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The percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living.

3 - @Cao hong Ngoc You should be aware of the structure of sentence such as capital letters or end mark...

Writing FeedbackCao hong Ngoc - Oct 9, 2023 / Duy Dang - Oct 10, 2023

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarize the information - 7 stages involved

2 - You have summarized the presentation too much. In your desire to present the quickest version of information possible, you...

Writing Feedbackpminhanh - Oct 7, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

Present your ideas about what you should or shouldn't do to live green

2 - This is a well written essay. it shows that the writer has a good grasp of the English language...

Writing Feedbackanhthueunsung - Oct 6, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

Writing task 1 Ielts: young people's expectations for change in five different areas

2 - Yes, statistics were provided in the image. However, you need to identify the type of image before you...

Writing Feedbackakane - Oct 5, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

The percentage of time adults spent on different activities in a country in 1958 and 2008

2 - You have misrepresented the number of pie charts in your summary overview. You need to use the plural form...

Writing Feedbackkhanh416 - Oct 4, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

The charts show the percentage of electricity consumed by different sectors in Eastern Australia

2 - I think you made a wrong word choice here. I believe you meant to say reverse. Which refers...

Writing FeedbacklemonadeA - Oct 3, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

Reasons why friendship is gradually dying

2 - You have provided reasons for friendships ending. Those do not necessarily reflect the death of friendships. You are speaking...

Writing Feedbackkieuuoanh - Oct 3, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

Global warming is one of the biggest threaten to our environment. Cause and solution ?

2 - I can understand what you are trying to tell me in the essay. The problem, is that even though...

Writing Feedbackpth1234 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

Goverment should prioritize heathcare instead of orther areas. Do you agree or disagree?

2 - Do not confuse the well being of a person with healthcare. Well being is a larger field of personal...

Writing FeedbackGiahuy2107 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

Construct stadium beneficial or not? IELTS Writting Task 2

2 - The essay is over written. It is not really a task 2 essay exercise at this point. It is...

Writing FeedbackOutsider_000 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

WRITE A SHORT PARAGRAPH (100-120 WORDS) ABOUT HOW TO KEEP FIT AND STAY HEALTHY.

2 - You have done a good job on writing this statement. It shows that you are becoming more comfortable writing...

Writing Feedbacktranhaithien2005 - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives.

2 - You are showing the reader why you partly agree with the given statement using a comparative discussion method. While...

Writing Feedbackmikey04 - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

Dicussion between putting some strict controls about noise and making as much noise as possible

2 - Your prompt restatement became confusing to the reader. There is a lack of clarity and coherence in that presentation...

Writing Feedbackphuongna - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

What is the advantages and disadvantages of using public transport?

2 - Seeing as this is a task 2 essay, you should not be coming to any conclusions or offering any...

Writing Feedbacknmint_tue07 - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

Some people feel that advertising has negative effects on our society

2 - Make sur eyou follow the writing rudiments for the English language. Every first word of a new sentence is...

Writing FeedbackHoangson - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2: LOOK AFTER ONE'S HEALTH FOR PERSONAL OR SOCIAL BENEFITS

2 - This is a single opinion essay. That is why you are being asked about the extent of your agreement...

Writing Feedbackhgzxz - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] GETTING OLD IN THE MODERN WORLD

2 - [quote=cangusocduaaa]This essay shall conduct a thorough assessment of both viewpoints so that a reasoned conclusion can be drawn.[/quoteWhile you...

Writing Feedbackcangusocduaaa - Sep 26, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

[WRITING TASK 1] Percentage of passing driving license of males and females in an Asian nation

2 - The summary overview is problematic and will not deliver a good preliminary score. There are several elements missing from...

Writing Feedbackwanderinuniverse - Sep 26, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023

AN ESSAY ABOUT THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF LIVING IN THE MODERN WORLD

3 - It is very important that whenever you write pros and cons, write them in 2 separate structured paragraphs. Your...

Writing FeedbackHAPPYLE - Sep 24, 2023 / Love478 - Oct 7, 2023

Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination

2 - You are writing a comparison essay that should focus on 2 things: 1. An explanation of the public...

Writing FeedbackVanChungNguyen - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

Teenagers should work unpaid, do you agree with the view? Write about 250 words

2 - You will already have failed the essay with your prompt restatement and writer's opinion alone. You are presenting a...

