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|IELTS 2: Zoos and Wildlife protection; Is it cruel to keep animals in zoos?
2 - Hi caroline! I have a few suggestions related to your writing. 1. Avoid to use this sentence I...
Writing FeedbackCaroline77 - Jul 27, 2018 / zahranatsir - Jul 27, 2018
|IELTS 2: music should not be taught in schools instead other subjects such as computers and science
5 - Avoid use this sentence this essay will discuss about ... because it will make the examiner think that...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Jul 22, 2018 / zahranatsir - Jul 27, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - A mandatory parents training course is necessary
4 - @Tran Minh Hien Sorry, look like I made a mistake. If your subject is "bad solutions" then it is...
Writing FeedbackTran Minh Hien - Jul 12, 2018 / Red Moon - Jul 26, 2018
|What I do in my free time - thinking about my goal
3 - Jhuang, this is more of a statement than an essay. So you should present short but clear sentences Since...
Writing FeedbackSandy047 - Jul 25, 2018 / Holt - Jul 26, 2018
|The distribution of tourist to different type of tourist attraction particular in Theme Parks
2 - Please include a picture in your thread or your next message for other people to give you feedback...
Writing Feedbackhuyen1109 - Jul 22, 2018 / hphuc123 - Jul 26, 2018
|The society and young people impact on it
3 - Thank you so much for your suggestion, Holt. Those are really helpful! Now I have the direction to work...
Writing Feedbackimprove_writing - Jul 25, 2018 / improve_writing - Jul 26, 2018
|People learn another language because of their linguistic passion, career, journey, migration, etc.
NEW - title: Some people say that the only reason for learning a foregin language is in order to travel to...
Writing Feedbackkhue - Jul 26, 2018 / — -
|IELTS 2: essay discussed about teaching children, what is good and what is bad for them
3 - Baljeet, you have an unnecessary focus on crime in this discussion. The essay only asks about the degree of...
Writing Feedbackbaljeet12345 - Jul 25, 2018 / Holt - Jul 26, 2018
|In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important.
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Jul 24, 2018 / TriceLiu - Jul 25, 2018
|Education for young people is important in many countries. What about illiterate adults?
3 - An Le, for starters, you are not giving the correct response in your thesis statement. Your response is not...
Writing FeedbackANLE1608 - Jul 24, 2018 / Holt - Jul 25, 2018
|The number of university undergraduates and government spending on each of them from 1991 to 2001
2 - Hi @Kimmy9682, I think you should include the chart so we can fully understand the topic requirement, therefore...
Writing FeedbackKimmy9682 - Jul 24, 2018 / trangtrang96 - Jul 24, 2018
|Governments spend too much money to protect wildlife, while there are other important problems
Writing FeedbackAmericanCorner - Jul 21, 2018 / AmericanCorner - Jul 24, 2018
|From the limestone and clay - process of making cement
Writing Feedbackhuyenhuyen69 - Jul 22, 2018 / huyenhuyen69 - Jul 24, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Summary on the structure in job market in Great Britain in 1992
Writing FeedbackGordonW - Jul 22, 2018 / GordonW - Jul 24, 2018
|The measured rates of weight among residents in the Charlestown
Writing Feedbackhup - Jul 23, 2018 / Holt - Jul 24, 2018
|Developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid
3 - Hoang, the problem you have is that you tend to begin your discussion in the first paragraph when you...
Writing Feedbackhphuc123 - Jul 23, 2018 / Holt - Jul 24, 2018
|Science lessons in school should be more interesting
Writing FeedbackEtheos - Jul 23, 2018 / Holt - Jul 24, 2018
|IELTS WRITNG TASK 1: Attendances at hospital emergency care departments
2 - Moon, there is absolutely no way that you will be able to write 222 words in the exam center....
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jul 23, 2018 / Holt - Jul 24, 2018
|@IELTS : The beneficial of team sport more than individual sport
2 - Hi @bichnguyen, any chance to post the question as well? From your essay it seem that it is just...
