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|Ambition motivate people - without it life would be mechanical or meaningless
3 - you can use others listing points to show new ideas; Also, Moreover, Furthermore, etc. Even though...
Writing FeedbackJwala - Aug 9, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 10, 2014
|TOEFL: High stress job paid a lot of money or low stress job with just enough to live on?
3 - Thank you for your useful advice, Aichen. I clearly see your point and try to improve them in further...
Writing FeedbackAudi - Aug 8, 2014 / Audi - Aug 9, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY; Some people have great ambitions in life, others don't.
NEW - [QUESTION] Some people have great ambitions in life, others don't. Do you think ambition is important to succeed in...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Aug 9, 2014 / — -
|task 2 for ielts: the wealth sharing among countries always have two sides
4 - Thus, the support should stop at providing food, education and health care. --> So the needy country should...
Writing FeedbackTuti gunner - Jul 8, 2014 / devabe2005 - Aug 9, 2014
|IELTS: bar chart - average retirement age among seven countries in 2004 and 2008
5 - be careful when you are using commas in your sentences, i observed so many comma mistakes in your report...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 18, 2014 / handsome7boy - Aug 9, 2014
|We always like to make progress in our life and it gives us a good sense - Toefl Essay
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 7, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 9, 2014
|IELTS: In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parent
6 - Is it fine to mention immigration and having to learn new life/culture as an advantage? Or is it a...
Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 1, 2014 / Monloi - Aug 9, 2014
|How did you get over your fear to speak in English? - Learning From Mistakes
2 - As a non-native speaker it was really hard to say even few sentences out loud, when I didn't really...
Writing Feedbackflorszi - Aug 7, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2014
|"Situation after Reunification of Korean peninsula" - prediction essay
2 - Do not capNot capitalize a word that comes after a,. Only capitalize the first letter of the sentence....
Writing Feedbacksamuela - Aug 7, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2014
|IELTS: Taxpayers don't need pay for public education system in which their children are not enrolled
2 - For instance, the recent bridge construction scam exposed by the media amounts Where ? I am new...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 7, 2014 / latkhan - Aug 8, 2014
|IELTS - 'the chart also predicts the proportions in 2040' - quantity of the population aged 65
6 - You must write overview paragraph in writing task 1 because overview is important instead of conclusion. In this prompt,...
Writing FeedbackHiruni - Jul 30, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 8, 2014
|IELTS 2: CONSIDERING DISADVANTAGES OF TOURISM
Writing Feedbackeirehc - Jul 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Aug 8, 2014
|Ielts: why and how parents teach their kids the importance of money?
10 - Is this college essay? If it is, then you shouldn't set (4-paragraphs) structures for it because it will limit...
Writing Feedbackningo - Aug 4, 2014 / huyenluv - Aug 7, 2014
|"WE FIND COMFORT AMONG THOSE WHO AGREE WITH US - GROWTH AMONG THOSE WHO DON'T"; PPST Writing TOPIC
Writing Feedbackeperry1 - Aug 5, 2014 / Binte Rasheed - Aug 7, 2014
|Efficient presentation saves time, makes the points clear, satisfies its audience
2 - Exactly, one thing more i would like to add is that put many pictures in your presentation so that...
Writing Feedbackahsam - Aug 5, 2014 / Binte Rasheed - Aug 7, 2014
|IELTS: The tax reduction of state school for parents who have children studying in private system
2 - On the whole, I do believe that taxes paying for state schools are necessary to be compulsory for all...
Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - Aug 7, 2014 / mvettri - Aug 7, 2014
|Independent TOEFL essay , Judging people on their appereance
Writing FeedbackBasilMostafa - Aug 5, 2014 / florszi - Aug 7, 2014
|Celebrities are more famous for the look and wealth than for talents and contribution to their field
2 - I think the crossed phrase is redundant. In addition, I suppose you need to develop or explain more...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 6, 2014 / Anh Nguyen 265 - Aug 7, 2014
|Advertising has too much influence on what people buy?
4 - Hence, the effect of advertising on the type of goods which people buy is undeniable => I thought this...
