!!! thanks a lot! have a nice dayy...

Writing Feedbacktypicallyarimel - Jun 7, 2022 / typicallyarimel - Jun 7, 2022
Practicing writing essays | TOPIC: Students should be required to take physical education courses

2 - There are 2 ways to approach the riting of this essay. These are: 1. Prompt restatement + personal opinion...

Writing Feedbackdefy - Jun 7, 2022 / Holt - Jun 7, 2022
Illustration the process of making traditional wooden shoes called clogs

2 - The procedural report is short by one paragraph even as the word count was met. There should be 3...

Writing FeedbackNgHH - Jun 7, 2022 / Holt - Jun 7, 2022
WRITING TASK 2 - Discuss both view - should spend money on bicycle or public transport?

3 - I appreciate your help! thanks a lot:) Actually, I'm a beginner, so I will definitetly make a lot of...

Writing Feedbacktuan1618 - Jun 7, 2022 / tuan1618 - Jun 7, 2022
(IELTS WRITING) Governments should ban dangerous sports? Discuss and give your own opinion

2 - Representing a statement of concern was totally unnecessary since this was not represented as such in the essay. It...

Writing Feedbackthaole2901 - Jun 7, 2022 / Holt - Jun 7, 2022
Task 2: academic writing: what factors affect food choices

3 - Thank you so much for giving me meaningful advice. I will try to review my essay and write it...

Writing FeedbackTran Thi Linh - Jun 6, 2022 / Tran Thi Linh - Jun 7, 2022
People claim that in the upcoming years, printed publications will be replaced by online materials

2 - Do not make claims that are not present in the original version so as not to negatively affect prompt...

Writing Feedbackpoopie - Jun 6, 2022 / Holt - Jun 6, 2022
Some people believe that learners should be taught what is necessary for their expertise

2 - The first sentence in this presentation is a prompt topic deviation but not an opinion misrepresentation. Placed in the...

Writing FeedbackPhan Son - Jun 6, 2022 / Holt - Jun 6, 2022
The question is whether specialized data should be widely available or not

2 - The prompt paraphrase is not going to receive passing considerations for 3 reasons: 1. The writer indicates a...

Writing Feedbackthaishaf - Jun 5, 2022 / Holt - Jun 5, 2022
Many subjects are dropped at school, leading multiple changes for students.

3 - @Holt thanks a lot !!!!!! i'll keep practicing and preventing myself from making these mistakes....

Writing Feedbacknhu thao - Jun 5, 2022 / nhu thao - Jun 5, 2022
The shown diagram depicts the procedure for reprocessing plastic bottles - IELTS 1

2 - This type of essay writing does not receive a passing score. That is because when less than 150 words...

Writing FeedbackKim2k5 - Jun 4, 2022 / Holt - Jun 4, 2022
IELTS[WRITING TASK 1] The number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

2 - The summary overview is incomplete as it does not mention the value reference of the data as collated. The...

Writing Feedbackelenaphan05 - Jun 4, 2022 / Holt - Jun 4, 2022
IELTS Wirting Task2 Happiness definition

2 - While the essay more than meets the required word count, the presentation format is incorrect. The IELTS Task 2...

Writing FeedbackIELTS HOU - Jun 4, 2022 / Holt - Jun 4, 2022
[WRITING TASK 1] the Internet use in different purposes in Australia in 2010 - 2011

2 - The presentation has 4 images which means it should have followed the 4 reporting paragraph format. The lack of...

Writing Feedbacknguyendynamo - Jun 3, 2022 / Holt - Jun 3, 2022
How to be well prepared before an exam

2 - The essay has good ideas that could have been better developed. I see this essay as a 4 paragraph...

Writing FeedbackFujiwara no Sai - Jun 3, 2022 / Holt - Jun 3, 2022
Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be?

2 - The topic paraphrasing is off-base. The writer's interpretation of the original topic does not reflect the correct meaning and...

Writing Feedbacktrangntt150801 - Jun 3, 2022 / Holt - Jun 3, 2022
The maps below show Colwick Arts Centre in 2005 and today.

2 - The summary overview and trending statement are well developed in this essay. The 2 sentence presentation is concise, clear,...

Writing Feedbackchungdinh - Jun 3, 2022 / Holt - Jun 3, 2022
Essay about schools preparing students for university instead of jobs

2 - The prompt restatement + personal opinion paragraph should only be 2 sentences long for agree or disagree and extent...

Writing FeedbackMatt1313 - Jun 2, 2022 / Holt - Jun 2, 2022
ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF IMMIGRANTS

4 - War countries does not mean anything, perhaps using war torn countries would be better. Instead of providing more...