Writing Feedbackbichnguyen - Jul 23, 2018 / smally01 - Jul 23, 2018
|IELTS writing for increasing of elderly in the country
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Jul 22, 2018 / smally01 - Jul 23, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: WINTER TRAVEL TRENDS IN THE US FROM 1999 TO 2003
Writing Feedbackxdung7292 - Jul 22, 2018 / xdung7292 - Jul 23, 2018
|Nowadays, there are some countries where the number of young adults is larger than elderly people
3 - Lipo, writing 350 words without proof reading and editing the content of your essay before submission tells me that...
Writing Feedbacklipolipo - Jul 22, 2018 / Holt - Jul 23, 2018
|GMAT - AWA ESSAYS: Art And Music Therapy
2 - Chang, in the first paragraph, you should completely mention the assumptions being made in the discussion presentation. You accidentally...
Writing Feedbackalicecw - Jul 22, 2018 / Holt - Jul 23, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 we have three important parts of education: reading, writing and maths.
4 - you can expand your idea why you agree/disagree in your body paragraphs. for instance, in first body paragraph ,...
Writing Feedbackdoda22 - Jul 22, 2018 / dimdim02 - Jul 23, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Prevention is better than treatment?
3 - Hang, your reasons are well developed and presented well in the essay. You have managed to present both supporting...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Jul 22, 2018 / Holt - Jul 23, 2018
|Topic: Some people believe that printed books are no longer necessary in this digital era
3 - Phuong, your grammar is correct in most instances and punctuation marks are properly used throughout the essay. There are...
Writing Feedbacksarahheya - Jul 22, 2018 / Holt - Jul 23, 2018
|An attempt on IELTS writing for differences on politeness between generations
5 - @Holt Thanks for your comment! I'll try my best next time and your continue supports are always appreciated....
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Jul 17, 2018 / smally01 - Jul 22, 2018
|Writing task 1: Bird migration observed in Woodchuck Country
Writing Feedbackminhthu - Jul 20, 2018 / minhthu - Jul 22, 2018
|IELTSS2- FREE INTERNET ACCESS FOR EVERYONE - BOTH VIEW
Writing Feedbackvanhkhuyen155 - Jul 21, 2018 / vanhkhuyen155 - Jul 22, 2018
|The breakdown of the figures of commodities which were transported by various vehicles in the UK
3 - Do, in order to get the highest scoring consideration for your analytical report in a Task 1 essay, you...
Writing Feedbackdoda22 - Jul 21, 2018 / Holt - Jul 22, 2018
|Robots are dangerous invention to the society.
3 - Thank you very much! I, at least think that I made small progress. No personal opinion should be...
Writing Feedbackjalp - Jul 17, 2018 / jalp - Jul 22, 2018
|People in Australia who had a physical exercise in 2010 within six various ages group
2 - "which who had a physical ... "except the first group": It makes me curious, what is "the first...
Writing Feedbackhreg - Jul 17, 2018 / cao1km - Jul 22, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: The Development of Tourism Contributed to English Becoming the Most Prominent Language
3 - Thank you for your feedback. since you gave me advice that I have to learn more about developing...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Jul 20, 2018 / dimdim02 - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS2 : a number of individuals want to have children later in their life - Reasons and Effects
Writing Feedbackjavidols - Jul 20, 2018 / javidols - Jul 21, 2018
|What do you think schools can do to ensure the health, well-being and safety of their students
Writing Feedbackama12321 - Jul 20, 2018 / ama12321 - Jul 21, 2018
|Better earning opportunities for those who have an university certificate comparing to less educated
2 - Ho, your prompt paraphrase is totally off the mark. You are not responding to the question being asked at...
Writing FeedbackHo Tran Tien Dun - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task2 : share as much information as possible
2 - Lipo, your opening paraphrase is inaccurate because it does not use the proper synonyms to represent the original discussion....
Writing Feedbacklipolipo - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|The media should limit the number of terrible news since it have a large effect on human's lives
3 - Phhuong, you are too focused on showing off your English vocabulary, without considering whether or not it makes sense...
Writing Feedbacktranlamthanh - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|Much stricter punishments on traffic driving offenses to decrease the road accidents
3 - @khoipham305 I have a feeling that you are writing this essay as part of a Task 2 response because...
