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|IELTS TASK 2 - MEDIA CONTROL - an important privilege and tool to manipulate the public
Writing Feedbacklinhledieue - Dec 27, 2016 / linhledieue - Dec 27, 2016
|If I would obtain a chance to go abroad then I would go to China
2 - Hey! A couple of things. First, you ought to capitalize every instance of China in the essay. It'll go...
Writing FeedbackOmerzafar - Dec 26, 2016 / YomanAwe - Dec 26, 2016
|Art can soar economy of the country - spending money for it
Writing FeedbackOmerzafar - Dec 25, 2016 / Omerzafar - Dec 26, 2016
|Some researchers analyse and say that, you are not too old to learn new skills
Writing Feedbacklalodhi - Dec 26, 2016 / Omerzafar - Dec 26, 2016
|Travel in a group can save money and time, it's pity though that people can't do then what they wish
4 - Especially for those are busy and are going with large number of people. -- Well, first of all I...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Dec 13, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 26, 2016
|Any new technological development in the recent years is a boon or curse for the society in general.
2 - hi @lalodhi, you have a good stand point. I'd like to give you some suggestion as follows : 1....
Writing Feedbacklalodhi - Dec 26, 2016 / masktaz - Dec 26, 2016
|The total download (in 1000s) from three computer packages in five weeks period
4 - I think you need to work on you summary sentence. ..."and Net less popular among internet users." - that...
Writing Feedbackkiemwanz - Dec 24, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 26, 2016
|Overpopulation of urban areas - problems and solutions
2 - @lalodhi Here are few suggestions from me. ..., there has been significant rise in the urban population... ......
Writing Feedbacklalodhi - Dec 26, 2016 / nandasharma - Dec 26, 2016
|The Profit from Losing Money
38 - @Holt I am so happy, Holt! Thanks for guiding me through the essay. Without you the essay would not...
Writing Feedbackmualla - Nov 11, 2016 / mualla - Dec 25, 2016
|The Personality of Candidate Requirement in Recruitment of the Company
3 - @SarlindaDS_27 Sarlinda, there are plenty of grammatical errors and subject-verb disgreements in your article which...
Writing FeedbackSarlindaDS_27 - Nov 30, 2016 / nandasharma - Dec 25, 2016
|IELTS task1: spending on different items in the UK (Table)
2 - Ali, when you write the summary overview of the chart, make sure to represent all of the sectors indicated...
Writing Feedbackali98 - Dec 24, 2016 / Holt - Dec 24, 2016
|Writing 2: people think that men and women have different qualities to certain jobs
3 - What I didn't like about your second paragraph is that, you have mixed complex and very simple sentences. I...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Dec 22, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 22, 2016
|The electricity generation was dominated by coal in New Zealand while Germany prefered other sources
2 - while nuclear, natural gas, and coal also was popular sources in Germany. - First, the word "also" doesn't sound...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Nov 1, 2015 / krempetkov - Dec 22, 2016
|Food revolution - and how the change impact on people's lives - IELTS essay
5 - hello, here are my suggestions, 1. I agree partially with this statement, preparedpreparing ... 2. The main reason...
Writing Feedbackthanhscorpia - Dec 18, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 22, 2016
|More and more young people hold the important positions in the government.
4 - hello, here are my suggestions, 1. In some countries, the youth is becomingbecome more and moreto occupyoccupying the...
Writing Feedbacktruonglanngoc - Dec 21, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 22, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads
3 - I think your essay is really good overall- very clear points. However, if I could change something maybe I'd...
Writing Feedbackardiankrist - Dec 21, 2016 / Punn1238 - Dec 21, 2016
|Urbanization is a modern disease.
Writing FeedbackVittal - Dec 19, 2016 / Holt - Dec 21, 2016
|Worldwide market of hybrid vehicles in three different areas - WRITING TASK 1
3 - Hi NinaJoesuf25, As my opinion, your first sentence in the first paragraph is complex, just keep it simple....
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 15, 2016 / phongnam - Dec 21, 2016
|"Why Mow?" What lawn means in suburban America -> Was I logical enough in criticizing Pollan's work?
3 - @Holt Holt I really appreciate your concern and advice. I will make sure that I don't repeat the same...
