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[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] IS GLOBALIZATION A MAJOR PROBLEM THESE DAYS?

3 - @nicole I think I see your writing before. Instead of using proverb, you can simply write a general...

Writing Feedbacknicole_jp - Jun 20, 2021 / HelenN - Jun 25, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Homework should be given by teachers?

3 - @Bot It's frequently It is thought that homework ..., however, there're they are proponents who ... In my...

Writing FeedbackBot - Jun 22, 2021 / HelenN - Jun 25, 2021
Palmela Wilson is a freshman majoring in English. She wants to look for a part-time job to get work

2 - If this letter was written for a task 1 essay, then it should not be more than 200 words....

Writing Feedbackcorvawnf - Jun 23, 2021 / Holt - Jun 25, 2021
The extinction of animal species and plants is a pressing issue today

3 - the major environmental threats to...

Writing FeedbackNhatminnmsr - Jun 22, 2021 / heyaaami - Jun 25, 2021
The debate on whether enterprises should value appearance, or the work performance of the laborers

4 - Nevertheless, dressing professionally also creates ...-> u use nevertheless but it does not have the main clause...

Writing FeedbackSally_Dao - Jun 23, 2021 / heyaaami - Jun 25, 2021
Task 1: The graph below shows how people buy music from 2011 to 2018

NEW - percentage of total music sales by method The line graph illustrates the proportion of how much three music...

Writing Feedbackheyaaami - Jun 25, 2021 / — -
Ielts task 2 writing: sports should be part of school program??

2 - The keywords "sports" and "academic work" are part of the original prompt. These need to be replaced for better...

Writing Feedbackkatiexd - Jun 24, 2021 / Holt - Jun 25, 2021
IELTS TASK 1: The flowchart illustrates the steps in the process of chocolate production.

2 - This is a strong procedural explanation. The depiction of the cacao making process is such that the vader can...

Writing Feedbackndat28th - Jun 24, 2021 / Holt - Jun 25, 2021
Technologies have developed very fast in the past 100 years. Advantages or disadvantages?

2 - The writer should not find reasons to agree with an opinion that he disagreed within the response sentence of...

Writing Feedbacknxhung24 - Jun 23, 2021 / Holt - Jun 25, 2021
Everyone should stay at school until 18. Do you agree or disagree with this idea ?

2 - When the writer indicates a partial agreement to the idea, the end of the agreement must be indicated. A...

Writing FeedbackThang Phan - Jun 23, 2021 / Holt - Jun 25, 2021
Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel.

2 - The writer is asked to provide his opinion on the given topic with a yes or no answer. Do...

Writing Feedbackvphat2001 - Jun 23, 2021 / Holt - Jun 25, 2021
The unwanted consequences of internet existence. The main problems and solutions.

2 - The prompt restatement could be better represented but is at least understandable in your version. The problem in this...

Writing Feedbackratter - Jun 23, 2021 / Holt - Jun 25, 2021
Some say that traveling and working overseas is the only way for acknowledging foreign language

2 - The prompt restatement is true to the original. Even the personal opinion is well presented. The prompt + personal...

Writing FeedbackJeodnwbwid - Jun 23, 2021 / Holt - Jun 24, 2021
Essay about should creative artists have their freedom for whatever they do?

2 - The prompt restatement iss acceptable. However, the extent Uspouse clarity was affected by the improper sentence structure: ...

Writing FeedbackJena Tran - Jun 22, 2021 / Holt - Jun 24, 2021
Governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views, give your opinion.

2 - The prompt restatement is lacking in opinion presentation. Both public opinions must be interpreted for the presentation prior to...

Writing Feedbackarlenne - Jun 22, 2021 / Holt - Jun 24, 2021
Is it best to accept a bad situation, or try and improve such circumstances?

NEW - Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage...

Writing FeedbackOriole - Jun 24, 2021 / — -
The diagram presents six stages in the life cycle of the honey bee (the diagram is on the internet)

2 - The presentation does not meet the minimum word count of 150 words. This immediately disqualifies the writing from a...

Writing FeedbackHoHoang - Jun 22, 2021 / Holt - Jun 24, 2021
[IELTS Writing task 2] Building houses in existing cities, or to develop new towns in rural areas?

2 - The prompt restatement and response is on target. There is a clear understanding of the topic and the reasoning,...

Writing Feedbackthuytien700 - Jun 22, 2021 / Holt - Jun 24, 2021
Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar

2 - The prompt does not require an emotional response because it is not an extent essay (To what extent...) Use...

Writing Feedbackanachan143 - Jun 22, 2021 / Holt - Jun 24, 2021
IELTS Task 1: The maps below show a coal mine and its redevelopment into a visitor attraction site.

2 - The essay is over-written at 226 words. It cannot be completed properly within 20 minutes. The writer will cut...

Writing FeedbackHelenN - Jun 21, 2021 / Holt - Jun 22, 2021
The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses.

