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|Six different categories of families living in poverty in Australia - report
2 - I think you have written this in preparation of IELTS Task 1. It is always good to mention the...
Writing Feedbackzyxily - Dec 15, 2013 / dumi - Dec 18, 2013
|TOEFL: It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends
3 - Well ... your essay looks like a direct answer to the prompt. However, you need to present it in...
Writing Feedbacksivian - Dec 15, 2013 / dumi - Dec 18, 2013
|Video Games and the American Dream [Help with a Naysayer]
Writing FeedbackDizonl - Dec 1, 2013 / ali ahsan123 - Dec 18, 2013
|TOEFL:Some people prefer to work for a large company; international conferences
5 - I'll put in some comments about your grammar. As mentioned by Sivian easier already has a comparative...
Writing Feedbacklast - Dec 15, 2013 / Liyuan - Dec 17, 2013
|There are many types of music in the world today; 'mental disease therapy'
Writing FeedbackJOYCE TENG - Dec 17, 2013 / znack - Dec 17, 2013
|Charity began at home - helping others essay
3 - Charity is about helping people either with money or other forms of aids such as medicine, clothes and...
Writing Feedbackakhalifa - Dec 16, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|IELTS- Workers in traditional industry (doctors, nursing and teachers)
7 - Yes, this is much better than what you wrote previously. :) People hold beliefs / People believe...
Writing Feedbackvmagic - Dec 13, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|Humankind is interested to imitate novel things, since he opened his eyes in this world
6 - youhold an opinion Also, I prefer if this fits in with the structure I suggested to you above. Conclude...
Writing FeedbackNinita - Dec 14, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|Teenagers have job while they are still student; bad effects on their education
9 - Thank you. I appreciated your sympathy. I'm in a good condition. My place is far from the area...
Writing Feedbackokaert - Dec 14, 2013 / niesaysi - Dec 17, 2013
|IELTS : Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today`s
Writing Feedbackfatihy - Dec 17, 2013 / fatihy - Dec 17, 2013
|IELTS; It is essential to treasure music as one of the vital kinds of art
Writing Feedbackladyjoy - Dec 15, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|"A father's influence in his daughter's life: ; Every Girl Needs Her Dad
Writing FeedbackRylee23 - Dec 16, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|[TOEFL] contribution of scientists have value more than contribution of artists
2 - .... This should be a hook statement which can grab the reader's attention instantly. However, this sentence does...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Dec 16, 2013 / dumi - Dec 17, 2013
|IELTS ; Pay attention to preserve culture and environment
Writing Feedbackznack - Dec 12, 2013 / JethroJosh - Dec 17, 2013
|GRE argument response--Of the two leading real estate firms in our town Adams is superior
Writing Feedbackbuheboljgin - Dec 3, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 16, 2013
|'Dorothy: a reflection' - Creative writing about belonging
2 - hi:) I couldn't look away that u had written,i just think its better 2 say i just couldnt take...
Writing Feedbackhaleygrace - Dec 5, 2013 / mika1998 - Dec 15, 2013
|International pollution issues such as the energy shortage and global warming
3 - I agree with Dumi. " Increasing and deteriorating are contrast to each other. Grammatically speaking, the...
Writing FeedbackShahoo - Dec 14, 2013 / niesaysi - Dec 15, 2013
|I stood gazing at the dilapidated house
2 - As I stood gazing at the dilapidated house, I shivered as though ice had replace my spine. ......
Writing Feedbackmolly_butler01 - Dec 14, 2013 / dumi - Dec 14, 2013
|IELTS: People from different countries have various customs and behaviors
3 - .... you can improve the presentation of this idea; Customs and traditions differ from nation to nation and...
Writing Feedbackpamani - Dec 14, 2013 / dumi - Dec 14, 2013
|IELTS : Tradations and money-making attractions aimed at tourists
7 - Well.... in the introduction you need to introduce the title in its original sense. This prompt says; ...
Writing Feedbackgavin - Dec 13, 2013 / dumi - Dec 13, 2013
|IELTS-task1-the table below gives information related to population growth...
