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|Too early learning other countries' language would lead children confusing and wasting time
3 - Let me try to rewrite this introduction. More attention should be paid on education for young learners...
Writing Feedbackcakradonya - Feb 1, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 6, 2015
|Tourists in England who visited four different attractions in Brighton - IElTS
4 - Introduction should has the information about the type of graph, the data, the unit of measurement, and periods of...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 2, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Feb 6, 2015
|Iran and Israel were in war period, but they released their problems and want to part in World Cup
2 - Hi Cuynomellen, you have a good writing and it is well organized although I have found some grammatical errors...
Writing FeedbackCuynomellen - Feb 6, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 6, 2015
|Three possible locations of the wind turbine; under the sea, on top of a hill or near a local house.
2 - Hy akhfan... that's nice essay. you success to construct your essay in order to be easy to read.. however,...
Writing Feedbackakhfan - Feb 6, 2015 / Mann_ms - Feb 6, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Internet is a wonderful tool for making new friends
2 - People will maintain their relationship can still keep in touchwith their friends without meeting face-to-face. My suggestion for...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Feb 6, 2015 / Cuynomellen - Feb 6, 2015
|Wind Turbine Generates Energy Power for Harnessing [IELTS - TASK 1]
3 - Hai.. Allow me to give you some suggestion for your essay.. This is a nice essay.. However, I found...
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Feb 4, 2015 / Mann_ms - Feb 6, 2015
|'nouveaux riche' - Technology increases or reduces the rich poor gap?
3 - Please, arranging your body with general to specific. This is my suggestion for your body; Admittedly, technology will...
Writing FeedbackLinhpt - Feb 4, 2015 / Cuynomellen - Feb 6, 2015
|International education; most significant current project to process humanizing mankind to the point
6 - hi Midoremido, thank you very much for your comment. It presumably will be useful if you give reasons for...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Feb 4, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 6, 2015
|Every subject may apply in a practical field which impact us and gives a positive effect on our life
3 - Halo, Talibaquil.. Let me give you some suggestion in your essay.. I found that you have to manage your...
Writing Feedbacktalibaquil - Feb 4, 2015 / Mann_ms - Feb 6, 2015
|Sports facility is a big factor of improving public health but it is not enough
Writing FeedbackSHabib - Feb 3, 2015 / SHabib - Feb 5, 2015
|You don't have to work hard to be successful, just be lucky.
2 - Even though you were not given a format for your paper, you should have used the default MLA formatting...
Writing Feedback561_devin - Feb 5, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 5, 2015
|Mainstream America Should be More Open- Minded to the Use of Medical Marijuana
2 - Your enthusiasm about the argument makes this a great paper. I'm so impressed, this is really some excellent...
Writing Feedbackorthochick37 - Feb 3, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2015
|Trees are utilized in making paper and wood products, water is source of energy - natural resources
2 - Hi! Very good points, but I think you should also add some observation. Since we still can't substitute all...
Writing Feedbackajreyes - Feb 5, 2015 / Elith - Feb 5, 2015
|IELTS - Media Attention to Report Celebrities' Life Instead of The Ordinaries
2 - Hello replikatika, The form of media is the immense source of information. While the media shots...
Writing Feedbackreplikatika - Feb 5, 2015 / tiaDS - Feb 5, 2015
|"Your generation will be the one that changes everything" - ENG101
3 - Hi wassupwoodsie, If you want to compare your live with your parents, I suggest you to separate different...
Writing Feedbackwassupwoodsie - Feb 5, 2015 / midorimido - Feb 5, 2015
|Is it a good idea to compete for the right to host international sport events?
2 - You need to lengthen this discussion when it comes to the part about your personal opinion on the matter....
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 5, 2015
|Running own business like Bill Gates or working at a company?
2 - Hi Shintachandrade, I have several comments, questions, and suggestions for your writing, I hope these can increase your...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Feb 4, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 4, 2015
|Should employees be allowed to do some work from home?
