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|IELTS Task 2 : The Freedom of Creativity
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 21, 2014
|Task 2. Crime and Punishment. IELTS
9 - For me, you write well enough. Also, if you could, you might construct your conclusion with this structure: ...
Writing FeedbackKarlito - Feb 13, 2014 / eddies - Feb 21, 2014
|IELTS Task II: Dress reflects Chracter
10 - if you could, you might construct your conclusion with this structure: The Concluding Paragraph has three parts: 1. a...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 10, 2014 / eddies - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS Some people think that government should provide unemployed people with a free cell
11 - Hellooo.., I strongly suggest you to follow Pahan's approach for your introduction. Also, if you could, you...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 11, 2014 / eddies - Feb 20, 2014
|I am applying Semester at Sea and I just want feedback!
2 - Since youthmy very young days , I have been listening to my father tell thefather's stories of adventures he...
Writing Feedbackjordifg - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|MALE AND FEMALE FITNESS MEMBERSHIP BETWEEN 1970 AND 2000
4 - I think that this sentence should be active sentence. the figure was almost doubled to approximately...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Feb 19, 2014 / tiaDS - Feb 20, 2014
|GRE1. dependence on technology weaken thinking ability
3 - First, thinking ability of people would be further fine tuned by the influence of technology. ......
Writing FeedbackSarah Park - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK I Fitnes Membership
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|Parents are most selfless well-wisher of children - IMPORTANT QUALITIES OF A GOOD SON OR DAUGHTER
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 19, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: On road transport in a number od European countries
2 - .... The highlighted parts are not delivering your idea clearly. You need to rephrase them :( It's better...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|"why a new global language is absolutely necessary for a new world.?"
Writing Feedbacksanky - Feb 20, 2014 / sanky - Feb 20, 2014
|Essay on " Every year several languages die out"; 'but still we manage our life'
7 - Yes, you can say that, but then you need to justify this stance in your body paragraphs. What you...
Writing Feedbackmottana - Feb 19, 2014 / dumi - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Living in "CONSUMER SOCIETIES"
2 - However, some people believe that consumer culture might bringplay a vital role in order to improving lives.living standards...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 19, 2014 / dumi - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS 1; Global sales of games software, Ds and Video or DVD
5 - The bar chart provides information about sales of games software, CDs and Video or DVD from the year...
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 19, 2014 / dumi - Feb 20, 2014
|IETLS Task II : Information Technology Benefit vs Disadvantages
2 - Information technology (IT) nowadays likesis likenuclear explosion which influences all parts of live including home, leisure, and work. nuclear...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 19, 2014 / dumi - Feb 20, 2014
|ESSAY EVALUTION - TOEFL - FALLOW YOUR CUSTOM OR OTHER COUNTRY'S.
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 18, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 19, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : International Sporting in easing international tensions
4 - Furthermore, with this events ==> these? cannot be the one way ==> could i remove "one"? cannot be...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 19, 2014 / ehaforyou - Feb 19, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : About athletes's Income
Writing Feedbackehaforyou - Feb 19, 2014 / ehaforyou - Feb 19, 2014
|Is experience better than book?
5 - First of all, both books and experiences lay the foundation of knowledge. .... very good sentence...
Writing Feedbacksevil - Feb 5, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 19, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Full-time and Part time Education in Britain
4 - It is better you presented these details in a manner of analysis. I mean compare the figures of males...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 18, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 19, 2014
|IELTS: SCIENTISTS VS POLITICIANS - Who have the greatest influence on our lives?
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 18, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 19, 2014
|TOEFL - Reasons of choosing dangerous sports or activity.
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 17, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 19, 2014
|TOEFL Essay - Compare and contrast you and your parents way of living
3 - ...."For starters" is not a good way to begin your sentence. "To begin with", "First" are better phrases...
Writing FeedbackNbabichev - Feb 18, 2014 / dumi - Feb 19, 2014
|check and grade IELTS Task 1 Diagram and table are attached
Writing Feedbackkimkitty - Feb 15, 2014 / eddies - Feb 18, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Do you believe studying hard will bring better life, Agree disagree
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 17, 2014 / eddies - Feb 18, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: IS IT GOOD TO CHANGE?
5 - For everybody, there is a moment in life that they would be demanded to change things from the...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014 / dumi - Feb 18, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: HIGH INCOME OF SPORTS PROFESSIONALS
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 5, 2014 / dumi - Feb 18, 2014
|I live in a country where poverty is a massive problem, and the lack of resources is very common
3 - There are some unacceptable spelling errors such as "First of all", "project". My suggestion is always to proofread after...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 17, 2014 / Alison - Feb 17, 2014
|IELTS General writing task II:Advantages and disadvantages of using mobile phones
Writing Feedbackdeyangsh - Feb 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 17, 2014
|TOEFL :Technology designed to make people's lives simpler often make them more complicated
Writing Feedbackkrnjeong - Feb 17, 2014 / krnjeong - Feb 17, 2014
|Responsibility of both visitors and the host to respect culture differences
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 17, 2014
|Higher salaries, risky job is better; 'people are motivated by their distress'
5 - First, open your threads for TOEFL essays in Writing Feedback forum. This has been transferred from Undergraduate to Writing...
Writing Feedbackmassiekur - Feb 17, 2014 / dumi - Feb 17, 2014
|TOEFL, It is impossible to be completely honest with friends.
