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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and three kinds of meat from 1979 to 2004

2 - While the presentation does indicate a chart, you did not identify the kind of chart presented, which poses...

Writing Feedbacklanhoangngoc - Oct 24, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
IELTS task 1: The bar chart compares five countries in terms of movies' production from 2007 to 2009

2 - The essay is unnecessarily long. You wrote more than 250 words, making this a task 2 essay presentation instead...

Writing FeedbackLillingg - Oct 24, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
The graph and table shows the amount of water used for various purposes

2 - Your first paragraph is going to earn you a failing preliminary GRA score. Avoid writing long sentences in that...

Writing Feedbacknghiaphong - Oct 23, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
The line graph below shows changes in the youth unemployment rate from 2000 to 2012.

2 - The essay is overwritten. You should not be writing more than 200 words maximum for a 20 minute writing...

Writing Feedbackkrystal2023 - Oct 23, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
[WRITING TASK 1] The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 & the plan for changes in 2024

2 - This vocabulary is too simple. You want to use somewhat advanced or intermediate English vocabulary to increase your...

Writing Feedbacklaura2024abroad - Oct 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TRAFFIC CONGESTION ISSUE - CAUSES AND SOLUTIONS

3 - "Due to a dramatic rise in population, traffic jam has been a globally debatable issue. " In the beginning,...

Writing Feedbackwanttobebetter - Oct 21, 2023 / greattako - Oct 26, 2023
[WRITTING TASK 1-MAP] The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise.

2 - You are missing an important element in this essay. Where is the summary overview? You began with the trending...

Writing Feedbackquanessayforum - Oct 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
Task1 line chart - overseas travel to an european country

2 - This is a missing element in your summary overview. You need to mention these 3 places immediately for...

Writing FeedbackCandy123 - Oct 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
The bar chart below shows the data about British emigration to 5 destinations between 2004 and 2007.

2 - This essay would cause you to automatically fail both task 1 and task 2 essays. That is because you...

Writing Feedbackplihg - Oct 19, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
Advantage and disadvantage of watching tv of children

2 - Okay. This is an advantage v. disadvantage essay. It is not a personal opinion essay. Therefore, you are not...

Writing Feedbackthaomya_03 - Oct 18, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
Task 2 essay on legislations against tobacco.

2 - The essay is missing an expanded discussion of your personal opinion. While you did discuss the 2 opinions as...

Writing Feedbackravan - Oct 18, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
[Writing task 1] The main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

2 - When you summarize your presentation, make sure to indicate that the pie charts are individually assigned to each year...

Writing Feedbackhuydaoquang - Oct 15, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
The restriction of using vehicles on certain days as a way to reduce air pollution

2 - Your prompt restatement + writer's opinion is too long. It should not be more than 3 sentences in length....

Writing Feedbacknam08 - Oct 15, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
Children watching TV - Writing Task 2

3 - First paragraph: not good job of paraphrasing. It is clear but you will need more advanced words, for eg:...

Writing FeedbackChu Chang - Oct 13, 2023 / wanttobebetter - Oct 21, 2023
Essay about separate education for students with different academic levels

4 - There are some amendments I can give to improve your writing: (this is just my personal opinion) - Some...

Writing FeedbackAnhngoc12 - Oct 15, 2023 / wanttobebetter - Oct 21, 2023
The bar chart shows the literacy rate (% of people who can read and write) in 2011 by regions

2 - Never ask the reader to look at the image. You have to narrate the information, not ask the...

Writing Feedbackhtlam11 - Oct 14, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
Was the American Revolution a Civil War?

2 - The formatting of this paper is just all wrong. Paragraphs should be used to separate the idea discussions. There...

Writing FeedbackRonaldwrw - Oct 12, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
Getting information from newspapers and other media

2 - You made your position clear in the writer's opinion section. Yet you contradicted yourself in the discussion paragraphs. You...

Writing Feedbackthuyduong470 - Oct 11, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
The chart illustrates the contribution in percentage of two different sectors (Task 1 IELTS)

2 - Try to be more specific about the kind of chart that is provided. That will help you gain...

Writing Feedbackekko162 - Oct 10, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
Comparing life with parents to living on campus

2 - I cannot accurately review this essay as the word count and paragraph representations do not follow the necessary requirements...

