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|Fast food is cheap and convenient therefore has positive impact on human eating habits
3 - Good introduction ... You have good writing skills :) I wish you shortened this sentence. Your point...
Writing Feedbackiamchop - Jul 17, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|TOEFL: extraordinarily cautious is important since rough work is intolerable
Writing FeedbackAndreawqh - Jul 18, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|[IELTS] 'Long-term positive effects of culture' - should tourist obey local customs and behaviors?
8 - Well, this sounds a bit stereotype generalization. There are countries that do not have such culture issues to...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jul 18, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|An increasing amount of students have negative attitude of learning. Why is this happening?
Writing Feedbackstephy7658 - Jul 21, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 22, 2014
|The line graph: Migration Statistics in UK
3 - Well, this is a task that aims at assessing your report writing skills and therefore you need to...
Writing FeedbackVihuynh - Jul 7, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|IELTS: we should not ignore the traditional food; fast foods need be supervised
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 16, 2014 / sundin928 - Jul 22, 2014
|What are the reasons behind lack of facilities &services for disabled population?
3 - We see many people with physical and mental disabilities and live in pathetic conditions. In fact, the recent statistical...
Writing FeedbackRUSHABH - Jun 5, 2014 / dumi - Jul 22, 2014
|Fixed punishments for crimes may improve the efficiency, decrease the crime rate
Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - Jul 16, 2014 / stephy7658 - Jul 22, 2014
|Nowadays, there is an ever increasing amount of noise in our everyday lives. Reasons and solutions
4 - Therefore, I believe that this problem can be relieved through the following measures. Firstly, if technologies create noises, human...
Writing Feedbackstephy7658 - Jul 21, 2014 / kevin1983 - Jul 21, 2014
|International aid is a must but also it is required to operate in the right way
4 - not only is the international aid is indispensable but also it is required to be operated in the rightappropriate...
Writing Feedbackgunyes - Jun 16, 2014 / eddies - Jul 21, 2014
|IELTS: Too much freedom for children affected their studies
2 - I like yoru approach towards the intorduction. However, I wish you removed the last line as it is...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jul 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|Number of languages in the world and its impact on global safety
4 - You should have mentioned the purpose of writing this essay, for example - IELTS, TOEFL etc., in the title...
Writing FeedbackVihuynh - Jun 9, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|Payment is very vital factor to consider while choose employer
Writing Feedbackhk_apm789 - Jul 2, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|"Bangla" - workers from Bangladesh in Malaysia
3 - 'Bangla' is one of the common descriptions we use to describe foreign construction workers in Malaysia, irrespective if they...
Writing FeedbackCycy - Jul 2, 2014 / dumi - Jul 21, 2014
|Ielts: The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business
5 - I think the reasons for both sides are not very good. And I think you should expand the ideas....
Writing Feedbackiamchop - Jun 24, 2014 / stephy7658 - Jul 21, 2014
|IELTS - Celebrities & Their Influences
5 - As a result, to become a star and an inspiration for people, a person need to have real talent...
Writing Feedbackicebeating - Jun 27, 2014 / kevin1983 - Jul 20, 2014
|The chart shows vast difference in the level of skilled vocational diploma
Writing Feedbackpranesh - Jul 17, 2014 / pranesh - Jul 20, 2014
|IELTS: Technological progress in the past century has its negative effect, despite its remarkable
4 - On one hand, the development of technology can promptwould result in economic growth and the improvement ofin living standards.The...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 18, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 20, 2014
|keep equal number of man and woman to show the respect for both genders
Writing Feedbacksky1997 - Jul 20, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 20, 2014
|TOEFL: An effective leader tries to make others feel they are part of the decision-making process.
Writing Feedbackjyong101 - Jul 18, 2014 / jyong101 - Jul 20, 2014
|[IELTS TASK 2] Several languages die out in the world
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 23, 2014 / eddies - Jul 20, 2014
|Technological improvement has always two sides, benefits and drawbacks
5 - Some vocabularies and sentences interrupt the flow. You need a concluding signal. This is strictly necessary, you know....
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jul 17, 2014 / eddies - Jul 20, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY; companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform
2 - Hi, devaraj This is called shopping listing unfortunately, it indicates laziness. As far as I read the...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jul 18, 2014 / SHanafi - Jul 20, 2014
|TOEFL - automobiles have changed our lives
3 - In my personal view automobiles are the ones that have brought have a new era of transportation. Yes... I...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh13 - Jun 27, 2014 / dumi - Jul 20, 2014
|[IELTS] The role of parents and school in teaching children
2 - Firstly, parents have major influence on children's behaviour, especially when they are 3-to 5-years-olds.very young. Children, by...
Writing Feedbacktoanci - Jun 28, 2014 / dumi - Jul 20, 2014
|What is alternatives to reduce industrial pollution? replace harmful industries
2 - Pollution is a vital problem worldwide. Developing countries are becoming industrialized that leads to increase pollutedmore environmental pollutionenvironment. In...
Writing Feedbackhk_apm789 - Jun 28, 2014 / dumi - Jul 20, 2014
|IELTS: spending more money on promoting healthy lifestyle or treatment
NEW - Some people think it is more important for government to spend more money on promoting healthy lifestyle in order...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 19, 2014 / — -
|GRE-118: views we share vs views contradict our own and learning from it
2 - Why are you having three parts for the introduction. You should have had all these sentences in on para...
