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|IELTS: The diagram about the evolution of the horse
5 - Once the first two evolution stages finishedwere completed, it can be seen that equineEquin e transformed into Merychippus with...
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 22, 2014 / dumi - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS; mobile phone impacts on people's lives
6 - From my point of view, your introduction is quite long compared with 3 or 4 sentences for a model...
Writing Feedbacklinh110 - Apr 21, 2014 / ningo - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS; mobile phones and precautions
7 - Can someone help me correct and make this sentence more academic ? I don't know how to express properly...
Writing Feedbacklinh110 - Apr 22, 2014 / linh110 - Apr 24, 2014
|Pain (First writing Essay) - 'Pain is a word that most of us hate'
6 - Google is the best friend. Everything you can find there. Also, If you think that you need some...
Writing FeedbackAlpha - Jan 25, 2012 / eddies - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS: The process of apple how to be canned; 'apple tree'
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 19, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 24, 2014
|Researching the Collapse of 2008: The Rise, Fall, and Flat Line
2 - But for recent college graduates- (I prefer using a comma, instead of hyphen) the group of immediate interest for...
Writing FeedbackMitchyy - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Apr 23, 2014
|Ielts: apple is canned; 'there are many processes'
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 18, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|Write a report about education in Australia between 1997 and 2005.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|Doctor is the most important person for society
5 - Ok, I see :D They think the doctors can help society from their illness.save others lives which is an...
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 23, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|Task - Are Macro-sports events good in easing international tensions?
5 - I suggest you to leave a blank line between your paragraphs to present your essay better and impress the...
Writing FeedbackThomas1948 - Apr 12, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: The winter heating costs according to heating fuel type
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 23, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|Radio and television audience in UK
4 - The TV audience is pretty less in numbers from 1.00 to 11.00 Thereafter the audience begins to grow and...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 23, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Advertising increase tendency to buy unneeded thing
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 22, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 23, 2014
|Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns - 'used for illegal purposes'
Writing FeedbackUmidabonu - Apr 19, 2014 / bestonline99 - Apr 23, 2014
|GRE: analyze and issue -- technology will deteriorate human thinking
NEW - -- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for...
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|IELTS: Sector of the economy - different age groups were employed.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 22, 2014 / dumi - Apr 23, 2014
|Ielts: Discuss both harms and good of advertising & give your opinion
Writing Feedbackningo - Apr 22, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The unemployment rates: US and Japan - 5% in March 99
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 22, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; region and by gender for the year 2000.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 10, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 23, 2014
|What are the qualities of a good neighbor? 'care your attitude to other people'
7 - sing or plur...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Mar 26, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The sector of economy for employment
3 - what does the word 'than' means? you put 'than' twice in a sentence before 'than' you put 'the...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS: Sector of the economy - employment by age
5 - this sentence makes me confuse, you wrote too long. it would be better if you separate them into...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS: visits abroad; some persons visit to abroad because they have some gains
4 - you should use present on your introduction because it covers all parts of the report, it does not...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 23, 2014
|'various viewpoints' Extreme sports should be banned or not?
5 - The topic of extreme sports is too broad. Why? sports are considered 'extreme' is debatable. Lead your reader by...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: Visits abroad by UK residents by purpose of visit
7 - Yes, follow dumi's advice on structuring your writing for this task. It is important that you have those three...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|Lost flight data recorders! What is going on?
Writing Feedbackdon2074978 - Apr 22, 2014 / uzboy - Apr 22, 2014
|Parents should allow their children to select their own profession
7 - Dear Aisha, kindly let us know the purpose of your wirting, whether are you preparing for IELTS or any...
Writing FeedbackAisha Baloch - Apr 19, 2014 / Arun0506 - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: Marriages are bigger and more expensive nowadays than in the past. Why is this?
5 - Pay serious attention to improve your essay structure. Hope you would follow what dumi has suggested. That structure contains...
Writing FeedbackStella Croatia - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS; Learning with a teacher or learning alone - Which one do you prefer?