Writing FeedbackNguyen Hoa - Oct 10, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
IELTS Cause/Problem Essay question on children spending less time with their parents

2 - This is personal information or a representation of your personal opinion. It is not a part of the...

Writing FeedbackDirkhammet - Oct 10, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
The proportion of population who used the Internet in three different countries between 1999 & 2009

2 - A trending statement needs to cover the most common information for the sources provided. You did that properly...

Writing Feedbacksuperattack2002 - Oct 9, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
Compare pie charts show the proportion of the energy produces from different sources in a country

2 - The summary overview lacks content. Always enumerate the information sources prior to setting up the trending statement. You cannot...

Writing FeedbackNgocAnk - Oct 9, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 1: three main difficulties each age has to face when they live abroad

NEW - the problems people have when they go to live in other countries The bar chart demonstrates three main...

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[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Juvenile delinquency. Cause/Solution?

NEW - IN SOME COUNTRIES, A HIGH PROPORTION OF CRIMINAL ACTS ARE COMMITTED BY TEENAGERS. WHY HAS THIS HAPPENED? WHAT CAN...

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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. The process is quite lengthy and complicated

4 - You do not have reached the word limit. You get a low score when you don't complete the task...

Writing Feedbackanhtho06 - Oct 8, 2023 / TanzeelaWasti - Oct 12, 2023
Why have men's sports been give far more attention by society than women's s? IELTS Writting Task 2

4 - I think you should give the essay a proper stance; either be positive about it or be negative about...

Writing FeedbackCantor Zhukov - Oct 9, 2023 / TanzeelaWasti - Oct 12, 2023
Task 1 writing ielts - carbon dioxide released by four different countries

3 - @laiphuongthao two nations,Italy and Portugal Following up were Sweden... in the given order, respectively/correspondingly. on the other hand, You...

Writing Feedbacklaiphuongthao - Oct 3, 2023 / Duy Dang - Oct 11, 2023
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Begin learning a foreign language

NEW - SOME EXPERTS BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER FOR CHILDREN TO BEGIN LEARNING A FOREIGN LANGUAGE AT PRIMARY SCHOOL RATHER...

Writing FeedbackDuy Dang - Oct 11, 2023 / — -
The percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living.

3 - @Cao hong Ngoc You should be aware of the structure of sentence such as capital letters or end mark...

Writing FeedbackCao hong Ngoc - Oct 9, 2023 / Duy Dang - Oct 10, 2023
The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarize the information - 7 stages involved

2 - You have summarized the presentation too much. In your desire to present the quickest version of information possible, you...

Writing Feedbackpminhanh - Oct 7, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Present your ideas about what you should or shouldn't do to live green

2 - This is a well written essay. it shows that the writer has a good grasp of the English language...

Writing Feedbackanhthueunsung - Oct 6, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Writing task 1 Ielts: young people's expectations for change in five different areas

2 - Yes, statistics were provided in the image. However, you need to identify the type of image before you...

Writing Feedbackakane - Oct 5, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
The percentage of time adults spent on different activities in a country in 1958 and 2008

2 - You have misrepresented the number of pie charts in your summary overview. You need to use the plural form...

Writing Feedbackkhanh416 - Oct 4, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
The charts show the percentage of electricity consumed by different sectors in Eastern Australia

2 - I think you made a wrong word choice here. I believe you meant to say reverse. Which refers...

Writing FeedbacklemonadeA - Oct 3, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Reasons why friendship is gradually dying

2 - You have provided reasons for friendships ending. Those do not necessarily reflect the death of friendships. You are speaking...

Writing Feedbackkieuuoanh - Oct 3, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Global warming is one of the biggest threaten to our environment. Cause and solution ?

2 - I can understand what you are trying to tell me in the essay. The problem, is that even though...

Writing Feedbackpth1234 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Goverment should prioritize heathcare instead of orther areas. Do you agree or disagree?

2 - Do not confuse the well being of a person with healthcare. Well being is a larger field of personal...

Writing FeedbackGiahuy2107 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Construct stadium beneficial or not? IELTS Writting Task 2

2 - The essay is over written. It is not really a task 2 essay exercise at this point. It is...