Writing Feedbackparand - Aug 5, 2014 / parand - Aug 7, 2014
|IELTS: CELEBRITY'S ROLE - influence of celebrities to the youth is as well positive as negative
7 - In fact, "Effort" can be both countable and uncountable word. Look at this example from macmilandictionary: Despite someone's efforts:...
Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - Aug 6, 2014 / ningo - Aug 7, 2014
|Having a factory in the region is bad and good news
Writing FeedbackEyadBosy - Aug 3, 2014 / sayes - Aug 6, 2014
|To me studying alone is more useful - students choice
Writing Feedbackahmadaz - Aug 5, 2014 / Anh Nguyen 265 - Aug 6, 2014
|Movies, television - entertainment and hobby that we can learn a lot from
2 - to the new modern television, which can be installed (i guess you mean the application or softwares for viewing...
Writing Feedbackafaghfarhadi - Aug 5, 2014 / izhar - Aug 5, 2014
|Mixed education provide added opportunity for either sex to develop interpersonal skills
NEW - Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Other, however, believe that...
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|[IELTS] 'advertising manipulates people' - Positives and Negatives of Ad's
Writing FeedbackJwala - Aug 3, 2014 / tiaDS - Aug 5, 2014
|Money as a reward can be beneficial, but compliments and comfortable working environment are better
NEW - Topic: Some employers reward members of staff for their exceptional contribution to the company by giving them extra money....
Writing Feedbackmanh - Aug 5, 2014 / — -
|'Globalization is like elephant' - how it affects the world?
Writing Feedbackizhar - Aug 4, 2014 / izhar - Aug 5, 2014
|IELTS: Intelligent students should be educated separately. Do the benefits outweigh the problems?
4 - This introductory paragraph is too simple. You need some major changes. For this prompt, let's give a try; ...
Writing FeedbackSummer_J - Aug 3, 2014 / eddies - Aug 5, 2014
|'I'm happy when I can solve difficult problems myself' - Studying alone or in groups?
2 - "All of those are a general purpose of student that they want to get success in their study. According...
Writing Feedbackwonnguyen - Aug 4, 2014 / cpuissant - Aug 4, 2014
|IELTS Competitiveness is a positive quality for people to have among most societies.
2 - Here is some general advice. Hope this helps; If you look at people taking GRE exams, then mostly...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Aug 4, 2014 / eddies - Aug 4, 2014
|Technology has both advantage and disadvantage for creativity of children
5 - Same meaning, both words means less, I just wanna add (es) to the verb which is unfamiliar to me...
Writing Feedbackhosseinshafiee - Aug 3, 2014 / EyadBosy - Aug 3, 2014
|SAT ; We place far too much emphasis on experience and achievement in our society
5 - Hitler had thrived to be the Chancellor of the Third Reich, which was also one of his achievements ....
Writing FeedbackDilian_Nguyen - Jun 28, 2014 / niesaysi - Aug 3, 2014
|Prunty County must undertake the same kind of road improvement as the Butler County; GRE Argument
NEW - [b]Q. Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain...
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|GRE: Highway Safety in Prunty and Butler County - Argument Topic
NEW - Argument topic In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County last year lowered its speed limit form 55Mph...
Writing Feedbackpinaksalvekar - Aug 3, 2014 / — -
|The wide-spread use of labor-saving devices has only made our life much more hectic.
Writing FeedbackRevin - Aug 1, 2014 / sundin928 - Aug 3, 2014
|TOEFL: 'new building construction hold the right to gain more money from government'
2 - If the price of housing growsincreases(more appropriate in the context) continuously, a comfortable place to live in will be...
Writing FeedbackStevenKuang - Aug 2, 2014 / niesaysi - Aug 2, 2014
|Learning a new language process
4 - Learning a new language it is a difficult process. Recently found this language exchange website: languageforexchange It's especially for...
Writing Feedbackkbektas - Jul 30, 2014 / ANSAN - Aug 2, 2014
|IELTS:Parents sending their kids abroad to acquire good education. Good or bad trend?
2 - I noticed that you change very often time scale of the ideas, which describe a person who studies abroad...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Aug 1, 2014 / VadimKlimenko - Aug 2, 2014
|TOEFL: children should be allowed to play computer games(the whole title is written in the message)
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Jul 31, 2014 / VadimKlimenko - Aug 2, 2014
|TOEFL: It is more important to use available land for farmland, housing, and industry.