Writing Feedbackrealtalk - Dec 20, 2016 / realtalk - Dec 21, 2016
|Higher fuel price to solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world
2 - @krempetkov George, No offense but hiking up the price of the fuel sounds ridiculous/childish and also not quite practical....
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 20, 2016 / nandasharma - Dec 21, 2016
|IELTS -writing 2 - The most appropriate time for learning a foreign language
2 - @dianakelin The first paragraph needs a lot of work. You need to reorganize the whole passage and make it...
Writing Feedbackdianakelin - Dec 20, 2016 / realtalk - Dec 20, 2016
|Property ownership - justification essay
6 - @Holt I really appreciate your help Holt I was so lost preparing for this test, and your responses gave...
Writing Feedbackredjohn - Dec 18, 2016 / redjohn - Dec 19, 2016
|Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, th
2 - Dimitry, I am not sure about how to review your essay. That is because you used the full prompt...
Writing Feedbackxenuseeng - Dec 19, 2016 / Holt - Dec 19, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : Is Advertisement informative or deceptive
Writing Feedbackm7mdbsheer1 - Dec 19, 2016 / ngokhoa99 - Dec 19, 2016
|Essay about the advantages of co-operation in your learning English
Writing Feedbacklahavip06 - Dec 18, 2016 / lahavip06 - Dec 18, 2016
|We have to depend on technology which makes our life easier, but we need to use it in a proper way.
5 - Jone, your overall score for this essay could be a 5 in terms of task accuracy. That is because...
Writing Feedbackjone75 - Dec 16, 2016 / Holt - Dec 18, 2016
|Congress should overturn policy in regards to women in combat (I need help editing my paper)
2 - @kaleidoscopic You are good at your platform but you are only moving around the background you have created....
Writing Feedbackkaleidoscopic - Dec 17, 2016 / koun - Dec 17, 2016
|Factories not stadiums, is what we need. Do you agree? Argumentative essay
2 - Azeddine, Somehow I don't feel like you posted the complete prompt along with the essay. The reason that i...
Writing FeedbackAdam10 - Dec 17, 2016 / Holt - Dec 17, 2016
|TOPIC OF AN ORIGINAL ARTICLE I AM WRITING ON: THE CAREER WOMAN
Writing Feedbackchizy7 - Dec 16, 2016 / Holt - Dec 17, 2016
|Advertising directed only to a particular target audiences who can make decision for their selves
3 - @Holt Thank you for your valuable feedback Mary. I realize that my essay is too rigid. I will try...
Writing FeedbackStreetwalker - Dec 16, 2016 / Streetwalker - Dec 16, 2016
|GRE-University should require all students to take classes outside of the students' field of study
4 - Just like all the activities that we do in life Sun, one has to regularly practice in order to...
Writing Feedbackxuesun - Dec 15, 2016 / Holt - Dec 16, 2016
|The line graph provides the information about the number of people who visit Australia
2 - Combining the information from the graph and table into the overview sentence is quite simple. You don't need to...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 15, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 16, 2016
|Working as volunteers should be taken into consideration for children - WRITING TASK 2
4 - Obviously, this concern is proliferating and gaining fame ... ... is pivotal factor to burgeon their self-development. ... interact...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 15, 2016 / ngokhoa99 - Dec 16, 2016
|Technologies such as computer benefits society
6 - In your essay, you mostly focused on the usage of computers using "the Internet". But before the Internet was...
Writing FeedbackHoaidepchi - Dec 7, 2016 / mualla - Dec 16, 2016
|Three exported products (graph) such as meat products, dairy products, and international tourism
2 - Hi let me give you some grammar corrections and my suggestions: The given bar chart informs the comparisons aboutcompares...
Writing FeedbackFatirtalent - Sep 27, 2016 / mualla - Dec 15, 2016
|CANADIANS SCHOLARS from a third level of education in Canada - the rising trend
3 - Initially, the female proportion broke the record as the highest one -- Well, "broke the record" is definitely not...
Writing Feedbackeve01 - Nov 10, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 15, 2016
|People tend to enjoy interaction with their friends in social networking more than in the real life
4 - @yika In my view and agree are repetitive in the starting. Tend to agree --only agree can work....
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 6, 2016 / abdon786 - Dec 15, 2016
|Wasting production in Six different countries in twenty years period presented in Table
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Nov 2, 2015 / Jeremy Newcastl - Dec 15, 2016
|Almost every country consider smoking in public areas as a detrimental issue.
