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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

3 - The overview is quite good as it shows the outline and what you will present for the whole essay....

Writing FeedbackThenh - Dec 7, 2023 / Haohao0719 - Dec 12, 2023
WRITING TASK 1 (IELTS):Number of Vehicles Bought in Kiwi City

2 - The summary overview was almost complete. You just forgot to reference that the vehicle sales were measured in the...

Writing Feedbackzitiudayaj - Dec 6, 2023 / Holt - Dec 8, 2023
writing task 1-line graph : The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies

2 - Be careful with your singular v. plural word usage. 5 is more than 1 and therefore, should be...

Writing Feedbacknagan123456 - Dec 5, 2023 / Holt - Dec 8, 2023
ielt p2: causes why people like online meeting than meeting directly and solution for it

2 - In the later part of the first paragraph, you should be separating your suggestions for solutions to the situation...

Writing Feedbackductam06 - Dec 5, 2023 / Holt - Dec 8, 2023
IELTS WRITRING TASK 1: The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European

2 - The summary overview requires you to give a short listing of the information provided, which will be discussed...

Writing FeedbackQaan - Dec 2, 2023 / Holt - Dec 8, 2023
writing task 1: The chart shows the information about salt intake in the US in 2000.

2 - I would like to call your attention to this presentation. It is confusing. You are focusing the reader's...

Writing Feedbackyeonyi - Dec 1, 2023 / Holt - Dec 8, 2023
WRITING TASK 2: IN MANY COUNTRIES AROUND THE WORLD, LIFE EXPECTANCY IS INCREASING

3 - The overview does not reply to the request of the topic. It would be better to present the advantages...

Writing Feedbacklinhanhhihi - Dec 1, 2023 / Haohao0719 - Dec 14, 2023
Writing task 1 - The percentage of households with cars

2 - The first sentence of your summary overview is not really going to be considered an original statement. It still...

Writing FeedbackMemeLorD - Nov 30, 2023 / Holt - Dec 8, 2023
The line chart illustrate fish and meat consumption (grams) in HCM city from 1979 to 2004-WRITING 1

2 - There are different meat descriptions available in the chart. You should not be identifying the meats in a...

Writing Feedbackvothanhan27 - Nov 30, 2023 / Holt - Dec 8, 2023
Traveling to work - writing task 1: Pie chart

2 - The summary overview is missing from the actual discussion. That is the first paragraph that kicks off all task...

Writing Feedbackthytyn - Nov 29, 2023 / Holt - Dec 3, 2023
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] The effect of professional sports on children

2 - You should not have began to present your personal opinions about the discussion in the first paragraph. That would...

Writing Feedbackmabel111 - Nov 29, 2023 / Holt - Dec 3, 2023
Ielts: is using technology a bad trend ?

2 - Try to shorten your essay next time to no more than 300 words. That is to ensure that you...

Writing Feedbackductam06 - Nov 29, 2023 / Holt - Dec 3, 2023
HEALTH DISPARITIES AND EQUITY - NEED

NEW - ~Need writing feedback on research paper on health disparities and strategies for health equity. Please list 3 weaknesses within...

Writing Feedbacktasim - Nov 29, 2023 / — -
The graph about the percentage of tourits visiting different countries in 2010

2 - Try to clarify the type of graph next time. There are several graphs used in the task 1 essay...

Writing FeedbackLangfarm - Nov 29, 2023 / Holt - Dec 3, 2023
Causes, effects and solutions in waste and rubbish pollution

4 - Apart from that, I can see that you used advanced vocabulary and the structure is good but as mentioned...

Writing Feedbackthtrang - Nov 29, 2023 / sankook - Dec 5, 2023
Writing task 1 - Process of growwing and making products from pineapples

2 - You only have 20 minutes to write this task 1 essay. It is not advisable that you write over...

Writing Feedbackhoangkelvin - Nov 29, 2023 / Holt - Dec 8, 2023
Write an essay about the negative impacts of social media on teens

2 - Where did you get this information? Cite your source. This is authoritative information that you are providing so...

Writing Feedbackaubreyyy - Nov 28, 2023 / Holt - Nov 28, 2023
Reforming the United States Prison Industry

2 - I would try to connect the essay to recidivism at this point. The Swedish model works on preventing...

Writing Feedbackpjoseph13 - Nov 27, 2023 / Holt - Nov 28, 2023
The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed

2 - The image information is incomplete. You have not provided any data regarding the number of charts, and what specific...

Writing FeedbackCyllyn 13 - Nov 27, 2023 / Holt - Nov 28, 2023
Screen Time Impact on Babies

2 - The research is one sided. It fails to consider the positive aspects of screen time on babies as some...

