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Highly-invented-sophisticated technology have most important impact on living standards of mankind

4 - Hello. i think it's too short to become an essay in IELTS test since we know it should be...

Writing FeedbackDipa19 - Aug 29, 2016 / aidafitria18 - Aug 30, 2016
It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people su

3 - Hi Terminal 23, It is an unique name for sure. You have had a some valuable advises from one...

Writing FeedbackTerminal23 - Aug 30, 2016 / Maya29 - Aug 30, 2016
IELTS Task 1 Wind Turbine Design and The Optimum Location

2 - hello. i know i'm not better than you. i'm still learning same as you. so i will look for...

Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 30, 2016 / aidafitria18 - Aug 30, 2016
A wind turbine consist of tower, generator, wind sensor, and blades controlled by a computer.

3 - Hi Ashela. I am pleased to read your writing because you have held the positive progress. Actually, you can...

Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 30, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 30, 2016
Writing IELTS task 1 : the components of a wind turbine and where it can be placed

2 - Hi there...., including the original prompt of this diagram is a must, as to know that you are being...

Writing Feedbackhailun11 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
Should the media report ordinary people lives more than celebrities' lives? IELTS WRITING TASK 1

2 - Hello, Eka. It's nice to read your essay. To enhance your writing better, you may consider my contributions as...

Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016 / akbartaufiq25 - Aug 30, 2016
Students have today more chances to study abroad, than it was before - practice on IELTS

3 - Hi Azmi, this time I would only focus on your introduction. As the prompt asks you to explain the...

Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Aug 29, 2016 / ilankelo21 - Aug 30, 2016
A wind turbine works by wind power, producing electricity efficiently when located on a high surface

NEW - The diagram illustrates about how to produce electricity by a wind turbine and the best place for wind turbines...

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Radio, television, and Internet shows over and over gossips stories and entertainment news

2 - hi,, dinar Radio, television, and the internet go overgives stories about gossips ... As a result, many...

Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 30, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016
It's not necessary to earn money by children when they are still on parents care

3 - Hello Daya! Nice to see you in essay forum! ^^ Here is my little correction for your essay. Hope...

Writing Feedbackdaya93 - Aug 30, 2016 / ashelarisa48 - Aug 30, 2016
BOARDING SCHOOL FOR CHILDREN - good option for the contemporary parents who doesn't have enough time

5 - Hi ionk, - ... point out the inevitable problems which is caused by it - which I will...

Writing Feedbackionksm - Aug 30, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 30, 2016
Participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries

2 - Hi Ilmi! levels of population in developing and developed countries = you can change the passage by :...

Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 29, 2016 / dinartika19 - Aug 30, 2016
The number of participants in education and science program in 1980 and 1990 based on a survey.

3 - you should put the picture of the chart advanced country have has There are many significant...

Writing FeedbackZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Degree Study Abroad

2 - hi there.., here are my valuable insights. No, no, no.. you are not being asked to discuss...

Writing FeedbackPermata992 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
Crimes in Newport city between 2003 and 2012. The burglary had the highest number among incidents.

5 - Beauty17, you have to include the picture of the graph every time you post your report writing here. This...

Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
IELTS Task 1 & Task 2 : Participation Levels in Science and Education

3 - tyar32, you are not allowed to post two writings in one thread. Stop doing this, otherwise, your account will...

Writing Feedbacktyar32 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
SUmmary TEDtalk: the first 21 days of a bee's life

3 - Hi Fadhilah.. I'd like to give you some suggestion.. ... insufficient because there are some trouble on it....

Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016 / Dipa19 - Aug 30, 2016
Summary TED Why By Feeling You Are Ugly Is Bad For You.

3 - Hi Farida, Ten thousands people every month google "Am I Ugly". This leads to depression for teenagers. I...

Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016 / daya93 - Aug 30, 2016
IELTS Task 1 : Recruitment English Teacher and French Teacher in Ontario between 2001 and 2007

5 - Hi I have some suggestions for you. I hope it will develop your writing skill decreased slightly --->...

Writing Feedbackdinartika19 - Aug 29, 2016 / tyar32 - Aug 30, 2016
Introducing young people to the work routines - IELTS Writing Task 2

2 - More children today get involved in working activities This results in children learning an effective way...

Writing FeedbackIlmi_03 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
The spread of the internet issue - IELTS TASK 4: FULLY-DEVELOPED EXAMPLES

4 - Hi Hary, let me you a hand, this is my correction For instance, moremany sites which contain unsure...

Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 29, 2016 / ZiadRasyid24 - Aug 30, 2016
How I turned a deadly plant into a thriving business

2 - This summary is extracted from the video of Achenyo Idachaba published in TEDtalk.com with how I turned a...

Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
Students have more opportunities to study in other countries, but they may struggle with problems

3 - i agree with Mr. Eddie that you should make your background fact more relevant to the topic given by...

Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 29, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 30, 2016
The percentage of first-year teachers with regular teaching jobs by year of graduation in Ontario

4 - Miss Dhyla, please you avoid repetition in your writing. Besides that, it is essential that make you sure what...

Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 30, 2016
The Percentage of The New Teachers in The Usual Teaching Jobs

4 - hi... according to teacher graduation year.... ...that English-language teachers and French-Language teachers on(that English and French-language teacher... avoid...

Writing Feedbackhirani03 - Aug 29, 2016 / Fadhilahumar91 - Aug 30, 2016
The variety of essay exercises - IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - CONCLUSION and EXAMPLE

2 - This sounds redundant. It will not help you that much when it comes to IELTS essay. I suggest...

Writing FeedbackPermata992 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
French-language teachers were recruied more often from 2001 to 2007, in contrast to English tutors

3 - a good paragraph consists of at least three sentences. Let me give a try for the intro: A comparison...

Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : ABOUT ABROAD STUDY

3 - Students in past were more likely to study in their own countries. More students today prefer...

Writing Feedbackrian31 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
IELTS Writing Task (Practice) Topic: Study Abroad

2 - thousand students write this template sentence in their essay. Therefore, you will gain more scores in this part....

Writing Feedbackjomul01 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
The chart shows the alteration of kinds of crime that happened in Newport city center (2003-2012)

3 - Firkno05, you are not allowed to post two writings in one column. You have to write them separately and...

Writing Feedbackfikni05 - Aug 30, 2016 / eddies - Aug 30, 2016
Stepping to IELTS Writing: Conclusion, Body, and Example

2 - Hi Yusuf, Instead of seeing/checking the content, I would like to focus on giving feedback related to technical...

Writing FeedbackYusuf05 - Aug 29, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 29, 2016
For three decades, Internet has provided spectacular influence to the communication system

2 - Hi.. I'd like to give you some suggestion.. For three decades, the Internet has been provided spectacular influence...

Writing Feedbackswr10 - Aug 29, 2016 / Dipa19 - Aug 29, 2016
TASK 1: Sugesstion to friend about a place to visit

2 - Hi ! here are my several suggestion, hope it will help you, regards ... and exploring new places...

Writing Feedbackxeroxlife - Aug 29, 2016 / jomul01 - Aug 29, 2016
Summary: Dyslexic Designers Just Think Different-Maybe Even Better

3 - hi i'd like to give some suggestions regarding to your summary. happy writing! ... expect that this exhibit...

Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016 / azmi23 - Aug 29, 2016
Modern technology and its global impact on human. Writing body paragraph.

2 - ... about modern technology today is pollution, since vehicles and major ... ... with vehicles and factories hashave contributed...

Writing Feedbackjomul01 - Aug 28, 2016 / swr10 - Aug 29, 2016
The changing rates of crime in the inner city from 2003 - 2012

2 - Robbery had a an fluctuate pattern whole the year ... Conversely, car theft was leadsled than the others from...

Writing Feedbackrian31 - Aug 29, 2016 / Dipa19 - Aug 29, 2016
Two surveys, in which people were asked which communication skills were crucial in their job

4 - hai tyar i just try to examine your task i hope it help you 1. please attach image before...

Writing Feedbacktyar32 - Aug 15, 2016 / rian31 - Aug 29, 2016
GLOBAL OUTSOURCING and low labor cost - SUMMARY TASK 6

2 - Hi. Please, you review my suggestions previously. In this summary, you made the same mistakes grammatically, especially use of...

Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 29, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Aug 29, 2016
Some years ago citizens, who lived in the rural area, knew well another people's in the neighborhood

2 - This is the third question that I give valuable feedback in a row :D The idea written...

Writing FeedbackDipa19 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 29, 2016
'only a few companies could stick out over 5 years' - WHAT MAKES SMALL BUSINESS SUCCESSFUL ?

6 - Hii rosa, this is my suggest 1. (Don't forget to distinguish between passive and active, use the correct...

Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 26, 2016 / Dipa19 - Aug 29, 2016
The percentage of NEW candidates for teachers of English and French language in Ontario

2 - Hailun, :) The line graph presents the number of first-year candidates ofcompares the announcement which is needed to...

Writing Feedbackhailun11 - Aug 29, 2016 / Ilmi_03 - Aug 29, 2016
In the bygone era, most people in the world stayed in rural area, had good relations with neighbors

2 - Hello Terminal23 There are some corrections for you :) ... stayed in rural area and they havehad good...

