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|Some people claim that the goal of politics should be the pursuit of an ideal. Others argue ...
4 - @paras01 The issues I see that needs tweaking are grammatical errors. Take note that you need to observe...
Writing Feedbackparas01 - Feb 28, 2017 / sugartown0829 - Feb 28, 2017
|The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
8 - @hongnguyentp92 I hope my suggestion would be useful. On the first paragraph, you tried to paraphrase "produce" with...
Writing Feedbackhongnguyentp92 - Jan 11, 2017 / bagusetyawan - Feb 27, 2017
|Giving tips for your sister on Simple Ways to Save Money
Writing FeedbackChewyy - Feb 26, 2017 / Chewyy - Feb 26, 2017
|Write a letter to your friend, in your letter ask your friend to send you one of the photographs
Writing Feedbackbumblebee - Feb 25, 2017 / Holt - Feb 25, 2017
|The tendency that youth graduates find it difficult to find a job nowadays
Writing Feedbacktramnguyen123456 - Feb 20, 2017 / Holt - Feb 25, 2017
|IELTS task 1 - describe the changes of an island before and after it turned to a resort
6 - @ainunazwaria Hi, thank you for your comment. But about the built or was built, I was trying to use...
Writing Feedbackthien_my - Feb 25, 2017 / thien_my - Feb 25, 2017
|A lot of technological enhancements have taken place in developing societies
6 - Prasanth, the proper paraphrasing of the prompt depends solely on the way that you understand the topic for discussion...
Writing Feedbackprasanthbab - Feb 20, 2017 / Holt - Feb 24, 2017
|The number of UK residents going abroad and overseas residents visiting the UK - IELTS WritingTask 1
4 - Hi Sehat, I have read your writing. I am gonna try giving you a few suggestions. Honestly, your first...
Writing Feedbacksehatdinati - Feb 24, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 24, 2017
|IELTS - the grievance note about the noise from your flat
3 - Hello Jaya Krishna, The content is good, I just would like to suggest you to change some sentences: ...
Writing Feedbackjaikrishna - Feb 22, 2017 / pb1013 - Feb 23, 2017
|Children's education punish or award - ielts task 2
2 - I'm confused a bit since both sides don't seem directly disagreeing with each other, and the word qualified citizen...
Writing FeedbackFirework - Feb 23, 2017 / Nitivat - Feb 23, 2017
|INFORMATION ABOUT COMMUTING PATTERN IN HOUSTON, TEXAS AND CO2 EMMISSIONS
3 - As an additional feedback, reaching 6 or above is quite difficult isn't it? Even though you have written as...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Feb 22, 2017 / ichanpants89 - Feb 23, 2017
|Food Production - is it important to know how our meal is produced? Or the taste only matters.
3 - Aziz, it seems that you somehow understood the prompt but failed to properly discuss the requirements. The paraphrasing of...
Writing FeedbackAziz_Gibran - Feb 23, 2017 / Holt - Feb 23, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1 : Wind Turbine placement and principle of operation (diagram)
3 - @Holt. thank for you comment and suggestion. The diagram actually just one. I forget to delete the first one...
Writing FeedbackAziz_Gibran - Feb 22, 2017 / Aziz_Gibran - Feb 23, 2017
|The ways used to dispose of the harmful garbage in Korea, Sweden and United Kingdom
3 - The introductory paragraph is well done, but I think you need to put some ideas in order to make...
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Feb 22, 2017 / eddies - Feb 22, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: The main features of Global Water Usage in Brazil and Congo
2 - Nuradia, the summary overview of the essay is not presented at all. The opening statement should have first indicated...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Feb 22, 2017 / Holt - Feb 22, 2017
|I would argue that dwelling in small village had several merits and demerits.
5 - An effective thesis statement is one that paraphrases the prompt while delivering a personal understanding on your part of...
Writing Feedbackainunazwaria - Feb 21, 2017 / Holt - Feb 22, 2017
|The quantities of goods moved using four kinds of means in the UK between 1974 and 2002
4 - dear @Abrahamlincoln, A few corrections from me.. Watch the grammar. In paragraph 1, The line graphs compare...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Feb 16, 2017 / nuradiapuspa - Feb 22, 2017
|Minimizing the traffic issue - proposed ways
7 - As mentioned, your introduction paraphrase should give your opinion for agree or disagree questionnaire. 2 or 3 rd...
Writing Feedbacknuradiapuspa - Feb 14, 2017 / jaikrishna - Feb 22, 2017
|The bar chart indicates the figure of time spent in billions of minutes by UK people on phone calls
8 - Hai @Maitouyen282 These are few corrections from me. Hope it could be helpful :) 1. In paragraph...
