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News media are important in modern society. Why are they so important?

2 - The writer has misunderstood the discussion question. This lack of proper question perception led to both a wrong opinion...

Writing Feedbackhellowdefrgtyj - Jul 11, 2022 / Holt - Jul 11, 2022
Question about the benefits of universities. It is a topic for IELTS Writing Task 2.

3 - The third paragraph did not fully answer the second question. In the third paragraph, you only mentioned the benefits...

Writing Feedbackkenny311006 - Jul 5, 2022 / camtu0502 - Jul 11, 2022
"Not everything that is learned is contained in books" the quote perfectly reflects my point of view

2 - A TOEFL test does not require a flowery and empty topic restatement. What sets it apart from the IELTS...

Writing FeedbackJnar - Jul 10, 2022 / Holt - Jul 10, 2022
Should countries be given a right to interfere in other countries' internal affairs?

2 - There is no need to overstate the discussion topic in the task 2 essay. The examiner is just looking...

Writing FeedbackPham Bien - Jul 10, 2022 / Holt - Jul 10, 2022
Whether or not the parents are the best teachers has been long discussed dilemma

3 - On the surface ur essay maynot meet length requirement of Ielts writing, even though i havent counted it yet....

Writing Feedbackuser999 - Jul 10, 2022 / Pham Bien - Jul 10, 2022
Writing task 2; Which institution should be responsible for solving the housing shortage?

3 - perhaps I see your essay is not long enough. Try to use more supporting sentence to consolidate your opinion....

Writing FeedbackQuybao013 - Jul 9, 2022 / Hungneverlose - Jul 10, 2022
Opinion: the ultimate time for children to commence their formal schooling is as soon as possible

3 - @Holt Sir . I came to my conclusion at the end of the essay...

Writing FeedbackHungneverlose - Jul 9, 2022 / Hungneverlose - Jul 10, 2022
The tendency of replacing conventional classrooms by virtual ones

3 - @Holt Oh, I see. Thank you for your advice....

Writing FeedbackThuy Tran 07 - Jul 9, 2022 / Thuy Tran 07 - Jul 10, 2022
Students in UK at a university who were able to speak additional languages to their native language

2 - The summary overview is confusing. It is difficult to understand the information because of problems with sentence clarity and...

Writing Feedbackkimmiez - Jul 9, 2022 / Holt - Jul 9, 2022
Charity in the USA - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - PIE CHARTS

2 - The summary is not as accurate as it could be. Some incorrect information was provided that reduced the authority...

Writing Feedbackjoeynguyen181 - Jul 9, 2022 / Holt - Jul 9, 2022
Some people believe that teenagers should be required to help the regional community

3 - @Holt thanks a lot <33...

Writing FeedbackHeliooo - Jul 8, 2022 / Heliooo - Jul 8, 2022
Ielts Task 1 - The graph represents how much money was spent on meat and fish in a European country

2 - The instruction is to have the writer produce at least 150 words. He was not instructed to write exactly...

Writing FeedbackCheng_ting - Jul 8, 2022 / Holt - Jul 8, 2022
The line graph shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002-2012

2 - I am unclear as to what type of image was provided for analysis. I cannot imagine how the measurements...

Writing Feedbacklangxuyen0806 - Jul 8, 2022 / Holt - Jul 8, 2022
The increasing rate of immigration is causing substantial changes in societies

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your precious advice on my work here, it's really effective in providing me...

Writing FeedbackWufeiyan - Jul 4, 2022 / Wufeiyan - Jul 8, 2022
The carbon dioxide (CO2) emitted by each person in four European countries 1967-2007

2 - The summary and succeeding paragraphs could use more detail and less cluttered presentation. A sentence requires that a single...

Writing FeedbackLilyElise - Jul 7, 2022 / Holt - Jul 8, 2022
'Famous sports people are payed too much money'. Do you agree?

2 - The first thing I have to do is call the attention of the writer to the almost unlimited spelling...

Writing FeedbackRoberta1 - Jul 7, 2022 / Holt - Jul 7, 2022
The line graph illustrates the consumption of spreads, in grams, over the course of 26 years

2 - The presentation is overwritten. Timed writing will show that 243 words cannot be completed within 20 minutes The writer...

Writing FeedbackHuysero11 - Jul 7, 2022 / Holt - Jul 7, 2022
Writing task 2 : The spread of multinational companies and the increase of globalization

2 - The restatement is not as effective as it could have been. The writer basically altered the presentation word for...

Writing Feedbackashleyhoang - Jul 7, 2022 / Holt - Jul 7, 2022
WRITING TASK 2 : 10. How Adults differentiate from Children?

2 - The essay has been a mostly confusing read for the most part. The English sentences qualify as incoherent for...

Writing FeedbackRizkadwia13 - Jul 7, 2022 / Holt - Jul 7, 2022
The quantity of Internet Express - My paragraph is too long. How can I make it short?

2 - The paragraph became too long because there was no discussion outline created prior to the writing of information. Learning...

