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|Don't be a victim of interview bias
3 - Thien, the clarity of your opinion is lost due to the manner of your discussion. You failed to make...
Writing FeedbackRogerPham - Mar 21, 2017 / Holt - Mar 23, 2017
|Writing 2: Computers replacing teachers / Money Education
2 - Arlenliu, it is of utmost importance that you post the exact prompts of your essay alongside your draft so...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Mar 22, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Mar 23, 2017
|Convenience food / city people for writing IELTS task 2
2 - Heru, your essay failed to answer the prompt as it seems you did not understand the requirements of the...
Writing FeedbackTongalere - Mar 22, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Mar 23, 2017
|The first day of learning oral English
Writing FeedbackZona - Mar 21, 2017 / d2ny - Mar 22, 2017
|Environment problems, who would be responsible for this? - IELTS essay topic
Writing Feedbackdemi34 - Mar 11, 2017 / demi34 - Mar 21, 2017
|IELTS writing the topic is about laws and society
3 - Hi Michele, I have read your writing closely and found some you have to improve. Please, meet my notes...
Writing Feedbackmichele - Mar 20, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 20, 2017
|Celebrating Food - Traditional food will change by fast food ?
2 - Nisa, there are a large number of problems related to this particular essay. It has both good and bad...
Writing FeedbackNisa_sultan - Mar 20, 2017 / Holt - Mar 20, 2017
|Why do we use Smartphones?
3 - You did not point out your statement clearly in the first paragraph, and what is the purpose you write...
Writing Feedbackwealthy life - Dec 3, 2012 / ERIC SUNG - Mar 20, 2017
|The children should be allowed to have smart phones along with maintaining some restrictions - TOEFL
2 - Rajeeb, you cannot discuss this essay by staying in the middle or taking the "up to a certain degree"...
Writing FeedbackTechRinser - Dec 19, 2015 / Holt - Mar 20, 2017
|A Picnic I enjoyed; it was marvellous to leave the grey building of a city behind
2 - Ayreen, when you write a descriptive essay, the first thing you have to learn to do is accurately describe...
Writing Feedbackayreen akrami - Dec 11, 2012 / Holt - Mar 20, 2017
|The honesty importance in a relationship
3 - For me, I CONSIDER HONESTY ESSENTIAL IN ALL ASPECTS OF LIFE, AND TELLING THE TRUTH FORMS A LARGE PART...
Writing Feedbackcheniki - Mar 19, 2017 / Guderian455 - Mar 19, 2017
|Factors which have an influence on men and women
3 - Hi Maitou, there were a few improvements you needed. First, make sure that you write is in your mind....
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 19, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 19, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Reference Letter for a job - Request from a Teacher
Writing Feedbacktanner - Mar 19, 2017 / Maitouyen282 - Mar 19, 2017
|Household expenditure in Hong Kong and Britain - charts give the breakdown of the percentage
4 - You counted sentences only for the first two paragraphs. Review the third paragraph and you will see that you...
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 18, 2017 / Holt - Mar 19, 2017
|Smart phones prohibition among kids
4 - A proper academic essay is composed of 5 parts. That description for these paragraphs are the introduction, 3 body...
Writing Feedbackdesign4cracker - Mar 19, 2017 / Holt - Mar 19, 2017
|(Russian National Exam) Agree or disagree? The clothes people wear influence their behavior
7 - @Holt, I am sorry. I wasn`t going to teach you. I just wanted to provide you this structure to...
Writing Feedbackalinavaky - Mar 19, 2017 / alinavaky - Mar 19, 2017
|New technology devices and software make students can not concentrate on class
Writing FeedbackERIC SUNG - Mar 19, 2017 / ERIC SUNG - Mar 19, 2017
|Learning a foreign language can be optimal in primary school, but the real language may bemuse them
3 - Nuraini, the biggest problem of your essay is that you did not offer a proper paraphrasing of the prompt...
Writing Feedbacknurainiyusuf16 - Nov 29, 2016 / Holt - Mar 19, 2017
|Lights and shadows of being a known person
4 - @xuancuong Hi I am learning ielts so i am really glad to help you in this essay. firstly, you...
Writing Feedbackxuancuong - Mar 17, 2017 / Maitouyen282 - Mar 18, 2017
|Team work; Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard
Writing Feedbackabderraouf2che - Mar 18, 2017 / abderraouf2che - Mar 18, 2017
|Education from parents and diversity - whether parents are the best teachers?
