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|Ielts Essay task 1 : Different forms of entertainment over a five- year period
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Sep 19, 2013 / shin122 - Oct 3, 2013
|IETLS Proportion of population aged 65 & over; Aging will accelerate after 2030s
3 - All the country present a upward situation. ---> all the coutries presented a upward situation Sweden go upward signally...
Writing FeedbackJIMMY0907 - Sep 25, 2013 / shin122 - Oct 3, 2013
|Should students have to wear uniforms? - Persuasive Essay
3 - .... is this "something so ridiculous" has got anything to do with uniforms? You need to link that...
Writing Feedbackbriancd3 - Sep 25, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|GRE Issue Essay; All nations should help support the development of a global university
4 - .... I don't see issues with your structure. I think it is well structured and you have presented...
Writing Feedbacknikitabonawate - Sep 28, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|Solving the gap between rich and poor nations requires much effort from governments - IELTS
Writing Feedbackhaisergeant - Oct 1, 2013 / haisergeant - Oct 3, 2013
|Technology and Its Effects on Reading and Writing.
Writing Feedbackdarashea - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|CHEATING IS GOOD AND BAD! (in easy words)
Writing FeedbackLAIBA - Sep 23, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|Some parents have many obvious similarities and differences; Compare and contrast essay
Writing Feedbackswimmer_chick - Sep 22, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 3, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Control Over use of Water by Government
3 - "scarcity" is a more appropriate key word to express "less availability" ... I doubt "strata" is...
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Oct 2, 2013 / dumi - Oct 3, 2013
|ielts; examination of education system should be emphasised and implemented in each country
3 - Tests or examinations require students to prepare for them before taking them and this makes students to study...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Oct 2, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS; The subjects that children are taught in schools are decided by central authorities
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 21, 2013 / fahadbd - Oct 2, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1 THE GRAPH SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF UK ADOLESCENTS FOLLOWING A VEGETARIAN DIET
5 - Hi, your essay failed to reach 150 words, however with only one line in the graph it's difficult to...
Writing Feedbackshin122 - Oct 1, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 2, 2013
|TOEFL - Should we tell the truth always to our friends?
5 - Hi Dumi thanks for your attention As I read so many answer templates , all of them had mentioned...
Writing Feedbackghazal85 - Oct 1, 2013 / ghazal85 - Oct 2, 2013
|People naturally resist making changes in their lives.What kind of problems can this cause
4 - ... I think it is not fair to make such generalization. In the contrary, people look forward to...
Writing Feedbacksaddream - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Oct 2, 2013
|Gre -- Argument; homeowners in nearby Brookville community
2 - This sentence is poorly constructed. In the first place, it's too long and at the end of your...
Writing Feedbackjunisha - Oct 2, 2013 / dumi - Oct 2, 2013
|[TOEFL] Secure job or satisfying job ? Which option would you take?
3 - .... the right word is affecting , not effecting; Affect means have an effect on; make a difference...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 26, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|For & Against Topic (TOEFL) . Students should attend to classes or it should be optional?
3 - .... here you need to tackle why these teachers can explain those lessons thoroughly - It is because...
Writing FeedbackGolnazgol - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|Involvement of children in different paid work, is it good or bad?
3 - I like this introduction. It is simple, yet interesting and contain all necessary features. .... great...
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Oct 1, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|whether job is only for money or there are several other reasons for it..
4 - thank u very much,dumi and pahan for ur suggestions.i will try my best,not to make this type of mistakes...
Writing Feedbackprakrit - Sep 30, 2013 / prakrit - Oct 1, 2013
|IELTS (Charts); electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Sep 27, 2013 / hisho88 - Oct 1, 2013
|TOEFL;should universities spend more money on salaries for university professors?
5 - .... here there are several grammar issues. Also, ideas are scattered here and there. Arrange them according to...
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 27, 2013 / dumi - Oct 1, 2013
|IELTS writing task 2.........Eating habits and lifestyle of children and their effects
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Sep 30, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 30, 2013
|GRE ISSUE --''bookish knowledge without experience is useless''
4 - Well... I think you need to work a lot on your grammar and sentence structure. There are many mistakes...
Writing Feedbackjunisha - Sep 26, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|TOEFL _ what do you prefer to be? a leader or a member of a group?
3 - ...." powerful" is not so appropriate because it deals with power and that can be external sources. (e.g....
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Sep 27, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|WHAT ARE YOUR OPINIONS ON CITY VERSUS COUNTRY LIVING ARGUMENT ?
Writing FeedbackKillions23 - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|Capital punishment has been a major source of concern for the last two decade
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Sep 26, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|What is "happiness"? ; It is the inner state of well-being and satisfaction!
Writing FeedbackFiras - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|The essay on life cycle of salmon
4 - The diagram illustrates the life cycle of salmon fish which consists of eight main stages. The cycle begins...