Writing Feedbackka9xxl - Jul 6, 2022 / Holt - Jul 7, 2022
English should be the only global language

2 - There is a slight problem in the first paragraph. The writer's opinion should always come before the reasoning statement....

Writing FeedbackDukPhuk - Jul 6, 2022 / Holt - Jul 7, 2022
It is no longer necessary to use animal-based products for human - agree or disagree

2 - I do not know where to begin with the review of this essay. The writing is just so bad...

Writing FeedbackTammyle - Jul 6, 2022 / Holt - Jul 6, 2022
It is widely believed that it is necessary for high school seniors to have a year-long break

2 - There is a difference between discussing advantages V. disadvantages and . The latter is a totally...

Writing Feedbackcamtu0502 - Jul 6, 2022 / Holt - Jul 6, 2022
The percentages of high school graduation in Mexico, Portugal and Luxembourg; IELTS 1

2 - The summary overview must always be presented within 3-5 sentences. The information must be individualized into separate sentences due...

Writing FeedbackHuysero11 - Jul 6, 2022 / Holt - Jul 6, 2022
The process of making electricity from a geothermal power plant - Cambridge 12 Test 8 Task 1

2 - A clear lack of task 1 writing knowledge is evident in this writing. It is non- passing for several...

Writing Feedbackfanncia99 - Jul 5, 2022 / Holt - Jul 6, 2022
People have a tendency to store knowledge on the internet at the present time

2 - Excellent work in making it very clear to the examiner that you are stating your personal opinion throughout the...

Writing Feedbacknhuver - Jul 4, 2022 / Holt - Jul 5, 2022
IELTS TASK 2: Crimes committed by young people are increasing in major cities throughout the world

2 - The thesis statement is useless. It does not accurately restate the prompt nor establish the discussion platform for the...

Writing FeedbackChauAnnnh - Jul 4, 2022 / Holt - Jul 5, 2022
TASK 2 people tend to have children later in life

2 - Do not place the basis of the writer's opinion / thesis statement in the first sentence. Always follow the...

Writing Feedbackantiphysics - Jul 4, 2022 / Holt - Jul 5, 2022
IELTS WRITING TAK 2: Replace parks and gardens instead of apartment buildings. Discuss both views.

2 - The overall discussion is off topic. The result will be a failing score because the writer changed the discussion...

Writing Feedbackquynhtotrd - Jul 4, 2022 / Holt - Jul 5, 2022
Considering the amount of money that we can earn when choosing a job - WRITING TASK 2

4 - Reducing your usage of the following words and/or phrases in your paper: have to, a lot, big, get, good,...

Writing Feedbackvukhanhlinh - Jul 3, 2022 / Vink - Jul 4, 2022
IELTS Writing task 1 - Bar chart - Information about high school graduation in 3 countries.

2 - This is a 3 paragraph report. It is missing another paragraph to complete the analysis aspect. A problem that...

Writing Feedbackdecember09th - Jul 2, 2022 / Holt - Jul 3, 2022
Travel by air have a lot of negative effects to the environment. Should it be restricted?

3 - Just a reminder I'm a student, not a professional teacher or instructor. First of all, the word "air...

Writing Feedbackkenzo8 - Jul 1, 2022 / anmolwrites - Jul 2, 2022
Writing task 1 - line graph - illustrates the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams

2 - While the witter produced text above the word count minimum, he could have scored better if he had written...

Writing Feedbackchemistryforever - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 2, 2022
SERIOUS CRIMES SOLVE BY DEATH PENALTY OR OTHER SOLUTIONS. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS

2 - The discussion does not represent the correct for this discussion. It only portrays the personal opinion of the writer,...

Writing Feedbackjaneedilyss - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 1, 2022
Essay about the influence of international sports events on a country

2 - When creating the prompt restatement, the writer must always review the prompt requirement. There are 3 statement that need...

Writing Feedbackphanngan - Jul 1, 2022 / Holt - Jul 1, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 1 - The amount of fruit produced in four countries from 1970 to 2010.

4 - I suggest: "In general, the amount of fruit produced by Spain took a leading position over the period shown....

Writing Feedbackelwynht - Jun 24, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jul 1, 2022
The increasing rate of young people embarking on crimes is becoming a pressing concern

4 - in the 2rd paragraph, there is a grammar mistake, "some of..., creating...", I recommend you should change into "some...

Writing Feedbackhoanghone - Jun 23, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jul 1, 2022
Advantages and disadvantages of changing jobs IELTS writing task2

4 - -Same above, you must change the pronoun "you" into other pronouns, such as people, human beings, they,......

Writing Feedbackanhtuan2312nek - Jun 28, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jul 1, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Live performance neccesity

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. Would it be able to directly answer the question had I put the...

Writing FeedbackHoyEu - Jun 29, 2022 / HoyEu - Jun 30, 2022
[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] THE NUMBER OF SHOP CLOSURES AND OPENINGS IN A COUNTRY FROM 2011 TO 2018

2 - The trending paragraph is no longer a trending paragraph. It turned into a report already due to the over-information...

