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|"Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandy sitting alone"
4 - Patrick walked into the room and spotted sandySandy sitting alone. He walkswalked up to her and very nervously asked...
Writing FeedbackAnelis123 - Oct 10, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|Murder, bloodshed, carnage; why exactly is it wrong?
4 - From the beginning of times, murder hashad been viewed as the ultimate crime deprived of life ...
Writing FeedbackBipabrena - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Oct 24, 2013
|IELTS : IN MANY COUNTRIES TODAY INSUFFICIENT RESPECT GIVEN TO OLD PEOPLE >...
Writing FeedbackShaan123 - Oct 21, 2013 / Shaan123 - Oct 24, 2013
|TOEFL;universities require students to studymany subjects or specialize in one subject
Writing Feedbackpppanta - Oct 23, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 23, 2013
|Some people think that private schools should be banned.
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Oct 23, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 23, 2013
|Argumentative Essay : Living on campus
8 - .... good point, but when you talk about competition among them, it kind of disturbs your idea :(...
Writing Feedbackcactus2601 - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 23, 2013
|Have you ever been in a crowded and dirty place? ;descriptive essay
4 - That is my introduction so i tried not to be specific in that paragraph. My teacher told me to...
Writing Feedbackboy3005 - Oct 23, 2013 / boy3005 - Oct 23, 2013
|Some teachers and parents suggest that rivalry between children should exist, while others don't
8 - In your body paragraphs, you should justify your opinion by giving reasons. And then you should support them...
Writing FeedbackGulala - Oct 13, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|BABYSITTING; Narration of process essay
Writing FeedbackCollege girl 13 - Oct 19, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|Perhaps food satisfies both the taste buds and the heart
Writing Feedbackthisistram - Oct 23, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|Man's Best Friend and Medicine; ESSAY ON ANIMAL THERAPY
4 - ... this sentence is too long and contain too many ideas. Therefore, it does not clearly deliver the...
Writing Feedbackczlets12 - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|English Informative essay about what people don't know of petroleum engineering.
2 - Many people perceive petroleum engineering is merely something to do with petroleum being converted into gasoline. ...
Writing Feedbackber - Oct 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 23, 2013
|Soon people who cannot work with computers will be disadvantaged- IELTS
Writing Feedbackravenet - Oct 14, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 22, 2013
|IELTS: Born with talents or talents can be trained? Discuss both views!
Writing Feedbackstream_xu - Oct 17, 2013 / stream_xu - Oct 22, 2013
|Waving thoughts; Narrative Essay (Revising and correcting)
4 - Thank you all, just realized that I didn't even posted the full essay. If you found it nonsense, that's...
Writing Feedbackjorgearmando18 - Sep 26, 2013 / jorgearmando18 - Oct 22, 2013
|IELTS: More houses are needed in many countries to cope with increasing people...
Writing FeedbackGulala - Oct 22, 2013 / MisterWandering - Oct 22, 2013
|Process Analysis Essay-How to change a tire (Proofread, suggestions, improvement)
Writing Feedbackjorgearmando18 - Oct 22, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 22, 2013
|We stand together looking at the flag; What does patriotism mean to me?
4 - the audience will be veterans, i think it probably should stay on the topic of war veterans but...
Writing Feedbackoksanavy7 - Sep 22, 2013 / oksanavy7 - Oct 22, 2013
|Increased fees affecting demand for University degrees
Writing FeedbackCJA - Oct 15, 2013 / CJA - Oct 22, 2013
|COMPARE/CONTRAST essay about my mother&sister
4 - Overall though is it a good essay.... I'm going to edit it and make changes and post it again...
Writing FeedbackCollege girl 13 - Oct 21, 2013 / College girl 13 - Oct 22, 2013
|Governments &Companies should share their scientific discoveries
2 - It's always better you mention the purpose of your writing in the title. For example, IELTS, TOEFL etc. Then...
Writing FeedbackRichardGe - Oct 22, 2013 / dumi - Oct 22, 2013
|TOEFL: 'analogous concern and money' - financial support for sports and social activities
6 - TOEFL Independent writing task expects you to provide specific examples to back the reasons that you present to...
Writing Feedbacknasiim - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 22, 2013
|knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decision today.
Writing FeedbackArunabh05 - Oct 10, 2013 / ebychris - Oct 22, 2013
|What changes your perception in order to be a better communicator
4 - In high school, I also got involved with Physics Olympiad Team. ... what do you mean by science-based...
Writing Feedbackkevinj888 - Oct 21, 2013 / dumi - Oct 22, 2013
|what are benefits of shopping online.
Writing Feedbackbixanh - Oct 21, 2013 / bixanh - Oct 21, 2013
|Human Cloning is the creation of a lab human or test tube baby!
Writing FeedbackNiuWang - Oct 14, 2013 / NiuWang - Oct 21, 2013
|TOEFL: Why people attend universities?
3 - ... I don't find any relevance between this sentence and your topic. This is your hook and it...
Writing Feedbackaqua12713 - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 21, 2013
|TOEFL: learning facts has more subsequent advantages for students' future lives
Writing Feedbacknasiim - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|TOEFL; Dancing plays an important role in a culture.
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 19, 2013 / legend777 - Oct 20, 2013
|I was waving goodbye to the life I had for 16 years/Transition from Childhood to Adulthood
5 - I like it! It's really great. The ONLY thing I would say is switch one "alive" to something else,...
Writing Feedbackrp2013 - Oct 11, 2013 / tayleeb - Oct 20, 2013
|TV & Movies have negative effects on children.
