|Home / Writing Feedback [23,927] - page 49 of 399|
|IELTS Task 2: Argument on whether economic progress is the most important goal of governments
2 - Zhou, it is unacceptable for you to present your point of view in the opening statement. That is not...
Writing FeedbackYuAnne - Jul 23, 2017 / Holt - Jul 23, 2017
|Prison or education is better to solve the problem of crime?
4 - @linhlol1749 Hello, your point is good, while it's better to pay attention to some usual grammatical mistakes, like there...
Writing Feedbacklinhlol1749 - Jul 23, 2017 / YuAnne - Jul 23, 2017
|The proportion of Coca-Cola sales around the World - IELTS Task 1
3 - @frankie89724 I think you have to be more careful when describing the trend. You need the preposition to...
Writing Feedbackfrankie89724 - Jul 22, 2017 / hi021132 - Jul 23, 2017
|Ielts task 2: high petrol price can reduce traffic?
2 - @ruby1231 I believe that the overall score for your essay would be somewhere in the 5 range. This is...
Writing Feedbackruby1231 - Jul 22, 2017 / Holt - Jul 23, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - discuss the importance of homework
3 - Wally the whole approach that you took to discussing this essay is not in accordance with the prompt requirement....
Writing Feedbacklee1943 - Jul 22, 2017 / Holt - Jul 22, 2017
|Film import in comparison to self-production
2 - Tung, your essay lacks proper discussion developments that could have better represented a cohesive and coherent discussion. I think...
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Jul 22, 2017 / Holt - Jul 22, 2017
|The history of Harris. [Narrative essay] Gave Me Hope
2 - Sharisha, pay attention to the tense usage in your presentation. You tend to confuse your present and past tense...
Writing FeedbackBluecoral - Jul 21, 2017 / Holt - Jul 22, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Saving or spend money
5 - @Holt Thanks so much, your advice is really helpful with me. I will try to concentrate on only 1...
Writing Feedbacknguyet_nguyen - Jul 22, 2017 / nguyet_nguyen - Jul 22, 2017
|Honey bee diagram explanation - [IELTS Writing Task 1]
4 - Peter, when the word minimum is 150, you should not just write 150 words. You wrote just enough to...
Writing Feedbackhi021132 - Jul 21, 2017 / Holt - Jul 22, 2017
|Do the drawbacks of video games (unhealthy lifestyle, distraction from study) outweigh the benefits?
Writing FeedbackYuAnne - Jul 19, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Jul 22, 2017
|"A lot of people want to get married at later ages. Why is this trend popular ?"
5 - Hi I think your essay is good, has many academic vocab. You can write the conclusion by paraphrasing the...
Writing Feedbacknguyentram - Jul 20, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Jul 22, 2017
|The pie charts illustrate five sources of energy production in France.
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Jul 21, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Jul 21, 2017
|Japanese people traveling oversea from 1985 to 1995; market share of Australia
2 - Phuong, kindly remember that we are unable to accurately review your essay when you do not upload the illustration...
Writing Feedbackphkhanh12 - Jul 21, 2017 / Holt - Jul 21, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2, talk about marriage age limitation in which at least 21
2 - Putri, there are so many problems with the way that you wrote this essay that I cannot figure out...
Writing Feedbackputjaaa - Jul 21, 2017 / Holt - Jul 21, 2017
|[IELTS Task 1] The main reasons for study among students of different age groups
2 - Peter in terms of a summary overview, you could have had a better presentation if you had actually indicated...
Writing Feedbackhi021132 - Jul 21, 2017 / Holt - Jul 21, 2017
|Having a gap year before attending college - IELTS
3 - Thanks @Holt However, I want to ask you about this sentence "Others believe that traveling after high school...
Writing Feedbacknguyet_nguyen - Jul 20, 2017 / nguyet_nguyen - Jul 21, 2017
|Is it true that women make better parents than men? Discuss
2 - Atakan, this is not a comparison and point of view essay. This is a straightforward personal opinion essay. So...
Writing FeedbackElixiron - Jul 21, 2017 / Holt - Jul 21, 2017
|[task 1]Surveys conducted in 1982 and 2002 show what motivate students to choose a school in the UK
4 - @LadyOfClockwork You utilizes a variety of words which interprets the overall survey very well. Like "shed light on"...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Jul 20, 2017 / Allentseng - Jul 20, 2017
|Is it possible for a country to be economically progressive while having a clean environment?
Writing FeedbackBoredpanda - Jul 20, 2017 / Boredpanda - Jul 20, 2017
|My points of view to the open offices.