Writing FeedbackOutsider_000 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
WRITE A SHORT PARAGRAPH (100-120 WORDS) ABOUT HOW TO KEEP FIT AND STAY HEALTHY.

2 - You have done a good job on writing this statement. It shows that you are becoming more comfortable writing...

Writing Feedbacktranhaithien2005 - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives.

2 - You are showing the reader why you partly agree with the given statement using a comparative discussion method. While...

Writing Feedbackmikey04 - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Dicussion between putting some strict controls about noise and making as much noise as possible

2 - Your prompt restatement became confusing to the reader. There is a lack of clarity and coherence in that presentation...

Writing Feedbackphuongna - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
What is the advantages and disadvantages of using public transport?

2 - Seeing as this is a task 2 essay, you should not be coming to any conclusions or offering any...

Writing Feedbacknmint_tue07 - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
Some people feel that advertising has negative effects on our society

2 - Make sur eyou follow the writing rudiments for the English language. Every first word of a new sentence is...

Writing FeedbackHoangson - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: LOOK AFTER ONE'S HEALTH FOR PERSONAL OR SOCIAL BENEFITS

2 - This is a single opinion essay. That is why you are being asked about the extent of your agreement...

Writing Feedbackhgzxz - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] GETTING OLD IN THE MODERN WORLD

2 - [quote=cangusocduaaa]This essay shall conduct a thorough assessment of both viewpoints so that a reasoned conclusion can be drawn.[/quoteWhile you...

Writing Feedbackcangusocduaaa - Sep 26, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
[WRITING TASK 1] Percentage of passing driving license of males and females in an Asian nation

2 - The summary overview is problematic and will not deliver a good preliminary score. There are several elements missing from...

Writing Feedbackwanderinuniverse - Sep 26, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
AN ESSAY ABOUT THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF LIVING IN THE MODERN WORLD

3 - It is very important that whenever you write pros and cons, write them in 2 separate structured paragraphs. Your...

Writing FeedbackHAPPYLE - Sep 24, 2023 / Love478 - Oct 7, 2023
Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination

2 - You are writing a comparison essay that should focus on 2 things: 1. An explanation of the public...

Writing FeedbackVanChungNguyen - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
Teenagers should work unpaid, do you agree with the view? Write about 250 words

2 - You will already have failed the essay with your prompt restatement and writer's opinion alone. You are presenting a...

Writing FeedbackKhanhChi2009 - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
The different of weight in England

2 - You are not making any sense in this section. The sentences do not carry any thought references and...

Writing Feedbackbantraicuabe - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
[WRITING TASK 2] To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population

2 - The essay will receive a failing score. You have not properly developed the discussion presentation when it comes to...

Writing FeedbackDoggoZ - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
WRITING TASK 1: LINE GRAPH - CINEMA ATTENDANCE BY AGE GROUP IN THE UK

2 - Wrong sentence structure. You cannot use the word "and" to start a sentence. Being a conjunction, that is...

Writing FeedbackHuongTran - Sep 24, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
What is an ideal society? And how can we create it?

2 - Word use redundancy. If you are imagining it, then it is already an illusion. There is...

Writing FeedbackRizChow - Sep 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
WRITING TASK1: LINE GRAPH - GREEN TRANSPORTATION USAGE

2 - The summary overview is not well developed. You need to learn to enumerate the required information such as the...

Writing Feedbackpnpu07 - Sep 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
Writing Task 2: Some people think that students should study the science of food and how to prepare

2 - I do not see an appropriate personal opinion provided in the discussion points. Based on the way you represented...

Writing FeedbackQuy Nguyen - Sep 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
Some students want to learn additional subjects. Others think should focus on getting a degree.

2 - The essay is over written. You cannot complete 288 words within 40 minutes. The actual test does not allow...

Writing Feedbacklynnci - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income

2 - You did not clearly identify the type of chart presented in the task. The image identifier helps to increase...

Writing Feedbackhuyphamdz1902 - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Governments should make universities free for everyone

2 - Did you review the response requirement for the essay prior to drafting it? If you did, then you would...

Writing Feedbackmayajuststart_0 - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
IELTS Writing task 2 - The excessive use of smartphones in free time

2 - The summary paraphrase and writer's opinion are unacceptable. The writer does not meet the passing preliminary TA score requirements...

Writing FeedbackEnglishwithakat - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

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