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[WRITING TASK 2] Living in metropolises is bad for people's health ( Agree or Disagree )

2 - Avoid using this word in a formal essay. This is considered an informal way of saying "and so...

Writing Feedbackhongnam207 - Jul 1, 2023 / Holt - Jul 7, 2023

The number of obese people is on the rise, presenting a danger to people's health

2 - This essay is tremendously overwritten. You will not be able to write over 400 words within 40 minutes. Remmeber...

Writing Feedbackthuynpt - Jul 1, 2023 / Holt - Jul 7, 2023

The idea of single-sex schools for boys and girls

2 - This presentation is under developed. The writer does not clearly offer his opinion in the opening paragraph. That is...

Writing Feedbackthaoly2007 - Jul 1, 2023 / Holt - Jul 7, 2023

In countries that have already achieved influence, any additional wealth wouldn't add happiness

2 - The writer has an error in his prompt restatement. Aflluence pertains to wealth, not just extra property. So the...

Writing FeedbackOsuG - Jun 30, 2023 / Holt - Jul 7, 2023

Comment on this ielts writing task 1: The proportion of urban population in four Asian nations

2 - The essay has too many words in it to be completed during the actual test. You should learn to...

Writing Feedbackhuyenanhmcqn - Jun 30, 2023 / Holt - Jul 7, 2023

What is the cause of generation gap? What are the solutions to this?

2 - The essay is over written and cannot be completed within 40 minutes during an actual test. This essay in...

Writing Feedbackinneyel - Jun 29, 2023 / Holt - Jul 7, 2023

WRITING TASK 1: The seven stages of salmon's life cycle.

3 - Remember that in task 1, using pronouns is unpermitted because this is an analysis essay, not an opinion. Also,...

Writing Feedbackselenakieu - Jun 24, 2023 / dangngoctung4 - Jul 6, 2023

WRITING TASK 1: The pictures below show the process of making clothes from recycled plastic bottles

2 - You clearly understood the diagram that was presented. The process was well covered in the explanation, but not very...

Writing Feedbackkatiebruse - Jun 29, 2023 / Holt - Jul 6, 2023

Modern life style is completely different from the way people lived in the past

2 - While we do know this as a matter of public knowledge, you do not need to stress this...

Writing FeedbackThuydung61 - Jun 29, 2023 / Holt - Jul 5, 2023

Some people think that renewable energy sources like solar and wind power should replace fossil fuel

2 - The prompt restatement will receive a failing preliminary sectional score since it is a run-on sentence. You should instead,...

Writing Feedbackhlingg_0307 - Jun 28, 2023 / Holt - Jul 5, 2023

Ielts 2: Right to University no matter of financial background of potential students

2 - The discussion you have presented correctly paraphrased the original topic. It worked quite well even though it was too...

Writing Feedbacktoof777 - Jun 28, 2023 / Holt - Jul 5, 2023

It's more important for children speding time outside than spending time in front of screen

NEW - TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE some people believe that it is worth doing outdoor activities...

Writing Feedbackduywrting - Jul 2, 2023 / — -

TASK 1 - The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks

3 - I think your essay is quite rigid and some word usage is inappropriate. The introduction is not well-paraphrased and...

Writing Feedbackkubokid - Jun 28, 2023 / Evelyn Pham - Jul 1, 2023

Men and women do not need share the same responsibilities at home and in everyday life. Do you agree

2 - The essay will receive an immediate failing score due to several reasons: 1. The prompt restatement is an...

Writing Feedbackmaichi - Jun 28, 2023 / Holt - Jun 30, 2023

Who should take care of preschool-aged children teachers in childcare centers or their grandparents?

2 - The examiner is looking for accurate representation of the original topic and ideas behind it. There was no...

Writing Feedbackgrace00000 - Jun 27, 2023 / Holt - Jun 30, 2023

Children are being told that they can achieve anything if they work hard, pros and cons?

3 - and try to archive that -> achieve However, doing so also has disadvantages -> I think you can directly...

Writing FeedbackBigk016 - Jun 17, 2023 / thuthao19321 - Jun 28, 2023

WRITING TASK 2: Do you agree or disagree that following news is a waste of time?

3 - @Holt Thanks for your help!...

Writing Feedbackselenakieu - Jun 27, 2023 / selenakieu - Jun 28, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - ASSESSMENT TO ABILITY OF STUDENTS

3 - I think you should use '." in the last sentence...

Writing Feedbackchloemarles - Jun 17, 2023 / thuthao19321 - Jun 27, 2023

TASK 2 : Some university want to learn another subjects in addition to their main subjects, believes

4 - the first sentence of para 2 is too complicated...

Writing Feedbackdtun_hi - Jun 22, 2023 / thuthao19321 - Jun 27, 2023

Task 2: It would be necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to learn

2 - The preliminary TA consideration for this essay will automatically be a failing one for 2 reasons. The first, is...

Writing Feedbackthuthao19321 - Jun 27, 2023 / Holt - Jun 27, 2023

Some people think children's spending time on TV, video and PC games is good, while others think it.

