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The line chart illustrates the population growth in New Zealand between 1950 and 2050

5 - @thanhtien2512 ,Thank you sometimes i make some mistake with typos and difficulty express my train of thought. I will...

Writing Feedbacklethiaixuan - Jun 5, 2021 / lethiaixuan - Jun 7, 2021
The use of social-sites can cause many physical and mental health problems and spread misinformation

2 - Do not close the statement after your opinion. Offer your 2 discussion reasons to help offer the supporting...

Writing FeedbackLe hai - Jun 6, 2021 / Holt - Jun 7, 2021
Fast food safety and school ban

2 - Was this paper meant to be a task 2 essay response or, as a research paper? Based on the...

Writing Feedbackwrite109745 - Jun 6, 2021 / Holt - Jun 7, 2021
Task 1, The expenditures for five major categories in the US, Canada, the UK, and Japan in 2009

2 - The bar chart is divided into 4 sections. Include that reference as the individual items are listed /...

Writing Feedbackphuongtrinh11200 - Jun 6, 2021 / Holt - Jun 7, 2021
People say that reading for pleasure helps people to develop imagination and better language skills

3 - If you look at the band descriptors for writing task 2, you will see the words "extend" and "develop"....

Writing FeedbackDragonKing - Jun 4, 2021 / phatpham332 - Jun 7, 2021
Do you agree that advancements in medical science and technology is one of the most important factor

2 - You did not properly respond to the discussion instruction which is: To what extent do you agree or...

Writing Feedbackngocngoc933 - Jun 6, 2021 / Holt - Jun 7, 2021
Writing task 2 - Marine pollution. Possible causes and effects on people and animals

2 - Your introductory paragraph is a rambling mess of big words and run on sentences that takes too long to...

Writing FeedbackGuest - Jun 5, 2021 / Holt - Jun 6, 2021
Everyone has a right to have access to university education without tuition

2 - Your second paragraph should be used to disprove the preceding reasoning paragraph. When you partly agree with the reasoning,...

Writing Feedbackminhductrinh - Jun 5, 2021 / Holt - Jun 6, 2021
The chart shows the proportion of women and men in one Asian country who passed their driving test

2 - In the summary overview, the image divisions need to be clearer. A reference to the number of columns representing...

Writing Feedbackhuynhuyn - Jun 5, 2021 / Holt - Jun 6, 2021
Bullying is a big problem in many schools. Causes and solutions [ielts writing p2]

2 - You come in with a strong, although a bit grammatically incorrect (in the first sentence) prompt restatement and thesis...

Writing Feedbackthaomycva - Jun 5, 2021 / Holt - Jun 6, 2021
Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. Opinion

2 - Actually, based on the original prompt, the proper term should be " much discussed" as there is no...

Writing Feedbackhhachoo - Jun 5, 2021 / Holt - Jun 6, 2021
The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing chocolate

2 - Use the word "man made" in reference to its noun form for grammar accuracy. Indicate "in this man..."...

Writing Feedbackvudao - Jun 5, 2021 / Holt - Jun 6, 2021
Writing task 1: household car ownership in Braitain from 1971 to 2007

4 - @ho chu diem my You should replace "illustrious" with "illustrates" or "shows" "The number of families owned one car...

Writing Feedbackho chu diem my - May 27, 2021 / phuongtrinh11200 - Jun 6, 2021
Parents or school? Who will teach children to be good citizens?

5 - Hi! I would like to have some feedbacks on your writing. The first thing, I agree with Holt that...

Writing Feedbacklaaaa0012 - Jun 3, 2021 / phatpham332 - Jun 6, 2021
Mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries, shops and on public transports

2 - Follow up this statement with your measured agreement to complete the response presentation. Your strong disagreement (Hint) response...

Writing FeedbackKhoaLee - Jun 4, 2021 / Holt - Jun 5, 2021
IELTS TASK 2 benefits and drawbacks of mobile phone on society, technology and health

2 - Your prompt restatement poses a discussion for a totally different essay. Your interpretation is nowhere near the original discusson...

Writing FeedbackPaul16 - Jun 4, 2021 / Holt - Jun 5, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 1 - Percentages of people living in the towns and cities in 4 different countries

5 - @zenosyne719 You should show the name of four countries " in four countries including USA, South Korea, India and...

Writing Feedbackzenosyne719 - May 31, 2021 / phuongtrinh11200 - Jun 5, 2021
Ielts writing task 2 - government and traffic combination topic

3 - I understand you want to use advanced words but there are some errors in the word choice and grammar,...

Writing Feedbackthank you 3000 - Jun 3, 2021 / Paul16 - Jun 5, 2021
Ielts writing task 1, Common sports played in the UK in 2008.

2 - Add another sentence that enumerates the relevant sports before the trending statement to give the reader a better...

Writing Feedbackphuongtrinh11200 - Jun 4, 2021 / Holt - Jun 5, 2021
Many children, spend hours by the screens, and it is detrimental to them

2 - Too many reasons involved in what should only bea 4 paragraph essay. Good work on presenting an immensely...