2 - The topic restatement does not use enough alternative word references to be considered an accurate rewrite. It can still...

Writing Feedbackduongbonbon12 - Jun 21, 2021 / Holt - Jun 22, 2021
Films Production, Digital Technology

2 - This is a single opinion essay. The writing requirement is that off a single choice response due to the...

Writing FeedbackVuongHoaiThanh - Jun 21, 2021 / Holt - Jun 22, 2021
Writing task 1: the percentage of male and female teachers in 6 types of educational setting (2010)

2 - In the summary, there is a mention of etypes but without proper listing of the 6 in relation to...

Writing Feedbacknoname268 - Jun 21, 2021 / Holt - Jun 22, 2021
To solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners and invest in public transport

2 - The prompt does not require a true or false response from the writer. Therefore, a statement of validity is...

Writing Feedbackabcdefg123 - Jun 21, 2021 / Holt - Jun 22, 2021
Task 2: Some people think that sports play an important role in the development of society

3 - Hi @Daisy23 There is an argument I think you can use present perfect here, it is not an...

Writing FeedbackDaisy23 - Jun 19, 2021 / HelenN - Jun 21, 2021
IELTS task 2: ADVERTISING AND ADOLESCENTS (both views and opinion)

NEW - persuading children to buy things Some advertisers have increased the amount of money they spend trying to persuade...

Writing FeedbackPaul16 - Jun 21, 2021 / — -
IELTS TASK 2: Individuals have changed their way in interaction

3 - As Holt had mentioned, affect (V) and effect (N) are different and misusing the correct word harms your clarity....

Writing FeedbackDoris1712 - Jun 19, 2021 / Paul16 - Jun 21, 2021
Why is studying at traditional schools better than studying at home by using technology?

2 - The essay kicks off with a deducted TA score due to insufficient word count at 239 / 250 words...

Writing Feedbackmai091206 - Jun 20, 2021 / Holt - Jun 21, 2021
What sorts of food do you like eating most

2 - Try to consolidate your background description in relation to the topic. Prompts like there have to be written insteps....

Writing FeedbackTTFameTT1 - Jun 20, 2021 / Holt - Jun 20, 2021
Global product and economy - CAMBRIDGE IELTS 10 Test 3 Writing Task 2

3 - @Holt Thank you so so much for your reply. Honestly, this is my first essay at this forum so...

Writing FeedbackMinhnek4 - Jun 18, 2021 / Minhnek4 - Jun 20, 2021
Whether taking part in a team sport is preferable is still an argumentative issue

2 - She prompt restatement is selective and incomplete. A proper paraphase covers a representation of both topics presented, inclusive of...

Writing Feedbackkimchi220800 - Jun 19, 2021 / Holt - Jun 20, 2021
Plan a problem and solution essay for the issue that you chose, explaining what should be done about

2 - When the prompt was created, the writer neglected to create an introductory or preliminary paragraph that focused on deforestation....

Writing FeedbackVander - Jun 19, 2021 / Holt - Jun 20, 2021
A claim that people should find an approach to live with global warming instead of preventing it

2 - There is no need to say" However" before presenting the disagreement. It does not fit the sentence structure. Since...

Writing Feedbackmimimeo - Jun 19, 2021 / Holt - Jun 20, 2021
The given diagram illustrates the complex procedures required to produce liquid chocolate

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback...

Writing FeedbackHelenN - Jun 18, 2021 / HelenN - Jun 19, 2021
People believe that the government should make college free. AGREE OR DISAGREE?

2 - There are 2 schools of thought provided for this prompt and yetonly one is reflected in the restatement. The...

Writing FeedbackLina nguyen - Jun 18, 2021 / Holt - Jun 19, 2021
1. Some people think that it is better to work for different organisations during the career

2 - Donot turn the discussion intea controversy. That statement is unnecessary as the writer is altering the original statement presentation....

Writing Feedbackmaichi13 - Jun 18, 2021 / Holt - Jun 19, 2021
One thing that makes me happy this week.

2 - This essay is meant to be a deep reflection of your relationship with your sister. If should cover at...

Writing Feedbackeffiechen22 - Jun 18, 2021 / Holt - Jun 19, 2021
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] WHETHER COMPUTERS ARE THE MOST SIGNIFICANT INNOVATION...

2 - Let's be clear, a reference to the "last century" means the most recent 100 years (20th century). The reference...

Writing Feedbackphcnguyen - Jun 18, 2021 / Holt - Jun 19, 2021
(IELTS) Home schooling vs School education

2 - Proper vocabulary usage is of the utmost importance in these essays. Word references help to bring clarity to the...

Writing FeedbackCrazy Snake - Jun 18, 2021 / Holt - Jun 19, 2021
Researchers and travelers are now more easily able to visit remote areas such as the South Pole

2 - This 209 word essay starts at a scoring disadvantage for not meeting the 250 minimum word count. The percentage...