3 - I think you have some problems with your IELTS format and the form of your presentation. Some basic mistakes...

Writing FeedbackDaizerboi - Jun 23, 2023 / thuthao19321 - Jun 26, 2023

IELTS TASK 2 : Extinction is a natural process for animal species such as dinosaurs

2 - While your discussion is sound and well supported by verifiable examples, there is a serios problem with your English...

Writing Feedbackhunnie - Jun 25, 2023 / Holt - Jun 26, 2023

Task 2-Local shops are affected by the shopping online trend. Problems might this cause? solutions?

2 - Think of this paper as an academic paper. When you write an academic paper, you have to accomplish 2...

Writing FeedbackLeoOnTheRoad - Jun 25, 2023 / Holt - Jun 26, 2023

Male and female passing their driving license test in one Asian country

2 - While your identification of the image provided is correct, you did not give a proper indicator of the division...

Writing Feedbacklemai6541 - Jun 25, 2023 / Holt - Jun 25, 2023

Describe one of your typical days when you are not working or studying

2 - I am unable to review this essay in a manner that would be helpful to you because you did...

Writing Feedbackmaian - Jun 25, 2023 / Holt - Jun 25, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - THE RAPID ADANCEMENT OF TECHNOLOGY DEVELOPMENT - PROS AND CONS

2 - The prompt restatement took a long time to restate the information provided, then proceeded to become an empty statement...

Writing Feedbackhhan666 - Jun 24, 2023 / Holt - Jun 25, 2023

The number of people who use internet in USA, Canada and Mexico as percentage from 1999 to 2009

3 - Hi @mingochjhj You should not use "we" or "I", which are pronouns that describe personal opinion in a report...

Writing Feedbackmingochjhj - Jun 17, 2023 / selenakieu - Jun 24, 2023

E-books vs traditional books-IELTS Writing Task 2

6 - Hi @IELTSAlt I think you should reduce the number of words in your essay by following this structure for...

Writing FeedbackIELTSAlt - Jun 15, 2023 / selenakieu - Jun 24, 2023

More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this?

3 - Your essay is rather good in my opinion! Your essay structure is well developed, having mentioned two main reasons...

Writing FeedbackNoubhn - Jun 22, 2023 / AntherRR - Jun 24, 2023

Topic 1: The autonomous vehicles are likely to be quickly popular in the future

2 - You will not receive additional scoring consideration in the writer's opinion area when you give vague responses...

Writing FeedbackMonica20042003 - Jun 22, 2023 / Holt - Jun 23, 2023

Changing jobs often or doing the same job. Discuss both view and give your opinion

2 - The writer has not written the essay in the expected response format. This is a discuss both views and...

Writing FeedbackTraLeMinhAnh1108 - Jun 22, 2023 / Holt - Jun 23, 2023

IELTS TASK 2: Solar energy has become an important part of our life. Advantages and disadvantages.

2 - The essay has failed to meet the minimum word count requirement. Since the number of words missing are quite...

Writing Feedbackquanhqa - Jun 22, 2023 / Holt - Jun 23, 2023

Task 1: yearly salary of three bakeries in Calgary between 2000 and 2001

3 - There are some mistakes in your task: between 2000 and 2001 I think it must be "between 2000 and...

Writing FeedbackHelenNguyen712 - Jun 15, 2023 / Sunny Chen - Jun 23, 2023

Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good

3 - I think the comparison with the past at the first body paragraph is unnecessary. Instead, you should elaborate more...

Writing FeedbackAmanda Helen - Jun 19, 2023 / huyenanhmcqn - Jun 22, 2023

Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. Agree or disagree?

3 - Thank you so much, I will take it into seriously in the next essay....

Writing Feedbackdtun_hi - Jun 21, 2023 / dtun_hi - Jun 22, 2023

Short Essay about your passion in an academic subject and what driven you to keep going on that path

2 - Your response is the exact opposite of what the writing instruction is about. You are being asked to write...

Writing FeedbackRaleExists - Jun 21, 2023 / Holt - Jun 22, 2023

IELTS task 2: Advertisements has become more common in daily life. Pros and cons.

2 - Although you have shown that you have an extensive vocabulary when it comes to the English language, having written...

Writing Feedbackvictoria_pham - Jun 21, 2023 / Holt - Jun 22, 2023

An ielts writing task one about why african teenagers using their phones between 2016 to 2019

2 - I cannot properly review and assess this essay due to the incorrect writing format that you used in the...

Writing Feedbackbray - Jun 21, 2023 / Holt - Jun 22, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2: ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE AND THE ROLE OF TEACHERS

2 - The essay will not meet the task accuracy requirements because the question posed in the original prompt was not...

Writing Feedbackangeliale - Jun 20, 2023 / Holt - Jun 21, 2023

WRITING TASK 2: Solitary lifestyle

2 - The thesis statement for the topic should have been divided into 2 sentences. The presentation asks you to respond...

Writing Feedbackhuongdothithu - Jun 20, 2023 / Holt - Jun 21, 2023

Task 1 Ielts : The graph below gives information about the number of citizens in 4 Asian countries

2 - The summary overview is missing just a few more elements to make it a comprehensive summary. It is important...