Writing FeedbackHelloHola - Jun 4, 2021 / Holt - Jun 4, 2021
In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animal as food or to use animal products

2 - You cannot use uncited information in a task 2 essay. Do not get used to using this incorrect writing...

Writing Feedbackbinhbii2104 - Jun 3, 2021 / Holt - Jun 4, 2021
Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention in school. What are the reasons?

2 - Use a general referenceinstead. That is because you are not being asked if the information presented is true...

Writing Feedbackngthuhang - Jun 3, 2021 / Holt - Jun 4, 2021
Coffee and tea lovers in Australia - IELTS Academic Writing Part 2 - Cambridge 15 Test 1

2 - 318 words are expected in a task 2 essay. The task 1 essay requires between 150-200 words only. Even...

Writing FeedbackLilyWD1814 - Jun 3, 2021 / Holt - Jun 4, 2021
Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers

3 - should be "on the one hand"...

Writing Feedbackquynhhuong656 - May 31, 2021 / winxangle - Jun 4, 2021
The comparison of total water utilized for different purposes in Sydney between 1997 and 2007

2 - Summarize the purposes as part of the important data short presentation. Mention the measurement type as well for...

Writing FeedbackMy Nguyen - Jun 2, 2021 / Holt - Jun 3, 2021
Writing task 2: My Father - Write about someone who inspires you

2 - The introduction should not focus on the importance of family since that is a general statement. The target person...

Writing Feedbackphuocsangle24 - Jun 2, 2021 / Holt - Jun 3, 2021
Ielts writing Part 2 - Strict punishment on road offences

2 - The prompt restatement should be divided into 2 separate sentences since these are 2 conflicting ideas and reasoning presentations....

Writing Feedbacktrangvnq - Jun 2, 2021 / Holt - Jun 3, 2021
The point of view for the situation when the young generation is a big part of society

2 - You will not get a passing score in any section of this test. Your prompt restatement is confusing and...

Writing Feedbackhieuho - Jun 2, 2021 / Holt - Jun 3, 2021
Ielts task 2: Many things can influence the academic achievements and emotional growth of a student

2 - In the first paragraph, deliver the subject of the sentence before the resulting action. Whose academic and emotional development...

Writing FeedbackHoaitrinhh - Jun 2, 2021 / Holt - Jun 3, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 2: Bring in foreign workers

2 - Wrong word usage. By meaning this refers to: a fact, occurrence, or circumstance observed or observable. Use a...

Writing Feedbackdongocbaotram - Jun 2, 2021 / Holt - Jun 2, 2021
The proportion of inhabitants by a variety of age groups in a city participated music events from 20

2 - Preciseness is key when describing the image source due to the mental picture, or imagined measurement chart. This...

Writing FeedbackSyawaluddin Alim - Jun 1, 2021 / Holt - Jun 2, 2021
IELTS Task 2: Discuss both view: Economic is the most important goal

2 - I love this part of your presentation. You successfully indicated 2 important elements in this presentation: -...

Writing Feedbackngocnhivn - Jun 1, 2021 / Holt - Jun 2, 2021
The information on the proportion of the entire population of the world over 100 years

2 - You need to learn how to better develop and present your sentence ideas per paragraph. Your sentences are understandable,...

Writing FeedbackRosePham - Jun 1, 2021 / Holt - Jun 2, 2021
The diagram shows the process for labelling shellfish for the international market.

2 - What sort of diagram ? Was it an illustration? A procedural drawing? Clarify. When indicating the image type...

Writing FeedbackBeolisa - Jun 1, 2021 / Holt - Jun 2, 2021
Population Growth in New Zealand over the years

2 - Your first sentence fails to clearly offer a summary overview. a clear summary overview is delivered over 5 sentences...

Writing Feedbacksynnee123 - Jun 1, 2021 / Holt - Jun 2, 2021
What have you learned from syntax course?

2 - Refer to yourself throughout the essay. You may refer to yourself as I, me, myself. or variations thereof. Do...

Writing Feedbackaanana mmaria - Jun 1, 2021 / Holt - Jun 1, 2021
The charts below show information about three diffenrents deserts around the world.

2 - In the first paragraph. Aim to use the standard 3-5 sentence format to aid with the coherence of the...

Writing Feedbackheyaaami - Jun 1, 2021 / Holt - Jun 1, 2021
Writing task 2: Buying things on the Internet - e-commerce trends evaluation

2 - Not towards. We already exist in the 21st century. This is incorrect word choice as it relates to...

Writing Feedbackcarrotlion123 - May 31, 2021 / Holt - Jun 1, 2021
The inequality between rich and poor nation is now wider than it has ever been before.

2 - While it is acceptable for you to take the easy road and simply restate the given questions, this...

