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Essay about ex-prisoner are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of crime

2 - The summary restatement is incorrect in format because the first sentence includes an attestation where it is not needed....

Writing Feedbackcandylee1711 - Mar 29, 2022 / Holt - Mar 29, 2022
Being able to speak a foreign language is an advantage these days

2 - The prompt restatement needs more accuracy. The exam taker is expected to rephrase the whole of the original discussion...

Writing Feedbackdang3cvt - Mar 28, 2022 / Holt - Mar 28, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2 Is technological development positive or negative for distant work and learning

2 - When writing an opinion essay, the writer must realize that he has to target the completeness by which he...

Writing FeedbackKhoa Le - Mar 28, 2022 / Holt - Mar 28, 2022
The consequences of competing between older people and young ones for the same type of occupations

3 - I think the first point in body 1 should be explained a little bit more, why ' the consequence...

Writing Feedbackhb_bap - Mar 28, 2022 / huoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022
The question whether rising price of fuel is the best solution to environmental issue

3 - Hello, I suggest using the structure PEER in each of your point in the body. P: point of view,...

Writing Feedbackqunhu270 - Mar 28, 2022 / huoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022
IELTS TASK 1: The provided illustration depicts the information about the making of leather prced.

3 - I think your writing would look better when being devided into 2 main bodies (with 1 introduction and 1...

Writing Feedbacknavjot789 - Mar 27, 2022 / huoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Are newspaper the best way to learn news?

2 - The prompt restatement contains information inaccuracies and a lack of personal opinion presentation that forces it to receive a...

Writing Feedbackhuoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022 / Holt - Mar 28, 2022
Museums in London and tourists - IELTS writing part 1 (bar chart)

5 - @Holt First and foremost, I'd like to say thank you because of your detailed comments and I also have...

Writing Feedbackvananhxh2005 - Mar 22, 2022 / vananhxh2005 - Mar 27, 2022
Consumption of chicken - IELTS WRITTING TASK 1: LINE GRAPH

2 - A listing of the data for comparison should be indicated in the summary overview. The listing is used to...

Writing Feedbackphuong171100 - Mar 27, 2022 / Holt - Mar 27, 2022
Travel around a city - IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The table and bar chart

2 - I am not sure what you mean by"raised" in reference to the city transportation. Since there is no image...

Writing FeedbackQuang23 - Mar 26, 2022 / Holt - Mar 26, 2022
Peer Review Eliminating Medication Overload Research Paper

2 - Establish the foundation for the research paper and information in a better manner. Create a more solid and interesting...

Writing Feedbackcoralwxo - Mar 25, 2022 / Holt - Mar 26, 2022
Students should choose the subjects they like to learn

3 - If the topic is discussion about 2 views, I suppose essay are failed to convey message. If the topic...

Writing Feedbackhuekun - Mar 12, 2022 / minahaya2020 - Mar 25, 2022
Discuss some advantages of handmade products over machine- made products

2 - The prompt restatement does not follow the flow of the original presentation. The first sentence is not in line...

Writing FeedbackSimple0202 - Mar 25, 2022 / Holt - Mar 25, 2022
Should students study the science of food and how to prepare it or not? Discuss both views

3 - I think the first body paragraph, he/she ought to clarify the advantages, then the disadvantages in the second body...

Writing Feedbackthuthanh1908 - Mar 21, 2022 / minahaya2020 - Mar 25, 2022
I am writing to express my interest in applying for second-cycle degree in the Data Science program

3 - Thank you! @Holt...

Writing Feedbackatahanatik - Mar 24, 2022 / atahanatik - Mar 25, 2022
What would you do to help the victims of natural disaster ?

2 - You can never cite yourself in an essay or any other witten work. Only other information references and people...

Writing Feedbackgna_lihn - Mar 24, 2022 / Holt - Mar 25, 2022
When children become adults, their social behavior is radically different than it was in the past

2 - The essay will automatically receive a failing score because it does not adhere to the provided discussion requirements which...

Writing FeedbackNamviet - Mar 24, 2022 / Holt - Mar 25, 2022
The table and pie chart give information about population in Australia according to different nation

2 - When writing the summary overview it is important that the information prounded in individualized. It must never be a...

Writing FeedbackTlinh31 - Mar 24, 2022 / Holt - Mar 24, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Nowadays it is more important to plant trees in open spaces in towns and cites

3 - @Holt Thank you for sending me such sincere feedback! I appreciate that <3...

Writing Feedbacklyncbb - Mar 23, 2022 / lyncbb - Mar 24, 2022
TASK1 MANUFACTURING INSTANT NOODLES

2 - Avoid redundancies in word usage. Distinct and different are similar in reference in this case as there are 8...

Writing Feedbacksulyxinh - Mar 24, 2022 / Holt - Mar 24, 2022
Describe a dream country where wish visit many times

3 - @Alice1410 I think it's a little bit short for a part 2 IELTS, right ? You should say more...