Writing Feedbackkin - Sep 26, 2013 / dumi - Sep 30, 2013
|Reading books continuous/ separate ; Which is better?
Writing Feedbacknhip2912 - Sep 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 30, 2013
|TOEFL:What is a important skill to succeed in life.
8 - Impessive...
Writing Feedbacktippabim - Sep 23, 2013 / Killions23 - Sep 29, 2013
|SAT: What motivates people to change something in their life?! (I wrote in 25 minutes)
Writing FeedbackAs is - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|People Learn from Their Mistakes
Writing FeedbackAk_Mueller - Sep 19, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|TOEFL- increasing professors' salary as an effective factor influencing educational system
5 - Nice job! But I think you should introduce the backgroud in short, otherwise your eaasy may seem a bit...
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Sep 28, 2013 / Antonio Lu - Sep 29, 2013
|IELTS:There is no doubt that globalization affects the world's economies positively
Writing Feedbackzoha - Sep 27, 2013 / Antonio Lu - Sep 29, 2013
|[toefl] Youth do not give enough time to help their society?
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 27, 2013 / raya1001 - Sep 29, 2013
|Capital punishment and criminal execution essay
3 - Well.... what is this essay for? Is it for IELTS or TOEFL? It's better you mention this purpose in...
Writing FeedbackYahyaSl - Sep 13, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|Agree or disagree? it is essential to have ability to plan and organize(TOEFL)
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Sep 26, 2013 / Erikd - Sep 28, 2013
|Technology has become integral part of twenty first century
Writing FeedbackShriji - Sep 26, 2013 / Shriji - Sep 28, 2013
|GRE issue essay about "educational institutes responsability"
4 - .... I wish you improve this line a bit mre; This responsibility is not limited to ensuring the...
Writing Feedbackquique7991 - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 28, 2013
|IELTS; Increase in crimes among young people - Social & Emotional learning
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Sep 27, 2013 / hisho88 - Sep 28, 2013
|TOEFL; Parents are our important teachers during children's life
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 27, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 27, 2013
|[GRE] - The indicator of a great nation is represented by the general welfare
3 - From my point view too, I believe that general welfare of citizens needs to be considered as a...
Writing Feedbackxiaoheng - Sep 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 27, 2013
|[GRE] - University should require students to take various courses
3 - ... Why do you include the word "physically"? I feel many universities deal more with intellectual development and...
Writing Feedbackxiaoheng - Sep 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 27, 2013
|Ielts line graph-percentage of population aged 65 and over
7 - i think your task must be divided into paragraphs and try to connect the sentences more effectively...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Sep 19, 2013 / hisho88 - Sep 27, 2013
|IELTS: different levels of post-school qualifications in australia in 1999
NEW - The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women...
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|TOEFL ; Parents should encourage children to do part-time jobs
6 - aliceNN It's generally agreed that the charactiresticcharacteristic of independent and thrifty which to children are the prerequisite for a...
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 22, 2013 / junisha - Sep 26, 2013
|IELTS; TECHNOLOGY Vs TRADITIONAL SKILLS
Writing Feedbackle soleil - Sep 25, 2013 / something - Sep 26, 2013
|The influence of popular music on young people?
4 - "hear"...
Writing Feedbackcrystella - Sep 22, 2013 / something - Sep 26, 2013
|[GRE argument task] A newsletter offers advice to invest to a new venture
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 30, 2013 / testtaker - Sep 26, 2013
|IELTS; governments should give financial support to creative artists
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 22, 2013 / Allen Hu - Sep 26, 2013
|[toefl] important business woman; business or house?
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|Qualities of a good son/daughter? - Cultural influence and Time factor
5 - Of course your essay displays good writing skills, especially with the sentences construction and vocabulary. You can score more...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|Essay Title: Something Different That Day
3 - ... By any chance, do you mean fifteen minutes ? quarter minute means one quarter of a minute...
Writing FeedbackKiarasparks16 - Sep 7, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|A little inaccuracy saves a world of explanation; SAT peparatory essay
Writing Feedbackaneeta - Sep 6, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|Amount of violence in films - ACADEMIC IELTS Writing task2 essay
Writing FeedbackMjkk91 - Sep 21, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|[toefl] people born with certain talents or they are taught?
6 - Some people think that talented people are the God's gifted creatures. What's your opinion? State it...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|[TOEFL] What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for my country
Writing Feedbacksomething - Sep 25, 2013 / something - Sep 25, 2013
|Leave my country and move to another; Overcome a challenge
3 - you begin your writing with this sentence: "The decision to leave my country and move to another is going...
Writing FeedbackJessicax84 - Sep 24, 2013 / moonname - Sep 25, 2013
|Ielts Writing task 1: The portion of different ages of the population in Yemen and Italy
4 - ... Good introduction. However, I feel it is good if your intro is followed by an overview of...
Writing Feedbacktrangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|'I feel much more safe'; Traditional house or a modern apartment building? Toefl
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