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|Australian boys and girls of age 5-14 leisure activities
4 - -gauravwalia1988 Thank you for the feedback. Mostly i still used simple words and sentences in my writing, will try...
Writing Feedbacktiawulansari - Mar 15, 2015 / tiawulansari - Mar 15, 2015
|Whether to voice our opinions or not? Listening to your heart is of vital importance.
Writing FeedbackDoggy - Mar 12, 2015 / Doggy - Mar 15, 2015
|Opening scenes of God Father 1 & 2 ; NCEA Level 3 English Film Study Essay
3 - I made a lot of punctuation changes, mostly breaking up, lengthy sentences, and clarifying them, with new word choices...
Writing FeedbackNoble - Sep 4, 2013 / EF_Carol - Mar 15, 2015
|Firstly, when the rain falls, the dam is full for a period of time. How the rainwater is reused.
5 - Overall, this is good. I just have a few improvements in grammatical points of view This sentence...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Mar 7, 2015 / eddies - Mar 14, 2015
|My Thrilling Birth Day Surprise in Royal Boutique - simple narrative essay
2 - My Thrilling Birth Day Birthday Surprise My unforgettable experience happened in my birth day surprise several months ago...
Writing FeedbackKomank Sukarma - Mar 13, 2015 / gauravwalia1988 - Mar 14, 2015
|The number of population in the U.S. of Oregon - gradual rise in three different counties
3 - Adhisti: a leading countie be careful with your spelling, it should be "continue" Thank you for your...
Writing FeedbackAdhisti - Mar 14, 2015 / Adhisti - Mar 14, 2015
|The process of pencil making from graphite and wood
3 - The first paragraph makes a brief statement about the information contained the diagram, plus the overview. Also, the following...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Mar 13, 2015 / eddies - Mar 14, 2015
|'my grandfather has diabetes' Young people enjoy more than older people?
Writing FeedbackVinusha - May 7, 2013 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 13, 2015
|The carbon cycle in our life - from fossil fuels to photosynthesis
4 - The diagram illustrates the way in which the how carbon is recycled in the daily life. It can be...
Writing FeedbackZihni92 - Mar 13, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 13, 2015
|The process of the greenhouse effect in the earth' surface - too much gases accumulated
3 - The diagram illustrates the process of the greenhouse ... I like the way in which you presented this...
Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Mar 13, 2015 / eddies - Mar 13, 2015
|In developed countries like America, France and Germany nearly everyone seems to own a car.
Writing FeedbackCE317 - Mar 11, 2015 / CE317 - Mar 13, 2015
|Critique practice GRE "Analyze an Argument"(head of household)
Writing FeedbackMBA_bound - Oct 21, 2012 / lynzee22 - Mar 12, 2015
|Children of helicopter parents are more likely to feel depressed and less satisfied with their lives
Writing FeedbackESSAYGENIUS - Mar 12, 2015 / ESSAYGENIUS - Mar 12, 2015
|Forcing visitors to behave like host country would not bring anything new - no good changes for host
Writing Feedbackmaryla - Mar 10, 2015 / Freelanson - Mar 11, 2015
|Even though the internet is not completely flawless, in general his impact is positive for us
Writing Feedbackjakelly - Mar 10, 2015 / MisterWandering - Mar 10, 2015
|House of tramps, the owner unseen.
2 - As you didn't ask for particulars I will comment generally. This is a very moving short story, with very...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Mar 10, 2015 / EF_Carol - Mar 10, 2015
|//IELTS-1// the table and charts below - destination and employment of UK graduates
4 - Hallo autumn_waltz, you're welcome... Ohh I see, sorry I've just realized that you have put your overview there....
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Mar 9, 2015 / shintacandrade - Mar 10, 2015
|Trying to rephrase a paragraph with unusual grammar to get intended message across
Writing Feedbacksabooakhter - Mar 9, 2015 / sabooakhter - Mar 9, 2015
|There have been growing concerns from many schools about the concentrate of students in class.
Writing FeedbackMisstuyet94 - Mar 6, 2015 / Misstuyet94 - Mar 9, 2015
|'I could bare feel the scalding handprint on my cheek' - Descriptive essay - A rash action
2 - I don't think you can use just one sentence to describe the emotional breakdown: With a stiffened breath, I...
Writing FeedbackYierei - Mar 8, 2015 / EF_Carol - Mar 8, 2015
|House is a good place to protect you, to relax yourself as well as give you more freedom.
2 - Essay: Some people would like to buy a business if they had enough money. The house will protect...