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 3, 2015 / ah_zafari - Feb 4, 2015
|Should we choose a job to earn more money or to have a contribution to the society?
2 - I absolutely love the personal opinion that you present in this essay. By showing that there is actually a...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 4, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 4, 2015
|Wind Turbine Design and process of electricity production. IELTS Writing Task 1.
3 - In my own opinion, you should mention every information which is provided by the figure, especially in describing a...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 3, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 4, 2015
|The turbine construction consist of two main features: a steel tower and a fiberglass or wood blades
Writing Feedbackreplikatika - Feb 4, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 4, 2015
|Because of media, Michael Jackson is not only known from his excellent voice
4 - Thankyou for your comment myngoc311.. Actually, I just want to give an example of celebitry who has been...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Feb 2, 2015 / shintacandrade - Feb 4, 2015
|Internet has an advantage - make study, social life and work easier for people
2 - I agree internet has advantage and make the life easier for people from around the world to communicate with...
Writing Feedbackaniso osman - Feb 4, 2015 / talibaquil - Feb 4, 2015
|How could anyone hate snow? Winter is the season of welcoming - Descriptive essay
NEW - How could anyone hate snow? Winter is the season of welcoming, the warm hugs in the cold frigid air,...
Writing Feedbackkkishh - Feb 3, 2015 / — -
|Freedom of speech tends to have tremendous detrimental effects on a mammoth number of people
2 - your essay is very good, nonetheless, It will be better if you make your sentences shorter...and I found out...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 2, 2015 / thiet sun - Feb 3, 2015
|The development of the Internet consists of many positive impacts.
Writing Feedbackthiet sun - Feb 1, 2015 / thiet sun - Feb 3, 2015
|Reasons for finding talented people
2 - Hi Mumtazdinar, These are several suggestions for your writing, I hope these can help you. skilled...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Feb 2, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 3, 2015
|IELTS-Writing task 2: Celebrity show engages viewers
4 - Media are (a) source of actual information. TheIn fact, they notice profoundly(this is inappropriate verb, so I delete it)...
Writing Feedbackdyah - Feb 2, 2015 / eddies - Feb 3, 2015
|ENIGMA = is traffic congestion the resposiblility of individuals or governments?
2 - I think there are some minor grammatical errors as below: a major problem forin most cities around the...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Feb 2, 2015 / Ehsangh - Feb 3, 2015
|IELTS: Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want- an argument-led essay
2 - Hi Ensangh, I have several comments and suggestions for you. GRAMMATICAL ERRORS it should be :...
Writing FeedbackEhsangh - Feb 2, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 2, 2015
|Today's media information is a heated issue that is faced by human beings around of the world.
2 - The prompt is missing something! but anyways, i found some of your mistakes, here we goes. s around of...
Writing Feedbackrhino - Feb 2, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 2, 2015
|IELTS - I think that journalists are too concentrated on exposing celebrities' lives
NEW - Q: The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 2, 2015 / — -
|The map illustrates 2 possible spots for building a new school. IELTs task 1
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 1, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 2, 2015
|British who are from 65 and older between 1985 and 2035 - IELTS task 1
3 - Let me try to rewrite this. The bar chart gives information regarding how many population aged 65...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 31, 2015 / ruwchii - Feb 2, 2015
|'we have a penchant for copying their habits' - Parents are the best teachers!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 2, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 2, 2015
|Children are dependent on computer entertainment. Should they spend more time on outdoor activities
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 30, 2015 / rhino - Feb 2, 2015
|Does modern technology make us freer or busier? It is a phenomenon that people bring work home.
2 - To conclude, even though technologies can squander your time in aforementioned ways, notwithstanding they make a significant impact on...
