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IELTS 2 : agreement or disagreement towards art at school as an important subject to focus

3 - In my opinion, I admit THAT it is true because children have ... this is my correction for...

Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Feb 20, 2016 / anita11 - Feb 21, 2016
ENCOURAGING STUDENTS TO LEARN THEIR FAVORITE SUBJECT IS BETTER THAN STRUGGLING IN ART. IELTS TASK 2

2 - ...focus on the other subjects ...if they are forced to concentrate in (...) Doing something thatan activity in...

Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Feb 20, 2016 / nuni11 - Feb 21, 2016
A separate room for nicotine users may limit the bad effect of the cigarette smoke on non-smokers

3 - Hello Riiskacha03 It appears that your text could have benefited from being stylistically refined a bit more. For example,...

Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Feb 21, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Feb 21, 2016
Entrust Children to Childcare Centers or Other Family Members?

2 - Hello Nuni, i like your writing, but let me correct several mistakes in your essay. This is because...

Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 21, 2016 / anita11 - Feb 21, 2016
IELTS TASK 2 - HAVING HIGH SALARY IS NOT THE PREDOMINANT FACTOR TO STAY IN ONE COMPANY

2 - It is true that the high salary (...) working place (...) in same place for years since employees also...

Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Feb 20, 2016 / nuni11 - Feb 21, 2016
Electronic media can cause several disadvantages on personal relationships between humans.

7 - because people cannot control themselves to not checking their gadget even in the morning when they wake up, the...

Writing Feedbackputri22 - Feb 18, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Feb 21, 2016
IELTS 2: Is it the right choice to place smokers in open areas rather than in public places?

2 - Hi Annisa, it seems like your essay do not discuss about the topic clearly. the topic is about the...

Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Feb 20, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Feb 21, 2016
What Motivate People to Stay Longer in Particular Company?

2 - Hello nuni11 There are a few minor stylistic/grammar errors in the text, but they do not affect its...

Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 20, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Feb 21, 2016
Kids should focus on subjects in which they have any interest instead of being forced to study art

2 - ...they have interest it in it instead of forcedthem to learn artistic matter such as painting and drawing(...)when they...

Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Feb 21, 2016 / nuni11 - Feb 21, 2016
The amount of money spent on buying books in four European countries, measured in millions US $

2 - the trend to purchase books in Germany, France, Italia, and Austria was upward over ten-years all of the countries...

Writing Feedbackanita11 - Feb 2, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Feb 21, 2016
I believe that the worries to quit job appears, thus staying many years in a company is reasonable.

NEW - Do you agree that money is the only motivation at work why people prefer working in the same company...

Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Feb 20, 2016 / — -
Public museums and art galleries vs Computer - great tool, but can it replace personal experience?

2 - Dear Bunlon11, Well, I've seen your writing has well organized, but let's see to this paragraph Furthermore, in...

Writing FeedbackBunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016 / indah_hai - Feb 20, 2016
Teaching children painting or other practical subjects is a good strategy. IELTS 2

2 - I like your idea in illustrating the practical issues in society regarding to art world at school, but I...

Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Feb 20, 2016 / ichatea07 - Feb 20, 2016
Underground railway system in different cities - main features and comparisons where relevant.

2 - Hi Bunglon, here is my correction :) A breakdown of the information system of(breakdown has same meaning with...

Writing FeedbackBunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016 / awe_28 - Feb 20, 2016
A breakdown of the inhabitant percentage aged 65 and more in USA, Sweden, and Japan

2 - Hi Bunglon, let me give you some corrections :) A breakdown of the percentage OF inhabitant... At first...

Writing FeedbackBunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016 / awe_28 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS 2 : which one is better between childcare services or grandparenting programme for children?

4 - WOW, MANY THANKS, @ Wolf Larsen, especially for the examples. I'll try to improve it. That point is actually...

Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Feb 20, 2016 / ichatea07 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS TASK 2 - CHILDREN LABOUR SHOULD BE CONSIDER AS VALUABLE WORK EXPERIENCE

3 - Hi Awe_28 let check your essay At the present time, many adolescents have been become employed younger labourers...

Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Feb 20, 2016 / Bunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016
Attending university is very common nowadays. The reasons vary from people to people.

2 - Some want to gain knowledge, some want to experience new things, some wants high status and some seek for...

Writing Feedbackameefuletra - Feb 10, 2016 / ichatea07 - Feb 20, 2016
When you study, what is the best way to do it? Is it in groups or alone?

2 - By the way, what is the aim in writing this essay? Perhaps, you could tell us...

Writing Feedbacknickkrocks0705 - Feb 20, 2016 / ichatea07 - Feb 20, 2016
The main reason why workers tend to devote themselves in a company is the given wage.