Writing Feedbackmanareldirais - Nov 26, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six

2 - You cannot use words of uncertainty in the presentation. Since this is a single opinion essay, you are...

Writing Feedbacknntruong0510 - Nov 25, 2023 / Holt - Nov 28, 2023
Writing task 2: The increase in the production on the natural environment

2 - Your prompt restatement is still close enough to the original presentation for this to be considered a plagiarism of...

Writing FeedbackHaohao0719 - Nov 25, 2023 / Holt - Nov 28, 2023
The graph below gives information about the percentage of people living in Australia who were born

2 - You summary overview is not very clear. Are you trying to tell us that the line graph shows information...

Writing Feedbackdieuanh121205 - Nov 25, 2023 / Holt - Nov 28, 2023
Some people think that people who chose a job early and keep doing are more likely to get satisfying

2 - Where are you basing this reference on? The original prompt only indicates a job. The type of job...

Writing Feedbackjamiethyha - Nov 21, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
The graphs below show the employment rate of each gender in four different contries in 2002

2 - I do not need to read the topic or see the image to know that this is not an...

Writing FeedbackNbhuong - Nov 21, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
to low- cost airlines, many people can travel abroad. Is it a positive or negative?

2 - You already indicated that low cost travel is a positive development in your writer's opinion paragraph. It was clearly...

Writing FeedbackThaoThanh - Nov 21, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
Question: Films were produced by big companies in the past, but today people are able to make a film

2 - You have not taken the correct approach to writing this essay. Based on the given writing guide question, you...

Writing FeedbackNguyenhienngoc - Nov 19, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
Increasing reciprocal exchange is positive or endanger cultural identity. Discuss both views.

2 - The essay is actually overwritten at 326 words. You do not have the time to write that many words...

Writing FeedbackAnhwuan - Nov 19, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
IELTS TASK 2 - STUDYING ABROAD

2 - You forgot to mention working abroad as well. It is important not to miss out on reference points...

Writing Feedbacktranggggg - Nov 18, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
Some students prefer to take a year off between school and university, to work or to travel.

2 - You should not be presenting an opinion in this case. The essay writing instructions asks you to deliver an...

Writing Feedbackbilaldev - Nov 18, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
Essay about global warming

2 - The writing is so bad that it is obvious you have not taken any English classes whatsoever. You are...

Writing Feedbackfartlol1 - Nov 16, 2023 / Holt - Nov 19, 2023
The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia in 2018.

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your feedback....

Writing Feedbackngngheo0cot1en - Nov 16, 2023 / ngngheo0cot1en - Nov 27, 2023
The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012.

2 - You have tried to go a good job on presenting the information in an analytical way. However, the way...

Writing FeedbackTran Hans - Nov 15, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
using network in classroom or traditonal class

2 - I was confused by the grammar used in this presentation. I can somehow fill in the blanks and do...

Writing FeedbackLogie Thanh - Nov 15, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
The impact AI has on our day to day lives essay, peer edit my essay <3

2 - Who is the author? Prior to using the citation, kindly inform the reader of the name of the...

Writing Feedbacknathanmak24 - Nov 15, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other count

2 - The summary overview is incomplete. It should represent a more summative presentation of the image over at least 3...

Writing FeedbackAnnaAlysia - Nov 14, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

2 - May Ii ask where you got the reference for the underground network? There is no such indicator in the...

Writing FeedbackKhoiNguyen - Nov 14, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
What are the causes of criminals committing more crimes upon being released from prison and solution

2 - The thesis statement and writer's opinion is well developed in this essay. The topic is clearly restated, along with...

Writing Feedbackductam06 - Nov 13, 2023 / Holt - Nov 27, 2023
talking about cyberbullying the effects and what kids go through

2 - Cyberbullying is the act of bullying someone in cyberspace. It is not the place where the bullying takes...

Writing Feedbackmyra95 - Nov 12, 2023 / Holt - Nov 25, 2023
How Technology affects us

2 - The thesis paragraph has a solid base, but lacks the actual presentation of the discussion topic. That is what...

Writing FeedbackIsabellaaaa - Nov 12, 2023 / Holt - Nov 25, 2023
Write a definition paragraph of about 150 words to address the following questions: What is freedom?

2 - The essay is more focused on why people want freedom as opposed to defining what freedom is. The question...

Writing Feedbackkimyun_05 - Nov 11, 2023 / Holt - Nov 25, 2023
china's one child policy has been carried out successfully

2 - 129 words is an unacceptable number of words for a task 1 presentation. It does not meet the minimum...