Writing Feedbackjenny0601 - May 29, 2022 / Matt1313 - Jun 2, 2022
Pros and cons of living or studying in other contries

3 - Although use, the term pros and cons can be replaced with more formal words such as benefits and drawbacks...

Writing FeedbackDuy020 - May 30, 2022 / Matt1313 - Jun 2, 2022
Essay about the power of advertising in the sale of consumer goods

2 - 2 problems exist in the prompt paraphrase. The first problem is that the author has opened with non- supported...

Writing FeedbackMatt1313 - Jun 2, 2022 / Holt - Jun 2, 2022
There are a variety of advantages for pupils to follow the higher learning path after graduation

4 - There is an absence of paraphrasing for the question prompt. That alone will make the essay unacceptable for IELTS....

Writing Feedbacklequangtien98 - May 31, 2022 / Matt1313 - Jun 2, 2022
INFLUENCE OF ADVERTISEMENTS ON CONSUMERS - CAUSES AND SOLUTION

2 - The prompt restatement should carry an academic tone and should not be using slang English words such as "bombarded"....

Writing Feedbackkimsunoo - Jun 2, 2022 / Holt - Jun 2, 2022
Some people say that advertising is extremely successfull at persuading us

3 - @Holt Thank you for the detailed response but would it score 7 or above in the ielts exam?...

Writing FeedbackMatt1313 - Jun 1, 2022 / Matt1313 - Jun 1, 2022
Whether parents or school should be responsible for unhealthy lifestyle of children

2 - The prompt restatement does not accurately seem up the original discussion points. The mistake in the interpretation was caused...

Writing FeedbackMaimaimaii - Jun 1, 2022 / Holt - Jun 1, 2022
The proportion of people in five different cities in Australia who consumed coffee and tea

2 - It is important for reporting purposes that the writer treat this as an actual analysis. An accurate analysis never...

Writing Feedbackphuongmaihihihi - May 31, 2022 / Holt - May 31, 2022
Overpopulation in urban areas leads to a deficit of food, water, space for living and contamination

3 - Linking words are highly advised to be used in your essay since the coherence between your statement was not...

Writing FeedbackNhi Huynh - May 27, 2022 / aanh1009 - May 29, 2022
Essay About Public Health And Increase In Sporting Facilities

2 - The first paragraph shows that the writer is unfamiliar with English word meaning. His misunderstanding of an arena representation...

Writing FeedbackAbby210 - May 28, 2022 / Holt - May 28, 2022
Ielts task 1: The changes of incident number happened in three areas of crime in Newport city center

2 - An "incident" is too general a reference that does not accurately identify the basis of the analysis. The please...

Writing Feedbackmt30 - May 27, 2022 / Holt - May 27, 2022
The rising rate of juvenile crimes has become an alarming practice for the public; TASK 2 IELTS

3 - Conclusion should include, thesis and main points from both the body paragraphs. it should also include your opinion at...

Writing FeedbackAnn0104 - May 24, 2022 / bhanushali - May 27, 2022
Does punishment is necessary for children?

3 - Although you have written that you will outline the appropriate penalty at the introduction, I hardly see it on...

Writing Feedbackchouchou - May 20, 2022 / Jenny3110 - May 27, 2022
Ielts writing test 1 - map of a museum topic

5 - You should divide your essay into different parts and your work is missing the introduction. I also see that...

Writing Feedbackkyrie - May 6, 2022 / Jenny3110 - May 27, 2022
IELTS Task 1 : the diagram shows the process for recycling plastic bottles

2 - There are 9 steps indicated. There is only 1 major step involved. There is an error in the trending...

Writing Feedbackbhanushali - May 26, 2022 / Holt - May 27, 2022
Allowing youngsters to have their own decisions in daily life matters - ielts academic

2 - There can be no aspect of the paraphrasing that is used in a cut and paste manner. The writer...

Writing FeedbackPeter2608 - May 26, 2022 / Holt - May 27, 2022
Ielts task 2. "Some people regard video games as harmless fun ..." Profits and drawbacks of gaming

7 - i think the writer should discuss only it's opinion in the easy and not the benefits and drawback both...

Writing Feedbacklananhle - Apr 26, 2022 / bhanushali - May 26, 2022
With the enhancement of new technologies, there are a variety of choices available

2 - The writer should not have focused on technology as the basis of his topic restatement. This is because the...

Writing Feedbackleothebest - May 26, 2022 / Holt - May 26, 2022
task 1 general training Write an e-mail to the bookshop

2 - The letter cannot make a recommendation for a book speaker without indicating a theme for the event. Since the...

Writing Feedbackdohavy - May 26, 2022 / Holt - May 26, 2022
ielts task 1 : the diagram below shows the manufracturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

2 - The first paragraph sentence contains a redundant process reference. It also uses a conjunction that does not suit the...