3 - Anh, what is the actual prompt requirement that you are responding to? Kindly indicate it in your response to...
Writing Feedbackantonie8x - Mar 17, 2017 / Holt - Mar 18, 2017
|IELTS task 2 about "What are the changes of family structures and family roles"
2 - Yolanda, the main problem with this essay is that it focused itself on the "Once Child Policy" of China....
Writing FeedbackYolandaessay - Mar 17, 2017 / Holt - Mar 17, 2017
|Second language learning at primary school. Both positive and negative aspects.
Writing Feedbackmaruko chan - Mar 16, 2017 / maruko chan - Mar 17, 2017
|workers commuting to work. IELTS Writing Task 1 - Paraphrasing INTRODUCTION
4 - Thao, I have already corrected your one sentence opening statement in my previous thread. So I will not be...
Writing Feedbackdreamof90 - Mar 16, 2017 / Holt - Mar 17, 2017
|Discussion about if dinosaurs are endotherms
Writing Feedbackbaptista - Mar 9, 2017 / baptista - Mar 16, 2017
|CLEP English Comp essay - discuss potential merits of various learning forms
3 - @Holt, thank you again for your fast and insightful comments. I am planning to take my test next Wednesday,...
Writing FeedbackPeterson123 - Mar 15, 2017 / Peterson123 - Mar 15, 2017
|Protecting wildlife through zoos?
2 - Hoang, since this is the very first essay that you have written for the IELTS practice test, I will...
Writing Feedbackhoangvutran123 - Mar 15, 2017 / Holt - Mar 15, 2017
|TOEFL independent writing task 1. A new restaurant may be built in your neighorhood.
Writing Feedbackfufuleilei - Mar 14, 2017 / fufuleilei - Mar 15, 2017
|Unveiling crimes using sophisticated technology
6 - I agree that your opinion is presented early, before a proper introduction of your topic. You make good...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 13, 2017 / Peterson123 - Mar 15, 2017
|CLEP English comp essay point of view: curriculum in education
3 - @Holt, thank you very much for your great feedback. This process is so helpful, and I want to improve...
Writing FeedbackPeterson123 - Mar 14, 2017 / Peterson123 - Mar 15, 2017
|Intercultural Communication connecting the societes. Final essay.
3 - Hello Suya, You have written a well-reasoned essay on intercultural communication based on your personal experiences. I think...
Writing FeedbackSUYA - Mar 14, 2017 / Peterson123 - Mar 14, 2017
|CLEP English Comp essay point of view: "Is it easier now than ever before to form friendships?"
Writing FeedbackPeterson123 - Mar 14, 2017 / Peterson123 - Mar 14, 2017
|How a solar powered water pump works
5 - I will not repeat the suggestion details anymore because I already explained it in the previous thread observation that...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 11, 2017 / Holt - Mar 14, 2017
|Writing 2: Should the government encourage a certain percentage of jobs to be reserved for women?
3 - Arlen, in your opening statement, you strongly support the idea that positions should be reserved for women. However, you...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Mar 14, 2017 / Holt - Mar 14, 2017
|CLEP English Comp essay prep - agree/ disagree "no goals so impossible as ones we set for ourselves"
4 - Thank you bontonsoup1 and Holt, I especially appreciate the suggestion to sharpen my focus to one side of...
Writing FeedbackPeterson123 - Mar 13, 2017 / Peterson123 - Mar 14, 2017
|Online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013
2 - Nur, while it is good that you have learned how to remove the mechanical representation of information in your...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 14, 2017 / Holt - Mar 14, 2017
|The talk about your favorite language
Writing Feedbackdoanquoc - Mar 13, 2017 / Arlen - Mar 14, 2017
|IELTS- Bigger Priority - governments should charge on railways instead of roads.
Writing FeedbackPaige - Mar 11, 2017 / Arlen - Mar 14, 2017
|Body image promoted and shared by social media is harmful to user
4 - Henry, your essay shows that you were given a topic to write about which is of huge importance or...
Writing Feedbackarsenal4life - Mar 14, 2017 / Holt - Mar 14, 2017
|The way international associations help developing countries
4 - First of all, I would like to thank you for your precious comment. I would like to empathize that...
Writing Feedbackhiencute - Mar 13, 2017 / hiencute - Mar 13, 2017
|Essay about the importance of spending money on the arts
3 - Hi Martina, I have read your essay and found some errors which you are supposed to improve. Hopefully, you...