Writing Feedbackthutrangg - Jun 18, 2021 / Holt - Jun 19, 2021
WRITING TASK 1- the proportion total expenditure in a certain European country between 1960 and 2000

3 - Hi @stella nguyen ... on five sectors increased decreased (?) from 1960 to 2000. ... money for transportation...

Writing Feedbackstella nguyen - Jun 16, 2021 / HelenN - Jun 18, 2021
Allowing children to decide on matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is beneficial or not?

3 - @VictoriaVu Good idea...

Writing FeedbackVictoriaVu - Jun 17, 2021 / Mekonguyen - Jun 18, 2021
Essay about if self-acceptance is the most important trait a teacher can have

2 - A teacher of the English language should have proficient English vocabulary. Lecturers are supposed to have enough English know-hour...

Writing FeedbackQL91 - Jun 17, 2021 / Holt - Jun 18, 2021
"the solution for using technological devices too much to organise a meeting with other peolple"

2 - The first paragraph is confusing. It does not make a logical representation of the base presentation. It appears to...

Writing Feedbackducanh123 - Jun 17, 2021 / Holt - Jun 18, 2021
The large number of people are drawing attention to communicating online

2 - Your prompt restatement is flawed. You opted to merely restate the discussion topics rather than completing your discussion outline...

Writing Feedbackmymyt - Jun 17, 2021 / Holt - Jun 18, 2021
People from some nations often attach more importance to possessing a home than having rented one

2 - The topic restatement is properly done. AIthough it would benefitted from better synonym usage for the word " rented"....

Writing Feedbackhoangtuanhthu - Jun 17, 2021 / Holt - Jun 18, 2021
Different types of activities in the American senior citizens' leisure time from 1980s to 2010s

3 - Thank you for giving me a feedback. It is really helpful for my improvement. Hope to get more feedback...

Writing Feedbackkimcat2207 - Jun 14, 2021 / kimcat2207 - Jun 18, 2021
Some people claim that studying overseas will bring considerable benefits to the country

2 - The presentation is mostly on track and relevant to the prompt. However, issues with grammar in terms of vocabulary,...

Writing Feedbackphamtamm2508 - Jun 17, 2021 / Holt - Jun 17, 2021
TOEFL TASK-2 Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient

2 - The first paragraph needs to represent the original prompt without changing the content. The essence of the original topic...

Writing Feedbackshivam1687 - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - Jun 17, 2021
IELTS WRITING PART 2 - working while studying teenagers

2 - Word usage accuracy is important when writing. Simply stating " working while studying does not carry the same meaning...

Writing Feedbackgiangninh - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - Jun 17, 2021
IELTS TASK 2: Describe causes and effects of extended working hours

2 - Okay. Put away the dictionary and stop looking up representative complicated words that do not help with the clarity...

Writing FeedbackkuroshiroP - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - Jun 17, 2021
Writing paragraphs about life goals

2 - Since this is only a single paragraph, you need not lead into your explanation with "To begin with". Go...

Writing Feedbackmanchint - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - Jun 17, 2021
The causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society

2 - The prompt paraphrase lacks coherence. The amount of words used in reference to the original discussion topic does not...

Writing FeedbackTrag1112 - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - Jun 17, 2021
Writing Task 2 IELTS - conflicts about deciding subjects at university

2 - The validity of the personal opinion you present should be in the 3rd paragraph of the essay. It is...

Writing FeedbackTinhAnhNguyen - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - Jun 17, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 about impact of social media on both individuals and society.

2 - Keep track of your word count. Always present 250 words or accept the penalties for not presenting the minimum...

Writing FeedbackAli20 - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - Jun 17, 2021
The pie charts compare household expenditure spending on five different items in UK and New Zealand

2 - The summary overview is the presentation that gives you the opportunity to run down important information for the leader....

Writing Feedbackhanh_1 - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - Jun 17, 2021
Bullying at schools. How to have a good structure in cause-solution writing type?

2 - There are a few things you have to remember when creating your restatement: - Don't refer to a debate...

Writing FeedbackHolan1712 - Jun 16, 2021 / Holt - Jun 17, 2021
Toefl Independent Writing - "Never, never give up" means to keep trying and working for own goals

3 - @Holt Thanks for the feedback....

Writing Feedbackackit - Jun 14, 2021 / ackit - Jun 16, 2021
The major environmental issue of our time is the extinction of many living creatures on earth

3 - This does not contain a complete thought. You probably mean that there are other pressing environmental...

Writing Feedbacktrangntt255 - Jun 15, 2021 / niesaysi - Jun 16, 2021
Most people try to balance between work and other parts of theirs lives.

2 - Avoid using a cut and paste of the original prompt reference. This is not good for your LR...

Writing Feedbackkhanhthu292002 - Jun 15, 2021 / Holt - Jun 16, 2021

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