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|TOEFL: IMPACT OF INTERNET on LIFE
4 - Good start. But you need to bring out the idea clearly and powerfully. The Internet can be regarded...
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Feb 6, 2013 / Pahan - Feb 7, 2013
|TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN VIEWED AS A TWO EDGED SWORD, preparing for IELTS in Feb...
5 - thanks dumi, joythblessy and waldo...ill definitely consider your suggestions... thanks alot.....
Writing FeedbackSKhan - Jan 27, 2013 / SKhan - Feb 6, 2013
|IELTS- Advertisement encourages consumers to buy in bulk, instead of high quality
Writing FeedbackSKhan - Jan 28, 2013 / SKhan - Feb 6, 2013
|THESIS ; INCREASE IN GUN VIOLENCE
3 - when a mass shooting occurs but don't want the government to make laws or regulations that may prevent those...
Writing Feedbackclbrock14 - Feb 5, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 6, 2013
|IELTS - there is a great gap in between the living standards of the people of cities and villages
4 - focus on only on agriculture. --> focus only on agriculture. complicated than it is there in countryside. -->...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 5, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 6, 2013
|Some people prefer change while some dont -IELTS
Writing Feedbackjaijagadeesh - Feb 1, 2013 / dumi - Feb 6, 2013
|IELTS Writing- Jury should not be given the past criminal records of a defendant
3 - These sentences does not refer to anything of your topic. In the introduction you should introduce topic to...
Writing FeedbackBinny - Feb 1, 2013 / dumi - Feb 6, 2013
|Contributions to an enjoyable vacation- Good Food/ Good Location/ Good Friends?
Writing Feedbackholycoww - Feb 6, 2013 / dumi - Feb 6, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) Effects of reading newspaper and watching television news
6 - In the modern world, media such as newspapers and television have become an integral part of peoples' lives....
Writing Feedbackrombos - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Feb 6, 2013
|Microwave oven and fastfood store in our lives
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Feb 5, 2013 / Mai Chu - Feb 5, 2013
|The mass media has a great influence in shaping people's ideas
6 - I meant "moderate stance" which means you can both agree and disagree to certain extent. That's why I...
Writing Feedbackfredrick1003 - Feb 4, 2013 / dumi - Feb 5, 2013
|TOEFL essay:The world is changing fast, people are less happy
3 - Dumi, thank you very much for your revision. You give me so much encouragement to continue learning writing....
Writing Feedbackhywb2 - Feb 5, 2013 / hywb2 - Feb 5, 2013
|How can we evaluate the culture of reading in our society?
3 - Thank you so much Dumi. I really appreciate your help. I am going to consider all of the points...
Writing Feedbacksamviolet - Feb 5, 2013 / samviolet - Feb 5, 2013
|Experienced learning or classroom learning?
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Feb 5, 2013 / dumi - Feb 5, 2013
|THROW-AWAY CULTURE IS GOOD OR BAD? - IELTS
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 4, 2013 / somysojan - Feb 5, 2013
|IELTS-visiting foreign countries, visitors take advantage of learning the culture
5 - .... make two sentences; People visit other countries for various reasons such as tourism, business, studies etc. Whatever...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 3, 2013 / dumi - Feb 5, 2013
|Today more people are travleing then ever before; IELTS
Writing Feedbacknadrian - Feb 5, 2013 / nadrian - Feb 5, 2013
|IELTS;"Charities in developed countries should donate to underdeveloped countries"
5 - Therefore,it is urgent that we should help poeple living in poverty as we could help more people ,even save...
Writing Feedbackbeyondmtk - Feb 5, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 5, 2013
|IELTS "computers and the Internet are important resources "
5 - Generally this task requires you to support your views and opinion with specific examples. In this case you...
Writing Feedbackbeyondmtk - Feb 3, 2013 / dumi - Feb 5, 2013
|IELTS-Nowadays a growing throw-away culture causes people to throw away their goods
2 - Due to rapid technological advancement endless number of new technological products, decvises adn equipment are introduced to the...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 4, 2013 / dumi - Feb 4, 2013
|Write a short story about a meal at a Thai restaurant
Writing Feedbackdaivinhtran1993 - Jan 30, 2013 / dumi - Feb 4, 2013
|TOEFL; Studying history and literature is more important!
Writing FeedbackJangGemini - Feb 1, 2013 / JangGemini - Feb 4, 2013
|The characteristics we are born with or the experiences we have in our life.
Writing FeedbackSinny073 - Feb 3, 2013 / Sinny073 - Feb 4, 2013
|Analysis of Native American Archetypes
2 - ... you have not completed this sentence? The White Buffalo Woman represents an archetype of the...
Writing Feedbacksammieee - Feb 3, 2013 / dumi - Feb 4, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) effect of mobile phones on young children.
12 - Hai Somy... Yes, you are right...)Ř› But you mentioned your opinion in the introduction itself.. Sorry for...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 3, 2013
|(IELTS essay) Dangerous sports banned or not; Children put themselves in trouble
5 - Hai dumi... Thanks for your correction and suggestions.. So many people concerned about the time for my...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 3, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2. TALENTED PEOPLE
3 - ... this sentence is poorly constructed.... It doesn't deliver a relevant idea too....In any society there should be...
Writing FeedbackJanett - Feb 3, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|IELTS-Many children these days have their own mobile phones. advantages/disadvantages
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) Effects of short time work
Writing Feedbackrombos - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) MODES OF LEARNING OTHER CULTURE AND TRADITION..