5 - In many instances, people tend to lie to their friends in view of not hurting them by telling...
Writing Feedbackkihong3625 - Feb 9, 2014 / dumi - Feb 17, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Male and female number in University (re-write)
5 - In this sentence try to make link before describe about requirement (high school report and university early examination)....
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 16, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 17, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: DISTANCE EDUCATION AND CLASSROOM-BASED EDUCATION
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 16, 2014 / dumi - Feb 17, 2014
|Modern parents are more devoted to their children's education than parents in the past.
4 - Yes, you should have included the prompt of the essay so that we can have a better understanding about...
Writing Feedbackkrnjeong - Feb 16, 2014 / dumi - Feb 17, 2014
|Toefl - Government should spend money for developing ICT or meeting basic needs of people?
5 - sandipsinh: Thirdly, many countries of the world are trying to combat low - employment problem and impacted population of...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 14, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 16, 2014
|Toefl-Government's attention should be on ICT development or Meeting basic needs of people
4 - My Gratitude to u guys, Ill keep on practicing so that i could able to write effectively in time....
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 14, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 16, 2014
|TOEFL: Which makes more impact on happiness? Job or social life?
6 - Your writing is good. I enjoy reading it. However, it takes many words. When facing the exam, I think...
Writing Feedbackmassiekur - Feb 10, 2014 / eddies - Feb 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: RICH NATION HELP POOR TO ESTABLISH HEALTH, EDUCATION AND TRADE AREAS
5 - some countries. When you use the negated verb(s) or a negative meaning such as decline or refuse,...
Writing Feedbacksabakhai - Feb 13, 2014 / eddies - Feb 16, 2014
|IETLT Task I : Spending leisure time by young individuals and couples
9 - A few details it takes for grammatical mechanics. "Contain" here as a transitive verb, so omit "with"...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 11, 2014 / eddies - Feb 16, 2014
|planting a tree; Young people are more concerned - issues like the environment
5 - i think that essay is good regarding the linguistic structures but it lacks ideas organization introduction it lacks a...
Writing FeedbackAlison - Feb 7, 2014 / orthofracture - Feb 16, 2014
|My Flight to The U.S.A
6 - In a while, the pilot greeted us and made his anouncement "Good afternoon ladies and gentlemen! this is...
Writing Feedbackrashs - Feb 15, 2014 / dumi - Feb 16, 2014
|TOEFL-AD. Television has had a greater effect on people's lives than the telephone has.
Writing FeedbackCassieM - Feb 14, 2014 / CassieM - Feb 16, 2014
|Vulnerable social groups like youth and elders need social welfare system - IELTS
5 - This is pretty confusing and fails to convey your idea to the reader clearly :( Second, the old...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 15, 2014 / dumi - Feb 16, 2014
|toefl - governments should spend more money improving on roads or public transportation?
3 - Ok, let's see what mistakes you have done in this intro- 1. You have not introduced your prompt...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 15, 2014 / dumi - Feb 16, 2014
|Having a trip with a tour leader definitely helps the one to enjoy his trip in the best way
5 - If you use paired conjunctions, like not only but also in the first of the sentence, generally the...
Writing Feedbackentezarifateme - Feb 10, 2014 / eddies - Feb 15, 2014
|IELTS task 2: kindly check my introductory paragraph (hook, etc)
6 - Thank you for all contributors and our moderator for the thoughtful feedback. I get much help for my writing,...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 14, 2014 / eddies - Feb 15, 2014
|IELTS Task I : Coastal Villange changing (Map Description)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 15, 2014
|[ESSAY]: INDUSTRIALIZED NATIONS AND THE DUTY FOR GLOBAL WARMING. AGREE OR NOT ?
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 15, 2014
|toefl: Learning with a teacher is more efficient than by myself.
5 - Not sure about this: It gives you a chance to concentrate on what you learn causebecause there is no...
Writing Feedbackodon - Feb 14, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 15, 2014
|Capital Punishment Essay Introduction
4 - Well, this thread should have been opened in Writing Feedback forum (transfered from Essay term paper to Writing Feedback)....
Writing Feedbackscowan99 - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 15, 2014
|Renewable sources of energy (sun, water, wind) will soon replace fossil fuels
Writing FeedbackGabriella - Feb 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Joint family versus Independent family
5 - in this part, i recommend you to use more advanced vocabulary. You could write and develop your essay...
Writing Feedbacksabakhai - Feb 14, 2014 / agi - Feb 15, 2014
|Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. Do you agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 11, 2014 / agi - Feb 15, 2014
|evaluating argument : arranged marriage
2 - Most often parents are the initiators of these types of marriages, although other family members and friends may also...
Writing Feedbacklisa93 - Feb 13, 2014 / dumi - Feb 15, 2014
|IELTS TAsk 1 : Small fishing village become European tourist resort (Picture)
3 - .... you need to mention about the tourist resort because it may mean a little different from a...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 14, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 15, 2014
|toefl - what are the qualities of a good neighbor? 'friendly and trustworthy'
6 - Thanks for your appreciation :) Yes, this forum is a great platform for collaboration. We all help each other...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 14, 2014 / dumi - Feb 14, 2014
|a short essay describing yourself as a person
Writing Feedbackhopeanngroff - Feb 13, 2014 / dumi - Feb 14, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Electronic calculators should not be allowed in school
3 - ... well this sentence is pretty confusing :( You need to express your ideas clearly and completely. The...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 4, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 14, 2014
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