2 - hi @ Riiskacha03 let me check your essay The main reason why a worker tends to devote to...

Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Feb 20, 2016 / Bunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016
'freedom from addiction' - The best way to get rid of someone's drug dependence is rehabilitation.

2 - hi @awe_28 Let me check your essay ... done an action which against the rule, while others...

Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Feb 20, 2016 / Bunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016
Childcare places are preferable for busy societies but grandparets are the right choice for toddlers

2 - Hi Awe_28 let me check your essay I have read it, I have some corrections A majority...

Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Feb 20, 2016 / Bunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS Task 2: the arguments about living in apartment building

3 - They believe that the flat has a much higher sense in community than the people, who live in houses,...

Writing Feedbackanita11 - Feb 2, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Feb 20, 2016
Put addicts to jail or rehabilitate? What have to be done to prevent them from using drugs?

3 - It is true thatIN FACT narcotics .... to be escapecure from their addiction. you have to check...

Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 20, 2016 / anita11 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS TASK 2: Interviews are not the best method to select the applicants

2 - ... cannot be determined by their words and the best methodmay be you can useapproachto avoid repetition is requiring...

Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Feb 20, 2016 / anita11 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS TASK 2: childcare centers or grandparents in taking care of the kids

NEW - Some parents think that childcare centers provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think...

Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Feb 20, 2016 / — -
Should Children with Less Artistic Talent Concentrate More On Practical Subjects?

2 - Hello nuni11 There are two issues with the text. First, a number of featured sentences are little too...

Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 20, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Feb 20, 2016
It is generally believed that narcotic addicts should be locked up to drift away the crime rate.

3 - Some people are of IN the opinion that drug users are criminals ... ... but not for drug dialer...

Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 20, 2016 / aflah15 - Feb 20, 2016
More efforts have to be applied on how to address unhealthy behaviour in children.

5 - Hi Sir, here my suggestion to you .. since your task is agree or disagree and you already have...

Writing Feedbacksir99 - Jan 28, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Feb 20, 2016
Different household spending during 60 years

4 - Hi Bunglon, let me give you some suggestion!! :) ..there were significant changeCHANGES in the percentage.. ..expenditure decreased...

Writing FeedbackBunglon11 - Jan 21, 2016 / awe_28 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS TASK 2 is money the only motivation for loyal workers?

2 - hi ilham, i like the whole essay but let me give some correction to make it more perfect. ...

Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Feb 20, 2016 / putri22 - Feb 20, 2016
TASK 2: What is the Best Method to Hire Employees?

3 - I am sorry, I put the wrong first body paragraph to this essay. Please look at the right paragraph:...

Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 20, 2016 / nuni11 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS 2 : suitable responses for treating the addicts of drugs

2 - hi icha, honestly i like this essay (the flow, the idea, the way you deliver your opinion) but there...

Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Feb 20, 2016 / putri22 - Feb 20, 2016
'Ecosystem has a balance between predators and preys' GRE ISSUE on protecting endangered species

4 - I think your ideas have been very brilliant in giving this response, however, it doesn't mean...

Writing Feedbacknav3057 - Feb 18, 2016 / ichatea07 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS Task 2 : SHOULD PARENTS RELY THEIR CHILDREN ON CHILDCARE OR RELATIVES?

2 - tend to look aftersend their children to childcare centres since this such places provide the optimum services(...)In spite (usually,...

Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 20, 2016 / nuni11 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS TASK 2: Encouraging Industries and Businesses to Move to Regional Areas

2 - - Some would argue that re locating industry - and businessesareas in the countryside - This essay will argue...

Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Feb 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 20, 2016
Childcare centers provide the best services for children of pre-school age

2 - Hello there indah_hai I think, you will be so much better off using some simpler sentences. Below...

Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Feb 20, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS 2 : opinions about children contribution in working experiences

3 - HI Anisa, I hope to help you on your essay. Kindly find my corrections focused on the first 2...

Writing Feedbackichatea07 - Feb 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS TASK 2: Encouraging Children to Find Some Kind of Paid Work - controversial issue today.

2 - hi aflah, first of all i would say that overall, your writing is good but let me give you...

Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Feb 20, 2016 / putri22 - Feb 20, 2016
TASK 2: Do Working in Particular Work Beneficial for Children?

2 - These days and ages , children involved in any kind of paid works are prohibited in some countries, while...

Writing Feedbacknuni11 - Feb 20, 2016 / irhame - Feb 20, 2016
Common for a great number of children in lots of nations to involve in different kind of occupations

2 - ...the others think that(...)to work gives merits such as(...)they necessarily need to pay more attention to their education ...

Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 20, 2016 / nuni11 - Feb 20, 2016
Sending the drug users to rehabilitation will heal them - jailing such people is not a solution

2 - hi riska, i like your idea but let me give you suggestion to make it better. i think...

Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Feb 20, 2016 / putri22 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS TASK 2: Grandparents are the best nurturer for children's growth

2 - Hi Siti, I would like to try help out in enhancing your essay. - have aare busy working...

Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Feb 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 20, 2016
Drug users rehabilitation is highly acceptable as their case can be resolved in that way.

3 - hi ilham, actually i like your essay. the idea is good and the flow is easy to follow but...

Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Feb 20, 2016 / putri22 - Feb 20, 2016
Although locating addicts in prison can alter their bad habit, this solution is not full enough.

2 - Jail limits the chance for users to access drugs. This is becauseTHEY ARE TIGHTLY CONTROLLED BY THE OFFICIALS IN...

Writing Feedbackaflah15 - Feb 20, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS Task 2 : MOVING THE INDUSTRIAL CENTER TO SUBURBS AREAS

3 - Hi Mardy, upon reading and understanding your essay, I must say that you are able to create a good...

Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS TASK 2 children should be entrusted to childcare centre or parents

2 - Some considered childcare centerCENTRE as the best place ..., but others argue that grandparents is ARE the better one....

Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Feb 20, 2016 / Mardy17 - Feb 20, 2016
Societies argue that people using drugs are better being jailed than delivering them to the rehab.

3 - Hi Bunglon11 Thank you for focusing me again about the supporting explanation... Now, I can see it is...

Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Feb 20, 2016 / indah_hai - Feb 20, 2016
Government spending on public services? Facilitating art is not a money waste too.

2 - I have read your opening paragraph of your essay, i found that there should be rewrite, let me try...

Writing FeedbackBunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016 / Diqon - Feb 20, 2016
IELTS TASK 2 children should only focus on their study or not

2 - Some would argue that children should focus on their study, while others think ... While working children is are...

Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Feb 20, 2016 / Bunglon11 - Feb 20, 2016
There are many factors for the crime rate increase among underaged people

2 - The number of teens who involve in criminal case hashave risen around the world. The most significant excuse...

Writing FeedbackLinda91 - Feb 3, 2016 / Riiskacha03 - Feb 20, 2016
DO THE COLOURS INFLUENCE THE PURCHASING DECISION? IELTS Task 2

2 - Hello there... here are some corrections for you: In my point of view - In my view This consideration...

Writing FeedbackMardy17 - Feb 20, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Feb 20, 2016
Children appearance of working in a company is a big deal nowadays for some countries.

2 - -----Employing children is illegal for some- are illegal -----especially confident way, than the possibility to have better future is...

Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Feb 20, 2016 / Subhasis - Feb 20, 2016
Students can receive useful skills while working - but is a paid work really beneficial for a child?

2 - Some would argue that children who are occupied isARE forbidden ... ... basic knowledge in school which will...

Writing FeedbackRiiskacha03 - Feb 19, 2016 / Mardy17 - Feb 20, 2016
Cell phones have some benefits, but they increase car accidents. TOEFL integrated essay

2 - However, the speaker doubts this idea by affirming that the use of cell phones on highways saveshas saved many...

Writing FeedbackNourNour - Feb 19, 2016 / Ssakshijain - Feb 19, 2016
Why do so many people want to study in English? Is it such an important international language?

3 - Thanks for your contribution Wolf Larsen. Now it seems better....

Writing Feedbackabdulhaq - Feb 19, 2016 / abdulhaq - Feb 19, 2016
False, deceptive advertising - strategies to deceive consumers

2 - The following are the corrections that I think should be applied to the text: 1. 'there has been...

Writing FeedbackCrystal812 - Feb 19, 2016 / Wolf Larsen - Feb 19, 2016
IELTS- TASK 2-More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life

3 - Hi Eddies, It is better, and I will learn from you. Thank you...

Writing Feedbackravenet - Feb 18, 2016 / ravenet - Feb 19, 2016
Power of media can influence reader perception and their viewpoint; too much celebrities in TV

2 - Hello Andri, let me give feedbacks and corrections on your essay. :) In your last paragraph,...

Writing Feedbackdcho23 - Feb 18, 2016 / aniani - Feb 19, 2016
Improving social-media equipment in this era has an impact on communication among human beings

3 - Hi ADIE08, Let me check your essay Improving social media equipment device in globalization era ... ...

Writing FeedbackADIE08 - Feb 18, 2016 / Bunglon11 - Feb 18, 2016

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