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These days people in some countries tend to live a lavish lifestyle

2 - Use of a memorized phrase will be a score deduction in the TA section. Avoid using place holder...

Writing Feedbackhahihe15 - Nov 27, 2021 / Holt - Nov 28, 2021
The consumption of sugar based drinks is on the rise. How to tackle this problem?

2 - Incorrect. These are the writer's personal opinions, which are not referenced at all in the original...

Writing FeedbackJoey1805 - Nov 26, 2021 / Holt - Nov 28, 2021
It is argued that schooling from early age would be ideal for the children' development

2 - While the prompt restatement and opinion is not grammatically accurate, it is still understandable enough for an ENL. Your...

Writing Feedbackhanguyen79 - Nov 26, 2021 / Holt - Nov 27, 2021
" It is beneficial for teenagers to receive pocket money from their parents". Do you agree?

2 - There are several problems with your opening statement. The first, is that you used a direct cut and paste...

Writing FeedbackHoang Trieu - Nov 25, 2021 / Holt - Nov 26, 2021
IELTS writing task 2. Should students pay for their colleges' tuition fee, or government?

2 - This is highly non-academic in reference. Avoid using too much everyday English words that are informal in presentation....

Writing Feedbackbaudgy - Nov 25, 2021 / Holt - Nov 26, 2021
IELTS Task 1: The price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne

2 - Two things are missing from your summary overview. The first is the number of charts. The second, is the...

Writing Feedbacknhidinh1231 - Nov 25, 2021 / Holt - Nov 26, 2021
IELTS Writing task 2: Children with mobile phone discussion

2 - As a basic rule, you must not begin the discussion of your opinion in the prompt restatement + opinion...

Writing Feedbacksaklovesyao - Nov 25, 2021 / Holt - Nov 26, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - ESSAY ABOUT ECONOMICS

2 - Your summary is well developed. It properly enumerates the markets involved and the trends that the collective comparison...

Writing Feedbackdaiton - Nov 25, 2021 / Holt - Nov 26, 2021
The tables give information about the temperatures and daylight hours in 4 cities during same week

2 - Make it clear that the measurement was done during the same year for the same last 3 days...

Writing FeedbackZarutopath - Nov 25, 2021 / Holt - Nov 26, 2021
Large public places and parks are significant for cities' residents

2 - Do not begin the discussion of your opinion in relation to the topic in the prompt restatement + opinion...

Writing FeedbackHarry Yang - Nov 24, 2021 / Holt - Nov 25, 2021
GENERATION GAP IN LIFESTYLES, VIEWPOINTS AND BEHAVIOURS

2 - The question was , "To what extent?" The extent is missing in this response. You should have stated...

Writing Feedbackkirarara - Nov 23, 2021 / Holt - Nov 24, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Adults and students are working and studying from home

2 - Wrong reasoning. This question tests your knowledge of current events. How you relate the pandemic, Covid - 19,...

Writing Feedbackdanh55162 - Nov 23, 2021 / Holt - Nov 24, 2021
Should we encourage the youth to engage in unpaid community work?

2 - There is a difference between ordinary community work and free community service. The difference is basesd on remuneration....

Writing Feedbacktenhquameo - Nov 23, 2021 / Holt - Nov 24, 2021
(IELTS WRITING 1) PIE CHART The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your review, I will correct these mistakes....

Writing Feedbacksherry2345 - Nov 11, 2021 / sherry2345 - Nov 24, 2021
Should the government put a tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to eat more healthily?

3 - @Holt Thanks for your comment! I am really appreciated it ^^...

Writing Feedbackxinhgaisomot - Nov 20, 2021 / xinhgaisomot - Nov 23, 2021
GENDER - Writing Task 2 - Several renowned organizations are headed by men

3 - @Holt @Hana146 Thanks for your feedback! This is my first essay IELTS Writing Task 2 and I made a...

Writing Feedbackhunnguyenle - Nov 22, 2021 / hunnguyenle - Nov 23, 2021
Essay about should the goverment funding for school fees

2 - This is a very elementary form of word usage and referencing. This is not the way a college...

Writing FeedbackJean Jatarin - Nov 22, 2021 / Holt - Nov 23, 2021
Nowadays people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games

2 - The techonology is not changing, which is the meaning of "alteration". Rather, the techonology is "developing" from the...

Writing Feedbackquynhanh200832 - Nov 22, 2021 / Holt - Nov 23, 2021
Children's success depends on their parents

2 - To provide a stronger thesis statement. Indicate your agreement with a sense of reasoning. Rather than saying "for...

Writing Feedbacknavy8303 - Nov 22, 2021 / Holt - Nov 23, 2021
Writing - How to write an effective formal email

4 - @Holt Thank you verry much for your feedback. I have mistaken the writer name. Kamal Satinder is the writer...

Writing FeedbackQuyenhuynh - Nov 18, 2021 / Quyenhuynh - Nov 22, 2021
The number of women aged 16-25 in particular country playing sport or watching sport

4 - The last paragraph is inappropriate, you should sum it up as a whole, not individually....