Writing Feedbackgara94 - Mar 8, 2015 / EF_Carol - Mar 8, 2015
|Riversdale University's Map in 1973 and in 2010 - IELTS Writing Task 1
2 - Hi,Mumtazdinar!Actually a wonderful essay for me.I,myself cannot find ANY mistakes. but if i write this compostion,i will mention the...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Mar 7, 2015 / RorA_IDC - Mar 8, 2015
|Preventing crime is the viable benefit of using body scanner and CCTV - IELTS
Writing Feedbackakhfan - Mar 7, 2015 / akhfan - Mar 8, 2015
|cultural identity lost because the emerge of internet. IELTS
NEW - Topic; A great many countries around the wolrd are gradually losing their cultural identity because of prevalence of the...
Writing FeedbackRorA_IDC - Mar 8, 2015 / — -
|Changes in the proportion of online shopping to the film/music retail sector in New Zealand
NEW - The pie charts compare the percentage of online sales on four different retail sectors in New Zealand between 2003...
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Mar 7, 2015 / — -
|I intend to argue that the general impacts of international tourism have in fact been negative
2 - Hi huonghoavc94vn, These are several suggestions for your writing: Good Luck and Happy Writing...
Writing Feedbackhuonghoavc94vn - Mar 4, 2015 / mumtazdinar - Mar 7, 2015
|The cool night breeze whistled softly, blowing lightly through my hair
5 - Hello maddy1579, I'm having a little trouble following what's happening here. From what I can understand, the narrator is...
Writing Feedbackmaddy1579 - Mar 3, 2015 / dquinlan11 - Mar 7, 2015
|Movement of population to cities becomes more popular in many countries for several reasons. IELTS
3 - Hi! Great start! Here is an outline that may help you: Introduction- Introduce the question and your thoughts...
Writing FeedbackGaiavu - Mar 6, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 6, 2015
|In general, Social Sciences, Arts leads highly of the main fields of study than the other subjects.
4 - It takes some time to give some feedback, as this writing has no picture included. I suggest attaching...
Writing FeedbackKifti H Islami - Mar 6, 2015 / eddies - Mar 6, 2015
|Cultures .. one view of their dynamics; Pilgrims of Eastern origin
2 - Hello, You bring up interesting points in this essay. However, the organization is a bit confusing. First, you main...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Mar 6, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 6, 2015
|"Engineering is an application of science to the purpose of life" said by Count Rumford
3 - I'm glad to hear that, thank you for correcting my essay and i'll rewrite it with your suggestions....
Writing Feedbackanhminh3105 - Mar 5, 2015 / anhminh3105 - Mar 5, 2015
|It is often alleged that many teenagers want to reach their higher education after finishing school.
4 - yes I know but I referred to the sentence preceded. >>There has been increasing interest in teenagers should spend...
Writing Feedbackdavechau - Mar 4, 2015 / anhminh3105 - Mar 5, 2015
|On the whole, people need to be aware of the value of food-consumed.
2 - Hello! my edits and suggestion are below: Food can be produced cheaper if we use improved fertilizers and...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 4, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 5, 2015
|Children are tomorrow asset for parent and nation. IELTS essay
2 - Hello, my edits and suggestions are below: Children are tomorrow(s) asset for parent and nation. For this reason,...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 4, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 5, 2015
|I do not agree to follow the same curriculum through all that period of time; GRE essay
7 - Thank you for your comments Anfalia, I will definitely make use of all comments to better my essay....
Writing FeedbackBarrera77 - Mar 1, 2015 / Barrera77 - Mar 5, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 1, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 5, 2015
|Knowledge from teachers, not from internet or TV? IELTS essay - Learning Resources
3 - I think you conclusion paragraph could use some revision. From your last sentence, it looks like the goal of...
Writing Feedbackreplikatika - Feb 23, 2015 / dquinlan11 - Mar 4, 2015
|Trash bins at every nook and corner, more public toilets and regularly cleaned garbage piles
2 - Hello! My edits and suggestions are below, I come from Chennai, India. It ( Chennai) is one of...
Writing Feedbackvidhyamouli - Mar 4, 2015 / EF_Jasmine - Mar 4, 2015
|Bad news in the media? Just to make money and to gain popularity.
3 - Something that I noticed right away is that you will want to use clearly organized paragraphs. I will help...
