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IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Housing and accommodation - buying or renting?)

2 - The writer has a fixation on referencing a time frame although none is mentioned in the first topic version....

Writing Feedbackbadiep0710 - Sep 1, 2022 / Holt - Sep 2, 2022
Essay on social responsibilities that organisations have (beside generating profit)

2 - Do not exaggerate the prompt restatement. There is no argument presented so it is incorrect to refer to the...

Writing Feedbacklucynnnn - Sep 1, 2022 / Holt - Sep 1, 2022
WT1 process: the diagram illustrates how sugar is generated from sugar cane

2 - The essay is too short to be considered for full scoring considerations. Providing only the minimum word count will...

Writing Feedbackcongpvppro - Sep 1, 2022 / Holt - Sep 1, 2022
GRE Issue: Should companies hire consultants to improve operating efficiency ?

3 - Thank you for taking the time to read the essay and giving me a few pointers. Now I know...

Writing Feedbacklegendaryhippo - Aug 22, 2022 / legendaryhippo - Aug 28, 2022
Accessing news - [IELTS writing task 1] - pie chart

2 - The first thing you have to note about a task 1 essay is that it is unnecessary and actually...

Writing Feedbackwonderws - Aug 28, 2022 / Holt - Aug 28, 2022
Participation in education and science - Writing task 1 - Bar chart

2 - The writing instruction can be vague aboutthe image reference. It can give oonly a general description since the examiner...

Writing Feedbacktuiladoanh - Aug 28, 2022 / Holt - Aug 28, 2022
IELTS - Writing task 2 - Allow children to make their own choices will turn them into selfish person

2 - The first error that must be addressed in this essay is the over-writing. 402 words is 102 words over...

Writing FeedbackDolia - Aug 27, 2022 / Holt - Aug 28, 2022
More and more people tend to obtain knowledge at home instead of going to schools or extra classes

2 - The prompt restatement is confusing. It incorrectly implies that children and adults both benefit from attending school online. '...

Writing Feedbackllkngocc - Aug 27, 2022 / Holt - Aug 28, 2022
Essay about being better for children learn at primary school than learning at secondary school.

3 - If the writer thinks that this trend's benefits overshadow its drawbacks, he'd better build a paragraph of advantages in...

Writing Feedbackdatn31874 - Aug 26, 2022 / Lehoang - Aug 27, 2022
Children should always follow their parents advice to what extent do you agree or disagree with this

3 - The writer forgot to state that he either agrees or disagrees with the idea, as well as the extent...

Writing FeedbackHanh16 - Aug 26, 2022 / Lehoang - Aug 27, 2022
People are living in a 'throwaway society' using things for a short time and then throwing them away

2 - This is only a 4 paragraph essay that the writer has opted to try to (unsuccessfully) expand to a...

Writing Feedbackchanyeol2711 - Aug 27, 2022 / Holt - Aug 27, 2022
The number of people in Asia who took their driving test and obtained a driver license due to it

2 - The habit of writing in run-on sentences is highly obvious in this essay. The writer tends to combine 2...

Writing Feedbackinzang - Aug 26, 2022 / Holt - Aug 26, 2022
Disciplinary measures using strict rules of behaviour play an significant role in raising children

2 - While reading this essay, I came to realize that the with did not understand the writing instruction. The discussion...

Writing Feedbacksabrina9147 - Aug 25, 2022 / Holt - Aug 26, 2022
[IELTS - WRITING TASK 2] Spend money to construct new railway or to improve public transport

2 - 358 words shows a lack of writing quality and incorrect task focus on the part of the exam taker....

Writing FeedbackBcnz - Aug 25, 2022 / Holt - Aug 26, 2022
Number of people including grown-ups as well as kids have been working and studying online from home

2 - People references adults and children. It is an all encompassing reference that does not need specific mentions afterwards. Since...

Writing Feedbackinzang - Aug 25, 2022 / Holt - Aug 26, 2022
Describe the table in task 1, about television viewing figures

2 - Try to avoid underwriting words in the task 1 essay. Be mindful of the 150 minimum and 200 maximum...

Writing Feedbacklequy1209 - Aug 25, 2022 / Holt - Aug 25, 2022
The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction

2 - Based on the number of maps prounded, this essay should have followed the 4 paragraph format. 1980 should have...

Writing FeedbackLe Trang - Aug 24, 2022 / Holt - Aug 24, 2022
Many young people who leave school hold a negative attitude toward learning. Why does this happen?

2 - There is no doubt that this essay will receive a failing overall score based on the writer's misinterpretation and...

Writing FeedbackMaiPhuongLeHoang - Aug 22, 2022 / Holt - Aug 23, 2022
Satisfaction with the job the nation's major airlines are doing

2 - Pick on descriptive reference point. Do not use all 3. It creates a confusing statement for the reader....

Writing Feedbackhua911107 - Aug 22, 2022 / Holt - Aug 23, 2022
WRITING TASK 1- The charts show the average consumption of three nutrients by adults in the UK

2 - Avoid the use of archaic English in these essays. The scores for vocabulary are based on the writer's ability...