Writing Feedbackangeloanh - Jun 30, 2022 / Holt - Jun 30, 2022
TECHNOLOGY AND TRADITIONAL CULTURES. AGREE OR DISAGREE

2 - The prompt restatement is acceptable, along with the thesis statement. However, the question response is not within the expected...

Writing Feedbackjaneedilyss - Jun 30, 2022 / Holt - Jun 30, 2022
Fewer to become a teacher in secondary school, give reasons and solve it

2 - The prompt restatement is highly inaccurate. The given opening sentence is a writer's opinion, which is not represented in...

Writing Feedbackanhtuan2312nek - Jun 30, 2022 / Holt - Jun 30, 2022
Some people say that doing multiple tasks at the same time can be beneficial, but others disagree.

3 - - in your introduction, structure "While..." is used wrongly. insteads, "While A..., B..." -"assist+ --> "assists"...

Writing FeedbackKwan0504 - Jun 26, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jun 30, 2022
In your opinion, what benefits do these celebrations have for society? Ielts Writing Task 2

5 - -In your introduction, you forgot to show your own opinion, which is really important and has a huge impact...

Writing Feedbackdouyin20102006 - Jun 18, 2022 / janeedilyss - Jun 30, 2022
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement ? Playing a game is fun only when you win.

4 - there are some grammar need fixing...

Writing FeedbackCindy Trinh - Jun 28, 2022 / anhtuan2312nek - Jun 30, 2022
IELTS writing task 2 about gap year out of formal education

2 - Please remember that the main score of this essay will be based on 2 important preliminary aspects that can...

Writing FeedbackJenny le - Jun 29, 2022 / Holt - Jun 29, 2022
Writing Task 2 - Polution and Solution essay (problems caused by deforestation)

2 - The most severe problem with this essay is the lack of proper sentence development in relation to the discussion....

Writing FeedbackVink - Jun 28, 2022 / Holt - Jun 28, 2022
In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people

3 - Spelling : + at a result --> as a result + such ( furniture, land) --> such as Long...

Writing FeedbackPotato Gardener - Jun 25, 2022 / Vink - Jun 28, 2022
These days, there are more human deforestation activities caused serious results of the environment

2 - The prompt restatement should never contain any repetition coming from the original prompt. Not a single sentence, phrase, or...

Writing FeedbackVink - Jun 27, 2022 / Holt - Jun 28, 2022
In recent years, pressure on school and university students has been increasing and they are pushed

2 - Kindly remember that the direct question to be responded to it "Do you think this is a positive or...

Writing Feedbackmiinffuc - Jun 27, 2022 / Holt - Jun 28, 2022
Even though organic fruits and vegetables are more expensive than conventional fruits and vegetables

3 - @Holt By the way, this is an IELTS essay, so incorrectly overstated an opinion as far as I know...

Writing Feedbackfoxdiem4u - Jun 27, 2022 / foxdiem4u - Jun 27, 2022
In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing

3 - 1.which can leave them to end up suffering 2. i would rather say the prosecution of persons ......

Writing Feedbackbeckaa - Jun 25, 2022 / Redsoxnation - Jun 26, 2022
The topic of whether a country will gain an edge when its students study overseas

2 - While the writer shows a good understanding of the discussion topic, a problem arose with the incomplete opinion statement....

Writing FeedbackBla - Jun 26, 2022 / Holt - Jun 26, 2022
Schools offer now qualification through distance learning from the internet

2 - 2 problems exist with the topic restatement. The first, is that the writer has said the topic is "irrefutable"...

Writing FeedbackRedsoxnation - Jun 25, 2022 / Holt - Jun 26, 2022
The Graph Bellow Compares Changes In The Birth Rates Of China And USA Between 1920 And 2000.

4 - 1. You can not use the phrase "It is noticeable that" from this sentence "It is noticeable that the...

Writing Feedbacklittlecozyhome - Jun 19, 2022 / beckaa - Jun 26, 2022
Many benefits for children to learn a foreign language from primary school

3 - 1.In paragraph 1, you got a run-on sentence "It has many benefits for children to learn (...) it is...

Writing Feedbackdiepanhnguyen - Jun 24, 2022 / beckaa - Jun 25, 2022
Energy consumption by the fuel - line chart in ielts writing task 1

3 - The line graph doesn't end at the moment but continues to the future so I don't think the sentence...

Writing Feedbackhoanglinh220301 - Jun 24, 2022 / beckaa - Jun 24, 2022
Academic style essay about what are the qualities that make a good leader?

2 - There is no clear personal definition of leadership in this presentation. The definition should only cover one paragraph, rather...

Writing Feedbacktinganc - Jun 24, 2022 / Holt - Jun 24, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 1 - The percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller

2 - This is a 4 paragraph presentation. The paragraph number is dictated by the number of images for comparison reporting....

Writing Feedbackdtthinh - Jun 23, 2022 / Holt - Jun 24, 2022
Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. What are the effects? And how can

2 - Never include a personal opinion when restating the topic. That act creates a topic focus change since it is...

Writing Feedbackbeckaa - Jun 23, 2022 / Holt - Jun 23, 2022

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