Writing Feedbackchoutwo - Nov 19, 2021 / kenna007 - Nov 22, 2021
The activity of cycling is admittedly no longer popular. How to change this trend?

2 - Good discussion with a few grammar and cohesive discussion problems for you to take note of. The errors stem...

Writing Feedbackthunthun - Nov 21, 2021 / Holt - Nov 22, 2021
Essays about Causes of stress in modern society and ways to reduce this problem

2 - The essay presentation is actually good, if I were not to consider the scoring requirements of the task 2...

Writing Feedbacknguyenminhhuyen - Nov 21, 2021 / Holt - Nov 22, 2021
NOWADAYS, SOME PARENTS PUT A LOT OF PRESSURE ON THEIR CHILDREN.

2 - This is not a part of the orginal topic presentation. The writer must keep his opinion to himself...

Writing Feedbackashley_pham - Nov 21, 2021 / Holt - Nov 22, 2021
A prediction that drivers would be unnecessary in the future due to the development of technology

2 - Wrong word usage. The negative representation of merit is demerit. Contrasting features is not a normal representation for...

Writing FeedbackLamahaf - Nov 21, 2021 / Holt - Nov 22, 2021
Allowing to visibly carry a gun in public places

2 - Why? The discussion response is complete, but the thesis outline is messing. Clue in the reader as to...

Writing Feedbackdanghaneh - Nov 21, 2021 / Holt - Nov 22, 2021
All youngsters should do volunteer work in their leisure time to support the community?

2 - This is an incorrect response. The provided discussion instruction pertains to the extent of your (dis) agreement with...

Writing FeedbackMing Fuong - Nov 21, 2021 / Holt - Nov 22, 2021
WRITING TASK 1 - BAR CHART ABOUT DIVORCE RATES IN FINLAND AND SWEDEN FROM 2011 TO 2015

3 - hi Huy Vo, lemme help you to repharase introduction ... in Finland and Sweden, a period of...

Writing FeedbackHuy Vo - Nov 18, 2021 / irvan - Nov 21, 2021
The number of telephone calls minutes in Finland in three different categories (period of 9 years)

3 - @Holt thankyou for this valuable feedback...

Writing Feedbackirvan - Nov 14, 2021 / irvan - Nov 21, 2021
The average amount of carbon dioxide emitted per each individual person in four European countries

2 - Be mindful of the writing time deadline. Practice writing with a timer in an actual exam set-up. By doing...

Writing Feedbackquynhmai - Nov 20, 2021 / Holt - Nov 21, 2021
The bar chart compares the number of 15-year old students chose to study French and Japanese

2 - Selecting to study what? The summary must be clear about its reference to the age group in relation...

Writing FeedbackMai 123 - Nov 20, 2021 / Holt - Nov 21, 2021
Writing task 2 - A look into students poor behavior; parents support importance

2 - The prompt restatement is over presented to the point where the author already shares personal insights on the topic....

Writing FeedbackJIV - Nov 20, 2021 / Holt - Nov 21, 2021
The developments along Olive Drive before and after the construction of new facilities 1980-2010

2 - The writer opted to identify the changes based on the year representations of the urban plan and design presentations....

Writing Feedbacktrang12345 - Nov 19, 2021 / Holt - Nov 20, 2021
Discuss both view about learning with teacher and learn by internet

2 - This is a failing essay had this been an actual test. The prompt restatement + personal opinion is tremendously...

Writing Feedbackvannhan - Nov 19, 2021 / Holt - Nov 20, 2021
Writing task2 - Team/group activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities

2 - This is a personal reflection of the author. It is not an accurate prompt restatement. Kindly remember that...

Writing Feedbackellenchen - Nov 19, 2021 / Holt - Nov 20, 2021
Identify the adverse impacts of online learning and propose solutions.

NEW - Identify the adverse impacts of online learning and propose solutions Please refer to our private editing services by...

Writing FeedbackLinhjin123 - Nov 20, 2021 / — -
The importance of learning English

3 - It is not recommended to describe a topic or explain it to somebody while comparing it with other topics....

Writing Feedbackcud - Nov 17, 2021 / lenjoy - Nov 19, 2021
There is an argument about whether we should protect all the fauna or not

2 - When you are asked to give both views and provide your opinion, the writing method of the task totally...

Writing Feedbackministran - Nov 18, 2021 / Holt - Nov 19, 2021
[IELTS Task1] The proportion of women's and men's driving test pass rates in one Asian country

2 - Go for a more complex sentence structure in relation to the time measurements. Itis more impressive to say" ......

Writing Feedbackclairewuwu - Nov 17, 2021 / Holt - Nov 18, 2021
Discuss the merits and dismerits of online learning among students in the context of COVID 19.

2 - As this is an advantage versus disadvantage discussion, you are not obliged to give a personal opinion. In...

