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|TOEFL: constructing public transportation systems in cities is good?
9 - This writing is good. However, it contains over 400 words, which I think that if you deal with such...
Writing Feedbacklephuc - Oct 11, 2014 / eddies - Nov 1, 2014
|We recommend maintaining Grove College's tradition of all-female education - GRE AW
2 - I would reinforce the message of the conclusion and convince the reader more deeply. JUST THE CONCLUSION...
Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Nov 1, 2014 / jdlr22 - Nov 1, 2014
|Travelling in a group you will have to fully rely on your leader or your members
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 1, 2014 / JuniorR - Nov 1, 2014
|TOEFL: wearing a uniform by students, when they go to school, is a big timesaver for them
3 - I forgot to mention this, use academic words in your essay. Sexy is not such a word. Besides,...
Writing Feedbacklephuc - Nov 1, 2014 / peyman_np - Nov 1, 2014
|Direct communication is always better than emails or telephone calls or letters
4 - Hi, following are my suggestions: 1. You use excessive commas in your essay. You should put periods after each...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 31, 2014 / 4theluvofgod - Nov 1, 2014
|I hate smoking the most. People know about smoking's harmful effect, but they still smoke?
Writing Feedbacksontrang_s2 - Nov 1, 2014 / sontrang_s2 - Nov 1, 2014
|Older the railway system is the better and longer it gets. London 1863. IELTS task
2 - the task...
Writing Feedbacksicko22 - Nov 1, 2014 / sicko22 - Nov 1, 2014
|A family in small village have superb natural resources and weather
3 - Thank you vangiespen. actually I'm beginner to writing an essay but I know the IBC and I didn't explain...
Writing Feedbackmrh54ir - Oct 31, 2014 / mrh54ir - Oct 31, 2014
|Schools, parents, and students would benefit with the requirements of wearing uniforms
4 - I strongly agree that public school should require students to wear uniforms. Uniforms can give school a better environment...
Writing Feedbackbivi1222 - Oct 30, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 31, 2014
|IELTS: Decreasing Levels of Fresh Water
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Oct 23, 2014 / Remansou - Oct 31, 2014
|IELTS Essay: People have always been seeking for their basic needs - Shopping Habits
3 - I don't know how to express my gratitude for your help Louisa . The best feedback I ever received....
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Oct 30, 2014 / Remansou - Oct 31, 2014
|medical treatment ielts test question
7 - Some sectors believe that the budget for health should be emphasized increasing research and medical technolog should be...
Writing Feedbackbteng011284 - Oct 20, 2014 / Remansou - Oct 31, 2014
|Good parenting with better schooling, when combined - children will grow into a gem to our society
Writing Feedbackshavaktm - Oct 23, 2014 / bivi1222 - Oct 30, 2014
|My bad experiences help me to fight harder and to go after what I want - CBEST essay
Writing Feedbackbivi1222 - Oct 30, 2014 / bivi1222 - Oct 30, 2014
|Do we need a teacher to learn English?
5 - Chloe, simply put, you are being asked to explain whether you believe that teachers are necessary for the teaching...
Writing FeedbackChloe121 - Oct 30, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 30, 2014
|Grades are the motivation for students to study better, they can create a competitive environment
3 - Vns, your essay, while delivering good reasons to support grades as a motivation for learning, needs a lot of...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 30, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 30, 2014
|Internet have opened up new doors for people who need recent information or news
2 - Hamed, you have written an essay that leaves its main thought process under developed because you have tried to...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Oct 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 30, 2014
|Success is not far-reaching for those who pursue their goals until they will achieve it
3 - Hamed, sorry about not having gotten back to you sooner. I have been a bit busy these days and...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Oct 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 30, 2014
|Spend money on long last thing or spend on short term pleasure;e.g. buying jewelry or takin vacation
Writing FeedbackClark_Z - Oct 30, 2014 / Clark_Z - Oct 30, 2014
|Nowadays, smoking is consider as a world wide phenomenon - should it be forbidden?
7 - Hello there . Hmmm , from what I've learned the body paragraph should start with a topic sentence...