Writing Feedbacktlinhng - Jun 19, 2023 / Holt - Jun 20, 2023

Many individuals view climate change as detrimental to their businesses, some have different opinion

2 - This is an unnecessary reference. You have already established the opinions that will be discussed in the restatement....

Writing FeedbackMisa_Emily - Jun 19, 2023 / Holt - Jun 20, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Smoking in public places - the ban is justified

2 - While there is a problem with the lack of sentence variations in your presentation, your ideas are sound a...

Writing FeedbackEvelyn Pham - Jun 19, 2023 / Holt - Jun 19, 2023

Students should be allowed to pursue college for free

3 - There are a few minor errors in your essay, for instance: "provision of free-of-charge education"-->"the provision" "their children learning"-->"children's...

Writing Feedbackhonganh2299 - Jun 16, 2023 / AntherRR - Jun 18, 2023

IELTS TASK 2: If people want to find a job, they have to move away from their friends........

2 - Only the second reasoning paragraph will be given scoring considerations for this writing task. That is because only that...

Writing Feedbackhuonguyen0206 - Jun 17, 2023 / Holt - Jun 18, 2023

This graph gives information about the percentage of city inhabitants. Summarize and Compare!

2 - This essay is too long for a 20 minute writing task. A 300 word count means you took at...

Writing Feedbackyuedevoir - Jun 17, 2023 / Holt - Jun 18, 2023

IELTS 2 - should children learn another language at primary school rather than in the middle school?

2 - The main problem of this essay is located in the reasoning paragraphs. You have over written and compressed the...

Writing FeedbackCharlie208 - Jun 17, 2023 / Holt - Jun 18, 2023

Essay about driving tests to check my academic writing.

2 - This essay is so over composed that it actually has almost 300 words in it. Meaning, it was written...

Writing FeedbackSangie - Jun 16, 2023 / Holt - Jun 18, 2023

WRITING TASK 1: The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports

2 - You keep on using a reference to "parts" in the essay, which is normally used to describe personal abilities...

Writing Feedbackvnahng - Jun 16, 2023 / Holt - Jun 18, 2023

Why more and more people are migrating to cities life in search of a better life?

3 - Your essay reached the desirable length because you were able to get right on the topic, so you shouldn't...

Writing Feedbackpikachuuuu - Jun 14, 2023 / AntherRR - Jun 18, 2023

The graph gives information about coffee production in 4 different countries from 1990 to 2010.

2 - This is a bad statement. It implies a global measurement when only selected countries were used. Next time,...

Writing FeedbackMin E - Jun 15, 2023 / Holt - Jun 17, 2023

IELTS 2: In some nations, citizens favor purchasing a home over renting property for some reasons

2 - Your first paragraph did not accomplish the task of providing a proper discussion overview for the reader. You also...

Writing Feedbackphoebecrazyyy - Jun 14, 2023 / Holt - Jun 17, 2023

Rising fuel prices as the ideal response to global environmental issues.

2 - While the prompt restatement is accurate, the writer failed to properly address the question as provided. To what extent...

Writing Feedbackshiroia - Jun 14, 2023 / Holt - Jun 17, 2023

It it easier to have a healthier lifestyle in the countryside.

2 - Task 2 essays do not require the writer to present a time reference in any writing portion. That is...

Writing Feedbackqueenannez - Jun 13, 2023 / Holt - Jun 17, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - RISKS-TAKING (the advantages of taking risks overweigh the disadvantages?)

2 - The prompt restatement is problematic in the sense that while it does reference fear, it does not accurately represent...

Writing Feedbackkhangdo1712 - Jun 13, 2023 / Holt - Jun 17, 2023

Children should mix? - IELTS Writing Task 2

3 - There are some noteworthy grammar errors in your essay: "specialities" --> "specialties", "the divergent of" --> "the divergence of"....

Writing FeedbackLeHoa - Jun 11, 2023 / chloemarles - Jun 16, 2023

WRITING IELTS TASK 2: POSIVITIVE OR NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT OF TECHNOLOGY ON VIRTUAL CLASS AND OFFICE

3 - **Some grammar errors: - techonological development. --> technological - First, virtual working and studying is --> are (because "working...

Writing FeedbackTien Pham - Jun 10, 2023 / chloemarles - Jun 16, 2023

WRITING TASK 1 The average proportions of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in meals

3 - You must not express your opinion, just report that. (like in intro) In the overview, you should emphasize biggest...

Writing Feedbackcatu155 - Jun 12, 2023 / thg080206 - Jun 16, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TEACHERS' ROLE IN BEHAVIOUR OF STUDENTS

2 - While your prompt restatement may be deemed acceptable, it will be receiving point deductions for your last sentence where...

Writing Feedbackchloemarles - Jun 13, 2023 / Holt - Jun 16, 2023

IELTS Writing Task 2 - REDUCING CRIME RATE

2 - When writing this a response to this type of question, you should avoid doing 2 things: 1. Using a...

Writing Feedbackphgahh - Jun 12, 2023 / Holt - Jun 16, 2023

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