Writing Feedbacktuanh24 - Nov 10, 2023 / Holt - Nov 25, 2023
TASK 1 - percentage of people born in and outside of Australia living in cities, town, rural areas

2 - Incorrect sentence structure. You are indicating that only 2 years are to be compared in the image. However,...

Writing Feedbackjackhoang - Nov 10, 2023 / Holt - Nov 25, 2023
Definition paragraph . Define the word ' solidarity ' and give your own perspective

2 - I think you meant to refer to "community" as in the place where the solidarity is taking place?...

Writing FeedbackLOIDAT - Nov 9, 2023 / Holt - Nov 25, 2023
Happiness levels increased in developing nations compared to declining levels in developed one

2 - Your prompt restatement did not include the basis for the happiness of both sectors, which is economic growth (financual...

Writing Feedbackhuyenmy2612 - Nov 5, 2023 / Holt - Nov 21, 2023
IELTS task 2 - the most important environmental problems

2 - Do not focus on a particular country or form of governance. This is a generalized discussion topic so...

Writing Feedbackjjwon - Nov 5, 2023 / Holt - Nov 21, 2023
The chart below depicts the way families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018

2 - The report does not meet the minimum 150 word requirement. There will be a small percentage deducted from the...

Writing Feedbackadwdhkkn - Nov 5, 2023 / Holt - Nov 19, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 1: bar chart about computer ownership

2 - The writer has a relaxed and comfortable writing style. Reading it made me feel as if you just took...

Writing Feedbacknghn_thyyannh - Nov 4, 2023 / Holt - Nov 19, 2023
W Task 2: The necessity of schools in providing knowledge for students

2 - Your opinion is well presented but, lacking in more depth so as to increase your score. You need to...

Writing Feedbackhuonggiang206 - Nov 3, 2023 / Holt - Nov 5, 2023
Cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourist

2 - The essay will get a failing task accuracy score in terms of paraphrasing considerations. That is because you decided...

Writing FeedbackMihnie21 - Nov 3, 2023 / Holt - Nov 5, 2023
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] - Music - opinion essay

2 - While you did write a very flowery restatement, it missed the mark for most counts in relation to the...

Writing Feedbackchau_pham - Nov 2, 2023 / Holt - Nov 5, 2023
Music helps to create an environment without barrier for people to understand more about each other

3 - I notice the use of academic vocabulary in the first 3 paragraphs. However, improvements still need to be made...

Writing Feedbackhannie286 - Nov 2, 2023 / chau_pham - Nov 2, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 2 - topic about crime prediction

3 - thank you so much for checking my essay! i deeply appreciate your effort. I just want to clarify that...

Writing Feedbacknghn_thyyannh - Nov 1, 2023 / nghn_thyyannh - Nov 2, 2023
[IELTS TASK 1 - MAP] - changes in Felix Stone

2 - For starters, you can lower your word count to better suit the 20 minute writing time frame. Learn to...

Writing Feedbackchau_pham - Nov 1, 2023 / Holt - Nov 1, 2023
In many countries obesity and unhealthy eating habits are increasing. What are the reasons for this?

2 - Avoid such exaggerated references in the restatement. Remember that the original topic is based upon logic. Therefore, only...

Writing Feedbackquynhhoa123 - Oct 31, 2023 / Holt - Nov 1, 2023
Esssay about should be encouraged to use computers from an early age(agree or disagree)

2 - The increased word count did not help this essay achieve a passing score. That is because the proper discussion...

Writing Feedbackjohnnguyenav - Oct 30, 2023 / Holt - Oct 31, 2023
The chart provides information about UK immigration, emigration and net migration; IELTS TASK 1

2 - You must always identify the type of image being presented for clarity purposes. Simply saying a chart was presented...

Writing FeedbackSakuradesu - Oct 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 30, 2023
ielts writing task 2: Fossil fuels (e.g. coal and natural gas) are the main source of energy

3 - @Holt thank you sm for your feedback, that's so true, i just want it to be convincing as much...

Writing Feedbackpeanutandanchovy - Oct 29, 2023 / peanutandanchovy - Oct 31, 2023
IELTS Writing task 1 - pie charts present the expenditure of senior students in 3 high schools

2 - Kindly identify the type and number of images next time you write a task 1 essay. It will help...

Writing Feedbackvaananh - Oct 28, 2023 / Holt - Oct 30, 2023
Writing task 1: Compare maps - changes in a Science Park since 2008

3 - You should use more grammar structures as I notice most sentences are written in passive voice, which could be...

Writing FeedbackCamellia0611 - Oct 27, 2023 / chau_pham - Nov 2, 2023

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