Writing FeedbackAlice1410 - Mar 23, 2022 / chloeng1301 - Mar 24, 2022
IELTS TASK 2 TOPIC: GOVERNMENT AND SOCIETY

4 - @Holt Thank you for your recommendations ! I will check my assignment again and correct my errors...

Writing Feedbackchloeng1301 - Mar 24, 2022 / chloeng1301 - Mar 24, 2022
Task 2 : NOWADAYS ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE IS BEING USED TO DRIVE CAR.

2 - The prompt paraphrase and direct question responses that comprise the personal opinion are all incorrect. The prompt restatement is...

Writing Feedbackminahaya2020 - Mar 24, 2022 / Holt - Mar 24, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - BAR CHART: Shares of expenditures for selected categories

4 - It is a great essay anyway you should make the numbers count properly. I found it contains more than...

Writing Feedbackquannhuy - Mar 19, 2022 / rasikhah - Mar 23, 2022
The bar chart shows the average class sizes in primary schools and lower secondary schools in 6

3 - Thank you for your useful advice, I will try to complete my task more perfectly...

Writing Feedbackthuytien123 - Mar 11, 2022 / thuytien123 - Mar 23, 2022
Some people think that intelligence is innate while others claim that we can improve it by learning

2 - The personal opinion of the writer is not clearly stated in the discussion paragraphs. Though general and group viewpoints...

Writing FeedbackIris HSIEH - Mar 22, 2022 / Holt - Mar 22, 2022
Literature, BL, ancient China

2 - Not everyone is familiar with LGBTQIA+ movies at this point. It would help educate the reader if you can...

Writing Feedbackhualien3800 - Mar 21, 2022 / Holt - Mar 22, 2022
Give your opinion on punishing young children. Propose alternatives.

2 - Avoid exaggerations in your restatement presentations as words such as "unquestionable" will alter the original intent of the presentation....

Writing Feedbackandroangelface - Mar 21, 2022 / Holt - Mar 21, 2022
Residents are transferring from rurality to metropolis toward an advanced future

2 - The first thing that the examiner will notice in this essay is the lack of proper word usage. The...

Writing Feedbackginquynh - Mar 21, 2022 / Holt - Mar 21, 2022
Public libraries should be replaced by computer technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

3 - I think in the introduction paragraph, you should change the sentence "I do not agree that public libraries should...

Writing Feedbackwindieyaaa - Mar 16, 2022 / thuthanh1908 - Mar 21, 2022
Writing Task2 - Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning

3 - In this writing, the author did not write according to the structure of the question required. With this type...

Writing Feedbacksegrid15 - Mar 19, 2022 / thuthanh1908 - Mar 21, 2022
Describe a line graph which indicates the average global temperature and co2 levels

4 - I think this essay is not really meaningful as it contains too many simple sentences which leads to lack...

Writing FeedbackLEON315 - Mar 19, 2022 / luonggiabao01 - Mar 20, 2022
Investment in railways is a must however the road infrastructure also play a vital role in transport

2 - The writer has written a failing score essay at this point. In terms of task accuracy, he has shown...

Writing Feedbackthuvuvu - Mar 20, 2022 / Holt - Mar 20, 2022
Hosting an international sports - Disscuss both views about it.

3 - You met some serious mistakes in the introduction which you gave your personal view before restating of the 2...

Writing Feedbackthuthanh1908 - Mar 19, 2022 / thuvuvu - Mar 20, 2022
A Healthier Life - rough draft

2 - The writer should make up his mind about the subject reference. Will it be pets in general or dogs?...

Writing FeedbackDavidB - Mar 19, 2022 / Holt - Mar 20, 2022
ARGUMENT ESSAY TASK - GRE - Newsletter offering advice to investors

2 - The writer need not repeat the prompt requirements in the first paragraph unless he was actually qquestioning these references...

Writing Feedbackhar8584 - Mar 19, 2022 / Holt - Mar 20, 2022
Computers are often argued to be the greatest milestone in the history of technology.

4 - As a task 2 IELTS essay response, it is safe to say that this paper has been over written....

Writing Feedbackminhtamdav - Sep 10, 2019 / Holt - Mar 19, 2022
The proportion of households in owned and households in rented accommodation in England and Wales

2 - The writer tends to have a redundant presentation in the use of the word "household", It was used as...

Writing Feedbackmeaan - Mar 18, 2022 / Holt - Mar 18, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2! Can you guess which band?

2 - The writer has over written his essay to the point where there is a great possibility that he cannot...

Writing Feedbacklinhluutk123 - Mar 18, 2022 / Holt - Mar 18, 2022
Communication amenities - WRITING TASK 1: THE LINE GRAPH

2 - The summary overview and trending statement would have been better scored had it properly used the listing of services...

Writing FeedbackHuynhTruc - Mar 17, 2022 / Holt - Mar 17, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2: Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others

2 - The prompt restatement is acceptable and shows a degree of control over the creation of simple and complex sentences....