Writing Feedbackvioletsky - Aug 22, 2022 / Holt - Aug 23, 2022
WRITING TASK 2: Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative

2 - [quote=pttrang]there are[/quote] Use a direct statement in this portion. There is no need for this referencing phrase since the...

Writing Feedbackpttrang - Aug 21, 2022 / Holt - Aug 22, 2022
It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.

3 - it's an okay type essay but can be better with better vocabulary and structure...

Writing FeedbackTruongphan - Aug 20, 2022 / Arshit0303 - Aug 21, 2022
[IELTS WT1] The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plan

2 - A task 1 essay cannot have more than 200 words written since there is a 20 minute writing limitation....

Writing FeedbackHoang Minh - Aug 21, 2022 / Holt - Aug 21, 2022
Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their freetime to help

3 - Hi, I think that in your conclusion, using "boast their soft skills" is inappropriate. I checked the dictionary beforehand...

Writing FeedbackLinda Hudson - Aug 18, 2022 / lexuanhoa123 - Aug 20, 2022
People argue if multiplayer sports are more beneficial than individual competition

2 - The writer has not written enough words to merit a passing score. At 217 words where 250 is the...

Writing FeedbackNinhnguyenksnb - Aug 19, 2022 / Holt - Aug 19, 2022
The proportion of the employment of first-year teachers by year of graduation in Ontario; IELTS 1

2 - The summary could use some clarification points. For starters, there should be an indicator of 2 lines running through...

Writing Feedbackthomle - Aug 19, 2022 / Holt - Aug 19, 2022
IELTS 1 Line graph - The proportion of possessing various tools powered by electricity / chores time

2 - How many line graphs were presented? Identify the number early on. When referencing the trends in the specific statement,...

Writing FeedbackPore - Aug 18, 2022 / Holt - Aug 19, 2022
The picture below shows the use of renewable energy accounting the total energy from 1971 to 2006.

2 - When indicating the summary overview, never forget to list the complete names of information sources. In this case, indicate...

Writing Feedbackhyemimibun2612 - Aug 18, 2022 / Holt - Aug 19, 2022
The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy.

3 - I just want to suggest you should watch out for your grammar later on, the first two sentences are...

Writing FeedbackCoffee25 - Aug 17, 2022 / Pore - Aug 18, 2022
Task 1: The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows

3 - I just to want to suggest you reread your essay for these errors: "Next in ranking ... with is...

Writing FeedbackIloveielts - Aug 8, 2022 / Pore - Aug 18, 2022
Writing IELTS Task 2: People have different views regarding the importance of robots in societies

2 - The prompt restatement is an incomplete depiction of the original presentation. The writer must always provide 3 points of...

Writing Feedbacklexuanhoa123 - Aug 17, 2022 / Holt - Aug 18, 2022
In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why? Is it a good thing?

2 - The essay is still 23 words over the suggested word count. The writer is relying on overwriting to help...

Writing Feedbackcherryblossom - Aug 10, 2022 / Holt - Aug 18, 2022
IELTS 1: PROCESS OF PLASTICS RECYCLING; Report the main features, and make relevant comparisons

2 - I tried to follow the report that the writer developed and found myself lost when I compared his report...

Writing FeedbackPore - Aug 17, 2022 / Holt - Aug 18, 2022
IELTS 2 : ENVIRONMENT; the use of alternative sources of energy (wind and solar energy) is promoted

2 - Here is the thing about the prompt rephrasement section of this essay, it is not a mere restating of...

Writing Feedbackririna - Aug 17, 2022 / Holt - Aug 18, 2022
Viewpoints on advertising

3 - You made a serious simple grammar mistake: For example, many English learners... Because..." This is wrong, and you shall...

Writing Feedbackdaisytruong2005 - Aug 17, 2022 / Pore - Aug 17, 2022
IELTS Task 2 Choosing interesting subjects or gaining knowledge that will be practical in the future

3 - I think the first paragraph should not include a specific statisitc, but please try a general way: researches. The...

Writing Feedbackwjc74751 - Aug 16, 2022 / Pore - Aug 17, 2022
IELTS 2 Agree/Disagree: Festival - people just enjoy themselves during this time

2 - The strength and strong scoring potential of this essay is in its ability to deliver the discussion as required....

Writing FeedbackPore - Aug 17, 2022 / Holt - Aug 17, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - As a learning tool for young people, the media is better than experiences.

2 - Since the response for this essay is to be based on a measured response, the opening sentence cannot begin...

Writing Feedbackminhthu06 - Aug 16, 2022 / Holt - Aug 17, 2022
IELTS 2: family, children - the numbers are declining

2 - When an exam taker writes as incoherently as this person, he can only expect one result from the test....

Writing FeedbackQuang Bao - Aug 16, 2022 / Holt - Aug 16, 2022
Ielts writing task 1: student accommodation 1960s-2000s

3 - you are writing coherently enough, but your sentences should be linked more together as too many simple ones can...

Writing FeedbackKhangdang - Aug 16, 2022 / Quang Bao - Aug 16, 2022
The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population

3 - You probably have not included the prompt, so your task response will be hard to evaluate this essay. Assume...