2 - ...good start :) learning about others' lifestyles help you learn more about those people like their...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|one can understand the society by studying major cities; rural and heritage area
NEW - Issue: "To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Studying Major...
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|IELTS Writing Task 2: 'ageing population' topic
2 - Hi, I think you write pretty good. So I thought giving my suggestions for different presentations of your ideas...
Writing FeedbackYanSun - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|What kinds of places do you avoid visiting when you travel?
9 - Hello frnds, i am Sharvani, Plz reply above my eassy, and tel me where i did mistakes. Help me...
Writing Feedbackelmar91 - Jan 21, 2013 / sharvani - Feb 2, 2013
|'neat and tidy'; Students who can keep their rooms organized are sure to succeed
4 - I take your point and thank you. And I doubt that there may be some other faults,especially the logy...
Writing Feedbacktofel201304 - Jan 28, 2013 / tofel201304 - Feb 2, 2013
|IELTS- Effects of replacing sports and games with more acdemic sessions in schools
6 - Hai bosco... Over all good essay.. Nice to read.. Nowadays many schools.... Keep on reading and...
Writing Feedbackrombos - Jan 30, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS-Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time.
2 - Hai dev.. Over all good attempt....). You have so many good points also...). Be careful about the...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS- people have different way of escaping the stress and difficulties
5 - you used many places stress instead use another vocabulary like anxiety, pressure, strain, tension, trauma, distress...
Writing Feedbackpmw0647 - Feb 1, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 1, 2013
|Some prefer living in places with same weather. Which do you prefer?
4 - ... your previous sentence says you generally have a colder weather throughout the year. This highlighted part...
Writing Feedbackmayraschmidt - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS ; What factors contribute to job satisfication?
Writing Feedbackcaoxue - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|Lazy talk - Television is dangerous because it has destroyed the family living and communication.
2 - .... I suggest you to present this differently; Some people argue that Television distances the family members and...
Writing Feedbackabcd1234 - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|Should educators be paid according to their students performance?
2 - this sounds a bit awkward .... this is my suggestion; to the academic performance of students ...
Writing FeedbackMabossani - Jan 27, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|Memoir of the Chevalier ; Writing Section of the Toefl, Question 1
7 - Hello. I am a former ETS TOEFL exam rater with 4 years of experience. My comments are intended to...
Writing Feedbackharetche - Jan 23, 2013 / toeflrater - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS - Eat at food stands or restaurants? Eat at home
Writing Feedbackpmw0647 - Jan 31, 2013 / rombos - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS-Some people think that museums entertain people, while others it is to educate
4 - First, it seems your essay is two short. Try to maintain at least the minimum word count required for...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 27, 2013 / dumi - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS-Children prefer electronic games to other games and toys.Why is it happening
2 - It should be either "rapid technological advancement" or "technological revolution" "Software companies deliver " is the correct form....
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Jan 31, 2013
|(practicing writing) Should first world countries offer economic help to third world?
3 - Thank you very much for your points there! =) I'm not practicing for a certificate (not yet though),...
Writing Feedbackkiniggit - Jan 31, 2013 / kiniggit - Jan 31, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) effects of electronic games on children
4 - ... Your sentence is too complex.. Let's simplify it. Today, it is not an unfamiliar sight to see...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 31, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 31, 2013
|schools replacing sports and exercise classes with more academic
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 31, 2013 / Arun0506 - Jan 31, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Both man and women should share domestic works..?
6 - Hai dumi, syed, dev and cuong... Thanks to you all, for your valuable time and concern for correcting...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 22, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 31, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Child-care courses, best way to up date childcare?
6 - Hai Hung.. Thanks for your wonderful correction.. It was really valuable.. It strength my essay Thanks a...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 28, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 31, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Drop sports classes from school?
5 - Hai Jenny, Pahan, Dev and Arun... Hai Jenny and Pahan... Thanks for the corrections which strengthen my...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 30, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS:Crime_nothing can be done to prevent it_Agree or disagree?To what extend?
Writing Feedbacktogiang - Jan 30, 2013 / togiang - Jan 30, 2013
|The most significant transportation innovation of past 200 years?
Writing Feedbackelmar91 - Jan 30, 2013 / elmar91 - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS - Parents are concerned with their children's' up-bringing than before.opin
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 29, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS - TASK1 - Write a letter to your friend thanking him/her for guiding interview
2 - ... the interview had already taken place.... so you need to keep this sentence in past tense. ...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013 / dumi - Jan 30, 2013
|The squirrel on the roof, basking in the morning sun
2 - about the time when I am done with my own morning routine, bath and toilet, meditation and yoga, and...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jan 29, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS- Most schools planning to replace sports classes with more academic sessions
4 - Thanks dumi, arun, I forget to proofread this essay that is why some places it is incomplete. They...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013
|Far-sighted/ Persevering/ Help my progres; Important qualities of a good boss
Writing FeedbackQingye - Jan 29, 2013 / Qingye - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS; INTERNET BRINGS THE WORLD TOGETHER AND MAKE IT SMALLER
3 - The Internet havehas becomea big part of our daily life. It existedexists everywhere; office, home and even your cell...
Writing Feedbackmanson20 - Jan 29, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 30, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Economical developments degrade Social values?
4 - let me suggest this way as its an introductory sentence and it should have a punch. Nowadays,...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 29, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 30, 2013
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