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Feb 21, 2017 / nuradiapuspa - Feb 22, 2017
|Marriage in early adulthood
3 - @Holt Thank for your advice. It took me two hours to think about main ideas for this essay. I...
Writing Feedbackthichankem - Feb 22, 2017 / thichankem - Feb 22, 2017
|Artificial environments. Positive and negative sides of zoos
4 - Hi @adamrahimov Don't you think you need to switch the opinion paragraphs? It will flow better (even though it...
Writing Feedbackadamrahimov - Feb 20, 2017 / d2ny - Feb 22, 2017
|[REFERENCES LETTER] She has demonstrated an exceptional ability to grasp the rigorous demands of job
7 - Sehat, keep the continued balance in your referral letters. Always present one professional and one extra curricular / socio-civic...
Writing Feedbacksehatdinati - Feb 21, 2017 / Holt - Feb 22, 2017
|task2; The pros and cons of living longer for human being
4 - Hi Jing, I will admit that this is one of the better developed essays that I have come across...
Writing FeedbackAllen1988 - Feb 20, 2017 / Holt - Feb 21, 2017
|Reading has become less significant to Americans.
7 - @akbarmappiare Thank you so much for your feedback. Can you give some suggestions regarding smooth transition from one paragraph...
Writing FeedbackPKM - Nov 27, 2016 / PKM - Feb 20, 2017
|This figure illustrates some new construction in the town of Garlsdon
4 - @MH_tw Dear Deng, other than you miss many information from the figure, your words is only 146 though....
Writing FeedbackMH_tw - Feb 18, 2017 / sehatdinati - Feb 20, 2017
|Critique on literature Review Introduction on Carbohydrate feeding on exercise performance
3 - Amanda, make the second paragraph the first paragraph instead. The actual topic paragraph is located in the second paragraph....
Writing Feedbackjermaine7 - Feb 19, 2017 / Holt - Feb 19, 2017
|[TOEFL] Moving to a new city or country is not agood idea because you will lose your old friends
4 - The full prompt for the essay dictates that you either agree or disagree with the statement provided. Therefore, you...
Writing Feedbackgoo9dan - Feb 19, 2017 / Holt - Feb 19, 2017
|Opinions of celebrities are powerful for young people who haven't decided their major. TOEFL Writing
2 - Asol, once again, I will remind you to please post the complete instructions for your essay prompt. Do not...
Writing Feedbackgoo9dan - Feb 19, 2017 / Holt - Feb 19, 2017
|Nowadays overpopulation and crowding of large cities are considered a big problem in the world.
5 - I correct how much I can. There were spelling mistakes.Also some places you can use synonyms. Additionally...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Feb 18, 2017 / mastindersingh - Feb 19, 2017
|Music cannot be substituted. People can't live without it.
5 - Adam, do not aim for the minimum 3 sentences for the introductory paragraph. The more sentences you have, the...
Writing Feedbackadamrahimov - Feb 18, 2017 / Holt - Feb 19, 2017
|Different techniques to encourage children for higher activity. Competitiveness or cooperativeness?
3 - Hi First, introduce your topic. The introductory paragraph should briefly orient the reader to the topic and provide a...
Writing FeedbackMH_tw - Feb 18, 2017 / rozhnaz - Feb 18, 2017
|The figure illustrates the number of three kinds of fast food eaten by youths in Australia
Writing Feedbacksehatdinati - Feb 18, 2017 / sehatdinati - Feb 18, 2017
|Percentage of the variation of old people, who are above their sixties
2 - To, you need to provide the graph so that I can confirm the accuracy of the information you are...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen2021 - Feb 18, 2017 / Holt - Feb 18, 2017
|PTE Summarize written text in one sentence. IT and blue-collar workers
3 - Thank you Mary! I didn't realize there are three stages. I only got the division by IT and blue-collar...
Writing Feedbackfoyuliu - Feb 18, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 18, 2017
|The pie charts illustrate how the proportion of annual expenditure was changed in a UK school
4 - Add a little comment, regarding following sentences, it seems no need to mention the data in 1991 since you...
Writing Feedbackkocc2003 - Feb 17, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 18, 2017
|Task 2 IELTS The line graph illustrates amount of UK employee transporting every day
5 - You find below my example of a more properly developed overview summary statement. It includes an analysis of the...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen20 - Feb 18, 2017 / Holt - Feb 18, 2017
|Evolution on people's quality of life through the making of foods
4 - For example, when you said "humans have invented enumerated tools...", you created a confusing sentence because the correct development...