3 - Where is the example? Make sure you provide a specific example to each reason you bring up to...
Writing Feedbacksusananley - Oct 20, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|Prevalence and Risk of Violence; Sex Trafficking in India
Writing Feedbackhaleyfister - Oct 18, 2013 / cactus2601 - Oct 20, 2013
|I live in beautiful Vietnam; My Country
4 - I think you better improve the structure. In the introduction give a short description about Vietnam's geography, its people,...
Writing Feedbackhikarulap - Oct 20, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|Negative effects of small vehicles; Persuasive Essay
2 - What would be the first thing an immigrant would notice aboutin Toronto? There is no doubt, it...
Writing Feedbackcontigo - Oct 17, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|IELTS;A government's role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure
2 - ... Why did you have a capital "I" for that word (irrespective)? The primary function of every government...
Writing Feedbackshiva sai - Oct 17, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|TOEFL Essay about capital punishment
6 - I agree with legend777. You display very good writing skills, however, you need to adopt a good essay...
Writing Feedbackhamed_vali68 - Oct 17, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|Most of the people do not have adequate knowledge of the place they are traveling to
Writing Feedbacklegend777 - Oct 17, 2013 / dumi - Oct 20, 2013
|It is important to have good person to be a good roommate - you have to stay with him for a while
3 - To begin with, a roommate should be a considerate person. If the roommate does not possess this quality...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 18, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|Parents and adults should have a say in important decisions of teenage children
3 - Well... you need to give prominence to the reasons you use to back your position in the argument....
Writing Feedbackguisela - Oct 18, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|Choosing and wearing clothes by high school students
7 - .... try to have more prominence to the reason and then give more details about it; First, uniform...
Writing Feedbackelan - Oct 18, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|Schooling helps kids to learn socialism and other important lessons - in school
Writing Feedbacktishca2013 - Oct 16, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 20, 2013
|TOEFL INTEGRATED:The objectives of Dinosaurs' crests
Writing FeedbackJin Hyung - Oct 18, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|Discuss the impact of the influx of immigrants and foreigners into Singapore.
Writing FeedbackSmiler - Oct 19, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|The benefits of travelling for the traveller
4 - ... This is not a very clear sentence. The word "people" getting repeated too often and that confuses...
Writing Feedbackbehrooz_00133 - Oct 19, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|In some countries most of the people prefer to rent a house rather than buy one
7 - However, there are negative aspects toin renting a house. .... very good point :) In many instances,...
Writing Feedbackhello2hanson - Oct 18, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|TOEFL Government is not necessary since we can redress many problems by our own.
5 - .... hey.... you've got to be careful with your spellings because they also are an important aspect of...
Writing Feedbackelan - Oct 16, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|IELTS - Do the benefits of globalization outweigh the drawbacks?
2 - This is a good body paragraph where you explain the reason as to why you take that position in...
Writing Feedbackjoylabx - Oct 16, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 19, 2013
|'intellectual sources'; Colleges should better prepare students for the future.
3 - unfortunately in medicine they offer alot of courses for getiing ready them before being a doctor but in technical...
Writing Feedbackevelyn410 - Oct 19, 2013 / soheylvahabzade - Oct 19, 2013
|What are the pros and cons of immigration?
Writing Feedbacksoheylvahabzade - Oct 19, 2013 / dumi - Oct 19, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY:WHAT CAN WE DO TO PROMOTE EQUALITY?
Writing Feedbackbey - Oct 9, 2013 / dumi - Oct 19, 2013
|Students' academic skills strongly reflect how their teacher helps them to promote their performance
5 - Thanks to help me. If you possible, Can you give me any writing tips? and give me score (full...
Writing FeedbackJintastic - Oct 14, 2013 / Jin Hyung - Oct 19, 2013
|It is certain that a country's success is built up by several factors
2 - ... it's not the quality, .... it is the status of economy or economic development/ progress ...
Writing Feedbackningo - Oct 18, 2013 / dumi - Oct 19, 2013
|Live in the same climate or changing climates? Which one do you prefer?
5 - Thank you....
Writing Feedbacksomething - Oct 11, 2013 / something - Oct 18, 2013
|TOEFL - Children managing their own money - best way to learn responsibility
8 - No problem ;)...
Writing Feedbacklegend777 - Oct 16, 2013 / legend777 - Oct 17, 2013
|'Rabindranath Tagore'; Children should be educated at home by their parents
Writing FeedbackJoohi24 - Oct 11, 2013 / gmad06 - Oct 16, 2013
|'political stability': Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth
Writing Feedbackadhikaribabita - Oct 13, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 16, 2013
|IELTS; Schools should provide practical knowledge and skills to students
Writing Feedbackjoylabx - Oct 16, 2013 / ravenet - Oct 16, 2013
|Small age kids have fresh brains, they are curious and grasp things easily.
2 - Throughout your essay, I find some disturbance in your presentation of ideas. I don't say your sentences are grammatically...
Writing Feedbacktushar241319 - Oct 16, 2013 / dumi - Oct 16, 2013
|Banning of smoking in public places; "Smoking is injurious to health"
2 - Try not to use questions in the intro and use facts or history(However, do not use defintion) First, details...
Writing Feedbacktishca2013 - Oct 16, 2013 / amymaria - Oct 16, 2013
|Should animals be used to research?
Writing Feedbackamymaria - Oct 15, 2013 / amymaria - Oct 16, 2013
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