Writing FeedbackKhanhChi2009 - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

The different of weight in England

2 - You are not making any sense in this section. The sentences do not carry any thought references and...

Writing Feedbackbantraicuabe - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

[WRITING TASK 2] To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population

2 - The essay will receive a failing score. You have not properly developed the discussion presentation when it comes to...

Writing FeedbackDoggoZ - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

WRITING TASK 1: LINE GRAPH - CINEMA ATTENDANCE BY AGE GROUP IN THE UK

2 - Wrong sentence structure. You cannot use the word "and" to start a sentence. Being a conjunction, that is...

Writing FeedbackHuongTran - Sep 24, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

What is an ideal society? And how can we create it?

2 - Word use redundancy. If you are imagining it, then it is already an illusion. There is...

Writing FeedbackRizChow - Sep 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

WRITING TASK1: LINE GRAPH - GREEN TRANSPORTATION USAGE

2 - The summary overview is not well developed. You need to learn to enumerate the required information such as the...

Writing Feedbackpnpu07 - Sep 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

Writing Task 2: Some people think that students should study the science of food and how to prepare

2 - I do not see an appropriate personal opinion provided in the discussion points. Based on the way you represented...

Writing FeedbackQuy Nguyen - Sep 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

Some students want to learn additional subjects. Others think should focus on getting a degree.

2 - The essay is over written. You cannot complete 288 words within 40 minutes. The actual test does not allow...

Writing Feedbacklynnci - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income

2 - You did not clearly identify the type of chart presented in the task. The image identifier helps to increase...

Writing Feedbackhuyphamdz1902 - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Governments should make universities free for everyone

2 - Did you review the response requirement for the essay prior to drafting it? If you did, then you would...

Writing Feedbackmayajuststart_0 - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

IELTS Writing task 2 - The excessive use of smartphones in free time

2 - The summary paraphrase and writer's opinion are unacceptable. The writer does not meet the passing preliminary TA score requirements...

Writing FeedbackEnglishwithakat - Sep 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

IELTS Writing Task 2 - about artificial intelligence

2 - The response is not aligned with the expected format. You gave a basic response instead of the expected measured...

Writing FeedbackPatsy Chan - Sep 20, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Plastic Bottle Production Process

NEW - Hi! I would love to see comments based upon IELTS marking criteria, and possibly a detailed band score! Thank...

Writing Feedbackheynameischarles - Oct 3, 2023 / — -

IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The proportion of money spent on different goods and services of households

NEW - The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. The...

Writing FeedbackThuhuongab123987 - Oct 1, 2023 / — -

IELTS WRITING TASK 2: ATTENTION SPANS

2 - Merged: writing on topic: attention spans being affected by social media - unprecedented technology-driven era: too complicated...

Writing FeedbackZoelee - Sep 28, 2023 / minhhien4326 - Sep 30, 2023

What types of things do a logistics engineer plan?

NEW - writing a logistics engineer plan A logistics engineer plan is the basis for a business to reach its...

Writing Feedbackluuvinhtan2111 - Sep 28, 2023 / — -

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TEACHING SITUATION / DISAGREE OR AGREE ESSAYS.

2 - Your overall response to the original prompt is incorrect. There are 2 reasons for this mistake: 1. There...

Writing Feedbackvieta06 - Sep 17, 2023 / Holt - Sep 26, 2023

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matter

2 - The word count of this essay could prove to be a huge problem for you during the actual test....

Writing FeedbackTramy245 - Sep 17, 2023 / Holt - Sep 26, 2023

Mobile and technology essay paper

2 - The essay is too long. It is so long that it has created a clear image in the examiner's...

Writing Feedbackminhtuan2006 - Sep 15, 2023 / Holt - Sep 26, 2023

Task 1: The chart shows the percentage of males and females with higher education qualification

2 - This is not a specific image identifier. It does not help the reader get a mental picture of...

Writing Feedbackhongtham2002 - Sep 15, 2023 / Holt - Sep 26, 2023

[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] UNPAID COMMUNITY SERVICE - obligation for students to make a better society

2 - The explanation is incomplete. They joined in without payment and then? What happened? Do they continue to maintain...

Writing FeedbackDuy Dang - Sep 13, 2023 / Holt - Sep 26, 2023

The fluctuation in monthly prices for copper, nickel and zinc throughout the year 2014

2 - The report is well developed and contains all of the necessary information. However, the paragraph presentations are uneven in...