Writing Feedbackbhanushali - May 25, 2022 / Holt - May 25, 2022
ielts writing task 1 pie charts showing export between The US and Vietnam

2 - The writer inappropriately identifies the comparison images. The inaccuracy lies in the number of images stated and its representative...

Writing Feedbackbhanushali - May 25, 2022 / Holt - May 25, 2022
WRITING TASK 2 IELTS: What can be done to prevent people from using their cars?

2 - This is just a simple opinion discussion that should be dealt with quickly but comprehensively.Think of it in terms...

Writing FeedbackTharug - May 25, 2022 / Holt - May 25, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2: Some suggest that schools should make teenagers spend a short time working

3 - I think you have a bit of a misunderstanding of the topic. In this case, you should express the...

Writing Feedbackwriting123 - May 12, 2022 / Ann0104 - May 24, 2022
There is a school of thought believe that the entry of museums should be free for everyone

2 - The writer has over written this opinion paper. It may not be possible to complete an almost 400 word...

Writing FeedbackJenny3110 - May 24, 2022 / Holt - May 24, 2022
IELTS task 1: The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation.

2 - It will do the writer well to remember that this is an interpretative essay based on provided information from...

Writing Feedbackmoon21 - May 21, 2022 / Holt - May 21, 2022
IELTS. The table below shows information about travelling to work in one US city.

3 - use thoughtly their commute=> commute is a verb but you need a noun here. The word "thoughtly" may be...

Writing FeedbackHuongNg - May 20, 2022 / moon21 - May 21, 2022
IELTS Task 2 - Should governments control newly constructed buildings?

2 - The prompt restatement was off to an illogical opening sentence. It showed a lack of proper sentence formation on...

Writing Feedbackintothevrains - May 20, 2022 / Holt - May 21, 2022
Write about a famous person you like. Who is this person? What is this person's job? Why do you like

2 - The writer did write about admiration and the reasons for it in the essay. While his basis for writing...

Writing Feedbacktrankhanhlinh - May 20, 2022 / Holt - May 20, 2022
Spending too much time in shopping centres could be detrimental for young adults

2 - Though this is an extent essay, it does not allow the writer to both agree anddisagree with the topic...

Writing FeedbackNhu Gia Vu - May 20, 2022 / Holt - May 20, 2022
A nation can be both prosperous and able to protect environment

2 - The prompt restatement is faulty for 2 reasons : 1. The topic rewording, based on the understanding of...

Writing FeedbackKatyNguyen - May 19, 2022 / Holt - May 20, 2022
Science of food in school and ways to prepare it, or more significant subjects?

2 - The expectation for the paragraphs is that the writer should present at least 3 sentences in it, specially in...

Writing Feedbackminhvipham0807 - May 18, 2022 / Holt - May 19, 2022
A country should make use of edible insects as a food source?

3 - practice your English and make sure that the reader will understand the things that you would want to say....

Writing Feedbackbrb1995 - May 17, 2022 / CZeSAY196 - May 17, 2022
Can any obstacle or disadvantage be turned into something good?

2 - Since you are taking the accuplacer test as an ESL, you need to consider the number of words you...

Writing FeedbackCZeSAY196 - May 17, 2022 / Holt - May 17, 2022
Formal education at early age or later than 7. Discuss both views, give your opinion

2 - The writer understood the topic for the essay, but failed to properly represent the 2 public opinions as required...

Writing Feedbacksontranguyen19 - May 15, 2022 / Holt - May 15, 2022
W1:The movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future .

2 - Never ask the reader to look at the image reference in any case. The assumption for this and all...

Writing Feedbackquinhquinh - May 14, 2022 / Holt - May 15, 2022
Many people use distance-learning programs to study at home, Others think it cannot bring benefits.

2 - It is almost as if the student did not bother to read the discussion instruction before writing this essay....

Writing Feedbackanhanhanh - May 14, 2022 / Holt - May 15, 2022
The line graph show the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006

2 - The writer must make an effort to create a properly formatted summary overview. This is accomplished by writing at...

Writing FeedbackAn99 - May 13, 2022 / Holt - May 13, 2022
TWO-PART QUESTION: Big city topic

3 - Nowadays, many metropolises have faced with a number of issues, ... I suggest using the present continuous tense....

Writing Feedbackhanle1999 - May 4, 2022 / writing123 - May 12, 2022
The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the UK in 2013 & 2014

2 - The writer has not written enough words to allowthe examiner to completely assess his English report writing skills. While...

Writing Feedbackbenio san - May 9, 2022 / Holt - May 10, 2022

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