Writing FeedbackTerminal23 - Aug 29, 2016 / hirani03 - Aug 29, 2016
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: the percentage of fresh graduate educators being required to teach two foreign

3 - ...fresh graduate educators beingrequiredrecruited to teach two foreign ... there was an slight upward trend of ... ...

Writing FeedbackIforsa - Aug 29, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016
Aristotle: 'being happy is essential for our lives to continue'; Happiness and its importance IELTS2

2 - Hello Eric First of all, actually this question above you should answer, but after I have read your...

Writing FeedbackEric2750230 - Aug 29, 2016 / hailun11 - Aug 29, 2016
In the modern era, most people argue if impressive constructions are essential for a city

3 - Hello Fadhilahumar91 Most people argue ifthat impressive construction are ... ... government should be spent of much...

Writing FeedbackFadhilahumar91 - Aug 24, 2016 / hirani03 - Aug 29, 2016
Suzana Herculano-Houzel: What is so special about the human brain?

2 - Another question comes from studyresearch about time spent by ... For instance, orang people need 8 hours per day...

Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016 / Terminal23 - Aug 29, 2016
"Successfulness" - SUMMARIZE TASK 5 - BRAND LOYALTY

2 - Hi Rosadesiana. This is my correction for you. I hope that it can help you :) It is...

Writing Feedbackrosadesiana - Aug 29, 2016 / ibal28 - Aug 29, 2016
Women Who Were Abused As Children Are Likely to Die Earlier - Summary Article

2 - The number of respondent ==> respondents The number of respondents in this research for about (are about )...

Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016 / rosadesiana - Aug 29, 2016
Ontario staffing job for teaching English suddenly fell down (2005-2007 timeframe) to just under 30%

3 - hi Eka, nice to meet you! I read your post and here my correction for you. - First...

Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016 / fikni05 - Aug 29, 2016
People believe that the technology has driven them to face great development in their daily routine

5 - Hi ibal28 Great to know that you are in essay forum now. yay! well, this is my correction for...

Writing Feedbackibal28 - Aug 27, 2016 / fikni05 - Aug 29, 2016
Summary: The law of 33% (Tai Lopez)

3 - Hi ilham, - Each person will have a good life neverthelessalthough some will not get it. It is...

Writing Feedbackbung ilham - Aug 29, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 CONCLUSION PART - sincere answers for different issues topics

3 - Hallo meimei :) I left a comment here.. I hope that it will useful to improve your writing skill.....

Writing FeedbackBeauty17 - Aug 28, 2016 / Permata992 - Aug 29, 2016
The number of French and English graduates who found job as a teacher in a big Canadian city

2 - initially eventually there will be more than one teacher. Write teacherS &...

Writing FeedbackFaridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 29, 2016
Years ago, living in a small community was a common thing. Now the world has urbanized.

2 - Overall, these are well-written paragraphs. Not only that, you have answered what is being asked in the prompt. Just...

Writing Feedbackswr10 - Aug 29, 2016 / eddies - Aug 29, 2016
The Challenge of Starting Introductory Writing, Will You Address Some Suggestions?

3 - Hello Mr Ichan, Thank you very much for such bright suggestions. I do really need bunch of ...

Writing FeedbackYusuf05 - Aug 25, 2016 / Yusuf05 - Aug 29, 2016
Writing Task 1 (US Airline satisfaction level) and Task 2 (The need of healthy meal to children)

3 - Hi Ziad, - The chart and table show the satisfaction level of passangers and aspect point of ......

Writing FeedbackZiadRasyid24 - Aug 26, 2016 / Faridadwi18 - Aug 29, 2016
One and multiple idea paragraph. IELTS writing task 2: making body paragraph

2 - i would like to highlight your one idea paragraph: This is because we are able to do many...

Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Aug 28, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016
IELTS TASK 1 - The map illustrates an overview of before and after the construction

2 - The map illustrates an overview of ... i prefer to write: The map illustrates two circumstance of an island:...

Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Aug 29, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016
It Is Easy to be Healthy - but not for everyone

3 - ... hard to do while others believes it is easy, providedif they really intend ... Another reason is modern...

Writing Feedbackashelarisa48 - Aug 28, 2016 / ekalamarsyari11 - Aug 29, 2016
IELTS TASK 3: MAKING CONCLUSION AND BODY PARAGRAPH

2 - Hi Hary, I would like to focus only on number 1, 2, and 3 of this thread. Here's...

Writing FeedbackHary01 - Aug 28, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 29, 2016

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