Writing FeedbackNaeemah - Oct 27, 2014 / Naeemah - Oct 30, 2014
|IELTS: Animal Testing should not be banned but its usages need to be minimized
2 - Firstly, great essay, However, some examples will surely consolidate your essay in order obtain better mark....
Writing Feedbackthongdat1608 - Oct 30, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 30, 2014
|'broader roads, logical control'; stuck on road in rush hours - many cars, motorbikes move slowly
Writing Feedbackanthonynguyen - Oct 30, 2014 / thongdat1608 - Oct 30, 2014
|I support the argument that the ancient languages are of no practical use and no help in getting job
2 - I would improve upon the grammar of your essay. Try including some sentence variety and transitions. Also, I'm not...
Writing Feedbackkajuthapa - Oct 29, 2014 / mirrrrr - Oct 29, 2014
|Nature vs industry - it is a must for our country to get the most out of our free space
2 - - Your overview is somewhat incomplete. You could have presented a summary of the reasons why you believe that...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 29, 2014
|Numerous people have a tendency to play at least 1 hour a day - Technologies
4 - Shon, I feel that your argument in this case is flaewed because you tried to relate the use of...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 28, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 29, 2014
|IELTS: More People Living by Themselves
6 - I think you are quite off topic. Since, they ask you the reasons of those current problems. Therefore, my...
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Oct 27, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 29, 2014
|Argument Essay; part of a letter to the editor of a scientific journal
2 - - Arun, you need to make specific mention that first born humans and monkeys exhibit the same tendencies....
Writing Feedbackarunpoppat - Oct 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 29, 2014
|IELTS - I would watch the events live once or twice every month and watch the rest of them on TV
2 - In conclusion, I believe both arguments can hold itstheir ground, and personally, I would go to site to ...
Writing Feedbackianisafk - Oct 29, 2014 / Dapocalypse7 - Oct 29, 2014
|IELTS: Wars essay - natural resources might be considered as a primary reason for wars
Writing Feedbackthongdat1608 - Oct 29, 2014 / thongdat1608 - Oct 29, 2014
|GRE issue: As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible?
Writing Feedbackbuheborjgin - Oct 2, 2014 / arunpoppat - Oct 29, 2014
|Teachers should teach academic or social subjects
2 - The Selection of topics for education is often(has been) very controversial. While I agree that teachers can teach their...
Writing Feedbackielts7 - Oct 29, 2014 / thongdat1608 - Oct 29, 2014
|Illiteracy cause and effect essay
Writing Feedbackthongdat1608 - Oct 29, 2014 / arunpoppat - Oct 29, 2014
|A society without school and education system is like a body without brain
7 - Hi Vns9x Firstly, Thank you for your time, I think my essay is not rich enough for using advanced...
Writing Feedbacksina_ns - Oct 28, 2014 / sina_ns - Oct 29, 2014
|IELTS - under suitable administration, tourism enhances local economic development
6 - While it seems that both of the ideas make sense, my view is that, by being managed properly, booming...
Writing FeedbackLen_hart - Oct 26, 2014 / zzwestmanzz - Oct 28, 2014
|Nicaragua has experienced a sharp increase in violence and ruthless crimes against woman
Writing Feedbackasdfkjsouplove2 - Oct 26, 2014 / asdfkjsouplove2 - Oct 28, 2014
|FARMING: Agriculture plays a leading role in our country, Cambodia has abundance of free territories
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 28, 2014 / Charphil - Oct 28, 2014
|Parents help their children to make decision
5 - There is no doubt that parents are the people who most care about their children in the world. Everything...
Writing FeedbackChppoin - Oct 25, 2014 / Chppoin - Oct 28, 2014
|"My friend, Angel" An essay about how I thought of her from day one until now
Writing FeedbackCath21 - Oct 24, 2014 / Cath21 - Oct 27, 2014
|I love science because I'm curious. Engineering Essay Template.
8 - You can still talk about how your love for engineering developed. You just need to slide it down to...
Writing FeedbackAtom007 - Oct 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 27, 2014
|The value of plans. Toefl exam.
6 - you should also reorganize the overall structure of the article(as commentator said above), especially an outline at the start...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Oct 3, 2014 / buheborjgin - Oct 27, 2014
|People should find what their talent is, to support what they do, to reach their goal in live
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Oct 26, 2014 / fp2014 - Oct 26, 2014
|Sentiments about the upcoming university!