Writing FeedbackLinhpt - Feb 1, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 2, 2015
|Learning a new language at any age is an anormously rewarding experience in many ways
Writing FeedbackFaisal_Aceh - Feb 1, 2015 / eddies - Feb 2, 2015
|I would argue that globalization influences people to learn foreign language, English especially
5 - I like the way you write the introduction. However, such intro needs more improvements as to form a...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Jan 31, 2015 / eddies - Feb 2, 2015
|Agree or disagree: Students need one year of break after finishing high school
4 - Luisa, I became really really confused with this line of your comment. In different IELTS writing books I...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 28, 2015 / ah_zafari - Feb 2, 2015
|We have to balance between learning second language and other subjects.
2 - Hi Frt247 , I would like to give several comments and suggestions for your writing. GRAMMAR ISSUES ...
Writing Feedbackfrt427 - Feb 1, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 1, 2015
|Movements to stop and prevent global warming have been getting tractions in the past few decades.
3 - Hey, thanks for commenting. The thing is, I don't have the complete prompt either. This is just what someone...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / motoja - Feb 1, 2015
|PTE Essay: A Computer can perform simple but repetitive tasks much faster than a human can
2 - The issues are well argued. However, I think the ideas should be in different paragraph to be clearer, i.e...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / Linhpt - Feb 1, 2015
|Latin or Greek - should we teach dead languages?
2 - Something is missing in your prompt such as asking for your opinion and examples, but anyways here are some...
Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 1, 2015
|The only remedy for this problem, is to set up a more powerful law. Smoking and its aftermaths!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 31, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 1, 2015
|While there are benefits of studying, there are good reasons why doing a job is worth a try.
3 - Thank you! Shon Do, it is really helpful. Eventhough i always get high marks at my literature (My mother...
Writing Feedbackkatherina - Jan 31, 2015 / katherina - Feb 1, 2015
|The data suggest that, as time goes by, more individuals prefer games software and DVDs over CDs.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 30, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 31, 2015
|There are some reasons why children learn better and faster than adults.
2 - A children(A children? It must be "A child", right?) should study a foreign language in school starting in the...
Writing Feedbackwina - Jan 31, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 31, 2015
|Parents claim that although advertisement provides information, children are misled by these adverts
3 - o conclude after discussing both the views , I feel that parents argument has got strong points and are...
Writing Feedbackvijaypj - Jan 30, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 30, 2015
|Drug is the thing that has always been prohibited in this world - Drugs and teenagers essay
NEW - People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are expertimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 30, 2015 / — -
|Internet, automobiles, aeronautical and medical advancements - 21st Century Scientific Changes
Writing Feedbacksambhavsh - Jan 24, 2015 / SHanafi - Jan 30, 2015
|Advertisement motivates us to imitate others rather than being unique according to our interest
Writing Feedbackvijaypj - Jan 29, 2015 / vijaypj - Jan 29, 2015
|A/D: Children will have less financial problems if they are given a certain amount of money weekly
NEW - Topic: Some people think that giving their children a certain amount of money every week will help them have...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 29, 2015 / — -
|IELTS: in-home work and in-home study, a development positive or negative?
3 - Many many thanks to you for your detaied and meticulous revision. It is quite a contribution. If it could...
Writing Feedbackmoleman - Jan 29, 2015 / moleman - Jan 29, 2015
|Group or on your own! Safety is a huge issue.
2 - English is not my first language,so what i can offer are just my humble thoughts. You have made...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 29, 2015 / moleman - Jan 29, 2015
|Essay writing; Parents should send children to school or not to be good members of society .
Writing FeedbackPedram - Jan 21, 2015 / SHanafi - Jan 29, 2015
|Coca Cola's sales numbers - Task 1 IELTs (pie)
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 29, 2015 / myngoc311 - Jan 29, 2015
|Gem cannot be polished nor man perfected
Writing Feedbackpurpleperidot - Jan 24, 2015 / purpleperidot - Jan 29, 2015
|Stunning and nail-biting special effects in today's television.
Writing Feedbackeftekharizade - Jan 28, 2015 / TJLuschen - Jan 29, 2015
|IELTS; 'our hectic schedule'; The need of music - Traditional Vs International
3 - You have some serious issues with punctuation, please revise the essay before submitting it. When it comes the content...
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