2 - Well, we are not great experts, however, with our experience for all these years we can certainly help...
Writing FeedbackVadimKlimenko - Aug 1, 2014 / dumi - Aug 1, 2014
|Business is an right investment for future despite of the economic crisis
Writing Feedbackwonnguyen - Aug 1, 2014 / wonnguyen - Aug 1, 2014
|'Travel is the thing, that makes you richer' - Semester at Sea Essay
Writing Feedbackoreillee - Jul 28, 2014 / Hiruni - Aug 1, 2014
|Whether each individual or government should be responsible for the healthy diet?
NEW - Please give me a look and your comments on this essay! Thanks all! :-* IELTS TASK 2: Some people...
Writing Feedbackningo - Aug 1, 2014 / — -
|Not only mother is giving her time and energy to nourish and raise children
3 - You should avoid using question to start an essay. The purpose is to paraphrase this topic fluently. ...
Writing FeedbackHiruni - Aug 1, 2014 / ningo - Aug 1, 2014
|IELTS - historic buildings are precious legacy to human development
2 - "development of modernization"? I really don't get your idea :( You need to open your essay with an...
Writing FeedbackMinnaliao - Jul 31, 2014 / dumi - Aug 1, 2014
|TOEFL Essay- People should master on skill only or many different skills.
2 - I think the last examples "one more friend, one more way to go" cannot support your view very well....
Writing FeedbackJiazigao - Jun 24, 2014 / DearbhailS - Jul 31, 2014
|IELTS Essay - Appropriate age of adulthood
Writing Feedbackmsarkar - Jul 29, 2014 / fikri - Jul 31, 2014
|Ielts: Is it necessary to teach children handwriting?
3 - here is my example,, Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what...
Writing Feedbackningo - Jul 30, 2014 / fikri - Jul 31, 2014
|Some cultures value more the elderly people, while others paid more attention on young generation
5 - It is a little bit difficult to provide more meaningful feedbacks without seeing your full prompt. However, I guess...
Writing FeedbackGulnar604 - Jul 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 31, 2014
|'children in Gaza' - Pre-Toefl - Childhood is not always a happiest time of people's life
6 - Yes, I quite agree with Ahmad :) What he has suggested is the most appropriate approach because it helps...
Writing FeedbackSarah Gharavi - Jul 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 31, 2014
|TOEFL: 'ancient people lived a natural life' - Now it's easier to maintain health
3 - However, some people even scholars are arguing about ifwhether modern people can maintain a good health easier compared to...
Writing FeedbackStevenKuang - Jul 30, 2014 / dumi - Jul 31, 2014
|Change of career and living place has more positive effect on the whole society and the individual
3 - MisterWandering: Your suggestions are very valuable. Thanks! The question is: People change their career and place of residence...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 30, 2014 / digitalidea - Jul 31, 2014
|IELTS Museums and art galleries should show artworks of the local culture
3 - THANKS Nathan, i rewrite it Today, Traditional arts and crafts are going through tough times and most of them...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 30, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 30, 2014
|Effects of sexual abuse and injustice on the personal lives of countless females today
2 - You need to check on your first line structure. It should be something like this, "In this world, we...
Writing Feedbacklydiuta - Jul 28, 2014 / nathan2014 - Jul 30, 2014
|IELTS: the importance of history - removing this course from school curriculum is unwise
Writing FeedbackNZsky - Jul 28, 2014 / eddies - Jul 30, 2014
|Home is good place to learn a lot, however school is the best place to learn.
Writing Feedbackapanwar01 - Jul 2, 2014 / msarkar - Jul 29, 2014
|Ielts: Can environmental problems be solved by individuals?
Writing Feedbackningo - Jul 29, 2014 / eddies - Jul 29, 2014
|'In countries like Japan, the population is getting older' - aging population essay Ielts
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|IELTS: Money as a members of staff reward for their exceptional contribution to the company
Writing FeedbackWillNgo - Jul 27, 2014 / eddies - Jul 28, 2014
|IELTS Detailed description of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society
NEW - Detailed description of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information...
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