Writing Feedbackbuonarroti - Jun 8, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS Education plays an important role in the socioeconomic status of a country
3 - Well... you write very well. Good grammar, vocabulary , flow etc. However, I believe you need to pay a...
Writing Feedbacktink3r - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|(IELTS) Studying abroad is a trend among university students in Turkey
5 - It is always good to include your prompt in the post so that we can have a better understanding...
Writing Feedbackkbektas - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS: Abortion Should Be illegal? People should think of the consequences
4 - Recently, abortionsincreaseshave increased rapidly and becomesthe issue has become a controversial topic. Some people supposebelieve that abortions should...
Writing Feedbackthanhmai - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|[IELTS] Why is happiness difficult to define? Important factors to happiness?
9 - ... aspired to happiness.be happy. This is very well written. Have you been able to finish it within 30...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|(IELTS) a country benefits from more and more university students
5 - However, the publicsome people has doubt about the beneficial effect of college education and they believe these policies will...
Writing Feedbackpatdr - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS Essay Task 2: entertaining and educational functions of Museums
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|TOEFL: 11 month study period for a better, more efficient education
2 - You need to improve your approach for introduction. This introduction fails to introduce your prompt to the reader....
Writing Feedbackkurosusu - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - center for business vs agriculture (farming) research choice
3 - I agree with eddies .... your intro needs improvement. I think you better introduce the prompt itself. In this...
Writing Feedbackilaha - Jun 26, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS: How British people spending their money on fast foods? Chart
Writing Feedbackgns5958 - Jul 16, 2014 / iamchop - Jul 17, 2014
|[IELTS TASK 2] Some sectors request many well-qualified people - career choices for young generation
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 30, 2014 / iamchop - Jul 17, 2014
|TEXT Messages - novelty for us
Writing FeedbackLobocor - Jul 14, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 17, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY; Movies and computer games containing violence are very popular.
NEW - QUESTION: Nowadays movies and computer games containing violence are very popular. Some people believe that they have negative effect...
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|IELTS: Advertising makes people buy products that they really do not need
8 - You have written this very clearly. However, it does not follow the most appropriate approach for the intro....
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 23, 2014 / dumi - Jul 17, 2014
|Person can only be happy if he has got a job which he enjoy
4 - It is always good to include the purpose of writing , e.g. IELTS, TOEFL etc., in your title for...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh13 - Jun 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 17, 2014
|Making money or traveling before entering university is valuable for students
2 - At present, it is commonlyoften recommended that young people graduate from high school should to go out to work...
Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - Jul 16, 2014 / dumi - Jul 17, 2014
|What should a country do: run/ carry out the policy of isolating from the world or engaging others?
3 - I will present my thoughts in the order of your essay's content. Don't be wordy (from my viewpoint, I...
Writing Feedbackthoomr - Jul 15, 2014 / dchege711 - Jul 16, 2014
|GRE best way to understand the character of a society
2 - You're essay is very good and well written, just the excess of large words makes it hard to get...
Writing FeedbackYoullee - Jun 26, 2014 / malsackey - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS - learning languages at an early age bracket benefits more than deteriorates.
4 - Sure :) This my suggestion for your introduction; Literacy on foreign languages is a great advantage in the modern...
Writing Feedbackerocdrah - Jul 15, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|I definitely agree - pressure of school and parental pressure should be reduced
3 - Don't write lengthy sentences to open your essay. Begin your essay with a more catchy, interesting and meaningful...
Writing Feedbackatmnbnnr - Jul 15, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS; working and travelling a year before university is a good idea
Writing Feedbackskyman - Jul 15, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|The importance of utilizing advisement globally continues to increase each year
Writing Feedbackdondon26 - Jun 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS The environment problems facing today's world are so great that there is
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 15, 2014 / MisterWandering - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS: 'The apple never falls far from the tree' - Parents should teach children
10 - For this essay, I think one body paragraph is not enough to cover all the question from the prompt....
Writing Feedback19epuzam - Jun 14, 2014 / eddies - Jul 16, 2014
|Toefl : Begin learning a foreign language as soon as starting school
5 - This sentence is too long and contains much vague information when it comes to an opening paragraph. according...
Writing Feedbackitspueng - Jun 14, 2014 / eddies - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS; School teachers used to be the source of information
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 15, 2014 / digitalidea - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Essay - Negative attitude of young people towards learning
Writing Feedbackmsarkar - Jun 27, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Some people say that the Internet is making the world
Writing FeedbackSabi Thapaa - Jul 4, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|Parents should have much time for their children which are lonely sometimes
5 - It is sometimes hard to share writing feedback if you don't include a complete hook. Secondly, when you open...
Writing Feedbackanthonypasha - Jul 6, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS - GUN CONTROL & INCREASING VIOLENCE
13 - All in all, it is obvious thatObviously,there isa poorthis proves that there is no valid relationship between polices carrying...
Writing Feedbackicebeating - Jun 22, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS : negative effects of technological process ( agree or disagree )
5 - This is not a clear example, I think. Have journalistic questions to build a clear example. Let's say:...
Writing Feedbackthanhphongct1 - Jun 13, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Essay - Well qualified graduates without employement
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|IELTS ESSAY: Computers - What things will they be used for in the future?
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