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|Social networks (Facebook) are harmful: agree vs disagree.
3 - In conclusion, i once again reaffirmi think better use other sentences. my position that the social networks that are...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Oct 21, 2014 / YULIS - Oct 21, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Challenges and Strategies of People who Move to New Cities or New Country
4 - Avoid writing in first person such as "we", use words like "people" instead. Do not use abbreviations....
Writing Feedbackmaritsanur - Oct 21, 2014 / zjxhz - Oct 21, 2014
|To make our children happy, we must not only have a job but also spend enough time with them - TOEFL
Writing Feedbackodon - Oct 17, 2014 / odon - Oct 21, 2014
|IELTS - young people's challenges in major cities
Writing Feedbackcy20070324 - Sep 20, 2014 / dev311 - Oct 21, 2014
|School subjects will influence in student's future - Physical Education - IELTS TASK 2
2 - You need to include some scientific facts to support your arguments. By doing so, readers won't categorize this as...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Oct 20, 2014 / eddies - Oct 20, 2014
|Public should care together with government and all participants to solve problems of our planet
2 - Climate change has been hot issue discussion in the worldToday's issue is climate change . Government and members of...
Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Oct 20, 2014 / eddies - Oct 20, 2014
|Zebra mussel - integrated writing: zebra mussel - TOEFL
2 - I would rewrite the first paragraph to look like this: As can be seen in the reading passage,It...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Oct 20, 2014 / astew5 - Oct 20, 2014
|Select a cultural phenomenon - do you see any danger in our society's dependence?
3 - I like your straightforward writing style. Now I want to suggest a way to make your essays leave...
Writing Feedbacklink2 - Oct 20, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Oct 20, 2014
|Relying on mobile phones may completely alienate us from the society and make us some trouble
2 - Saba, while you present good discussion points for your essay, there are parts that need to be adjusted for...
Writing Feedbackshavaktm - Oct 20, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 20, 2014
|HISTORIC BUILDINGS - symbol of the cities and piece of our own history
2 - Lastly, many people, who were very important in the history, lived in this historical places,destroying this kind of places...
Writing Feedbackbetit_betiti - Oct 20, 2014 / bteng011284 - Oct 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Medical Treatment; Health is above wealth for inhabitants in this world
4 - Health education is the solid common aspect in a whole of society - i think your topic sentence...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Oct 20, 2014 / bteng011284 - Oct 20, 2014
|Today we live in the world of competition and worries. IELTS Writing Academic
3 - We hear the news of inflation, people complaining about it - this seems to be incomplete, - Most people...
Writing Feedbackbaj_roman - Oct 20, 2014 / bteng011284 - Oct 20, 2014
|Students usually obtain lots of assignments from the professor. It can waste a large amount of time.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 20, 2014 / enzomentos - Oct 20, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY: Many people are afraid to leave their homes because of the fear of crime.
5 - Your conclusion looks like an introduction. In fact, never write from my point of view in conclusion....
Writing Feedbackgingerfly - Oct 15, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 20, 2014
|IELTS : what is the impact of technology on the frequency of face-to-face communication?
4 - Overall, it is a good essay. However, I do not consider 5 paragraphs essay is perfect. Furthermore, it is...
Writing FeedbackHarin - Oct 11, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 20, 2014
|Firstly, on a safety level, traveling with a guide is most important
Writing Feedbackodon - Oct 19, 2014 / odon - Oct 19, 2014
|I decided to join a club; there was only one sport that interested me - soccer; narrative essay
3 - Thank you very much, I'll consider your advice. I'm foreign and that is the reason I have such a...
Writing Feedbackalans5010 - Oct 19, 2014 / alans5010 - Oct 19, 2014
|Once time, I came to countryside. It was terrible! Living in the crowded cities is better.
3 - thanks odon...
Writing Feedbacktekikurin - Oct 18, 2014 / tekikurin - Oct 19, 2014
|The Feeling Of My Father - The first one optimism was chosen
Writing Feedbackcaroline123 - Oct 18, 2014 / caroline123 - Oct 19, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : The surveillance of closed-circuit television
5 - You need to present scientific facts so as to support those paragraphs. By doing so, readers won't cogitate about...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Oct 17, 2014 / eddies - Oct 19, 2014
|A young inventor called Kelvin Doe
Writing FeedbackSatar - Oct 18, 2014 / Satar - Oct 18, 2014
|The problems that Facebook can cause for us.
