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|[TOEFL]Some people consider that our life is more complex than it was in the past
3 - @Holt Happy to see you again, I say this because after the first you read my article titled as...
Writing FeedbackRoman123 - Aug 12, 2017 / Roman123 - Aug 13, 2017
|Ielts task 2 | Health (The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems)
3 - @DinaDinh hello, In the intro paragraph, I think there is no opening sentence (which is more generalized), rather...
Writing FeedbackDinaDinh - Aug 12, 2017 / zeal - Aug 12, 2017
|[Toefl] an effective leader should try to make others part of the decision making process
Writing FeedbackRoman123 - Aug 9, 2017 / Roman123 - Aug 12, 2017
|[IELTS Task 1] the trends of the accessibility of current technology in homes in the U.K.
Writing Feedbackzeal - Aug 11, 2017 / zeal - Aug 12, 2017
|Idolization and its effects
3 - Linh, this is not a comparison essay. This is a singular opinion essay as indicated by the prompt instruction...
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Aug 12, 2017 / Holt - Aug 12, 2017
|The pie chart compares the proportion of energy production in four different energy sources
3 - Abu, when you write the summary overview, always make sure that you do it as a complete paragraph that...
Writing Feedbackabubakar07 - Aug 11, 2017 / Holt - Aug 12, 2017
|Task 1 Ielts: Bar graphs about the sales of music albums
4 - I can only suggest you to improve visuals of statistical graphs by creating them in microsoft/en-gb/store/b/office because they looks...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 11, 2017 / ulanter - Aug 11, 2017
|Should a city try to preserve its old buildings or replace them with modern buildings?
4 - Here are a number of errors made in the essay. 1) Incomplete sentences. 2) Too simple overview....
Writing Feedbackminhphuccttv - Aug 11, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 11, 2017
|Everyone should become vegetarian
Writing FeedbackAndreiWindy - Aug 11, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 11, 2017
|The emissions of carbon dioxide (CO2) in metric tonnes per person [Ielts]
4 - @wuchunhung0927 Hi. You should have given your essay a second look when you succeeded in posting your thread. Images...
Writing Feedbackwuchunhung0927 - Aug 11, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Aug 11, 2017
|Essay about the punishment for children
3 - Chan, your essay is not very understandable. The English sentences that you developed are not coherent and lack a...
Writing Feedbackvincent0801 - Aug 11, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|[IELTS TAKS 2] CAMBRIDGE 12 TEST 5 - INFORMATION SHARING
4 - It is considered by some that accessing to scientific research, business and academic world should be free while there...
Writing Feedbackhailung - Aug 8, 2017 / hailung - Aug 11, 2017
|Do you agree or disagree with the following comment? Sometimes it is better not to tell the truth.
3 - Thao, grammar issues, which are minimal in consideration, aside, this is a very well thought out and defended essay....
Writing Feedbackitsjjj16 - Aug 11, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|[IELTS Task 2]Should museums charge for admission
2 - Jiawen, your paraphrasing of the prompt requirements is misrepresenting the original intent of the writer and also, incomplete in...
Writing Feedbackmtnnnntm - Aug 10, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|IELTS Essay task 2: Food can be produced cheaper if we use...
2 - Thu, in an IELTS Task 2 Essay, your personal opinion, though required by the prompt, is not to be...
Writing Feedbacknamchun99 - Aug 10, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|Early cultivation of children's interest in learning second language
2 - Lucy, this essay is very confusing to read. You failed to properly paraphrase the prompt requirements in the opening...
Writing FeedbackLucy Kao - Aug 10, 2017 / Holt - Aug 11, 2017
|Causes of land degradation and deforestation in 1990's - IELTS1
6 - Thank for your comment! this is my first presentation with fast writing, so i will other with more effort...
Writing Feedbackkjra178 - Aug 9, 2017 / kjra178 - Aug 10, 2017
|[Toefl] Compared to when our grandparents were young, life is more comfortable and easier these days
3 - Matthew, first of all, please make sure that you post the essay for review in the correct forum. You...
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 10, 2017 / Holt - Aug 10, 2017
|Purchasing other countries' products in the same place
Writing FeedbackWendy0604 - Aug 10, 2017 / Holt - Aug 10, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 1] CAMBRIDGE 12 - BAR CHART - PHYSICAL ACTIVITIES
Writing Feedbackhailung - Aug 7, 2017 / hailung - Aug 10, 2017
|IELTS task1 Ages of the populations in Yemen and Italy
4 - @Holt Thank you for all advice. I appreciate and will keep practicing my writing. Also, thank you for pointing...