Writing Feedbackkhoipham305 - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|The business and cultural contact grows more and more widely between countries; pros and cons
Writing FeedbackVivian Clouds - Jul 16, 2018 / Vivian Clouds - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Future plans to design prisons for learning and working
2 - Tran, you did not understand what the discussion method for this topic is. Your response to the original question...
Writing Feedbackawbtbsitw - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - People in the community can buy cheaper products nowadays
2 - TA - 6 Vu, you have a slight prompt deviation in your opening paraphrase. The prompt paraphrase should...
Writing Feedbackgiangvu - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Some employers prefer formal qualification than life experience
Writing Feedbackiamaminh - Jul 20, 2018 / iamaminh - Jul 20, 2018
|Children should only start formal education after being graduated from an informal school
2 - Juliano, the essay prompt uses the word "either" in the question response instruction. Therefore, you cannot discuss both points...
Writing Feedbackjulianofs - Jul 19, 2018 / Holt - Jul 20, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Is traditional skills and ways of life worthy to be kept alive?
Writing Feedbackas920024 - Jul 19, 2018 / as920024 - Jul 20, 2018
|Ielts Writing Task 1: Internet users as percentage of population 1999 - 2009
3 - Thank you for your feedback. I've just practiced writing essays recently and your advice is truly helpful to me!!!...
Writing FeedbackAlexdangphan - Jul 18, 2018 / Alexdangphan - Jul 19, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - The most important achievements for any child?
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jul 18, 2018 / NganNguyen - Jul 18, 2018
|Gender equality has become such a hot topic, seen in almost all aspects of life, including education
3 - Tran, your essay is not properly responding to the prompt question. The question posed before you is this: Do...
Writing Feedbacklinhlinh19897 - Jul 17, 2018 / Holt - Jul 18, 2018
|Should school leavers take a year off before going to university?
4 - Vi, your discussion is only partially correct. Only your third paragraph responds to the prompt in a correct manner....
Writing Feedbackvendetta - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|There is one activity that teenagers recently prefer, and it is purchasing goods
2 - Dimas, this essay shows that you have a problem when it comes to properly developing the sentence structure, punctuation,...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|The main role of museums - they should be enjoyable places to entertain people?
2 - Minh, the essay that you wrote does not completely cover the task requirements. The prompt instructions clearly request you...
Writing Feedbacklukaku123 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|'We get educated only in school.' What are your views?
Writing Feedbackama12321 - Jul 15, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|Should adolescents be obligated to use their spare time for helping their residences without wages?
2 - Thanh, I cannot say that your essay is clearly understandable nor is it cohesive or coherent in presentation. That...
Writing Feedbackkimthanh194 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|Eductional achievements - " pen and paper" exams
2 - Hang, your essay suffers from a lack of clarity in explanation. It is not coherent nor cohesive and causes...
Writing FeedbackMaithanhhang - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|People were asked if and why they traveled abroad (1994-98)
4 - Hoang, you did right by reviewing the sample essay before you entered into writing your own analytical report. It...
Writing Feedbackhphuc123 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|In my opinion people should prepare meal and eat at home rather than going out to restaurants
5 - Hi Lam, the essay is asking you for your personal preference or choice in this instance, as to whether...
Writing FeedbackLam Tran - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: formal academic qualifications VS life experience or personal qualities.
2 - Hey Thai, I'd like to tell you not to worry about your score. I have thoroughly reviewed your essay...
Writing Feedbackthaihoang613 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|Some of the celebrities are younger than others, and believe this is a positive development
5 - Thank you all for spending time on my essay! I did not see these problems when I was revising,...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Jul 14, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Jul 16, 2018
|Should children be banned from playing computer games?
5 - you should built your ideas clearly following by: Main idea No.1.....detail 1.....detail 2... Main idea No.2.....detail 1.....detail 2... Main...
Writing FeedbackTemuulen - Jul 11, 2018 / anhrriv - Jul 16, 2018
|Face to face communication with an increasing Internet connection and text messages in use?
4 - For me, your essay is poor about idea for the second paragraph which need to 2 ideas. Construction of...
Writing Feedbackbaljit2108 - Jul 15, 2018 / anhrriv - Jul 16, 2018
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