5 - None of these sentences provide any idea to the reader. You need to improve clarity of your sentences...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|Ielts: 'the corner stone' - Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?
3 - Your writing is good. However, you should polish the structure of your essay more. Try to follow the structures...
Writing Feedbacksamsonyeung - Apr 22, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 22, 2014
|Toefl - going to classes should be optional for the students
4 - BecauseSince the university students haveare intellectually matured enoughgrown up , they have enoughthe ability to read and understandthe concepts...
Writing FeedbackJaanu - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|An increasing number of people change their career and place of residence
Writing Feedbackammus1 - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|advertising issues; regulate a law prohibiting unacceptable advertising
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|Painter, director, writter, photographers - creatives artists, expressing their own ideas.
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: people should create a sense of co-operation in their children
6 - The above approach I have given is for your introduction. Follow this one for your overall essay structure and...
Writing FeedbackUmair Bandhani - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|Honesty vs Telling lies - persuasive essay
Writing FeedbackAndy01 - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS :How apple is canned? 'durable before it is bought'
3 - These are not relevant stuff for reporting what you observe in the diagram. In this task, you should...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2; Students VS Homework - unnecessary encumbrance
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 5, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: 'all processes occur in the water' - Live cycle of a frog
3 - ... Good introduction :) .... this needs improvement; Overall, there are seven stages in the life...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: The method of bricks; heated in high temperature 200-1300C
2 - The diagram explains the method entire process of how bricks how to make it become material that people can...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|We have to bend children in the starting stage otherwise we can not stop them after growing
Writing Feedbackbhanusri - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS:The process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|Enterprises should never put all eggs in one basket - Money in advertising.
Writing FeedbackBRonnie - Apr 20, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS Exam; essay part, intro, every related information
2 - Well, you need to have a good essay structure, good grammar and clarity in your sentences, good flow of...
Writing Feedbackravneets007 - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: with increasing use of computers, letters writing will disappear
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 14, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The results of a survey by the UK residents
4 - This sentence has several issues. First, what the tables show are not reasons of a survey. What they...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: Education in Australia
2 - The tables show the results of a survey abouton education in Australia between 1997 and 2005. And then,...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: Why students should have laptop in their learning process? Wikipedia, Google, Bing
5 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing FeedbackSigit_EngLearn - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|Ielts task 2: In some countries the average weight of people is increasing.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 19, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 20, 2014
|Some sportsmen earn more money than other professionals; 'specialist of sphere'
10 - Thank you very much! You all have helped me very greatly! I am grateful that there are people like...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 16, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS-International tourism should respect local cultures; 'Chinese restaurants'
Writing Feedbackilovemilch - Apr 14, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS : Contacting nowadays seems to be not a difficulty anymore; technology
9 - Look at what Dumi suggests you with the structure (a 4-paragraph essay). With this structure, you are easy...
Writing FeedbackKellyChu - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS: man to man interaction changed; reason - technology
Writing Feedbackchien - Apr 19, 2014 / chien - Apr 20, 2014
|How should children be taught?
6 - Yes, good advice by Pahan With this structure, you are easy to develop your paragraph properly. This is...
Writing FeedbackKelly219 - Apr 16, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|TOEFL - Scientist are responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries.
Writing Feedbackthalac - Apr 16, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS: The Charts show the proportion of the population of two countries
NEW - The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections...
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|IELTS TASK 1 : Bricks process
2 - Your essay is really specific. And a lot of concrete verbs. I think it's really good. However, there are...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 20, 2014 / BRonnie - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS: Life was better when technology was simpler.
5 - I like this paragraph. You have composed a good strategy. Beginning by describing a scenario, you end with...
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 19, 2014
|'it is not permanent'; enjoy your money when you earn or save for your future
6 - Write "I think", instead of according to which is used when saying what people, organizations, and reports have...
Writing FeedbackJaanu - Mar 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS; 'unique from other animals' - How life cycle of a frog?
3 - Well, the mating part of the frogs not shown or indicated in the diagram. Do not write anything...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 19, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
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