Writing FeedbackAnhu - May 31, 2021 / Holt - Jun 1, 2021
Task2: The benefits and disadvantages of working from home

7 - @uyenmy0025 thank you!!! I appreciate your comment .I will take notice of your advice and I will enhance my...

Writing Feedbackminhdeptrai - May 29, 2021 / minhdeptrai - May 31, 2021
IELTS writing practice test review - enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office

3 - Actually, your opening is too general, you need to specify it clearly. Which kinds of inquiries include??? Review grammar...

Writing Feedbackdaydreamer - May 17, 2021 / uyenmy0025 - May 31, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 1 - Amount of money spent by school and percentage of students getting passed

2 - After indicating the number of bar graphs, end the sentence. Follow it up with 2 separate sentences that...

Writing Feedbackfranklywritten - May 30, 2021 / Holt - May 31, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Opinion Essay on Free University Education

2 - You forgot to restate the portion of the original prompt indicating that this belief is regardless of income....

Writing Feedbackphatpham332 - May 30, 2021 / Holt - May 31, 2021
Fossil fuel and renewable resources - IELTS task 2 essay

3 - I suggest using 'sustainable energy" for renewable energy...

Writing Feedbacktatanh - May 27, 2021 / jane49 - May 30, 2021
TOPIC: Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams

2 - For clarity and prompt adherence, you can state your opinion directly provided it will help show support for...

Writing FeedbackTranght - May 29, 2021 / Holt - May 30, 2021
Vocational training is needed - there is lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers

2 - This shows the part of the discussion instruction that you did not understand. You are discussing the 2...

Writing Feedbackhuyn2511 - May 29, 2021 / Holt - May 30, 2021
Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health

2 - The prompt for this essay falls under the 3 paragraph requirement based on the writing instruction "Discuss both points...

Writing Feedbackhoangmanhcuong - May 29, 2021 / Holt - May 30, 2021
TASK2 Some countries have single-sex education models while in others mixed schools are prefered

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your advice but actually, the question is "discuss both views and give an...

Writing Feedbackjane49 - May 28, 2021 / jane49 - May 29, 2021
IELTS - promoting hosting in a country

2 - There was never a reference to equestriane sports in the original prompt. Whatever compelled you to change the...

Writing FeedbackKakaka - May 28, 2021 / Holt - May 29, 2021
Writing task 2: People say that a country will benefit greatly if its students study abroad.

3 - =>> A nation can benefit from letting its students pursue education in an international environment. =>>...

Writing Feedbackwinxangle - May 28, 2021 / phuongtrang56780 - May 28, 2021
Essay about the process of manufacturing tea bags

2 - The essay cannot be renewed - properly without the reference image. However, I can offer a brief review of...

Writing Feedbackyathh2k4 - May 28, 2021 / Holt - May 28, 2021
IELTS task 1 - two charts demonstrating a research about adult education

3 - ''There are two charts demonstrating'' should be ''demonstrate'', cause it always demonstrates, not only at the moment You have...

Writing Feedbackphamhuong - May 22, 2021 / huen - May 28, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: THE NUMBER OF TRAVELLERS USING THREE LARGE BRITISH AIRPORTS

2 - Flag carriers are airlines. The reference points used are airports. Be careful with your references. You just created...

Writing Feedbackthaovy1405 - May 28, 2021 / Holt - May 28, 2021
According to Confucius, education is a key to success

2 - You did not meet the 250 word requirement. When you do this during an actual test, this could garner...

Writing Feedbackuyenntunn02 - May 27, 2021 / Holt - May 28, 2021
I've just seen a brilliant program about dolphins on television. Which program have you enjoyed?

2 - The first half of your essay is nothing but an unrelated information presentation. This is actually a statement response...

Writing Feedbacktmt2306 - May 27, 2021 / Holt - May 28, 2021
The amount of money people in the US spend on mobile and landline phone calls and other services

2 - What? This reference has no meaning. Perhaps you mis-translated from your native tongue to English? This is why...

Writing Feedbackmih - May 27, 2021 / Holt - May 28, 2021
Ielts writing task 2: The advances in agriculture and the increase in world hunger

2 - Be conscious of GRA requirements. You do not seem to be familiar with punctuation marks and howto use these....

Writing FeedbackGiang87 - May 27, 2021 / Holt - May 28, 2021
The positive and negative effect of globalisation

2 - If, I am not mistaken, you have mis-analyzed the prompt. Based upon what I know of the original...

Writing Feedbackbo288144 - May 27, 2021 / Holt - May 28, 2021
Australia Bureau of Meteorology - the ielts exam task

2 - What sort of diagram? Your identification is incomplete. It does not help the reader create a mental picture...

Writing FeedbackThienan2409 - May 27, 2021 / Holt - May 27, 2021
Why some people can't success even if they have practiced hard

2 - Did you mean to use this presentation as a Task 2 essay or just for basic English writing practice?...

Writing FeedbackTsan - May 27, 2021 / Holt - May 27, 2021

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