Writing Feedbackmyphan123456 - Nov 17, 2021 / Holt - Nov 18, 2021
A survey about how people in five Australian cities bought their coffee and tea (IELTS 1)

2 - Never indicate an image position to help you avoid any referencing errors. Always assume that the reader does...

Writing FeedbackAgnes Yang - Nov 17, 2021 / Holt - Nov 18, 2021
[IELTS task 1] The line chart compares the demand for 4 different types of meat and fish

4 - @Holt Thank you very much! I have combined my writing style from many sources, and I've always tried to...

Writing Feedbackchristian281 - Nov 14, 2021 / christian281 - Nov 17, 2021
IELTS 1: How much waste was collected by a recycling centre over a period of 5 consecutive years

2 - The presentation is mostly acceptable except, the writer did not proofread the report. There is a missing period at...

Writing Feedbackbinhan - Nov 16, 2021 / Holt - Nov 17, 2021
#ielts Some people think that changing jobs periodically is good. What is your opinion?

2 - The first few errors that caught my eye in the first paragraph are the LR and GRA mistakes. she...

Writing Feedbackbangbang83 - Nov 16, 2021 / Holt - Nov 17, 2021
My IELTS Practice Essay: I really need to improve my work on the gap year

2 - You are not writing a mesearch paper. You are writing a personal opinion paper of no more than 300...

Writing Feedbackemm234 - Nov 16, 2021 / Holt - Nov 17, 2021
[IELTS Task 1] The chart shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in a particular country

2 - For the summary overview. the proper approach would have been to describe itas a comparison of players vessels watchers.That...

Writing Feedbackstevehere - Nov 16, 2021 / Holt - Nov 17, 2021
Writing task 2: The main reasons to make people spend most their time working

5 - Thanks for your advice! I will read more news to collect ideas....

Writing Feedbackquynhchi61 - Nov 8, 2021 / quynhchi61 - Nov 17, 2021
The chart reperesents the amount of males and females passing their driving test

2 - First time Task 1 writers tend to limit their word count to exactly or just a little over the...

Writing Feedbacktranhin - Nov 15, 2021 / Holt - Nov 16, 2021
Question about the advantage and disadvantage of working from home.

2 - Do not make reference to current events in your restatement. The original topic is not connected to this...

Writing FeedbackNhido - Nov 15, 2021 / Holt - Nov 16, 2021
[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] The charts below show the most popular films by genre for men and women

3 - @hanhnguyennn you can use another vocabulary to explain film types. such as genre, category, etc...

Writing Feedbackhanhnguyennn - Nov 11, 2021 / aryabhaskara - Nov 16, 2021
IELTS 1 - The expenditure on consumed goods. The data was collected in France and the UK in 2010

6 - @Dason what the unit is used in the chart? Dollars or pounds? the number of car sales...

Writing FeedbackDason - Nov 1, 2021 / aryabhaskara - Nov 16, 2021
Today's schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today.

2 - The prompt paraphrase and opinion paragraph has deviated from the original topic and required response format. The restatement should...

Writing Feedbacknhatlam6306 - Nov 15, 2021 / Holt - Nov 16, 2021
The bar charts show the comparison of salt intake between men and women in different ages in America

3 - I think that your sentences using humans as the subject are too much in your essay. Use more like...

Writing FeedbackMay55 - Nov 11, 2021 / greencoconut - Nov 16, 2021
The energy produced by France in the course of two years (1995 and 2005)

3 - @Holt thank ya' very much....

Writing Feedbackkhangngudot - Nov 14, 2021 / khangngudot - Nov 15, 2021
IELTS TASK 2: IS GOVERNMENT RESPONSIBLE FOR TAKING CARE OF CITIZENS' HEALTH and diet?

3 - 1. I think your thesis statement in the first paragraph should not just have your opinion but also the...

Writing Feedbackkimkhue - Nov 13, 2021 / Khushi123 - Nov 15, 2021
Some have a strong preference for studying alone while others tend to go for learning in a group

2 - The essay asks for your direct opinion. So the examples must be based on first person,rather than 3rd party...

Writing Feedbackthungoc13 - Nov 14, 2021 / Holt - Nov 15, 2021
New student enrollment in Top Australian university and their applications majors

3 - @Holt Thank you very much...

Writing FeedbackKund7 - Nov 12, 2021 / Kund7 - Nov 15, 2021
There are serious concerns about the sale and production of genetically modified food.

2 - It is not necessary to define what genetically modified foods are to the reader. The task 2 essay...

Writing FeedbackPHAMNGOCHUONG - Nov 13, 2021 / Holt - Nov 14, 2021
Some believe that importing foreign movies and TV programs is beneficial for their country's culture

4 - @Holt Thank you for helping me! It's a meaningful instruction :)...

Writing Feedbackslintii_302 - Nov 12, 2021 / slintii_302 - Nov 14, 2021
Is maintaining public libraries a waste of money since the Internet is now replacing their function?

2 - Review the writing instructions. The writing is to be based on "to what extent" a response that you...

Writing FeedbackNathan531 - Nov 12, 2021 / Holt - Nov 13, 2021

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