Writing FeedbackWarda1992 - Mar 13, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 13, 2017
|The three different charts present the percentage of four different categories of foods utilized
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 11, 2017 / Maitouyen282 - Mar 13, 2017
|It is difficult to imagine a life without music. Traditional or popular, modern music?
3 - Nutwarara, the essay that you wrote will earn you a score of 4 because you did not properly discuss...
Writing Feedbacknutwararat - Mar 12, 2017 / Holt - Mar 13, 2017
|There is a nexus between corruption and terrorism
Writing FeedbackFAHADKHAN185 - Mar 12, 2017 / Holt - Mar 12, 2017
|Finacial Aid VS Practical Aid And Advice
4 - No bother at all Anais. I think you will see where your faulty paraphrasing came in with the example...
Writing FeedbackAnais - Mar 12, 2017 / Holt - Mar 12, 2017
|The most important aspect of a job is the size of money you earn. Big salary vs job satisfaction?
3 - Hi @Mohsen23 I know that your idea disagrees the prompt. However, sometimes i get confuse because a lot of...
Writing FeedbackMohsen23 - Mar 7, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 11, 2017
|Plethora numbers of criminal activities - causes of crime rate and effort to prevent them
4 - @yuukinohan4 Hi! I am learning IELTS too. Therefore, I give you some advice. Firstly, the cause of crime. Nowadays,...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 10, 2017 / Maitouyen282 - Mar 11, 2017
|Many children have difficulty paying attention and concentrating in their classes at school
6 - Hi guys @ChiObi @yuukinohan4 @Holt @eiriashhar Thank you so much for all your golden feedback. I read them...
Writing FeedbackOkaeef - Mar 10, 2017 / Okaeef - Mar 11, 2017
|My view on Independent Recruiting of Universities
4 - @Holt First of all ,I am very grateful to you for your advice. I'm a college student in China.I've...
Writing FeedbackRayLi - Mar 10, 2017 / RayLi - Mar 10, 2017
|The line graph depicts the different modes of transportation used by the country United Kingdom
6 - Hi @Sajeemaka I have already read your entire essay, i just suggest you to group the paragraph of...
Writing FeedbackSajeemaka - Mar 9, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 10, 2017
|Oil resources and Consumption annually in the same areas
4 - It would be better if you do not include any actual information in the overview summary. The summary is...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 9, 2017 / Holt - Mar 10, 2017
|Essay - Intercultural Communication. Western culture always tends to be open comparing with Eastern
Writing FeedbackKaitonglin - Mar 9, 2017 / Kaitonglin - Mar 9, 2017
|A discussion paper regarding the mental health services in the city
2 - Luk, for the question section, do not provide the instructions that your professor provided for the writing of the...
Writing Feedbacklskarena22 - Mar 9, 2017 / Holt - Mar 9, 2017
|IETLS Writing task 1 - 'Parkway Hotel customer service' pie chart
4 - Hi Vi, I have read your writing closer and found a few improvements you need. Firstly, you actually presented...
Writing Feedbackchikachika - Mar 8, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 9, 2017
|The percentage of elderly aged over 65 in USA, Japan and Sweden from 1940 to 2040 - IELTS
3 - Hi Ainun, I will give you a few corrections. Actually, based on the systematic, you can successfully write this...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Mar 8, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 9, 2017
|Car Ownership increasing big traffic jams
4 - Hey Nur! Like Holt said above, the introduction is mainly used to talk about the issue at hand and...
Writing Feedbackyuukinohan4 - Mar 8, 2017 / DoctorWho - Mar 8, 2017
|IELTS TASK 1 Other worker's salaries, teacher's salaries and furniture and equipment
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 7, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
|The government should promote the use of renewable energy in electricity generation
3 - Luk, this is a sound summary of your policy paper research. I hope though that this is not the...
Writing Feedbacklskarena22 - Mar 8, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
|IELTS WRITING PART 2 ex-criminals are good teacher for teenagers on danger of committing a crime
3 - Hi @Neo Lee After reading a whole of your essay, I can understand the reason of your agreement toward...
Writing FeedbackNeo Lee - Mar 8, 2017 / yuukinohan4 - Mar 8, 2017
|Higher entrance fees to attractions for residents than for foreign travelers?
6 - Duy, you would get a very disturbing score of 3 for this essay. The reason that you failed to...
Writing Feedbackhausofduy - Mar 8, 2017 / Holt - Mar 8, 2017
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