3 - Thank you very much. I read the article here. ( time./4590401/open-office-productivity/ ) And then I try to write down...
Writing FeedbackCarol Li - Jul 20, 2017 / Carol Li - Jul 20, 2017
|[Task 1] The changing rates of crime in Newport city over nine years
7 - Hi Liza, your observations and descriptions are correct, but I think you may miss some features which are worth...
Writing FeedbackLiza2307 - Jul 16, 2017 / hi021132 - Jul 20, 2017
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern life is easier than life in the past.
2 - Utsav, your brain was running a mile a minute when you wrote this essay. You thought of so many...
Writing Feedbackutsi - Jul 20, 2017 / Holt - Jul 20, 2017
|[IELTS Writing Task 1] The consumption of fish and different kinds of meat between 1979 and 2004
3 - Thank you for your comment. I really find it useful, especially the comment about the choice of words. But...
Writing Feedbackhi021132 - Jul 19, 2017 / hi021132 - Jul 20, 2017
|Practice IELTS Writing Task 2 - Advantages or Disadvantages of Information Technology Development
Writing Feedbacktsonga - Jul 19, 2017 / tsonga - Jul 20, 2017
|Burgeoning economic growth effect. Problem and solution essay.
3 - @Sirojiddin it would be best if you can separate your discussions into the manner indicated in the discussion instructions....
Writing FeedbackSirojiddin - Jul 19, 2017 / Holt - Jul 20, 2017
|THE AVERAGE ATTENDANCE OF TOP-LEVEL SOCCER LEAGUES
Writing Feedbackthanhnguyen1011 - Jul 18, 2017 / thanhnguyen1011 - Jul 20, 2017
|Should Grades Define Your Intelligence?
3 - Well, I think there are some problems with these sentences +Growing up everybody is taught that the number one...
Writing Feedbackdfig2233 - Jul 19, 2017 / Kaylee - Jul 19, 2017
|OPINION ABOUT SHOPPING ONLINE
4 - @YuAnne THANKS, I GOT IT @Holt THANKS FOR YOUR ADVICE. USING OPPOSITE OPINION LIKE A LEVER. I LIKE...
Writing FeedbackGnad - Jul 19, 2017 / Gnad - Jul 19, 2017
|Practice IELTS Writing Task 2 - Benefit and Drawback of Computer Games
3 - Hello Mr Habib, in this moment I am going to offer a few suggestions for improving your essay so...
Writing Feedbackhabibaistiqomah - Jul 19, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Jul 19, 2017
|Poor countries are helped by young people from wealthy nations.
2 - Tung, when the instruction says "approximately" that means you have to write up to the number of words indicated....
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Jul 19, 2017 / Holt - Jul 19, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Overpopulation problem and how to solve it
Writing Feedbackarizabp - Jul 18, 2017 / arizabp - Jul 19, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] How human activites effect animals life and solutions suggested
3 - I think your essay is good and easy-to-follow. But it would be better if you explain more in two...
Writing Feedbackduongtong1414 - Jul 16, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Jul 19, 2017
|[IELTS] Schools are no longer necessary because of the Internet... Agree or disagree?
4 - Hello YuAnne, Your essay is good, you wrote it with topic sentences, which made your essay clear. I think...
Writing FeedbackYuAnne - Jul 18, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Jul 19, 2017
|Performance Bell Curve; archaic practice causes unfair employee evaluation
Writing Feedbackkristinbaum82 - Jul 17, 2017 / kristinbaum82 - Jul 19, 2017
|IELTS argumentative essay for Salaries of Sports Athletes
3 - Ricardo, you were not able to properly paraphrase the original prompt. You mistook the presentation of facts in your...
Writing Feedbackricardof360 - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 18, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : Give opinions on teaching a foreign language in primary school years.
5 - @hailung Thank you for your comment. - But as i know, many students who learn foreign language early have...
Writing Feedbackthaongoc - Jun 30, 2017 / thaongoc - Jul 18, 2017
|Narrative essay for English about overcoming fears
2 - There is an unanswered question in your presentation. You said "Never give up without trying because you will never...
Writing Feedbacklavonnamark - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|Problems and Solutions about local museums
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Jul 16, 2017 / lavonnamark - Jul 17, 2017
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] - TV alienates family members
4 - overall, good essay. I would fix some of the grammar mistakes tho such as find=found in the first sentence,...
Writing Feedbackchantieh - Jul 16, 2017 / lavonnamark - Jul 17, 2017
|The question is whether the motherhood is essential in raising children. IELTS Writing task 2
Writing Feedbackdaiha20082009 - Jul 16, 2017 / Kaylee - Jul 17, 2017
|It is an absurd that a newspaper is the most crucial source of information
Writing Feedbackkiki2807 - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|[TOEFL iBT INDEPENDENT TASK] THE INTERNET OR PRINTED MATERIAL FOR RESEARCH?