6 - Do not forget about layout. Moreover, attempt to rephrase your reasons in conclusion. It is better....
Writing FeedbackVera Canderine - Oct 14, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 18, 2014
|"in the way to success, there is no feet of lazy person" luck/hard work=Success
3 - Read this out load slowly to yourself. a couple of small words could be added "the". Succeed instead of...
Writing Feedbackmeokhoang94 - Oct 2, 2014 / ksuydam54 - Oct 18, 2014
|Argumentative Essay on "Jeremy" by Pearl Jam
2 - Rebecca, what you have written is more of an opinion essay than an argumentative essay. That is because the...
Writing Feedbackbech - Oct 15, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 18, 2014
|Factory and its aftermaths
8 - Vns, when it comes to verifying the content of your essay, I cannot assure you that the TOEFL examiner...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 17, 2014
|International travel agencies are going to reduce their fees for people. Discuss advantages and dis.
4 - Do not utilize,, in my opinion,, in conclusion. In fact, use it in introduction instead. Moreover, try to work...
Writing Feedbackanthonynguyen - Oct 15, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 17, 2014
|Pride. These days, antiques became the most popular thing in Cambodia
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 17, 2014 / odon - Oct 17, 2014
|How to control media so that they give the right opinions instead being inclined to some ideology?
NEW - ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Present a written argument or case to an educated reader...
Writing Feedbackbaj_roman - Oct 17, 2014 / — -
|IELTS: There are two potential places for the supermarket - Map question
Writing Feedbackgalileoaskan - Oct 16, 2014 / tiaDS - Oct 17, 2014
|Online learning is becoming a convenient way in which many people are obtaining their degrees.
Writing Feedbacksangnhoxq2 - Oct 15, 2014 / sangnhoxq2 - Oct 16, 2014
|Thoughts on my essay about private companies spending more money on research compared to governments
2 - Here, at the beginning, I wonder what purpose you have for using the word 'dynamic': In the present dynamic...
Writing Feedbackjeewhat - Oct 16, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Oct 16, 2014
|IELTS: IMPROVED MEDICAL CARE > LIFE EXPECTANCY - advantages vs disadvantages.
2 - Is there a word limit? If not, I would suggest elaborating on your main points. Maybe bring up some...
Writing Feedbackkttrung - Oct 16, 2014 / IHaile - Oct 16, 2014
|Life is a complex thing. Every single second is our lesson as well as experience.
2 - Vns, I would like to suggest that you draw the example of this essay from your personal experience in...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 16, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 16, 2014
|TOEFL: It is essential to control how much time you spent watching TV or movies
Writing FeedbackCarolst - Oct 15, 2014 / Carolst - Oct 15, 2014
|What impact on children has the lack of social and emotional learning from parents and teachers?
Writing FeedbackPqowieuryt - Oct 15, 2014 / Pqowieuryt - Oct 15, 2014
|Discuss and critique how the revised Ofsted inspection framework have impacted safeguarding EYFS
Writing Feedbackscentfromabove - Oct 11, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Oct 15, 2014
|Lying has disturbed millions of relationships and transformed the previous friends to enemies
5 - About restating the the question I tried to do this by this sentence These historical experiences convince numerous...
Writing Feedbacksallas - Oct 12, 2014 / sallas - Oct 15, 2014
|Summary About Palestine
2 - The war started when 3 Israeli teenagers were kidnapped and killed in June, and in July Israel kidnapped 3...
Writing Feedbackreal_abdullah - Oct 14, 2014 / AlinaSkripets - Oct 15, 2014
|War is a thrilling escape from the laziness of peace - essay
Writing FeedbackOroro - Oct 15, 2014 / Ororo - Oct 15, 2014
|Games are pivotal for adults, they broaden their mind and can reduce stresses
2 - Whenever it comes to games, the majority of people will consider itthem to be fit only for children. However,...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 14, 2014 / AlinaSkripets - Oct 15, 2014
|IELTS: The graph illustrates how goods were transported in the UK
2 - It is obvious thatobviously road transportation washas been the this numberhad increased dramatically to 97 million ona par in...