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 26, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 26, 2014
|some paraphrase for some articles about the internet and newspaper
NEW - source 1 Ross Dawson, who wrote the 'Living Networks' book which predicted the social networking revolution, thinks that newspapers...
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|The dramatically fluctuations are composite by Canada, Italy, Japan and France - IELTS table chart
7 - Hello Wiratmaja_Dicky, I suggest you to read many sample answer as much as you can to improve your writing...
Writing FeedbackWiratmaja_Dicky - Oct 20, 2014 / tiaDS - Oct 26, 2014
|IELTS Essay: The government should allocate more funds to public services instead of arts
3 - Many thanks for your worthy feedback. It is really appreciated. I am also concern about grammar and punctuation or...
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Oct 25, 2014 / Remansou - Oct 26, 2014
|These days, most of universities have many subjects for male or female only
3 - 1. Avoid shopping listing. In formal writing, commonly, it attaches three words or phrases. eg. engineering, nursing and...
Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Oct 26, 2014
|In personal live, we have some responsibilities towards other people (TOEFL)
5 - Moreover, sometimes by doing things helps the people learn about livelife . In this essay, the reasons for why...
Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 22, 2014 / Remansou - Oct 25, 2014
|TOEFL: working alone appears to be better. It helps us to be more responsible.
9 - Revised essay: Our work describes the way we are. People practice lots of ways of working to get the...
Writing Feedbacklephuc - Oct 11, 2014 / lephuc - Oct 25, 2014
|IELTS: people are now more conscious to gain more educational qualification
3 - Hi Katy, Thanks a lot. Actually it's from Cambridge-01, test-04. They never used to define precisely if that's an...
Writing Feedbackimon - Oct 25, 2014 / imon - Oct 25, 2014
|IELTS WT1 Test 1 CAM 7 - National consumer expenditure 2002
NEW - Please mark my description below. I really need your help because of the next week IELTS exam. Thank you...
Writing FeedbackKaty Curie - Oct 25, 2014 / — -
|TOEFL: It is better to wait in patience than take action.
13 - Zhang, you understood what I meant precisely. In the TOEFL, you are under a time constraint of 30 minutes....
Writing FeedbackDiesel - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 25, 2014
|Living in dormitory can immensely enhance your independency skills
2 - I know this is one of the approved forms when dealing with an introductory statement. However, you need...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 25, 2014 / eddies - Oct 25, 2014
|IELTS: Modern forms of communication increases the frequency and quality of interpersonal links
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Oct 22, 2014 / imon - Oct 25, 2014
|Others advices and personal experience should co-exist to assist person reach success
Writing Feedbackshabemahtab - Oct 24, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 25, 2014
|People can easily achieve success unless they have two prominent aspects: talent and hard effort
3 - I think the term "prison sentence" is not usable here. Overall, your reasoning was good. But the...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Oct 23, 2014 / imon - Oct 25, 2014
|IELTS: Summarizing a Bar Graph (Population of Asian Elephants)
2 - The graph illustrates the estimated maximum population of Asian elephants in nine countries in both 1997 and 2004 ...
Writing FeedbackJakurino - Oct 24, 2014 / eddies - Oct 25, 2014
|IELTS - the level of education among women in the land experienced an upgrade
2 - The pie charts illustrate how educated women in someland attain their high levels of education between 1945 and...
Writing Feedbackmaritsanur - Oct 22, 2014 / eddies - Oct 24, 2014
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 24, 2014 / RawrKiwiz - Oct 24, 2014
|futuristic city vs marvelous artifacts - historical building IELTS essay
4 - Well, this writing is good. However, this lacks specific examples for both para 3 and 4. As you can...
Writing Feedbackbteng011284 - Oct 20, 2014 / eddies - Oct 24, 2014
|IELTS - nowadays human activities are influenced by computer use; computers are more of a hindrance?
2 - This essay is good. However, this contains grammar issues affecting the flow of the sentences. A closer look at...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Oct 23, 2014 / eddies - Oct 24, 2014
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