3 - Minh, your body paragraph for your reasoning is acceptable. The problem is that your opening paragraph and concluding paragraphs...
Writing FeedbackMinh Nguyen - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|(IELTS Task 2) Some people choose to eat no meat or fish...
3 - Matias, in the opening statement, you are expected to simply restate the prompt for discussion, the side of the...
Writing Feedbackmcaamano - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|Some people say it is wrong to keep animals in captivity. Others say that are benefit for animal
2 - Nguyet, the next time that you post your essay for review, please post the complete original instructions along with...
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|After graduation from high school, most students tend to attend colleges or universities
Writing Feedbackthanhha19973 - Jul 17, 2017 / Holt - Jul 17, 2017
|GAP YEAR could be a huge asset if used for proper activities - IELTS
5 - I would also say that the essay above does not have a proper balance idea and number of words...
Writing Feedbackhailung - Jul 1, 2017 / lamabeto - Jul 16, 2017
|Protecting the environment by any person is welcomed but multinational cooperation is more important
2 - Robin, if you say that the solution to the problem lies in a multilateral solution, then you must take...
Writing FeedbackRobin_Ni - Jul 16, 2017 / Holt - Jul 16, 2017
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] - Some people propose that smoking should be banned completely
6 - @tunglinh0907@daiha20082009 Thank you for your responses! @thuy_nguyet I think there's no maximum limit to the length of your...
Writing Feedbackchantieh - Jul 14, 2017 / chantieh - Jul 16, 2017
|IELTS task 2 Writing - About should Sports be compulsory at school?
3 - Hi Nguyet, i'm glad to have a chance in sharing with you about writing, especially academic writing. i suppose...
Writing Feedbackthuy_nguyet - Jul 16, 2017 / putjaaa - Jul 16, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Travel and work are the only reason for learning a foreign language
3 - I think your essay is good, easy-to-follow writing, understand the topic. However, there are a few mistakes in your...
Writing FeedbackAllentseng - Jul 15, 2017 / tunglinh0907 - Jul 16, 2017
|Motorways have both positive and negative impacts on the social community
3 - @Holt Thanks for your advice ,Holt ! I understood that its was my mistake to forget the question but...
Writing FeedbackHieugod28102001 - Jul 15, 2017 / Hieugod28102001 - Jul 15, 2017
|The prevention on health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine.
2 - Sana, your paraphrasing is not in the acceptable format. It does not clearly explain the original topic for discussion...
Writing Feedbacksana saeed - Jun 26, 2017 / Holt - Jul 15, 2017
|Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems.
Writing Feedbackanuthomas121 - Jul 15, 2017 / anuthomas121 - Jul 15, 2017
|Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
2 - @YuTingJim the approach you have taken to the discussion of this essay is faulty. Note that the prompt specifically...
Writing FeedbackYuTingJim - Jul 15, 2017 / Holt - Jul 15, 2017
|Folklore Turkish food - Dolma/Yaprag
2 - Farhad. you need too develop the evolutionary story of Dolma from the Yaprag stage before you being to discuss...
Writing Feedbackfar2124696 - Jul 15, 2017 / Holt - Jul 15, 2017
|[TOEFL] Students take distance-learning courses or in a real class. Which one is better?
3 - @Holt Thank you very much for the careful comments. I didn't notice I missed the conclusion at the last...
Writing Feedbackvivisky720 - Jul 13, 2017 / vivisky720 - Jul 15, 2017
|[IELTS: Task 1] Shares of the mobile phone market - the table.
Writing FeedbackLinh Linh - Jul 14, 2017 / Holt - Jul 14, 2017
|My Autobiography..... I'm the only child.
4 - @anna14 Why not dividing your paragraphs into several topic sentences? Let's say, the first paragraph is about your educational...
Writing Feedbackanna14 - Jul 13, 2017 / d2ny - Jul 13, 2017
|The pie charts compare the percentage of a certain school's expenditure annually in UK
2 - Susan, your work cannot be scored because you did not upload the image that was provided to you for...
Writing Feedbacksmvicp - Jul 12, 2017 / Holt - Jul 12, 2017
|The graph gives information about drinking habits in the US by age.
2 - Hoang, you are not properly summarizing the information referred to you for reference in the graph. Aside from identifying...
Writing Feedbackhoangmyvo - Jul 12, 2017 / Holt - Jul 12, 2017
|Home / Writing Feedback|