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|Improving people's health by cleaning the environment. TOEFL writing
4 - In my opinion is more common there are some factories producing polluted water ..., if people drink contaminated water,...
Writing Feedbackzlb20187515 - Apr 17, 2019 / traviekingston96 - Apr 20, 2019
|Why sports are important to people? TOIEC Writing
2 - Divide your composition into separate paragraphs to follow the general rules and conventions of writing. I recommend that...
Writing Feedbackjoanne1203 - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|Respecting teachers today vs in the past
2 - I like your composition. The simplicity of your language wonderfully plays out; it enables the readers to have a...
Writing Feedbackadl - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF EATING OUT
3 - Hi Margaret, I found that you missed some article, including "a", "an" and "the". offer a great view,...
Writing FeedbackMargaret 2019 - Apr 17, 2019 / joanne1203 - Apr 18, 2019
|In many countries day by day rubbish (garbage) is increasing. Why is it happening? What can be done?
3 - My advices- 1. Your introduction part is little deviated from the topic...your opening sentence is focusing on overpopulation. It...
Writing Feedbackmaipthao12345 - Apr 17, 2019 / Jipsa Jadwani - Apr 19, 2019
|IELTS 1 - The given maps illustrates how campus of Woodwards University changed from 1985 to today
2 - I would omit lines that you do not necessarily need. Let's take your first sentence as an example. In...
Writing FeedbackBatu - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|Task 2 IELTS. Topic: LAW. Should defendant's criminal record be available in legal cases?
2 - I would suggest changing the formatting of your sentences at times. This can enhance the flow and the structure...
Writing Feedbackicebear24 - Apr 17, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Modern communication vs Writing letters
2 - I appreciate the structure and content of your essay. I do have a couple of recommendations that can better...
Writing FeedbackThuan Tran - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 17, 2019
|IELTS - many youngsters choose to shop as one of their favorite leisure activities
2 - You should create a more balanced argumentation format for your essay's structure. Notice how roughly two-thirds of your essay...
Writing Feedbackwriting7 - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 16, 2019
|I was ghosted by a girl and I just let it go
2 - Are you writing this for a creative writing class? You should always ensure that your language is articulated smoothly....
Writing Feedbackbenny812 - Apr 16, 2019 / Maria - Apr 16, 2019
|ielts: Fair earnings - sports professionals can earn a lot of money
3 - I think it would have been better if you had explained clearly for the topic sentence. Your second point...
Writing Feedbackcorda - Apr 15, 2019 / trvaanh - Apr 24, 2019
|Timing for choosing a job
Writing Feedbackyoona_crocodiles - Apr 15, 2019 / yoona_crocodiles - Apr 16, 2019
|Topic: Young people read few books. What are the reasons for this problem and what can be done it?
2 - I would firstly recommend that you watch out for your usage of the definitive article the. There were instances...
Writing Feedbackdhue1998 - Apr 15, 2019 / Maria - Apr 15, 2019
|IELTS 2: Whether children should be taught to distinguish right and wrong.
3 - Hey! I pretty much like your essay and the way you organize the ideas is good. However, if this...
Writing Feedbacktammy23 - Apr 15, 2019 / icebear24 - Apr 17, 2019
|The dilemma of whether to earn a living or continute studies
3 - @kwang_ha You should be more clear with your language. From the get-go, it was quite unclear which position you...
Writing Feedbackkwang_ha - Apr 14, 2019 / Maria - Apr 15, 2019
|Employment of youngsters would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole
2 - Are you working with a maximum word count? This can significantly change my perception of the entirety of the...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Apr 13, 2019 / Maria - Apr 13, 2019
|Whether it's necessary that children should learn to manage their money at young age
3 - @yuanyinan Are you working with a specific word count? If you are, then I suggest that you try to...
Writing Feedbackyuanyinan - Apr 13, 2019 / Maria - Apr 15, 2019
|IELTS 2 - Working and traveling abroad as the main factors to learn an different language?
NEW - Importance of Language Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order...
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|Advertisements are misleading for children or they provide knowledge?
NEW - adverts impact on children Some people think that advertisements are misleading for children while others claim that they...
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|IELTS is sharing information always beneficial?
2 - Hello leeyunwei I think this is a great essay as it hardly contains any grammatical errors and your ideas...