Writing FeedbackBALAJISK - Mar 4, 2015 / Lbernal11 - Mar 4, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Online Sales for retail sectors in New Zealand
2 - Your summary is very good. Well written and easy to understand. However, I have a few suggestions. I...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Mar 4, 2015 / audley - Mar 4, 2015
|World's population has peaked at a geometric rate in this day and age. IELTS WRITING TASK II
4 - You can mention some statistical data like- India population is going to increase by 40% by 2050 and the...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Feb 21, 2015 / vidhyamouli - Mar 4, 2015
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Security Cameras and Cellphone Tracking
2 - Hi! Technological experts have paid morea lot of attention to the development of monitoring tolls such as cameras...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Mar 4, 2015 / autumn_waltz - Mar 4, 2015
|Event to reduce a tension between ASEAN students, which promoted tolerance and reconciliation
3 - thank you very much for your suggestion, however, I hope you can give me an example and underline my...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Mar 1, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Mar 4, 2015
|People who committed crime, especially the young offenders, have the right to be educated
2 - Hi duomaxwel, I have some general suggestions for you, I hope it can help you to improve your writing....
Writing Feedbackduomaxwel - Mar 3, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Mar 4, 2015
|Ageing population worldwide in 2000 and predictions for 2050. IELTS-1
2 - "Overall, the number of elderly people is expected to grow in all parts of the world, with the world...
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Mar 3, 2015 / audley - Mar 3, 2015
|Car ownership, public transport and environment protection - Ielts2
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Mar 3, 2015 / lynzee22 - Mar 3, 2015
|Good friends are as valuable as pearls in life; TOEFL essay
5 - Prompt Strking backward to your prompt.I am afraid that this may not in linearly related. Based...
Writing Feedbackvahid11 - Feb 28, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 3, 2015
|Electricity transfers from high voltage cables into transformer station - one of several stages
2 - Hi! This diagram illustrates the process of water-produced for electricitygenerating electricity using moving water (I'm afraid you can't say...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 2, 2015 / autumn_waltz - Mar 3, 2015
|Sports unite peoples from different corners of the world. IELTS TASK 2.
2 - Sports unite peoples from different corners of the world. From this persona l perspective, it iscan be said that...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 2, 2015 / SHanafi - Mar 2, 2015
|History creates value and shapes our life. For this reason law is available to protect old buildings
NEW - Many old buildings are protected by law because they are part of nation's history. However, some people think old...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Mar 2, 2015 / — -
|There are some huge gaps between male and female regarding teaching - IELTS
4 - I don't worry about the body of your paragraph. however, in the introduction, you need to tell about what...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 19, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 2, 2015
|IELTS - governments subsidize museums, theaters and other arts, and it concerns many people.
3 - Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this...
Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Mar 2, 2015 / Anfalia - Mar 2, 2015
|Exams as a way to measure students' ability
3 - Nowadays cheating on exams is commonplace; therefore it is not uncommon for students who do not do well in...
Writing Feedbackjoyceylyne - Feb 28, 2015 / autumn_waltz - Mar 2, 2015
|New discoveries benefits - for instance students can extend their knowledge from the internet
2 - In the past 100 years there are many useful discoveries, such as computer, mobile phone and many other inventions....
Writing FeedbackRinzo - Mar 1, 2015 / LoveNYU - Mar 1, 2015
|My question - "What make you obtain your achievement?" - meeting with a famous person
2 - Hi hallohello! I'm EF_Season and I'm here to help you with your essay today! First, you've chosen a great...
Writing Feedbackhallohello - Feb 28, 2015 / EF_Season - Mar 1, 2015
|IELTS writing task 2: Fixed punishments or the circumstances of an individual crime.
4 - Hi tantadedanaan, These are my suggestions for your writing: Nowadays, one of the major problems around the...
Writing Feedbacktantadedanaan - Feb 28, 2015 / mumtazdinar - Mar 1, 2015
|Video surveillance has become common place in many countries to reduce crime
5 - Hi anhminh3105, These are several suggestions for your writing: 1. You stated "true" in the first...
Writing Feedbackanhminh3105 - Feb 27, 2015 / mumtazdinar - Mar 1, 2015
|'life is never flat' - Media as a way to help each other
Writing FeedbackZihni92 - Feb 3, 2015 / Zihni92 - Feb 28, 2015
|IELTS TASK 2: Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years
2 - They use it frequently for having trips people commuting by car Admittedly, the allowance to pay higher tax...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 27, 2015 / autumn_waltz - Feb 27, 2015
|In every learning environment is at least one boisterous student with some behavioural problems.
2 - Hi, here are my suggestions. Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy...
Writing Feedbackjaclynjaclyn97 - Feb 26, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 27, 2015
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