Writing Feedbackjaikrishna - Feb 17, 2017 / Holt - Feb 17, 2017
|PTE Essay: should age discrimination be made illegal
Writing Feedbackfoyuliu - Feb 17, 2017 / foyuliu - Feb 17, 2017
|The consequences of deforestation would be even more serious than the global warming
Writing Feedbackrainman9t - Feb 17, 2017 / Holt - Feb 17, 2017
|Our life is very different from this life that our parents and grandparents used to live
4 - Hi Van, You should not repeat the complete question in your answer. Also, for every 2 lines a...
Writing FeedbackVan Nhi Nguyen - Feb 16, 2017 / jaikrishna - Feb 17, 2017
|Writing Task 2 - Travelling to other countries with appreciation for different customs
4 - @Abrahamlincoln In the conclusion, the sentence seems very complicated. It is good to use complex sentences without hampering...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Feb 16, 2017 / haleshi - Feb 16, 2017
|Writing Task 1 - how many people took computer science at university of UK?
4 - Hi Abrahamlincoln, It is important to give more stress on sentence structure. For example, Meanwhile, in the...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Feb 16, 2017 / haleshi - Feb 16, 2017
|Modern building versus buildings from the past
Writing Feedbackhaleshi - Feb 16, 2017 / haleshi - Feb 16, 2017
|Ways to preserve any remaining wilderness areas.
2 - Shivam, upon close analysis of your essay, I do not believe that you can score higher than a 3...
Writing Feedbackshiv_riky - Feb 16, 2017 / Holt - Feb 16, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Presentation skills. Do you think public speaking skill is really important?
3 - Sinchana, the example that you gave about the doctor is irrelevant to the discussion. You presented his success but...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 15, 2017 / Holt - Feb 16, 2017
|To purchase either a house or a business is the question
Writing FeedbackNorahFSH - Feb 10, 2017 / sinchana2017 - Feb 15, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Progress of mankind in recent years
4 - In your presentation, each paragraph has 2 examples which you use to create your message regarding the topic provided,...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 15, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Parenting course program for young parents
5 - Hi Sinchana, I will try offering my perspective about your writing. After I have seen your style in the...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 14, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 15, 2017
|E books versus paper books. Cause and effects.
7 - @akbarmappiare Thanks for your detailed explanation on making me understand about my mistakes. Will work on these things and...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 13, 2017 / sinchana2017 - Feb 14, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: The choice of subject between girls and boys
3 - Sinchana, always keep a formal, academic tone in your essays. Always refer to the genders as male or female,...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|Task 1 IELTS the bar graph shows the global sales (in bilion of dollars) of different games
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen10 - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|Reasons of land degradation globally and the impact it causes on three different continents
3 - Hi Fadhil, welcome to Essay Forum. Hopefully, in the next term, you attach the picture about you explained if...
Writing FeedbackFadhilmmd2511 - Feb 14, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 14, 2017
|How to make our society better?
2 - Kalmia, are you writing this as a response to a specific English qualifying test that you will be taking...
Writing Feedbacklittle kitten - Feb 14, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|CBEST: Pros and Cons of "Letter grading" v/s "Pass- Fail"
Writing FeedbackPKM - Feb 12, 2017 / Holt - Feb 14, 2017
|Today's kids ailments same like among adults. The example - obesity.
12 - Thanks a lot Holt for your speaking. I try to read articles and then write them again. and follow...
Writing FeedbackSARAsajedi91 - Feb 13, 2017 / SARAsajedi91 - Feb 14, 2017
|Essay - healthy lifestyle of individuals. Discuss both sides and give opinion
4 - Hi Sichana, I have read your writing closely. You need improvement, especially your content. In the introductory paragraph, you...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 13, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 14, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: The gap between rich and poor is growing. What problem does this create?
3 - Hi Sinchana, welcome to Essay Forum. I will try offering a few corrections for finalizing your writing. In...
Writing Feedbacksinchana2017 - Feb 13, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Feb 13, 2017
|It's popular for teenagers to travel or to work for a year before studying into next level
7 - You can write that they can get first hand experience of the society rather than somebody else sharing...
Writing FeedbackMH_tw - Feb 8, 2017 / PKM - Feb 13, 2017
|What can arts tell us of life that science cannot?
6 - @Holt Oh yeah, I understand, I thought it has something wrong, now I clear, thanks you and I will...
Writing FeedbackNgocdoan - Feb 10, 2017 / Ngocdoan - Feb 11, 2017
|In industrial society nowadays, many children are suffering from obesity and it is a serious problem
5 - Mai, IELTS is a very technical Test of English of Language and as such, should be given proper attention...
Writing Feedbackmaitouyen124 - Feb 11, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Feb 11, 2017
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