Writing Feedbacktiyuok - Dec 12, 2013 / tiyuok - Dec 13, 2013
|People listen to music for different reasons at different times
2 - I find this paragraph irrelevant to the topic. You didn't give reasons why music is so important to...
Writing Feedbackhanyoojung - Dec 13, 2013 / greenleaf - Dec 13, 2013
|IELTS - Reearing a child in strict or no-rules culture. Discuss merits of both
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Dec 2, 2013 / znack - Dec 13, 2013
|A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people
2 - meat contains protein mostly and not vitamins. :D Well... this is the essay structure we suggest for this...
Writing FeedbackShahoo - Dec 13, 2013 / dumi - Dec 13, 2013
|TEEN MIAMI; How extracurricular activities have influenced me
Writing Feedbackmj2794 - Dec 8, 2013 / mj2794 - Dec 13, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should the government sponsor artists or artists sponsor themselves?
4 - Dumi, Greenleaf, Thank you both for pointing out the mistakes. Actually, I am going to take TOEFL this weekend...
Writing Feedbackbleu929 - Dec 12, 2013 / bleu929 - Dec 13, 2013
|The Role of Media in The Lives of Americans
2 - Media has had a profound affectimpact on the lives of Americans / Media has profoundly affected the lives of...
Writing FeedbackAlecSalisbury - Dec 12, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 13, 2013
|After 19 century, everything changes dramatically like never before - Life today is more comfortable
Writing Feedbackwendi - Dec 11, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 13, 2013
|"Never Lose Hope" - Narrative/Descriptive Essay
2 - I really liked the way you have narrated the incident and everything. But i felt that this situation was...
Writing Feedbacktasfia_sultana - Dec 3, 2013 / SreeSam - Dec 13, 2013
|IELTS- Many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one- advantages/disadvantages
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Dec 12, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 13, 2013
|IELTS 2: Average weight of people is increasing and level of health decreasing,solution
Writing FeedbackJins - Dec 12, 2013 / SreeSam - Dec 12, 2013
|The importance to have second language ; First paragraph
6 - Ok... if so, this should contain the reasons and examples to support those reasons. Generally it is good to...
Writing FeedbackMurilo - Dec 11, 2013 / dumi - Dec 12, 2013
|No one can deny the benefits to be gain from leading a hand to in needed nations
Writing FeedbackMichael Tran - Dec 12, 2013 / MisterWandering - Dec 12, 2013
|"Old is gold" - City should try to preserve its old, historic buildings
Writing FeedbackHuma khan - Dec 12, 2013 / Huma khan - Dec 12, 2013
|TOEFL; Today's competitive society requires at least social independence from parents for survival
Writing Feedbackatacankucuk - Dec 11, 2013 / atacankucuk - Dec 12, 2013
|[TOEFL] the most important characteristic to be successful is intelligence
2 - .... this has a few issues in terms of grammar; People who become successful in life possess certain...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Dec 12, 2013 / dumi - Dec 12, 2013
|IELTS; Subjects taught in schools are to be decided by central authorities or teachers?
4 - Being in the teaching profession for years, teachers would be able to clearly picturise the ideas and topics which...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Dec 11, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 12, 2013
|IELTS essay - Animals should not be exploited or humans must use animals to satisfy them
6 - This tropic sentence is suggested to be rewritten as it is irrelevant to the supporting sentences. When you...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Dec 2, 2013 / Alexielts - Dec 12, 2013
|The Equal Rights: men should be responsible for children's upbringing
Writing Feedbackmonokakau - Dec 11, 2013 / monokakau - Dec 11, 2013
|SAT; Judging a book by its cover
6 - Well.... you may cite certain literature work as examples and that is no harm. However, in this...
Writing Feedbackslevia94 - Nov 20, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|Being a foreign language teacher is needed or not
4 - :) That's a good attempt. If you are practicing in view of improving your English writing skills, then IELTS...
Writing FeedbackMandy Chan - Dec 1, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|Some schools are introducing unpaid community services into their school programmes compulsorily.