Writing Feedbackleeyunwei - Apr 12, 2019 / coke - Apr 12, 2019
|Actors, story, and music - three factors that build up a good movie
2 - Your construction of sentences is decent. I would only say that in terms of structure, you could opt for...
Writing Feedbacklailai5203 - Apr 12, 2019 / Maria - Apr 12, 2019
|IELTS task 2: Whether women are more good at parenting than men is under hot debate.
Writing Feedbackhappypassexam - Apr 11, 2019 / TJLuschen - Apr 11, 2019
|IELTS: Plan-cancelling letter to a friend
2 - I would suggest that you revise your opening line.While it is nice that you are being straightforward, I would...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Apr 11, 2019 / Maria - Apr 11, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Should computer skills be included in education?
3 - I think you should use more linking words to start your paragraphs for examples Firstly, Secondly, In conclusion to...
Writing Feedbackminhtung97 - Apr 10, 2019 / trvaanh - Apr 13, 2019
|Essay: Should parents reward their children with money for each good grade from school?
4 - Dear Coke: Thank you for your feedback. It really helps me a lot. Sometimes when I come across...
Writing FeedbackFuntomas Chen - Apr 10, 2019 / Funtomas Chen - Apr 11, 2019
|IELTS: Is direct actions or donation of money more preferable to help someone?
3 - Thank you @Constance for your detailed correction. I really appreciate your help in each paragraph....
Writing Feedbackcoke - Apr 9, 2019 / coke - Apr 10, 2019
|Issue Essay for GRE AWA section - All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ....
Writing Feedbackpg1811 - Apr 9, 2019 / pg1811 - Apr 12, 2019
|Social mindset - some people try to look younger than they really are
Writing Feedbackprisid - Apr 9, 2019 / prisid - Apr 9, 2019
|Writing Part 2 - Citizens know little about their neighbors. Reasons and solutions.
3 - @Alicia2019 I think that your essay is impressive on its own. However, I do have a couple of suggestions...
Writing FeedbackAlicia2019 - Apr 8, 2019 / Maria - Apr 8, 2019
|Unethical and immoral advertising in our daily lives
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019
|Youth crime, reason and solution
3 - regarding to point #3, I don't understand the usage of alongside. We'll be happy to help again if this...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019
|Significant developments in the field of information technology and its effects for the future
2 - I would recommend that you watch out for your modifications in the verbs.There were instances sprinkled throughout your essay...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019 / Maria - Apr 8, 2019
|IELTS - aids by developed countries to third-word countries
3 - thanks a lot...
Writing Feedbackahmedaly11 - Apr 7, 2019 / ahmedaly11 - Apr 8, 2019
|Writing Part 2. What factors may have caused that highly qualified graduates are without job?
4 - I think it's better to illustrate your article by first stating reasons, and give some suggestions corresponding to these...
Writing FeedbackSyIlhamzultami - Apr 7, 2019 / sgyyan38 - Apr 8, 2019
|IELTS - Prolonged incarceration or... Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Writing Feedbacksgyyan38 - Apr 7, 2019 / sgyyan38 - Apr 8, 2019
|IELTS - Opinion - Is our planet in peril?
3 - Depending on the application of this article, simple and clear introduction is usually welcomed in examination. You may consider...
Writing Feedbackmailnaycuachi - Apr 7, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 8, 2019
|Should we use a bicycle as our main form of transport?
Writing Feedbackhendrac15 - Apr 7, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 7, 2019
|Ielts 1 - statistical information on the amount of flora and fauna extinction in tropical forests
2 - I would switch your first two sentences. In the process of doing so, you could briefly expound and touch...
Writing Feedbackicebear24 - Apr 6, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
|IELTS 2: In some regions, a great number of young adults are elected for key roles in the government
4 - @andrewfoy273 Hi there. I have a few words to say on this Paragraph 1 these two viewpoin this two...
Writing Feedbackandrewfoy273 - Apr 6, 2019 / mailnaycuachi - Apr 7, 2019
|Options on transportation improvement
3 - @tcl1120 Great start for your essay!I do still have a couple of key recommendations to better your structure and...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
|Childcare preparation to all new parents
3 - Thank you for your valuable comments. May I adopt "In fact" or "Nevertheless" replacing the word of "Perhaps"...
