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|Ielts: Dangerous sports are an invisible killer - threatening games should be forbidden.
3 - For this reason, certain individuals consider that athletes should participate to this kind of sports to become wealthy. Although...
Writing Feedbacklourance - Oct 8, 2014 / zzwestmanzz - Oct 8, 2014
|IELTS : Children will easier memorize and manage the foreign words since they are young
2 - It is no doubtundoubtedly true that for learning a foreign language is at primary and secondary school. ThoughHowever ,...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Oct 8, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 8, 2014
|Advertisement makes us know what is the recent product available in the market; impact on our choice
4 - Hi there.. its not bad for the first essay, but you have to pay attention for some point like...
Writing Feedbackbassamfarah - Oct 8, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Oct 8, 2014
|Doing social activities make a strong effect on student's personality; libraries vs sports support
3 - First and foremost, you should make it clear where is your introduction, body and conclusion. Pay attention to the...
Writing Feedbackmaryailt - Oct 8, 2014 / Abdurasul - Oct 8, 2014
|Academic Writing IELTS about numbers of computer users - graph
Writing Feedbackbaj_roman - Oct 6, 2014 / oktaHrp - Oct 8, 2014
|TOEFL: In twenty years cars will be gradually exchanged into other transportation systems
2 - Jen, the sentiments that you tried to convey within your essay are very good. You only have a problem...
Writing FeedbackSmile_Jen - Oct 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 8, 2014
|IELTS - Cinema viewers in the four various countries: India, Ireland, New Zealand and Japan
3 - A few details to share: The table chart illustrates the figures for cinema viewers for films in...
Writing Feedbackrubz_girl23 - Oct 7, 2014 / eddies - Oct 8, 2014
|Eeating food in home has many advantages for family relationship
Writing FeedbackSmile_Jen - Oct 7, 2014 / maryailt - Oct 8, 2014
|Ielts: Parents should be more involved with their children's upbringing.
8 - please... do not try to make my sentences correct if you are not sure!!!! Gbekil, yea,,,, you are...
Writing Feedbackhandsome78boy - Oct 2, 2014 / handsome78boy - Oct 7, 2014
|"Hey my son Military writ came for you" - should national service be mandatory for young adults?
Writing FeedbackKhusel - Oct 7, 2014 / Khusel - Oct 7, 2014
|Altruism and sacrifice - people donate money for a reason
2 - Vns, what is the prompt for the essay? I realize that it is a commentary on a previously assigned...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|Experiencing is much more pivotal than reading a book because it is more realistic.
2 - Millions of people are reading books since it has numerous useful information to comprehend.Yet, the rest are always learning...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 7, 2014 / IHaile - Oct 7, 2014
|I've always been searching for the perfect room my whole life - interior design essay
2 - meme, it is difficult to help you with your essay because you did not offer to share the essay...
Writing Feedbackmemecx - Oct 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|Ielts: Animal testing is used in important medical researches.
2 - - State your opinion immediately. You must say it within the introduction in order to show us the...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Oct 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|A job should mean a job for life!
3 - Vns, you show a thorough understanding of the essay prompt and have managed to use very informative, logical, and...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|Upward trend in the national and international call lines and the # of minutes in the mobile calls
2 - national and international fixed line, and mobiles that the two other classes (what?? I think here you have...
Writing Feedbackrubz_girl23 - Oct 7, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 7, 2014
|Teachers should not instill their social or political points to students.
2 - That is to say, teachers' points as an access for students to discussing mor e social and political issues....
Writing FeedbackMaxineee - Oct 7, 2014 / rubz_girl23 - Oct 7, 2014
|A Revolutionary Mindset; cultural and political characteristics of revolutionary America
2 - The peoples of America have always been diverse. Our colonial settlers came from many different backgrounds, for various reasons,...