Writing Feedbackthaohung2442006 - Aug 16, 2022 / Quang Bao - Aug 16, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 (NATURAL PROCESS): The diagram shows the life of a honey bee.

5 - There is a detail that the bee gets the pattern after the second moulting, which should be added. ...

Writing FeedbackHelen Phan_4505 - Aug 13, 2022 / wjc74751 - Aug 16, 2022
IELTS 1: The changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent for housework.

3 - I think there should be a short introduction in the second paragraph. Besides, there is no change trend...

Writing FeedbackJori - Aug 10, 2022 / wjc74751 - Aug 16, 2022
Despite the availability of many translation softwares, it is still beneficial to learn a language.

2 - The writer has created an orginal prompt statement rather than simply restating the original prompt. As such, the task...

Writing Feedbacktueminh1010 - Aug 16, 2022 / Holt - Aug 16, 2022
Environmental Problem Essay (Task 2) about extinction of flora and fauna species

2 - There is no discussion reference in the ougeval in relation to It is better for the...

Writing Feedbacklylian_29 - Aug 16, 2022 / Holt - Aug 16, 2022
Will taking risks brings us more advantages than disadvantages? (Task 2)

3 - Basically, you are anwering with an off-topic essay. The prompt asked you to express your opinion evaluating whether there...

Writing FeedbackNatsure - Aug 16, 2022 / Quang Bao - Aug 16, 2022
Homelessness IELTS part 2

2 - The reason that there was an over writing time is because the writer was focused on writing reasons rather...

Writing FeedbackQuang Bao - Aug 15, 2022 / Holt - Aug 16, 2022
A writing about education. Tuition fees for studies

2 - Do not refer to something as a public opinion, when it is not indicated as such in the original...

Writing FeedbackNhat Ha - Aug 15, 2022 / Holt - Aug 16, 2022
IELTS@In many countries, people spend more and more time away from their families. What causes this

3 - Please note that the word count on your essay isn't met the IELTS requirements for task two. You can...

Writing Feedbackwjc74751 - Aug 15, 2022 / huyjunnie - Aug 15, 2022
If a product is good enough or it meets people's needs, advertising is unnecessary. Opinion essay

4 - Yes, I also think you made a mistake about "fish source" instead of "fish sauce", which then causes the...

Writing Feedbackarthur123 - Aug 12, 2022 / Nhat Ha - Aug 15, 2022
Learning local history more crucial for pupils than gaining knowledge about the world's past events

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback, I'm going to take the IELTS exams so do you have any recommendations...

Writing FeedbackNhat Ha - Aug 15, 2022 / Nhat Ha - Aug 15, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: IS MONEY THE MOST IMPORTANT FACTOR TO MOTIVATE PEOPLE TO STAY IN THE WORKFORCE

3 - I agree with the consultant that your conclusion is a little too short while your introduction is quite detailed,...

Writing Feedbackgradient - Aug 11, 2022 / Nhat Ha - Aug 15, 2022
Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones (school day). Both views

3 - I think you should divide the second paragraph into 2 parts so as to make it easier to follow....

Writing Feedbackanhkhoa257 - Aug 12, 2022 / Nhat Ha - Aug 15, 2022
IELTS Task 1 - write a letter to report customer's complaints

3 - The writer has made some basic grammatical mistakes in this letter, such as "become perfect" instead of "become perfectly"...

Writing Feedbacktslove - Aug 13, 2022 / Donfil - Aug 15, 2022
BUSSINES ADMINISTRATION PERSONAL STATMENT FOR GLOBAL KOREA SCHOLARSHIP

3 - Thank you for your answer Since junior high school, I have been interested in business. At that time,...

Writing Feedbackaprilia27 - Aug 7, 2022 / aprilia27 - Aug 14, 2022
Nothing can be done to prevent crime. To which extent do you agree or not?

2 - Do not immediately discuss the essay topic in the first paragraph. That is an automatic failing score since the...

Writing FeedbackWangYu0611 - Aug 13, 2022 / Holt - Aug 14, 2022
ESSAYS ABOUT PUBLIC MUSEUMS AND ART GALLERIES (are they still needed?)

3 - Hi, In your first reasoning paragraph, your topic sentence mentions that:"... public museums and art galleries had better be...

Writing FeedbackDonfil - Aug 12, 2022 / lexuanhoa123 - Aug 13, 2022
The youth pay more attention to entertainment celebrities than the historic figures of their nations

2 - The prompt restatement is well developed. However, the establishing discussion topics are missing from the opinion statement, thus leaving...

Writing Feedbackmichaelpark - Aug 12, 2022 / Holt - Aug 13, 2022
Big salary is more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

2 - When writing the prompt estatement do not indicate "several reasons" when it cannot be referred to in the original...

Writing Feedbackmileyno - Aug 11, 2022 / Holt - Aug 12, 2022
Shortage of physical exercise is a prevailing situation among citizens

2 - A review of the original prompt indicates that the writer should have provided reasoning topics for the questions provided....

Writing Feedbackhdklntt - Aug 10, 2022 / Holt - Aug 11, 2022

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