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019
|Sport stars are paid too much for what they do. Discuss your opinion [IELTS]
3 - good article with range of lexicon. I would recommend you to consolidate the point 1 and 2 to...
Writing Feedbacknguyenholinhchi - Apr 6, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019
|Essay (Problem-Solution-Evaluation Essay) about Drones
2 - I would suggest simplifying your language to make your sentences more precise and comprehensive. It would be appreciated by...
Writing Feedbackdynastylee0929 - Apr 6, 2019 / Maria - Apr 6, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2: Bettering public health by the number of sport facilities or other measures
Writing FeedbackHarrypham0109 - Apr 6, 2019 / icebear24 - Apr 10, 2019
|In some countries there are more young adults than older people - advantages?
Writing Feedbacktcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 6, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: reasons and positive/negative development for shopping malls designed for the young?
Writing Feedbackgoodorfood - Apr 5, 2019 / nguyenholinhchi - Apr 7, 2019
|Ielts part 1_Table: compares the data about the underground systems of railway in six cities
2 - My first recommendation is for you to condense your writing. This is especially useful for ESL learners because it...
Writing FeedbackMonicamita - Apr 4, 2019 / Maria - Apr 4, 2019
|Nowadays people can buy cheaper products. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?
4 - ... necessities such as clothes,food. ==> clothes and food Thus people are ... this word cannot use as the...
Writing Feedbackdrnikonian - Apr 4, 2019 / dynastylee0929 - Apr 6, 2019
|Worty Cost? - New railway lines for high speed trains or improving existing public transport
Writing FeedbackOceanandsun - Apr 4, 2019 / Oceanandsun - Apr 7, 2019
|Security Concerns, American People, and National Terrorism
Writing Feedbackcja365 - Apr 4, 2019 / Day999 - Apr 4, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2: agree or disagree: the national or international literature and history
3 - In paragraph two write "to teach local literature." Remove the comma after invaders. Remove "From that" and write This...
Writing Feedbackhappiness89 - Apr 3, 2019 / Constance - Apr 3, 2019
|Writing task 1 : fast food consumption by income groups
3 - i'm so sorry... i prepared but i didn't understand why i forget attaching to this essay thanks for your...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Apr 3, 2019 / Hammy - Apr 3, 2019
|Learning Motivation - IELTS Writing Task 2: Discursive Essay
2 - I would watch out for your construction of paragraphs. You have a tendency to leave behind thoughts, meaning that...
Writing Feedbackvietduccan - Apr 3, 2019 / Maria - Apr 3, 2019
|Radiologist Informative Essay for English I
2 - In paragraph one last sentence ...and the types of jobs that are available. In paragraph two, paraphrase the...
Writing Feedbacktnoelle110 - Apr 1, 2019 / Constance - Apr 2, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2 - Free or not? Charged information makes a more sustainable development in a long term.
3 - This is a discusive essay, therefore, I think you should include some phrases like "some people believe that, it...
Writing Feedbackbobodoris - Apr 1, 2019 / vietduccan - Apr 3, 2019
|Is it feasible for a country provide university places for a high proportion of people?
2 - I would suggest incorporating more concrete data into your essay.While the essay has a general flow and direction, it...
Writing Feedbackkatkat - Apr 1, 2019 / Maria - Apr 1, 2019
|IELTS2 In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.
5 - Hi, there are some problems related to your essay. Firstly, I'd like to talk about the essay's structure. Although...
Writing FeedbackFrancescaD - Apr 1, 2019 / vietduccan - Apr 3, 2019
|Public libraries are no longer important / replaced by gadgets
4 - There are some good points in both sides, I would recommend to link those point together in order to...
Writing Feedbacksurbhisid96 - Apr 1, 2019 / tcl1120 - Apr 5, 2019
|Writing task 2 - factors impact on the editors' decision what to broadcast
3 - actually, i think you have misconception with my tense i used in the essay. i only use the present...
Writing FeedbackHammy - Mar 31, 2019 / Hammy - Apr 2, 2019
|Cooking doesn't take much time any longer - Has this improved the way people live?
4 - your ideal make me have some confusion firstly, i think it's a long and rambling essay, just because the...
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