Writing FeedbackWendy0604 - Aug 7, 2017 / Wendy0604 - Aug 10, 2017
|Toefl Essay- Which of the following is the kind of friend you would prefer to have?
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 8, 2017 / Katthew Kim - Aug 10, 2017
|(IELTS Task 1) The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled..
Writing Feedbackvansonfan321 - Aug 9, 2017 / vansonfan321 - Aug 10, 2017
|The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
3 - @Holt Thank for point out my mistake, I will improve my skill by using your advise and present it...
Writing Feedbackwuchunhung0927 - Aug 9, 2017 / wuchunhung0927 - Aug 9, 2017
|Change is an integral part of every existence, should we avoid it?
Writing FeedbackNghi Huynh - Aug 9, 2017 / Holt - Aug 9, 2017
|Discuss about the government should put money on medical care and education or theatres and sports
3 - Nguyen, a well developed essay that properly discusses the required information as required by the prompt will total 5...
Writing Feedbackhanguyen2211 - Aug 9, 2017 / Holt - Aug 9, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 1]The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Aug 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Aug 9, 2017
|Patience. What is your approach to problem-solving? TOEFL Independent Essay
3 - Majd, you are writing an academic essay. Therefore, the response needs to be direct and informative. You need not...
Writing FeedbackSFTBNWH11 - Aug 8, 2017 / Holt - Aug 9, 2017
|Study and other activities in student life
3 - Dear Holt, many thanks for your useful advice, it helps me a lot. I re-wrote the essay and hope...
Writing Feedbacknguyenquan - Aug 8, 2017 / nguyenquan - Aug 9, 2017
|Ielts task 2 : technology provides opportunities as much as damages
4 - Susan, you have not approached this task 2 essay in the proper manner. From the very start, you have...
Writing Feedbacksmvicp - Aug 8, 2017 / Holt - Aug 8, 2017
|Money as the reward for good grades in school
2 - Cindy, it is difficult for me to assess the impressive work that you have presented here. You did not...
Writing Feedbacknameaname - Aug 8, 2017 / Holt - Aug 8, 2017
|Children should be taught to collaborate rather than trying to show who's better - IELTS writing
4 - @Shirely Fu Hello, miss Fu. Holt is a contributor, who is not allowed to review your essay twice or...
Writing FeedbackShirely Fu - Aug 7, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Aug 8, 2017
|Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it (just spend or invest in business, save)
2 - Nayaz, I would really appreciate it if you would include the actual prompt instructions for your essay practice test...
Writing FeedbackNayazah - Aug 7, 2017 / Holt - Aug 7, 2017
|Children' better chance for development - in a rural place or in a big city?
2 - Majd, you have not properly formatted this essay to the required outline for a TOEFL test. The opening paragraph...
Writing FeedbackSFTBNWH11 - Aug 7, 2017 / Holt - Aug 7, 2017
|IELTS writing task 1 - The two pie charts about the types of communication.
3 - Yang, your essay does not follow the correct structure and form presentation for a Task 1 essay. Your first...
Writing Feedbackbachyangha - Aug 6, 2017 / Holt - Aug 7, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: Graph of employment rates in three sectors of UK economy
8 - I think your second body paragraph is too short and you need to make more comparisons ( You can...
Writing Feedbacktommyph - Jul 10, 2017 / Red Moon - Aug 6, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 1 : The three companies' waste
9 - Thanks for your advices. I will try to write a better essay next time. Hope that you can also...
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - May 20, 2017 / Red Moon - Aug 6, 2017
|Robots will become smarter than humans and will take control of their society
2 - Cao, in my opinion, I believe that your essay will score between a 4-5 at best. Your essay has...
Writing Feedbackmathboy - Aug 6, 2017 / Holt - Aug 6, 2017
|Preservation of land for natural existence or human intervention
2 - Williams, the first thing that I notice about this essay is that you did not remember to post the...
Writing Feedbackliam_obdk - Aug 5, 2017 / Holt - Aug 6, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1: the rate of smoking men declined gradually in Someland
Writing Feedbacktamdoan409 - Aug 5, 2017 / tamdoan409 - Aug 6, 2017
|IELTS WRITING ESSAY ABOUT LEARNING A LANGUAGE AND A FOREIGN CULTURE
2 - Le, you need to familiarize yourself with the types of essays used in IELTS tests and how these are...