Writing FeedbackKaty Curie - Oct 14, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 14, 2014
|Written assignment, a midterm sales letter for scientific writing course
4 - that climate change is occurring, ; however, there are those scientists who Which begs the question,: why worry about...
Writing Feedbackparth5693 - Oct 12, 2014 / sa1na - Oct 14, 2014
|Once a person have vast ambitions, it is available to reach the goal which they are struggling for
3 - Firstly, i consider you have to dig deeper before creating new examples. Secondly, your last sentence of your introduction...
Writing Feedbackkatieying1225 - Oct 11, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 14, 2014
|IELTS : Children are engaged in paid job. Discuss both views and give your opinion
3 - Basically you follow the right order, but some points should be rearranged. I'm also about to beat IELTS next...
Writing FeedbackJennNguyen - Oct 14, 2014 / Katy Curie - Oct 14, 2014
|IELTS: Four countries comparison - Japan spending for food was highest with approximately 23%
3 - Thank Katy Curie for your detailed comment, I red carefully I saw many nice word. I'll notice your...
Writing Feedbacknguyenhien0907 - Oct 13, 2014 / nguyenhien0907 - Oct 13, 2014
|Charts: students who study for their career / amount of support from the employer
Writing Feedbackhelpmeplz - Oct 12, 2014 / nguyenhien0907 - Oct 13, 2014
|The reading and lecture are discuss the topic of professor who appears on television; contrast essay
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 12, 2014 / hamedmas - Oct 13, 2014
|University must wisely allot money on sport activities and libraries because those all are essential
6 - The TOEFL tests many avenues of your English skills, one of these avenues is your ability to analyze...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 13, 2014
|Benefit of education is to create someone smart, skillful, religious, lofty moral and strong in life
3 - Thanks for your advice Prompt is closet in meaning to Outline?I have made an outline ;however, I don't know...
Writing FeedbackTuanphamthanh - Oct 12, 2014 / Tuanphamthanh - Oct 12, 2014
|[IELTS Task 2] Newly-invented technology VS the role of teacher at schools.
3 - Tia, you have created a good essay that shows tremendous improvement over your past work. While the grammar remains...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2014
|SAT - countless historical evidences show that challenging the authority is necessary at some times.
3 - Thanks for commenting! I do recognize that current events are better to use in essays because they show that...
Writing FeedbackBlueblood - Oct 10, 2014 / Blueblood - Oct 12, 2014
|IELTS; learning of job skills should be the most important function of Universities
Writing Feedbackeissaaskari - Oct 12, 2014 / eissaaskari - Oct 12, 2014
|children's involvement in crime- ielts essay
7 - Dude, it is not an opinion or solution essay to give to do like that!!!! in the agree/disagree opinion,...
Writing Feedbackhandsome78boy - Oct 9, 2014 / handsome78boy - Oct 12, 2014
|TOEFL: The food we eat today may put a damper on our health rather than making us live healthier
7 - Yue, your essay actually answers the prompt or question being posed in the statement. It is actually a very...
Writing FeedbackYUEyue - Oct 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2014
|There are some common factors we all share to gain happiness; each have own definition of happy life
2 - Ni ngo, you need to develop this essay further. It presents good arguments but lacks paragraph development through the...
Writing Feedbackningo - Oct 12, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2014
|My new neighbor is a restaurant
4 - Gbekil, you need to address 2 stands in this particular essay aside from your own in order to effectively...
Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 12, 2014
|Government should persuade workers to go to offices by buses, and build more highways in cities
Writing FeedbackKaty Curie - Oct 11, 2014 / Katy Curie - Oct 11, 2014
|Zoos have a strong advantage for both, the endangered species as well as for the society
Writing FeedbackSaba ahmed - Oct 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 11, 2014
|Computers are more accessible and cheaper, more adults work at home and students study at home
2 - you wrote: Some intelligent students might even compete with each other to get the first place in school which...
Writing Feedbackilufatsy16 - Oct 11, 2014 / lephuc - Oct 11, 2014
|IELTS: Regular books will be still appreciated through some traditional readers
9 - You have so much spelling errors: anywere, ussage, continious, belive, ussual. In the test, this will lower your score...
Writing Feedbacknssuraj - Oct 9, 2014 / lephuc - Oct 11, 2014
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