Writing Feedbackrichardjolly - Oct 6, 2014 / rubz_girl23 - Oct 7, 2014
|It's certainly true that happiness is an essential component of every human life - IELTS
Writing Feedbackbayratak - Sep 30, 2014 / bayratak - Oct 7, 2014
|IELTS: established preparation at school to become good mother and father?
2 - incomplete sentence While many people agree that formal training for parenting should be given for schoolchildren,...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Oct 6, 2014 / SHanafi - Oct 7, 2014
|The increase in selecting to live individually helps people have a better life; some cons though
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Oct 7, 2014 / Abdurasul - Oct 7, 2014
|"better things that are learned are contained in experiences" - experience vs books knowledge
2 - Your essay has a number of flaws that I will be addressing below. Please consider other ways of presenting...
Writing Feedbackshigaogui - Oct 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 7, 2014
|TOEFL: Make decision by myself or by parents.
Writing FeedbackYuuukily - Oct 6, 2014 / Yuuukily - Oct 7, 2014
|As the essential resource for people's lives, easier prepared food means easier to improve our lives
3 - Thanks for your reply, I find it's better for my essay. But I have a question about that. "the...
Writing FeedbackLittleCa - Oct 6, 2014 / LittleCa - Oct 7, 2014
|How is energy wasted in school?
2 - is a necessity and essential to modern life - I believe this has a slight grammatical problem- either you...
Writing FeedbackEst2k - Oct 6, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Wheat exports
2 - , from 1985 to 1990,andwhich It is noticeable that the total of wheat exports in the three countries fluctuated...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Oct 6, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 6, 2014
|[IELTS] Cheap flights should not be discouraged
4 - - zjxhz, that is exactly what I was pointing out to you. You must always present a clear point...
Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2014
|Marijuana - what it is to you? Rough Draft Compare and Contrast
3 - Greetings! Yes, it is a lot of information. However, it is imperative that it is this long so that...
Writing FeedbackBrandonBritts - Oct 4, 2014 / BrandonBritts - Oct 6, 2014
|Sports facilities should be adopted parallel with sports contests and health events
2 - Kyrsten,excellent introduction even though you forgot to present your point of view. As you know the essay asks...
Writing FeedbackKrysten Mai - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS: the advertisement aimed at children should be restricted or even banned
3 - Well, overall, not bad. However, do not straightforwardly point on children out. Attempt to write in this way. Advertising...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Oct 6, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS- Should foreign visitors pay more than local visitors for tourist sites?
2 - Sam, I will revise and review your essay by showing you how the content can be improved. My comments...
Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Oct 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS - Education should be considered as the most important factor in a country's success
10 - I think your argument here is weak. It seems that you are talking about people, rather than the success...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Sep 4, 2014 / SAM2014 - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS; having purpose of life and being helpful as the main factors to achieve happiness
4 - Hello ritairianti, Let me try to write an introductory paragraph which is in three aspects; an attention-grabbing...
Writing Feedbackritairianti - Oct 5, 2014 / tiaDS - Oct 6, 2014
|Drugs, alcohol and messy sex lives - Celebrities news has negative impacts on children; [IELTS]
7 - Thanks for your comment. Yes recently I have realized that maybe it is better to develop one idea further,...
Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Sep 15, 2014 / zjxhz - Oct 6, 2014
|IELTS-Task 2: children should take formal training to become good parents
Writing Feedbacklourance - Oct 5, 2014 / lourance - Oct 6, 2014
|Kobe vs Lebron? Lebron James is still the King of this basketball planet; Contrast essay
Writing FeedbackGilchrist2014 - Oct 4, 2014 / Gilchrist2014 - Oct 5, 2014
|As a student I always prepared my own food - it is a considerably more expedient choice
4 - Gbekil, the only advice I can give you is to keep reading English materials and watching English films...
Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 5, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 5, 2014
|Naturtint vs. Tom's of Maine - Compare and Contrast 2 advertisements
Writing Feedbackbehendrix - Oct 2, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 5, 2014
|There are no such things as freedom and security without independence - importance in your life
2 - There are no such things as freedom and security without independence. It is simply impossible. You cannot live freely...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 5, 2014 / IHaile - Oct 5, 2014
|Our rights as people define who we are as individuals - SAT ESSAY; CENSORSHIP
2 - Our rights as people define who are we are as individuals. Our individual rights in society allow us to...
Writing Feedbackboston1002 - Oct 5, 2014 / IHaile - Oct 5, 2014
|Do you want do everything by your own hand without expecting to rely on somebody? Work on your own!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 5, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 5, 2014
|Watching television together makes communication among friends and family stronger
5 - i will give you some patern : 1. introduction you should paraphrasing this issue, and write clearly with two...
Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 3, 2014 / ritairianti - Oct 5, 2014
|All schools have got an aim to prepare their students to be a professional individual of the society
Writing FeedbackFuadAzeri - Oct 5, 2014 / FuadAzeri - Oct 5, 2014
|There are three main things that matter to me: God, family, and country. Stanford Essay
3 - Patriot, while you do present very good examples of things that matter to you, there is a big problem...
Writing Feedbackpatriot1776 - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|Security vs freedom - living freely is much more important than security.
2 - Vns, while you offer a very good argument in support of your stand, you have failed to recognize the...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|I think, no one can't live these days without a mobile phone and a computer.
Writing Feedbackrokajo5 - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|I was only thirteen at the time but old enough to understand that Leukemia was cancerous; UC essay
4 - Wow! Can I just say that your introduction was so unexpected? I loved your essay. It really pulled me...
Writing FeedbackTeeddy - Oct 3, 2014 / eldubb - Oct 4, 2014
|What are the advantages and disadvantages of traveling by air?
Writing FeedbackKristy Nguyen - Oct 3, 2014 / Kristy Nguyen - Oct 4, 2014
|TOEFL: Pets not only can be our best and helpful friends but they also bring happiness for us.
Writing Feedbackmaryailt - Oct 4, 2014 / maryailt - Oct 4, 2014
|"Norouz" - it would be a beautiful celebration for all nations in the world; TOEFL essay
2 - Hamed, sorry I missed this essay. Is it too late for me to give my review and suggestions? I'll...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|My Castle - it all started from one brick. This is the place I feel comfortable in.
Writing FeedbackKM97 - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|Mahatma Gandhi, is the most important spiritual guide in contemporary world; important world leader
Writing Feedbackmaryailt - Oct 4, 2014 / maryailt - Oct 4, 2014
|'For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony'; GRE
Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Oct 3, 2014 / peyman_np - Oct 4, 2014
|motives of people applying for work / forms of transport used for journey - IELTS Task 1
4 - Thanks you bros! I think that before writing two detailed paragraphs, I have mentioned an overall trend as an...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Oct 3, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Oct 3, 2014
|Too much attention on small things!
4 - Vns, you can add more to this introduction so that you can strengthen your opinion on the matter....
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 3, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2014
|Response to an article "Struggle for perfection"
Writing FeedbackNoumanAhmad - Oct 3, 2014 / NoumanAhmad - Oct 3, 2014
|The first and foremost consideration is to be able obtain a stable job, satisfaction would be next..
2 - - William, you forgot to introduce the topic statement prior to entering your full discussion. Without the topic...
Writing Feedbackwilliam731 - Oct 3, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2014
|Zoos may not act as the best interest of animals since they are profit earning entities.
3 - Thank you for your correction. I agree with your other comments but I think "whose" is used to...
Writing Feedbackwilliam731 - Oct 2, 2014 / william731 - Oct 3, 2014
|The content of the Internet controlled by a single powerful global agency?
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Oct 2, 2014 / chucnt - Oct 3, 2014
|'health is a primary need' - alternative forms of medicine
8 - Do not commence your essay with those words such as i agree or disagree, save it for the conclusion...
Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 23, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 2, 2014
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