Writing Feedbackbhlin - Mar 17, 2022 / Holt - Mar 17, 2022
Today, TV channels show more men's sports than women's sports. Why is this the case?

2 - There are times when a restatement requires 2 sentences, there are times when it needs 3 sentences in the...

Writing Feedbackvananhpivi - Mar 17, 2022 / Holt - Mar 17, 2022
WRITING TASK 1: The Percentage of Canadian workforce in five main industries

3 - Hi there, I have a few suggestions for your essay. Hope it helps! 1. It's better to have...

Writing FeedbackMocTuAnh - Mar 14, 2022 / windieyaaa - Mar 16, 2022
Is government penalizing people who use their own cars the best way to traffic / pollution problems?

3 - @phanhuusang I have a few sugestions for your essay. Hope it helps! - "consequently, positively affect our surroundings..."...

Writing Feedbackphanhuusang - Mar 16, 2022 / windieyaaa - Mar 16, 2022
The chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the number of films produced in 5 countries

2 - A chart is different from a diagram. A chart represents a given measurement for a specific series of comparisons....

Writing Feedbackbuithanhduy - Mar 15, 2022 / Holt - Mar 16, 2022
The investment in health promotion is more crucial than the treatment of people who are already ill

3 - @Holt Thank you so much! can you guess which band I can have??...

Writing Feedbacklinhluutk123 - Mar 15, 2022 / linhluutk123 - Mar 15, 2022
Is it a fact that earning extremely high salaries by few people is good for the country?

2 - The first paragraph will lose points for lack of restatement clarity. The 2 public opinions must be presented as...

Writing Feedbackdevold - Mar 14, 2022 / Holt - Mar 15, 2022
IS FREEDOM OF SPEECH NECESSARY IN A FREE SOCIETY. TO WHAT EXTEND DO YOU AGREE ? (250 words minimum)

2 - I believe that the writer has meant this essay piece for as a task 2 response. In which case,...

Writing Feedbackminahaya2020 - Mar 13, 2022 / Holt - Mar 14, 2022
The two maps compare the road access to a city hospital which was done in 2007 and 2010

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback! I think I should improve my range of vocabulary for my writing skill...

Writing Feedbackluonggiabao01 - Mar 12, 2022 / luonggiabao01 - Mar 12, 2022
Money spent on the protection of wild animals could be better use on human's needs

2 - It is incorrect for the writer to refer to the idea presented "in restrospect" because the idea is not...

Writing Feedbackminhkhoi - Mar 12, 2022 / Holt - Mar 12, 2022
Public smoking - good or not?

2 - To get the maximum base score potential in a task 2 test, the writer must refrain from immediately discussing...

Writing FeedbackPhanThinh - Mar 12, 2022 / Holt - Mar 12, 2022
Give your opinion on sharing information freely

3 - @Holt Thank you for your suggestions! Now I find out my problems in this essay!...

Writing Feedbackthuvuvu - Mar 11, 2022 / thuvuvu - Mar 11, 2022
Is it true that technology makes our life too complex?

2 - When the student states "the technology", he is making reference to a specific technology already. The original prompt does...

Writing FeedbackNgan kieu - Mar 11, 2022 / Holt - Mar 11, 2022
Should we preserve or destroy old buidings?

2 - A school of thought is a belief or idea that is supported by people. That is not the reference...

Writing Feedbackluuly512 - Mar 11, 2022 / Holt - Mar 11, 2022
Some people say that teachers have the biggest influence on child's development once he/she starts.

3 - This essay is not appropriate to the format of the standard essay like IELTS, TOEIC,... There is no an...

Writing FeedbackJena Williams - Mar 11, 2022 / Ngan kieu - Mar 11, 2022
Run your own business rather than work for an employer. Advantages and disadvantages

2 - The prompt restatement is too far from the original topic considerations to be considered an accurate rewording of that...

Writing Feedbackhuongpro68 - Mar 11, 2022 / Holt - Mar 11, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Economic progress VS Other progress

2 - The prompt restatement is inaccurate. It fails to represent both public opinions prior to the writer's point of view...

Writing Feedbacktkhuev - Mar 10, 2022 / Holt - Mar 10, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 1 - The proportion of national consumers' expenditure on various items

2 - A 4 paragraph report is only acceptable when 2 images are provided for the comparative reporting task. Where only...

Writing Feedbackadriennguyen - Mar 10, 2022 / Holt - Mar 10, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Children's Talents can be learned

2 - In the first sentence of the prompt restatement, the writer uses the past tense "believed" rather than the current...

Writing Feedbackadriennguyen - Mar 10, 2022 / Holt - Mar 10, 2022
Ielts Writing Task 2: Some people think the news has no connection to people's lives

5 - @Holt I really appreciate your detailed feedback on my essay. It is really helpful to know my weakness so...

Writing Feedbackthuyduong267 - Mar 10, 2022 / thuyduong267 - Mar 10, 2022

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