Writing FeedbackNguyenChuc - Sep 12, 2023 / Holt - Sep 26, 2023

Writing task 1 essay about US annual income

2 - Do not use a numerical ordinal if you are not going to proceed with such usage in the later...

Writing Feedbacktdnkevin - Sep 12, 2023 / Holt - Sep 26, 2023

Doing away with old buildings and building modern ones or restoring old buildings?

2 - This is incorrect. Not all people really care about architecture and the preservation of old buildings. The reference...

Writing FeedbackThyn1103 - Sep 12, 2023 / Holt - Sep 25, 2023

Holiday at home or abroad - ielts writting task 2

2 - The first paragraph concerning the difficulties of international travel is well written to a certain point. The way that...

Writing FeedbackDeverX - Sep 12, 2023 / Holt - Sep 25, 2023

Too much money on repairing old buildings instead of pulling them down and constructing the new ones

2 - Avoid exaggerating your reference to the discussion topic as the examiner will definitely lower your score in that aspect....

Writing Feedbackellie1912 - Sep 11, 2023 / Holt - Sep 25, 2023

The low productivity of agriculture land - IELTS Cambridge 8 Test 1 Task 1

2 - There is no such thing as a circle graph. I believe that you are trying to reference a...

Writing Feedbackhtnlinh - Sep 10, 2023 / Holt - Sep 25, 2023

Write an essay how adults can influence younger people's behaviour

3 - Your information feels accurate. The structure of the paragraphs could use some work and there are some spelling mistakes...

Writing FeedbackOrangEnglish - Sep 10, 2023 / GracefulRoseThor - Sep 25, 2023

Benefits and drawbacks of sharing information

3 - @TryToWrite I think you could potentially cut the two body paragraphs in half and combine that to make a...

Writing FeedbackTryToWrite - Sep 10, 2023 / GracefulRoseThor - Sep 25, 2023

The graph shows oil production capacity for several Gulf countries between 1990 and 2010.

2 - The presentation is good. You did your best to present the information properly and coherently to the examiner. However,...

Writing FeedbackThang113 - Sep 10, 2023 / Holt - Sep 25, 2023

IELTS Writing Task 1: The chart illustrates the income of households in the US

2 - The last paragraph of this essay is not structured as a mere report, which affected the overall presentation of...

Writing FeedbackDennis Dawl - Sep 8, 2023 / Holt - Sep 24, 2023

The graph describes the changes in medical funding in four countries from 2010-2018

2 - Familiarize yourself with time references based on numerical gaps. There is a 4 year gap between information presentations,...

Writing Feedbackkaibao - Sep 8, 2023 / Holt - Sep 24, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : Young population outnumbers the old in various countries

2 - This is an incorrect interpretation of the original presentation. There is no dispute presented since only one public...

Writing Feedbackthanhthao22552 - Sep 7, 2023 / Holt - Sep 24, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 about learning widely spo languages lead to the increase of minority languages

2 - Stick to your discussion opinion when explaining your point of view. There is no need to defend the opposite...

Writing Feedbackplinh136 - Sep 7, 2023 / Holt - Sep 24, 2023

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned development site

2 - While you have met the minimum word count for the report, I would not say that you will be...

Writing Feedbackbinnguyen - Sep 7, 2023 / Holt - Sep 24, 2023

Different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

2 - This is a failing task 1 essay. You need to learn how to write the proper 3-4 paragraph essay...

Writing Feedbackroadtocanada2108 - Sep 6, 2023 / Holt - Sep 18, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Free education or new technology in developing countries.

2 - You are misinforming the reader and placing unnecessary information in your restatement that will affect the original message...

Writing Feedbackvuvietanh123 - Sep 6, 2023 / Holt - Sep 18, 2023

IELTS WRTING TASK 1 - TABLE: INTERNATIONAL STUDENTS IN CANADA AND USA

NEW - students in canada by their country of origin The table delineates the number of foreign students in Canada...

Writing Feedbacksonbiee - Sep 18, 2023 / — -

Although families have influence on children's development, factors outside the home do too.

NEW - influence on child development It is a common belief that children are primarily affected by household members nurturing...

Writing FeedbackKieu Sa Nguyen - Sep 18, 2023 / — -

What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying online?

NEW - studying online pros and cons What do you think of studying online? It is popular with its convenience...

Writing Feedbackleanhthao - Sep 18, 2023 / — -

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