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|IELTS 2 - Modern Technology influence on access to important data
5 - Hello Fatma, I am very happy to see your essay because your essay is well structured and the flow...
Writing Feedbackfatmajanna - Jul 18, 2016 / mahdinurianto25 - Aug 3, 2016
|If we use cell phones in the right way, they will become the most efficient tool in this modern life
Writing Feedbackquynh_12 - Aug 1, 2016 / quynh_12 - Aug 3, 2016
|The Internet provides us many valuable things but also cause some problems; IELTS task
4 - Hi Yingying, welcome to EF! :) To avoid confusion, I reckon that for the next practice you need...
Writing Feedbackmessityy - Jul 24, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 3, 2016
|Sweatshop about clothing and a child does not have education, workers very poor and get low wages
3 - Hi Wendy, first of all, in this essay, I can definitely feel that you are somehow furious, furious of...
Writing FeedbackWendy Li - Jul 30, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 2, 2016
|IELTS Task 2: More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time.
2 - Hi Mahdi, below are my thoughts for your essay. Indeed, a growing number of people are buying cars...
Writing Feedbackmahdinurianto25 - Aug 2, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 2, 2016
|Why money are very important factor in today's world?
5 - Hi Alvius, indeed, you need to practice more in order to create a good essay. Now, it will not...
Writing FeedbackAlviusTinambunan - Jul 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 2, 2016
|Students going to college - essay correction; I am trying to improve my writting skills.
2 - Hi Ashkan, first of all, I don't see anything wrong with how you approach your first paragraph, however, in...
Writing FeedbackAshkan123 - Aug 2, 2016 / justivy03 - Aug 2, 2016
|Some people believe that governments should pay for healthcare and education, but others disagree..
Writing Feedbackbestjery - Jul 31, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Aug 1, 2016
|The problems that appear if using personal vehicle and the best way to solve it
2 - Hi Puja, nice to meet you here. This is my some corrections: - Transport facilities is basic need...
Writing Feedbackpujakurniawan19 - Jul 31, 2016 / Risty01 - Jul 31, 2016
|IELTS Task2: Children are forced to study even their leisure time. Is that a good practice?
5 - Hi. Here is my opinion Pressure is a noun. You should say:may parents put pressure on their children to...
Writing FeedbackFreeman_ps1983 - Jul 27, 2016 / huynhngocminh99 - Jul 31, 2016
|The diagrams illustrate the growth of Salmon, one of the species of big fish. IELTS Task 1 practice
7 - Hello mister, thank you for the feedback that you give to me before, I also want to give some...
Writing Feedbackakbartaufiq25 - Jul 19, 2016 / grintdevereaux30 - Jul 31, 2016
|People face far greater risks in our modern way of life than they did in the past
4 - The correction you made is just about grammar and linking ideas. However, the topic requires you to show "any...
Writing Feedbackquynh_12 - Jul 30, 2016 / nguyendinhtuong - Jul 31, 2016
|Whether it should be compulsory for high school students to wear uniforms or not - it's the question
5 - Hi Minh, I'm glad to help you edit some mistakes in your essay: [b]beneficial for their performance not beneficial...
Writing Feedbackhuynhngocminh99 - Jul 27, 2016 / quynh_12 - Jul 31, 2016
|The public transportation overflow in modern countries is causing number of negative effects
3 - Hi Adip. Here is my feedback. It is very sensible of you to have written two paragraphs in the...
Writing Feedbackadip - Jul 30, 2016 / huynhngocminh99 - Jul 30, 2016
|Cars, apart of the private transportation, has recently sold to many people in developing countries.
Writing Feedbackramzi06 - Jul 30, 2016 / mahdinurianto25 - Jul 30, 2016
|Lofty tax and significant improvement of public transportation as a solution for too many cars
2 - Greetings Mr. Defry, Just share something that come up in my mind, don't forget to correct me if I...
Writing FeedbackDefryerwinsyah13 - Jul 30, 2016 / ramzi06 - Jul 30, 2016
|Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment.Why is this happening ,and what
8 - Hi, Rudi Thanks for your suggestion on my essay, I really appreciate it, So, Here my some corrections: ...
Writing Feedbackrodiwo - Jul 27, 2016 / Risty01 - Jul 30, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : People in poorer countries are buying cars. What are the problems? Any solutions?
3 - Hi grintdevereaux30, I have some suggestions, and please correct me when I make some mistakes. this is your...