Writing Feedbackfuong0510 - Aug 5, 2017 / Holt - Aug 6, 2017
|Ielts task 2, topic: Law, type: Agree or disagree
3 - Tran, due to the fact that you did not properly discuss this essay, the score that you can get...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 5, 2017 / Holt - Aug 5, 2017
|Are the newspapers contents trustworthy?
3 - Cong, the next time you post an essay for review here, you need to post the original instructions and...
Writing Feedbacklecongminh1997 - Aug 4, 2017 / Holt - Aug 5, 2017
|[Task1] Information about Chorleywood town
4 - The map illustrates ... The changes during each phase will be summed up in this essay and comparison made...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Jul 26, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 5, 2017
|"Should state college tuition be free?" Hi All, Can you help me to correct this paragraph
8 - @Holt Thanks for your advice.I was trying to write one paragraph each time so I can get benefit...
Writing FeedbackAshkan123 - Aug 1, 2017 / Ashkan123 - Aug 4, 2017
|The graph below compares changes in the birth rates of China and the US between 1920 and 2000
3 - Admittedly, there will be complex graphs and simple graphs to discuss in the actual test. Since these topics are...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Aug 4, 2017 / Holt - Aug 4, 2017
|Toefl Writing, Television should be used to instruct people rather than to entertain them
4 - Matthew, you do not need to write an introduction for your original prompt statement each time. As a seasoned...
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 4, 2017 / Holt - Aug 4, 2017
|TOEFL essay- Write a letter about your experience in a foreign country
5 - Amin, this letter requires a touch of cultural difference beyond the obvious. It is a very sad letter that...
Writing FeedbackAminox - Aug 3, 2017 / Holt - Aug 4, 2017
|"Who have to pay for the care of the elders? Government or family ?"
Writing Feedbackmatheusandrade - Aug 3, 2017 / matheusandrade - Aug 3, 2017
|Essay about TOEFL question 'Having time alone is the most ideal way to relax and relieve stress'
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 3, 2017 / Katthew Kim - Aug 3, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: The low birth rate and its effects in the future
3 - Hi Holt, Could you specify 5 full developed statement paragraphs. Help me to understand please. I refer...
Writing Feedbacknhhung_80 - Aug 3, 2017 / nhhung_80 - Aug 3, 2017
|People treat their birds, cats, dogs as a part of family.
2 - Ngo, the next time that you post an essay for review here, please include the original prompt that you...
Writing FeedbackNDLinh - Aug 3, 2017 / Holt - Aug 3, 2017
|Crime must be punished, the question is how? IELTS
4 - @near9 You did explain 2 opinions in your essay. But you did not discuss the opinions as dictated by...
Writing Feedbacknear9 - Aug 2, 2017 / Holt - Aug 3, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - WHAT TOURIST CAN DO
4 - This essay is lack of advanced vocabulary and structures, there are some words that you repeated many times. You...
Writing Feedbackghazali - Jul 28, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 3, 2017
|IELTS task1 Divorced rates in Finland and Sweden in a bar chart
3 - Dear @Holt Thank you so much for providing the instruction to me. I REALLY APPRECIATE your prompt response and...
Writing FeedbackWendy0604 - Aug 2, 2017 / Wendy0604 - Aug 3, 2017
|IELTS Task2 Protecting the variety of languages
2 - Hi Shirely Fu, This is my contribution in regards to your essay.Please help me with my essay ...
Writing FeedbackShirely Fu - Aug 2, 2017 / Ashkan123 - Aug 2, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] Traffic congestion - the proposition of solution
Writing Feedbackbruceng - Aug 2, 2017 / bruceng - Aug 2, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] (Agree and Disagree) Books and televisions
4 - Hang, the agreement that you have with the opinion should have been indicated in a proper manner in the...
Writing Feedbackxhang24 - Aug 1, 2017 / Holt - Aug 1, 2017
|My most unforgettable meal
4 - Jessie as a simple statement that describes a meal that you remember, this essay is sufficient. It delivers all...
Writing Feedbackjessiewuwu - Jul 30, 2017 / Holt - Aug 1, 2017
|Reason why people sometimes prefer ride bicycle when commuting to work instead of using eg. car
4 - Maildor, I really do not think that the prompt you posted and the supposedly charts are related. However, the...
Writing Feedbackmaildor - Jul 31, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Aug 1, 2017
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