Writing Feedbackruilee - Dec 10, 2013 / fatihy007 - Dec 11, 2013
|IELTS ; What is the best way to reduce crime?
3 - 1. Need to improve your grammar & punctuation 2. Try writing simple sentences & make it clear for...
Writing Feedbackfatihy007 - Dec 11, 2013 / SreeSam - Dec 11, 2013
|ESSAY ABOUT DREAM THEORIES; we have only brushed the surface
3 - but after centuries of interpretations and studies accumulated throughout the years, it's still a question to which we have...
Writing FeedbackCtence - Nov 18, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|One of the characteristics of successful leaders is the sense of responsibility for accept
3 - Well, leadership had always been in demand since the inception of this world, not only among humans, but...
Writing FeedbackHellen - Dec 11, 2013 / dumi - Dec 11, 2013
|IELTS WT 2 - Advertisment is more harmful than helpful to humantity. Agree or disagree?
6 - 1. Good essay. 2. Introduction could have been more attractive or catchy ---------------- Help with mine ⇒...
Writing Feedbackmariali - Dec 10, 2013 / CASOON - Dec 10, 2013
|It is crucial in mathematics, insight plays an secondary role; Amherst Insight 'Reasoning' Essay
3 - nicely done. I take it that your response agrees with the paragraph at the top (albeit without stating it...
Writing FeedbackLydmeister - Dec 8, 2013 / coolintake - Dec 10, 2013
|Young adults - early independence or living with family for a long time?
4 - Yes, I too agree with greenleaf. Your topic sounds like an IELTS or TOEFL topic. If you prepare...
Writing Feedbackmasoud48 - Dec 10, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 10, 2013
|[Toefl ibt-Opinion Essay] Should Attendance Be Required in College?
Writing Feedbackemma13 - Dec 9, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|IELTS; Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.
5 - Thanks a lot for helping me guys. It's really very helpful for me. Someone can please also help me...
Writing FeedbackGirishgautams - Dec 8, 2013 / Girishgautams - Dec 10, 2013
|GRE - ISSUE/ARGUMENT; All parents should volunteer time to their children's schools
3 - I like if you concluded this introduction with expressing you opinion rather than opening your essay with the opinion....
Writing FeedbackMoralesJ - Dec 3, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|[IELTS - Task 2] Examinations can give a clear picture of students' true ability
7 - That's good news! Please go to the EF Contributors page (you find it at the bottom - click on...
Writing Feedbackgreenleaf - Dec 9, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|IELTS essay - role of news editors in broadcasting the news
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Dec 10, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|How do movies or television influence people's behavior? it is part of our lives
Writing Feedbackaoey - Dec 7, 2013 / aoey - Dec 10, 2013
|Homework helps teachers to assess students' understanding ; Advantages of homework
6 - Body paragraphs are used to elaborate on reasons. What is the key reason here? It is time management....
Writing FeedbackFofo123 - Dec 8, 2013 / dumi - Dec 10, 2013
|Characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality n development
5 - I think this sentence have no strength. It emphasizes nothing. Try to rewrite it and include your main...
Writing Feedbacknidhishaw - Dec 1, 2013 / mariali - Dec 10, 2013
|UK economic structure had experienced considerable changes over the last century - the graph
Writing Feedbackgreenleaf - Dec 7, 2013 / greenleaf - Dec 9, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task2 - Causes and solutions in preventing bad influence of adult products
7 - FrankZheng: Yep, thank you, now I find it clearer :D I should rewrite the second paragraph, and focus to...
Writing Feedbackmariali - Dec 9, 2013 / mariali - Dec 9, 2013
|Work or travel before university; very difficult to resume after discontinuation
4 - .... since you mentioned countries, you should have included at least one more country. Again the word "perspective"...
Writing Feedbacknidhishaw - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 9, 2013
|hometown clean - if you could change one important thing about your hometown?
3 - Ok.... First, I have a few admin requests for you - Include the purpose of writing (e.g. TOEFL, IELTS)...
Writing Feedbackkhodekhodam - Nov 28, 2013 / dumi - Dec 9, 2013
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