Writing Feedbackgrintdevereaux30 - Jul 29, 2016 / adip - Jul 30, 2016
|In my opinion, managing and maintaining interpersonal relations is the most important skill nowadays
6 - Hi Payal, it is a sample introduction of mine. However, I'm sorry if this obtains some mistake. Such...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 28, 2016 / adip - Jul 30, 2016
|IELTS: individuals are more and more dependent or independent.
5 - The first sentence of the Intro won't impress the examiner, since such phrase too commonly appears when IELTS...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 20, 2016 / eddies - Jul 30, 2016
|Too many cars create problems and the State, also even society should work to solve this
Writing FeedbackRisty01 - Jul 29, 2016 / mahdinurianto25 - Jul 29, 2016
|Test 1 TOEFL. Summarize a reading and listening passage.
Writing Feedbackgabrieloandco - Jul 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 29, 2016
|First trial of IELTS writing test sample (Task 1) before the real IELTS
6 - You got a point there, Ivy. My biggest obstacle is to transfer the concept from my mind into the...
Writing Feedbackabstracism - Jul 26, 2016 / abstracism - Jul 29, 2016
|IELTS: People do unhealthy activities. Why and give solutions.
3 - Hi Keely, it is really nice to see that finally the moderator in this forum release your account from...
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 29, 2016
|The younger children need some help from their parents to complete their homework efficiently; IELTS
5 - I would like to say thank you for appreciating my feedback above. It is nice to see the fighting...
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 28, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 29, 2016
|IELTS: SHOULD PARENTS HELP CHILDREN WITH THEIR HOMEWORK OR NOT?
Writing FeedbackDaniel1998 - Jul 26, 2016 / Daniel1998 - Jul 28, 2016
|Immigrants from rural to urban areas: Effects and Solutions.
3 - Hi Nguyen, I would like to try to assess you based on IELTS writing band descriptor of task 2....
Writing Feedbackgiangnt248 - Jul 26, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 28, 2016
|Having an outstanding career and satisfying family life are the main desires of all human beings
3 - Hi Mahdi, here's my take on your essay; - Enjoying life is our principal intentionTo enjoy life is...
Writing Feedbackmahdinurianto25 - Jul 28, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 28, 2016
|The protection for endangered animal species and your opinions.
7 - Hi Nguyen, thank you for appreciating our work here on EF and you can be rest assured that we...
Writing Feedbackgiangnt248 - Jul 25, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 28, 2016
|The table shows the the demand for bananas and coffee in 5 countries over a 6 year period
Writing FeedbackKaterina0686 - Jul 27, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 28, 2016
|An essay about how to write a good paragraph
Writing Feedbackhuyennd - Jul 27, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2.Q.INCREASE AIR TICKET PRICE TO REDUCE AIR TRAFFIC
4 - The salad days of third millennium has seen Although there are few arguments in favour , I am of...
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 26, 2016 / eddies - Jul 28, 2016
|ielts- should we provide children in rural communities with more schools or computers
7 - hai on the contrary with the view of many commented above, I think you have written a fairly good...
Writing Feedbackhuynhngocminh99 - Jul 22, 2016 / jobymonpj - Jul 28, 2016
|Essay about work/life balance IELTS TASK 2
4 - Hai timea I think you didn't spend enough time to analyze and understand the question. The question clearly asks...
Writing FeedbackTimeaL - Jul 25, 2016 / jobymonpj - Jul 26, 2016
|Do you agree with the saying: "Traveling broadens your minds" ?
4 - No Worries at all Ho and thank you for appreciating our work here on EF, rest assured that we...
Writing Feedbackthphuong1911 - Jul 25, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 26, 2016
|Everyone should receive education on a field which is totally interested, without any gender barrier
3 - Hi View, well, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope you find this website to be helpful as...
Writing FeedbackWeevil - Jul 26, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 26, 2016
|COLLEGEAPP: Assume that 're in a position of leadership in your country and write an academic Essay
3 - Hi Mark, I can see that you have the most comprehensive feedback here from one of our EF contributors...
Writing Feedbackmarkcho0106 - Jul 25, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 25, 2016
|Fresh tea leaves picking is the first step of manufacturing black tea; IELTS diagram
Writing Feedbackmadmoiselle - Jul 24, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 25, 2016
|IELTS: The qualities of life of people in big cities are worse. Give causes and measures.
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 25, 2016
|TOEFL: a large number of celebrities are not equipped with skills necessary for a politician
4 - Celebrities dive into politics for the sole reason of using their popularity and "people image" to increase their vote...