2 - Nur, your task accuracy score is 3. Yes, it is a failing score. Why did you fail? Consider the...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Feb 21, 2016 / Holt - Dec 15, 2016
|Causes of stress in society nowadays - working environment, financial condition and family issue.
2 - Hi, Although I can see your main points about stress, I believe your writing would benefit if you...
Writing FeedbackHoaidepchi - Dec 14, 2016 / mualla - Dec 15, 2016
|The length of phone calls in the United Kingdom - WRITING TASK 1
2 - Be careful in providing false descriptions because it wasn't a line graph, yet it is a bar chart. Also,...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 14, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Ielts writing task 1 -The graph reveals the information in regard to the ownership
3 - George, you are suggested to complete the description of information in the overview / introduction part in your essay....
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Nov 30, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Writing test exercise for ielts; the number of trips to and from UK increased every year 1979-1999
3 - Resa, writing an acceptable and recommended paragraphing structure for an IELTS task 1 is not that difficult. It is...
Writing Feedbackresair - Dec 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Ielts writing task 2 - Safety standards are important when building people's homes.
3 - The thing that makes your essay seems odd is because you did not answer the question properly. Reaching band...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|The alteration of an island; new vehicle track and footpath to connect the western and eastern areas
6 - I can see some improvements and that's quite good. Yet, there are still some rooms to enhance the quality...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|The increasing number of the elderly people and its influence on society
2 - Hello Zen, Your writing is well structured, I can tell that you've planned out how to deliver the...
Writing Feedbackzen111 - Jun 18, 2015 / CDuke93 - Dec 13, 2016
|Businesses and their profit - they should protect the environment instead and help others in need
NEW - Hello everyone. I am Kadir and I am currently preparing for TOEFL. I wrote a essay about this topic....
Writing Feedbacktheunnamedfeelin - Dec 13, 2016 / — -
|IS IT ACCEPTABLE FOR CHILDREN TO LEARN FOREIGN LANGUAGE AT PRIMARY SCHOOL? WRITING TASK 2
2 - @NinaJoesuf25 NinaJoesuf25 Needless to say ; ** could you replace this with a different phrase? What I...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 13, 2016 / CDuke93 - Dec 13, 2016
|The importance of communication skills in job relation
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 6, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 13, 2016
|I disagree with the opinion that says always telling the truth in a relationship is important.
Writing Feedbacksushantpaygude - Jun 16, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 13, 2016
|IELTS task 1: How heat is lost and energy wasted since the air circulation in a house
3 - Your paragraphs are too short to be considered an actual summary of the diagram that you were provided with....
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Nov 1, 2015 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|The proportion of water in six gulf countries in 2000, based on three main objectives
2 - Azmi, here's my feedback towards your first and last paragraph. I hope you can follow through. 1st paragraph:...
Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Sep 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 13, 2016
|Various ways of communication summary - all contribute to conveying information equally
3 - Ignacy, you neglected to represent what I consider to be the key point of the essay prompt. You failed...
Writing Feedbackwladca - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|English spoken throughout the world essay
2 - Ivan, your paraphrased prompt is incomplete. You were supposed to mention that there are languages that are slowly losing...
Writing Feedbackuzbeklord - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|The information about the air diffusion in a house and how it reduces heat
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 7, 2016 / debby17 - Dec 12, 2016
|WRITING TASK 1 Process making of bricks for building industry
2 - Sari, where did the term loam, that you keep using throughout most of the essay come from? There is...
Writing Feedbackss158284 - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|The Spammy Pokemon Go Apps Being Pushed to Millions of iPhones
2 - Eka, there are a number of misinformation in your current summary article. Most of them are quite serious because...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 13, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|Traveling is a good way of improving our knowledge
2 - Love the last paragraph that includes your opinion along with a quote. But have you thought of bringing that...
Writing Feedbackbongxugalaxie - Jan 8, 2013 / giuzu98 - Dec 12, 2016
|Corporations should focus on taking people who are innovative and able to work self-contained
3 - I really liked the fact that you first included a background on the popular belief and then talked about...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Nov 30, 2016 / giuzu98 - Dec 11, 2016
|Thesis for essay on Japanese internment versus the Holocaust?
Writing Feedbackcocobean3 - Dec 11, 2016 / Holt - Dec 11, 2016
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