Writing Feedbacknatasha_139 - Jul 8, 2016 / Eric_Rom - Jul 25, 2016
|IELTS Academic Writing task 2 - The Person Who Should Teach Children
Writing FeedbackRadhiyahFahra - Jul 23, 2016 / Laraib - Jul 25, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 essay practice - Population Distribution in two different countries, two different year
4 - Both forecast and forecasted are correct. I think it is more appropriate to use either elderly people or simply...
Writing Feedbackfatmajanna - Jul 24, 2016 / Daniel1998 - Jul 24, 2016
|IELTS; To read or not to read: That is a question - can we learn that way about a foreign country?
3 - but this approach is really suitable for everyone : However is this the best way for... yet for someone...
Writing FeedbackVictoria1015 - Jul 23, 2016 / madmoiselle - Jul 24, 2016
|IELTS: VIOLENCE SHOWN ON TV AND IN THE CINEMA MIGHT EXPLAIN YOUNG PEOPLE'S VIOLENT BEHAVIOUR
4 - ... this unpleasant phenomenon ought to be taken so that to reduce the amount of violence faced by our...
Writing FeedbackDaniel1998 - Jul 23, 2016 / giangnt248 - Jul 24, 2016
|[ielts Task 2] Increasing global demand of oil and gas, should continue explore?
2 - Hi yon959, your essay is very well for both skeleton and supporting ideas. However, I have some minor comments...
Writing Feedbackyon959 - Jul 23, 2016 / Freeman_ps1983 - Jul 23, 2016
|It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm the friendship. Do you agree?
4 - Hi, Payal, I think you did not directly answer the question properly (maybe I am wrong). The question...
Writing Feedbackpayal1982 - Jul 22, 2016 / yon959 - Jul 23, 2016
|We can't affirm that the living certain place is better.
3 - Dear Hien, I think that comments and remarks above have mostly summed up the changes and enhancements, you need...
Writing Feedbackhohien - Jul 6, 2016 / Sunrise011 - Jul 23, 2016
|GRE Argument:"WWAC radio station..."
2 - ... likely to choose the Internet rather than the radio station to meet their needs. ... radio station which...
Writing Feedbacksunshinelyb - Jul 23, 2016 / Victoria1015 - Jul 23, 2016
|IELTS: WHETHER TRAVELLING AND WORKING ABROAD ARE THE ONLY REASONS TO LEARN A FOREIGN LANGUAGE OR NOT
2 - Hi, Here is my feedback: Consequently, it significantly increases their chances of getting a well-paying----. well paid and...
Writing FeedbackDaniel1998 - Jul 22, 2016 / payal1982 - Jul 22, 2016
|First hand smokers must not be allowed to smoke in public places. I agree with that statement
NEW - Smoking should be banned in public places The people, who smoke, are increasing/growing day by day through the...
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|The causes of less productive agricultural land degradation during the 1990s in 3 continents
3 - Hi Naomi, below are my thoughts on your essay. - wasis the main reason - toof land degradation...
Writing FeedbackTitus14 - Jul 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 22, 2016
|In a modern world people always face the dilemma to own a car. Perspective for the next 20 years.
3 - Hi Khaleed, I can see that you received a comprehensive feedback from one of our EF contributors and I...
Writing Feedbackkhaledd - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 22, 2016
|Talk about the pros/cons of this era as is full of daily inventions.
4 - Hi Smith, first of all, your essay is very relevant to todays world. You made sure that the information...
Writing Feedbacktwid - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|IELTS: People live in small family units rather than big family groups. Is it positive or negative?
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 12, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|Payment Disparity in Sports: Sexist or Economic
3 - Hi Julian, indeed WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family. We hope that this is just the start of this...
Writing Feedbackcrzydude42 - Jul 10, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents
4 - Hi Chiang, first of all, I find your analysis very accurate to the graph, it is not only using...
Writing Feedbackyunana - Jul 7, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|Is the improvement of schools the most important factor in creating a progressed, thriving country?
4 - Hi Hector, no worries at all, we are happy that you acknowledge our efforts here on EF, we do...
Writing Feedbacksinahector - Jul 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|More enhancements in security system due to the recent upsurge in the number of offences
6 - Hi Minh, thank you for acknowledging our insights here on EF. We do strive to provide you with the...
Writing Feedbackhuynhngocminh99 - Jul 20, 2016 / justivy03 - Jul 21, 2016
|IELTS: In many countries, there are 24 -hour TV programs. Is it a positive or negative development?
Writing Feedbackkantyjang - Jul 15, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Jul 20, 2016
|People should speak a global language in a global word
4 - I mean you should show your idea in the first paragraph so the reader could easily get your points...
Writing Feedbackeminhaqi - Jul 20, 2016 / nguyendinhtuong - Jul 20, 2016
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